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Review #26, by patronus_charm His Worst Mistake

2nd June 2013:
Hello there Iím here from the Ravenclaw Review Tag :D You included Sigmund Freud? *tries to calm self* I may like psychology a little too much and may have read some of his workÖ I feel so stupid not connecting the title with the subjects :P

I really liked the introduction of Cassiopeia and I thought it was really glad. For starters Ravenclaw won which was awesome and secondly she seemed to be a really awesome character. Iím one of those weird people who always prefer the mean guys to the nice ones so of course I really liked this whole persona you built up around her.

You went into a good detail with the description both physical and emotional description which was something nice to see as it isnít always done so it was a pleasant surprise to see it here. Another thing I really liked was how you stuck to the attributes of each house and it made me laugh seeing the Hufflepuffs brows furrowing and now Iím going to go to sleep with images of that.

The psychology was merged in really well and added to the story a lot. As I said before I know a bit about Freudís work so it was alright, however most people probably donít, so I would perhaps suggest including an explanation about what each means in your author note so people got the whole meaning. Itís only a suggestion though :)

The side mention of Rose and Scorpius was brilliant and it made me crack up seeing my OTP act in that way. One tiny suggestion you might want to consider is perhaps create more tension towards him and Cassiopeia for even greater comedic effect. Just do the romantic clichťs really but make them both oblivious to it and it will be gold!

That was a really great start to your story and yay for Freud!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Thank you for your review!! :)

Yes, I love me some Siggy myself. We talked about him a lot in Psych this year, and his work definitely plays some of a part in this story. (Just a little, though. Hahaha...)

It's quite interesting to know that you prefer villains to heroes, but it's really cool. I'm glad that you liked Cassiopeia, and yes, yay Ravenclaw!

I'm glad that you thought my description was good. Sometimes I worry that I don't put enough into it, but hopefully that's not the case with this story. It's nice to hear that you were amused by Lysander--he's a bit of a character, I'd like to think. :)

I probably should explain myself, what with all of the psychology that I'm throwing out there, but I'll have to save that for a time when I edit. Thanks for the heads up!

Scorose is an interesting phenomenon, especially as seen (or NOT seen) in the brief mention that I threw in. I'm glad that I cracked you up with their interaction. :D

~UnluckyStar57


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Review #27, by HarrietHopkirk His Worst Mistake

2nd June 2013:
Yay! I love the idea of a fic about Gobstones! This is great stuff and it has great promise! I also love fics written about the Scamander boys and so I really enjoyed this.

First off, I think how you went about setting up the chapter and the opening scenes was brilliant - the contrast between the sunny outside world and then the dark, tense game of Gobstones. Really good. I also liked how you introduced Cassiopeia Prestwich - but I think you could have done more to build the suspense of Lorcan's opponent, if she as feared as you say she is, with maybe some sort of final reveal? Maybe try to describe what she looks like, her personality before revealing her name right at the end of that opening section? I don't know, but I like her character already!

And boy, is she crazy? First threatening Lorcan, then pushing him down the stairs? The chapter started off quite light-hearted compared to this! Ahaha, and I love Lysander too! Overall, a great opening chapter - well done!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review!

I'm very glad you like the idea of Gobstones and the Scamanders, because when I was trying to decide what I should write about, I thought it would just be so cool to have the twins kind of get on each other's nerves. What resulted was a whole lot of psychology and a really strange sibling relationship. After all, they ARE Luna's children! :)

I'm also very glad that you liked the way I set this up. I really struggled a lot with how to begin, and several times I ended up reverting back to the original, which is what ended up being posted. :p

As far as the reveal of Cassiopeia goes, I do agree that I could probably draw it out a bit more, to make it more suspenseful and over-the-top. I shall definitely edit this after I've posted the third and final chapter!

And yes, she is crazy. They ALL are crazy, in their own little ways. :)

Thank you so much for your comments and suggestions!!

~UnluckyStar57


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Review #28, by Maelody His Worst Mistake

27th May 2013:
Hey there! Here I am with your review! :) Sorry it has taken a while.

Alright, so I laughed pretty much throughout this whole piece. It was a quick, adorable little read, and I really liked it. The characters were all given a sense of balance and description. The rumors of Caseopia had me laughing throughout.

I also really liked how the brothers were in different Houses. It was easier to see their differences that way, and yet just how oddly similar they are. Though, I would love to know why such a bully like Cas made it into Gryffindor ;). I know they can't all be Slytherins, but yeah haha.

As for romance, it was really funny seeing the close to romantic scenes crumble into bullying, BUT, wouldn't suggesting that Cas has a crush on him add a bit of romance to it? Rather he believes in it or not? I could be wrong, and I don't completely know the rules of your challenge, but that just sort of stuck out to me.

Otherwise, you have excellent word usage, a great comedic style, very descriptive, and I enjoyed it very much. You did a wonderful job, and feel free to re-request! :)

Author's Response: Thank you for laughing at my silliness!! :)

I'm glad you found the story enjoyable, as I often think I can be a bit of a bore sometimes, with pacing of the story and whatnot. And thank you for saying that my characters have balance!! Believe it or not (and this makes me a terrible person for admitting it!), I didn't really plan out these characters before I wrote them. I just let them make themselves known to me as I wrote, which is risky at best and perilous always.

The rumors of Cassiopeia had me laughing as I was writing them--I'm glad that you laughed as well, and I enjoy the nickname you gave her, though she probably wouldn't like it. I put her into Gryffindor on a whim, just to see how she would turn out. It is my belief that not all Slytherins are bad, just as not all Gryffindors are good. I wanted her in Gryffindor to explore just how ugly boldness can be when taken to an extreme. She is brash and rude, all of the worst elements of the house of the brave. The romantic aspect that seemed to be present was only intended to be ironic--I think of her as a person who will stop at nothing to be a champion, even if it means chewing up the competition and spitting him out. As far as I know, she has no love for anyone, but I can definitely see how it could come across as such. Thank you for leading me to muse about all of this, though it might be much more than you wanted in response. :)

You are a wonder-fabulous reviewer, and I will definitely be rerequesting soon for the next chapter. Thank you so much!!

~UnluckyStar57


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Review #29, by adluvshp His Worst Mistake

26th May 2013:
Hey! Here for your requested review from the forums.

This definitely made for a fun read and I quite enjoyed it. I think you did a good job of emphasising on the 'no romance' aspect of it and making it humorous at the same time with all the cooties talk and all.

Your descriptions were pretty intricate too, not too much and not too little. They set the scene pretty well and I could imagine the setting in my head so good job there.

I enjoyed your characterisations of Lorcan, Lysander, and Cassiopeia immensely. The rumour bit about Cassiopeia being the illegitimate daughter of Grawp and Maxime, and what not, was really funny. I also liked the way she intimidated Lorcan. Lorcan's portrayal as a scared guy also was shown really well.

The plot was unique and entertaining. The whole idea of gobstones was really great, and all in all, I enjoyed it. According to me, the title suits the plot so I don't think you need to change it =)

All in all, this made for a fun read and I really don't have any CC or suggestions for you. You've done a good job with this!

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you so much for your wonderful review!! :)

It was really nice to know that you think this chapter is fun and humourous. I'm not usually a very funny person, so writing this way is a bit out-on-a-limb for me. I think that the story is going for a really off-the-wall, crazy spin, especially in future chapters, so perhaps it's good that this first one kind of sets it up for that.

And thank you so much for enjoying my characterization of Cassiopeia! Those little rumours were random thoughts that I had as I was writing the chapter, and they seemed to fit her pretty well.

I'm very glad you like the title; to me, it sounds a tiny bit lame, but I guess it really does make sense with the story.

Thankyouthankyouthankyouthankyou so much for your praise-filled and wonder-fabulous review!

~UnluckyStar57


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Review #30, by Broken Butterfly His Worst Mistake

22nd May 2013:
Interesting story. I would have to say that romance definatly is not a part of the story, so you have that covered. But it isn't really emphasised clearly that it is NOT a part of the story. I would try and put a backstory in here too, just a bit have a story between Lorcan and the girl. Some History. I really like your closing line, esecially as I'm a psych major at university. Great job so far, I think this is coming along nicely. Can I just ask though: What exactly is gobstones? I'm not familiar if it is canon and it may have taken away from my understanding of teh chapter.

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you so much for your review!!

To be honest, I didn't really picture Lorcan and Cassiopeia having a backstory, necessarily, because up until this point, they've stayed away from each other. But now that you mention it, I think it would be a great idea to maybe go into some of Lorcan's history and his fear of women. That might give a better foundation for his fear of Cassiopeia, because she is certainly his worst nightmare!!

And yes, the psychology thing came about from my psychology class: I really love psych, and when I sat down to write this story, I started thinking about Sigmund Freud and all of his theories about human sexuality. It seemed to fit in a world where romance was not allowed to exist. And I can definitely try to emphasize the non-romance of the whole thing a little bit more. :)

As for Gobstones: It's a game in canon that has pieces that squirt the opponent in the eye with ink. It was mentioned briefly in the first book, and it doesn't seem to be a very widely-played game amongst the canon students of Hogwarts. I totally understand your confusion. :)

Thanks again for your review!!

~UnluckyStar57


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