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Review #26, by lia_2390 Professor Peach

18th December 2012:
Hey, it's Lia from TGS here for the Review Exchange!

I'm a big fan of murder mysteries, not going to lie, so naturally I was very excited when I read your story.

I like your opening line. For me it sets the tone for what I should expect from your narrator, and what kind of story he or she will tell. It sounds very retrospective in that I could see this as something being recounted to a group of friends sitting around a table, years in the future. Or this could be a sort of film noir sort of thing.

What I liked to see, again, was that the description wasn't overly description. You know some people could go to town on their main character discovering the body. Again, this deals with tone and I think you've matched them up really well.

James's reaction was well done too, I think. Gone is the confident swagger we're used to seeing. Now, you've shown us a scared and confused teenage boy who has probably never seen a dead body in his life, or one exposed to such violence. What I loved most was the comparison of the late Professor to his elderly father which puts things much closer to home.

At the end, you've set us up for something ominous later on and I can't wait to read it. I'm already speculating on how the Professor died...or rather, how many times someone tried to kill him.

Good job!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review Lia! I think now, the massive problem that I have to face is continuing the mystery, keeping up the suspense whilst adding little clues in as to what's happening...

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Review #27, by MissMdsty Professor Peach

8th December 2012:
Hello!

I just love a good murder mystery (in stories that is)! And the set up you have here is just perfect. You have your victim, you have your cause of death, a little dark humor (the corpse deciding on its death, brilliant) and James Potter. That is amazing.

You have flawless writting, grammar and spelling, your descriptions are lovely and I can't wait to read more!

Adding this to my favorites and eagerly awaiting an update! Good job!

Ral

Author's Response: Thanks Ral so much for the review! This has got to be one of my favourite stories to work on since it's so completely different from anything I've tried before :D

I love dark humor. My sadistic side will prevail when it comes to this story :P


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