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Review #26, by LilyEPotter A Chance Meeting

29th May 2013:
Hi! I'm here from the Review Tag 3.0.

I really like how you've added more dimension to Oliver than just his focus on Quidditch. The way you touch on them having to work through what happened during that final battle and how difficult it was to do ordinary things for a time.

For Mia and Aidan, I'm already curious and wanting to know more about them. Aidan reminds me a little of Colin when he first met Harry Potter.

I really enjoyed reading this chapter.

Great story!

Author's Response: Hi there! I'm so excited you enjoyed getting to know a little more about Oliver in this chapter!

Mia and Aidan definitely play important parts in the story, so I hop you enjoy getting to know more of them!!

Thank you so much for stopping by to review!
Jami


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Review #27, by CambAngst Boys Will Be Boys

27th May 2013:
Hi! ☺

I am really impressed with the amount of attention you're giving to Mia and Aidan's life spanning the muggle and magical worlds. It's one of those things that far too many authors gloss over or avoid dealing with entirely. You started with simple little things like library books and electricity and then you really dug into more complicated things like trying to get a child to understand the Statute of Secrecy. It's a challenge I wouldn't envy any parent. As Mia says, it's a really good thing that Aidan is a bright, observant child.

Mia's own life dilemma were also brought out really well. I can tell that you've spend your fair share of time around single mothers. It's such a tough existence, especially for somebody like Mia whose chosen profession doesn't lend itself to long-term, stable employment situations. But she's completely dedicated to doing what's best for her son, and it really helped to define her character that she's willing to sacrifice her photography and possibly settle for something less glamorous if it allows Aidan to have stronger roots.

I like the way that you've taken the familiar things about Oliver from the books and evolved them into the professional persona of a top-tier Quidditch coach. The explanation of the different meaning that winning and losing has at this level was really well done. So was the tone you set for the management of the team and the pressures that Oliver operates under. He clearly manages those pressures well, though, and uses them to motivate himself and his team. Very nicely done!

I'm still working on figuring out where Oliver's sister fits into all of this, but I like her as a character. Somebody has to keep these high-flying broom jockeys grounded in reality! ;)

A few typos I noticed, if you like:

"I know how crumby it is that you can't tell your friends about some of the stuff that you're most excited about. -- crummy, I think

He was just about to call an end to the drill when he looked down the pitch and saw Claire making he way toward him. -- making her way

The Gryffindor team used to marvel at how worked up he could. -- could get

"Alright," he started as they collapses around him. -- collapsed

And finally, my favorite line of the chapter: She wasnít happy with sending an owl out unless it was a perfectly sunny day. Because England got so many of those. -- I love it when you hate on British weather.

Nice second chapter. You kept the story moving, gave a lot more definition to your characters and their lives, and kept me interested. Looking forward to seeing how Oliver, Mia and Aidan interact at the match!

Author's Response: Hii Dan with the cool smiley face!!!

I knew I wanted to make Mia part of both worlds but favor the Muggle, which we'll learn more about later. But trying to figure out just where to draw that line has been tricky... so I figured I'd jut blur it instead :P.

I'm so happy you could tell how dedicated Mia was to Aidan. I can't imagine being anything but when you're a single mother, but she also has the downfall of not really having much family to help her. She'd definitely had to get a lot stronger and harder than most 27 year old women, but I think she'd say it was worth it ;).

You know how much I hate writing Quidditch. I can't for the life of me figure out why Oliver HAD to be who I chose, but he was the only one that felt like he'd really work with Mia. Let's see how many games I can creatively avoid writing for this :P!

You're still working on where her sister fits? I thought you'd for sure have picked up on the clues I gave in this chapter! Maybe they were too subtle. well, regardless you'll find out next chapter ;).

I have edited in your typos! See, look, I've tricked you into being my beta anyway :P! hahahahahaa.

I'm so excited you liked this chapter and that the characters are becoming more defined. I really want to give everyone a strong sense of who Mia and Oliver are separately before seeing how they fit together.

Thank you for another awesome review ♥


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Review #28, by Harry and Ginny Boys Will Be Boys

26th May 2013:
it's great that we're learning more about Mia and Aidan as well so we can see how their path will cross with Oliver's more often and I can't wait to read the moment where Oliver and Mia get together! can't wait to read the next chapter!^_^

10/10

Harry and Ginny

Author's Response: Hi H&G!!! I'm so happy you liked this chapter. I really want to give both Oliver and Mia separate lives before showing how they sort of mesh together.

Thank you so much for another awesome review ♥

Jami


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Review #29, by Harry and Ginny A Chance Meeting

23rd May 2013:
I don't read many fics of Oliver Wood, but this one seemed interesting and I loved reading this first chapter! how Oliver doesn't date but is always flirting with women and now a new woman appeared in Oliver's life! can't wait to read the next chapter!^_^

10/10

Harry and Ginny

Author's Response: Hi there H&G! I've never actually read an Oliver Wood fic, so I'm excited that I'll be able to have my own spin on him!

I'm so happy you liked this first chapter! Thank you so much for stopping by to review ♥


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Review #30, by CambAngst A Chance Meeting

23rd May 2013:
Hi, Jami!

So, you asked for my opinions. In my opinion, you've given Oliver an excellent back story for the years following the war. I thought it hit all the right notes: the struggle with grief and guilt left over from the battle, the unity with his friends and the very gradual process of healing and moving forward with life. Oliver definitely makes a good coach; he always had that sort of personality. His choice of lifestyle -- dating casually, not getting involved in anything long-term -- also meshes well with his career ambitions and probably the lingering emotional scars from the battle. I feel like you're setting up a number of things here.

Aiden is an awesome little kid. Definitely a bit precocious, but only children and children of single parents often seem to be for whatever reason. At any rate, he fills his role in the story very well.

Mia had a lot of interesting angles to her in her first appearance. She's obviously very cautious around strangers. It made perfect sense for a single mother with a very outgoing young son. I thought her reactions were well done. Oliver was making a bit of headway with her when he accidentally stepped into the husband trap. He recovered from it pretty well, though. Not too hard to see that he's rather taken with her, or at least thinks he might be.

Let's see, what else can I add? You did a nice job describing the people and places, especially the newcomers like Mia and Aiden. I had good, clear pictures of the two of them in my head. You translated Mia's facial expressions and body language into words really well, too. That was key, I think, because her reactions told so much of the story.

Your writing was really good, as always. Everything flowed really nicely and it was easy to follow. The chapter felt shorter than it actually was.

Great start!

Author's Response: Dan! This story sort of came out of know where, didn't it? Ha!

I've never really read an Oliver story, so I'm excited to see how that influences my portrayal of him. He sort of has some Charlie pieces in my head -- stubborn and driven. But I think he'd end up really wanting to be a family man, whereas I'm pretty sure Charlie never would have taken that leap. Anyway...

Single moms sort of fascinate me. The strength that must take is always something I've thought really amazing, so Mia and Aidan sort of started the idea for this story. I wanted an independent woman who had to work for everything she got, which increased tenfold after she had her child. And I wanted a little boy who was a little more of an observer than most children his age, and thinks he's a lot older than he really is. So we'll see if they actually develop that way :P

I'm so happy you liked the start of this! I hope I can keep up with this one :P



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Review #31, by Imogen A Chance Meeting

23rd May 2013:
Please put up another chapter!!

Author's Response: Hi! I've just updated :)! I hope you enjoy that chapter!

Thanks for the review!
Jami


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Review #32, by Erised A Chance Meeting

23rd May 2013:
Hi Jami! :)

This is a great start to what I'm sure is going to be a really cute little fic! I liked hoe you set up the background for Oliver's life and mentioning the war and how time has gone by was a nice touch. I also enjoyed how you stayed so in touch with his character - his 29 year old self hasn't changed a bit! The role of manager definitely suits him, so nice work there. It's definitely what I imagined him doing post-books.

Oh my goodness, Aidan was SO CUTE! I can find myself getting a little annoyed sometimes at children in fics because they come across as overly insightful and too grown up, but Aidan was perfect. He was sweet and charming and acted his age, and his excitement was wonderful to see. I had a big grin on my face when Oliver gave him and Mia the tickets!

And speaking of Mia, well. She's a character isn't she? Mysterious and closed off is definitely interesting, and I liked how she wasn't fawning all over Oliver and he was clearly more enamoured. I can't wait to see more of her story and character development unfold!

Great start here my lovely, I can't wait for the next chapter! :)

Author's Response: Hi Jenny!! I don't even know what compelled me to start this...but I did so I suppose there's no going back now :P. Actually this story is one I've kind of been toying with but couldn't figure out who to use. And then today it clicked. OLIVER!

I'm really happy you thought I kept him the same as book Oliver. I need to reread the parts he's in or something, because I don't remember nearly enough of him.

I'm so happy you liked Aidan! I work with children, so even though I'm definitely out of my comfort zone when it come to writing Oliver, kids I can handle. Ha! I'm really happy he seemed realistic to you. I wanted a blend of slightly irritating but mostly charming going on ;).

I'm really excited that you liked this first chapter. I plan on doing a mixture of Oliver and Mia's perspective, so hopefully you'll like hers!

Thank you so much for stopping by, it put a huge smile on my face ♥


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