Hey! Sorry that my reviews are taking longer than usual these days - it seems like I only get around to them in the weekend, so I'm really sorry about that!

Anyway, this chapter seemed to be a little bit filler-ish, but sometimes we need fillers in stories to add to the development of characters so that is a-okay. I like that we got to see some more of Dom and Rose in this chapter, and that we are beginning to see their personalities shine through. I also liked that line about Rose being swapped for Hattie - I thought that was a nice, humorous touch to the chapter.

I would have loved to see a little bit more description in this chapter, to make the chapter flow a little more smoothly and slow down the pace a little. It would have been great had you expanded on the journey into Hogsmeade, perhaps playing a little more on Flick's conflicting emotions and I'd also have liked to seen some more detailed imagery concerning the Shrieking Shack.

I liked Flick's friends idea of locking her inside with Albus - that was very nicely done, even though it ended in an argument. I hope Flick tells Albus about the twins soon, and quickly too, because I think it's unfair to the children to grow up without knowing their father, purely because of Flick's selfishness.

I actually found Flick a little irritating in this chapter, although that was probably intentional. I didn't like the way she attacked Albus. Yes, she is under stress with the twins and yes, she did have a legitimate excuse for staying home last year but she didn't need to take it all out on Albus, especially considering it's been over a year and she STILL hasn't told them. I hate to think what Albus is going to feel when he realizes he has two kids and didn't even get to see the first year of their childhood. That is going to be a huge blow.

I also didn't like the way Flick told Albus about Hattie, and how the only reason she was with him was for the money. That was downright nasty. If she really likes/loves Albus, I would've thought she wouldn't have been so cruel. But then I guess love does strange things to people, right?

Anyway, I enjoyed this chapter, though I don't think it quite met the standard of the others. There were also a few grammar and spelling mistakes scattered throughout the chapter, so I'd suggest a quick edit.

Courtney:)

Author's Response: Heya,

Don't worry about it, it's fine, RL gets in the way.

Yep, just as chapter 5 this was simply a filler.

Dom and Rose = :) Flick really does wish it would happen since Rose spends so much time with them.

After reading over the chapter, I see what you mean. I'm hoping to do a big edit so I'll be sure to add some more descriptions in.

They had to talk some time even if they did argue. It is unfair on them and Flick has her reasons apart from not being able to tell him.

Everyone's irritating at some point and this chapter just happened to be Flick's time. I do believe Al will have a lot of feelings when/if he finds out, it'll be an interesting chapter to right I'm sure.

I think Flick feels that if she was Al, she would want to know the truth, Which is why she told him.You're right, love does do strange things to people and maybe that's why she told him.

I wasn't a huge fan of this chapter either.

I'm hoping to do a big edit on this sometime in the week so I'll be sure to change them.

Thank you once again!

-Potterfan310
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Hey! Sorry it took me so long to get back here - real life has gotten a little hectic.

Anyway, it's nice to see that Flick is settling it (sort of) and getting back into the swing of things (with some interesting incidents along the way) at Hogwarts. However, all I could think in this chapter was "How on earth could she leave her children behind?" I'd be freaking out if I were Flick, constantly flooing Ria, writing letters and trying to get in contact, so I hope we see some more of this panic to see her children coming out in later chapters.

Oooh, Hattie really is horrible, isn't she? Why on earth did Albus start going out with her? Clearly, he is crazy. But I hope Flick doesn't let Hattie drive her into insanity, because she's so much better than that. And I like the fact that Dom always sticks up for her. It seems like the two of them are very good friends and I really hope Flick starts letting her, as well as her other friends (and especially Albus) in soon. I don't want her to be all alone!

I noticed, at the start in particular several spelling and grammar mistakes that were a little distracting, so I'd suggest a quick re-read to get rid of those.

Another thing I liked about this chapter was the fact that those boys were drooling over Victoire...and I love the way Dom tried to protect her sister, which just resulted in Victoire yelling at her. That definitely seemed very sisterly. And VERY teenage boy, too.

Flick's timetable! Man, would I love to have three free periods in one day. Maybe I'd actually get some homework done then...although somehow, I doubt it.

Overall, nice chapter!

Courtney:)

Author's Response: Heya,

Don't worry about it, it's fine.

I think Flick was relativly calm as it was only the first night/day away from them but she does go into panic mode a bit later on.

Yep, Hattie is a piece of work. Al must be crazy, but somehow he tries to see a good side in everyone.

We'll see, Flick might eventually tell them but any idea who she would tell first??? Flick won't be alone ;)

I'll be sure to re-read and change them!!

Dom and Vic are close, but they're not as close as Flick and Ria. Even though Vic is older Dom still feels the need to protect her, they are family after all. Teenage boys, pretty much all of them have one thing on their mind except for the odd few.

Same here, but then again I never do. I always end up distracted by something else.

Thanks once again!!!

-Potterfan310
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this is an awesome story, please update soon

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you like it. Hopefully I'll be able to find my muse again and be able to update soon x

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Hello !
I love your story it is exactly the type that I love, I really hope you keep on writing this because it is awesome so thanks, but why twins? just curious and nice names!
Nikita

Author's Response: Heya,

I'm glad you like it! I love reading stories like this as well. I am definitely going to keep on writing this, chapter 11 is party done but I've got a bit of writers block and am kinda stuck at a certain point.

I chose twins because I couldn't decide whether it should be a boy or girl and whether it would look like Flick or Al so I settled for twins with each of their features.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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Ooooh, there was a lot I liked about this chapter! In fact, it was probably my favourite yet!

I really liked everything that Neville - ahem, sorry, Professor Longbottom - said to Flick. It was all very sweet, compassionate and considerate and just so Neville! And I'm glad that Flick gets to see her children more often than just during the holidays. It definitely would be very hard being away from them, and I hope we get to see this in some of your later chapters.

Hehehe, I giggled a bit at all the theories of how Flick had died. They were certainly all very imaginative. I'm guessing you had a great time coming up with them all. I think my personal favourite definitely had to be Dom's theory. She's such a great character!

Ohmygoodness, when Al said: "There was the one where you got knocked up by me, left Hogwarts and never told me that I have two children" I almost had a heart attack! And then I read the next line and I let out a BIG sigh of relief. I want the truth to get out, but definitely not in that way.

God, I really do love Dom and the weird and strange things that she says. I like the fact that she and Flick were ganging up against Hattie without being complete...witches and I also laughed when she, Flick and their other friends gave each other the look when Hattie came out in the chemise. I really do not like Hattie. I wonder if she'll prove to have any redeemable qualities or whether she'd just a robot...hmm.

Anyway, great chapter! Good job.

Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hello again :D
I love this chapter as well and along with chapter ten and another certain chapter it is one of my all time favourites!!!

Neville is a sweetie even as a professor. Whats not to love about Neville :) The allowing Flick to see them by flooing home does come into play sometime before chapter 20 and after chapter 12/13. I think it would be especially hard for Flick because Bentley and Aubri are so young and she knows she'll be missing their milestones like walking and talking etc..

I have to say Dom's theory was my favourite and I had a great time coming up with them, since I tend to have an overactive imagination.

Haha, it would have been a little cruel for the truth to come out like that but you never know how things will play out. ;)

Dom... I think after Flick and Ria she is my favourite person to write because she's wild, unpredictable and you neevr know what she'll come out with or do next.

I'm not a fan of Hattie either but she is fun to write since her personality and the ways she acts is so different to the others.

Thank you once again for reading and reviewing!!

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This Is A Good Chapter I Hope In The Next Thews Hours We See Albus Get Jeaslsouy And Something Big To Happen With Hattie Brother Good Work Know Can't Wait For Chapter 11.

Author's Response: Heya,

Thank you for reviewing and who knows if Al will get jealous or not and as for Aaron, I'm keeping my lips sealed.

Glad you like it and thank you for reviewing!

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Hey!

So, this chapter was pretty good - there were many things I liked about it and we were introduced to a whole cast of new characters which was great.

I liked reading the whole segment about Flick and her family getting ready to go to school. It felt very chaotic and slightly manic, which I loved, and I also loved the fact that Ria was forced to be in charge of everyone, and make sure everyone was ready, because their dad was at work. I almost have to say that Ria is currently my favourite character. She has so much on her plate but deals pretty well...and I feel kind of bad for her, having to look after the twins while Flick is at school. It sort of seems like she's given up her life for family, in a way. The beginning scene also gave me a huge hit of nostalgia, though I have no idea why, but I found myself thinking back to the books, which I always love to do when I'm reading fanfiction!

Oh god, that car journey sounded painful! It completely reminded me of my family, what with Tessa being sick and all. Poor Flick, she was clearly nervous enough as it was!

I really liked the whole back story with Ria and James and Fred. It added another layer to the chapter which was excellent to see, and I have a sneaking suspicion that something might happen between Ria and James which would be awesome - they seem like two completely different characters. And you know what they say about opposites attracting.

Just a couple of CC's: this chapter did tend to sway from past and present tense quite a bit, especially in the very first few paragraphs, so I'd go back and have a look at that, if I was you. Also, I love most of your characters, but I currently really, really dislike Hattie. I'm not sure whether this is necessarily a bad thing, as she and Flick have all this antagonism towards each other, but at the moment she seems a little realistic. I'd like to see more back story to her character, so we get some insight into her motives and reasons for acting the way she does.

I loved the little detail about Scorpius' grandfather killing his ferret. That really made me smile - and the addition of Scorpius being Flick's gay but not gay friend was pretty cool, too.

There were a few grammar and spelling issues here and there, but nothing too distracting.

Hope this review was somewhat helpful!

Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hello again :D

Along with Dom, Ria is one of my favourite characters. Ria's great to write and since she's become the mother of the family she sees it her job to look after Bentley and Aubri for Flick. Ria knows her dad has to work to keep the money coming in and she knows if she doesn't look after them, then Flick would have never gone back to Hogwarts.

Ria and James, hmmm... I'm not saying anything else ;)

I think I've sorted out the tenses thing, so I'll edit the chapter soon.

You're not the only one who hates Hattie. There are a fair few people in the 'I hate Hattie club' along with Flick, Dom, Rose and Scorp :)

Thank you once again!

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Heya!

So, this was a pretty short chapter but I liked it, nevertheless. I always enjoy reading about Dom in fan fiction, and so I am very much looking forward to meeting her. From what I can see (mainly from Dom's letter) she looks like she's going to be an awesome character - very lively and bubbly. I'm eager to see how she and Flick will interact. And if Dom's personality will bring out any traits in Flick we didn't know she had.

I'm also looking forward to the moment that she tells her friends about the kids - I really want to see what their reactions will be, especially from Albus.

I also enjoyed the conversation Flick had with Tessa about houses. I liked her comment about not being a Gryffindor, because she couldn't even tell Albus she was pregnant. I hope we'll get to see some more of her Slytherin characteristics coming through...I wonder what house Tessa will be in.

This was a very nice, fluffy little chapter. It was a little fillery but some filler is always nice once in a while. Keep up the good writing!

Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hi,

I LOVE Dom and there never seems to be enough of her!!! Dom certainly is a live one and a bit of a wild child.

Ohh their reactions, I can't wait either and writing the story :)

Thanks once again

-Potterfan310
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Hello again!

Okay, so this was a pretty interesting chapter in which we found out a lot of information about Flick's back story, which was very nice to see. It really makes her seem like a much more realistic character and I always like to read about large families that have a few problems, so I like the fact the Flick's mother left them when they were young. I wonder if we'll get to meet her later in the story? And if so, I wonder what she will be like-she certainly doesn't seem like a particularly good mother. And the fact that she doesn't even know about her father's death is horrible-I thought that was a nice touch to the chapter.

I don't know why but, in a way, Flick's family sort of reminds me of the Weasley's. I think it might be the slightly chaotic atmosphere which surrounds them, which I really like. Ria and Flick seem very close, and I liked the snatches and glimpses of the other family members we were given in this chapter.

I personally feel that Flick's reaction to finding out Albus supposedly has a girlfriend was a little over the top, which I guess suggests that she still has feelings for him. It will be interesting to see how all that plays out.

I don't really have any mega CC's for this chapter, apart from a few spelling and grammar errors which I would suggest going back over and a few random comma splices. But overall, I liked the chapter!

Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hello Again :D

I can't say too much because spoilers but lets just say Flick gets quite a shock ;)

I never though of it like that before, especially since Flick's family isn't as big as the Weasleys but I guess in ways they're just as chaotic.

Flick can be a little dramatic at times but like you said, she may still have feelings of sorts for him. Especially since he is Bentley and Aubri's daddy.

Reading through it I noticed them, so I'll make sure to change them.

Thank you once again!!!
-Potterfan310
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Hey! I thought this was a really good chapter, and I actually reckon your writing is improving loads-we also found out a lot more information and were introduced to some important characters, which was great.

I liked the conversation between Flick and Albus. It was definitely sufficiently awkward, and I'm actually glad Flick hasn't told Albus the babies are his yet, because that should make for some very interesting drama in the following chapters...looking forward to it!

I actually really like Ria's character. You have done a really good job developing her personality, and her reaction when Flick told her what she'd said to Albus was great. I also like Dom-well, what we've seen of her, anyway. She seems like that classic, slightly crazy best friend, and I can't wait to see more of she and Flick together.

If I have one criticism for this chapter, it's that the whole flashback seemed a little unrealistic. In saying that, that could just be my taste. Flick's ex-best friend just seemed a little bit too catty and it seems like Flick and Albus were awfully young when they got together and first slept together-they must have been only 12 or 13? Again, it could just be me, but that seems a little un-Hogwarts. However, apart from this, I think this chapter was great, and I hope you don't think I sound too harsh!

Good writing,
Courtney:)

Author's Response: Thank you!!! :)


Oh there are many awkward moments to come between Al and Flick. As well as lots and lots of drama and quite a few things you won't have seen coming :D

Ria's over protective since she's the oldest and she had to like mum for the past few years, she's just looking out for Flick :)

There are reason's Rory is slightly catty towards Flick, although I don't think she should use it as an excuse.

Al and Flick got together when he was 14 and she was 13 (nearly 14). They were both 16 when they first slept together.

You weren't harsh at all :) although I do understand where you're coming from about it being un-Hogwarts ish.

Thank you again!
-Potterfan310
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Hello again-thanks for re-requesting.

I think I said it in my last review, but I'll say it again anyway: I really like the spin you have taken on the classic pregnancy story. The fact that Flick has not been in the wizarding world since getting pregnant makes a lot of sense, as I get the feeling that becoming pregnant at sixteen in the wizarding world would not be looked at very highly. Because of this, I really liked the way you wrote the Diagon Alley scene. Flick was clearly so embarrassed and wanted to get out of there quickly before anyone saw her, which I can totally relate to. I like the way you are developing her character-she is becoming very believable and realistic, with no qualities that are completely ridiculous or random.

Bentley and Aubri (I love all your names, by the way) see very cute, and I'd like to find out more about them-maybe see Flick interact with them a little more, at least before she goes back to Hogwarts. Ria also seems like a good character-very organised and headstrong, which seems to be a nice comparison to Flick.

You finished off this chapter very nicely, making the reader more curious as to what is going to happen next. I have a feeling Albus might be the father, but I could be wrong. I usually suck at guessing.

I don't really have an major CC's for this chapter. Your spelling and grammar was great-just be careful not to switch from the past tense to the present. I noticed that you tend to do this during Flick's thoughts.

Anyway, this was a great chapter-nice job.

Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hello again :D

Yep, I think even the fact you're a witch and pregnant at sixteen, you'll still get dirty looks off people and the usual 'tags' of being a young mum. She also didn't want to bump into any one she knew because she never told them she was pregnant.

Thanks, I love all their names as well. All orginal and cute :)

Hmm, you might be right.. ;)

Whoops, I'll have to go over and check it.
Thanks for reviewing!
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Hey there! Thanks so much for re-requesting.

It's weird, I've read a lot of pregnancy stories lately, so when I saw this one my immediate reaction was that this was going to be just like the many others I've read (sorry.) Of course, a couple of the pregnancy stories I'm reading right now are great and completely original. Others are cliche and annoying. Yours is definitely part of the first category and I am so, so sorry for my initial reaction-I promise to never judge a book by its cover again!

I like the fact that you are setting your story after Flick has given birth. I like that she is a parent, rather than pregnant, and was intelligent enough to realize that she needed to drop out of school to properly raise her children-it would be impractical to attend Hogwarts at eight months pregnant-I mean, think of all those stairs!

I liked the idea of having a spell to hide the bump and I also liked the fact that Flick (awesome name, by the way-having a unique name really makes a character stand out, in my opinion) had a tutor while she was away from school. The first chapter of this story was very practical, which is always important in pregnancy stories.

Overall, I thought this was a good first chapter.

Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hello :)

It's fine, don't worry.

Yep, Flick realised she needed to drop out because she knows what it's like not having her mother around and wants whats best for her children.

Stairs kill me at the best of times, imagine the Hogwarts stairs when 7/8/9 months pregnant and you're carrying twins.

There were lots of reasons she hid her bump, the main one was that she didn't tell the father and the others were because she didn't tell her friends/want anyone to know especially the press.

Unique names for the win!!! I love unique names especially since I'm stuck with quite a common name. I also think they add to a persons personality if that makes sense.

Thanks for the review!!!
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seriously if aaron has another motive im going to cry.

Author's Response: I think I will as well, he is a nice guy but who knows he might have a dark side...

Thanks for reviewing!!

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I Love This Chapter It One Of Your Best I Hope Flick And Albus Get Back Togther In The End.

Author's Response: I Love this chapter as well and I have to say it is one of my favourites :D

Why thank you!!! I hope so too xx

Thanks for reviewing!!!
-Pottrefan310
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Please update soon! I really hate Hattie and wish Al would break up with her and I want Flick to tell him about Aubri and Bently!! It's so great, such a good story

Author's Response: Chapter 10 is about 50-60% done and I'm hoping to get it up sometime next week when once I've finished it :)

You're not the only one who hates Hattie, and as for Al and her breaking up and for Flick telling him all will be revealed.

Thanks for reviewing and I'm glad you like it!
-Potterfan310
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This is really good despite some minor spelling and grammar mistakes. I love it :)

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing and glad you like it.

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You need more in the chapter than this, honey.

Author's Response: I know, this chapters sucks but the Al/Flick arguing needed to be done. There are reason for it.

Thanks for reviewing!

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This Chapter Ok But Not Your Best When Albus Find Out I Hope You Make It Real Dramatic And All The Potter And Flick Family And Hattie There I Can't Wait For Chapter 10.

Author's Response: Hey,

I know, I wasn't to pleased with and there is quite a bit of drama when Al finds out. That's if he does...

Chapter 10 is about 50% done, and it might possibly be u[ by the end of the week.

Thanks for reviewing!

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This aid Not Your Best Chapter But I Still Can't Wait For The Next Chapter.

Author's Response: I know, I wasn't too pleased with it but it still needed to be done.

Thanks for reviewing!

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Can You Update Quick Please It A Good Story.

Author's Response: Hi Callum,

Thanks for reading and reviewing!1 :D

Hopefully chapter 9 should be up soon, but right now it's about 20-30% done

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More, please! Somebody better put that bitch Hattie in her place. Is she named for the evil stepsister in Ella Enchanted who wants to marry Char so she can be queen?

Author's Response: Hi Hannah,

I'm with you that, Hattie does need to be put in her place. But you'll have to wait and see ;)

I've never actually saw Ella Enchanted. But I know someone called Hattie and when I the name on my newsfeed it just seemed like a nice name to use.

Thanks for reviewing!
-Potterfan310
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Love this can't wait to find out what happens! Ahh im excited!!! please update soon xxx :)

Author's Response: Glad you like it! :)

Hopefully chapter 8 will be in the que within the next week (or two).

Thanks for reviewing
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Soph x

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Omg I just read the description of the story and I was like must. read. this. now.

You absolutely did not disappoint.

10/10

Author's Response: Thank you!! x

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Aww, so good :)
I cant wait to read more

Author's Response: Heya, thanks for reviewing xxx
-Soph xx
P.s when is 'I love you mum' going to be updated?

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Love it absoulutli love it, i do hope she is going to tell Al soon, but hey, it is your storie and i have no control over it.
And again love it, keep up the good work ;)

Author's Response: Hey,
Thanks for reviewing :D
You shall wait and see...
Glad you like it
-Potterfan310
Soph xx

P.s Chapter 6 is in the que! :D

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