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Review #26, by theblacksisters Control

29th January 2014:
Enjoying the story! I think that you should add in some sub-plots along with the main one. It would make the story more interesting. (Not that it isn't already.)

Author's Response: I'm glad you are! My lovely little subplots are beginning to develop, but you're right, I probably should have brought them in earlier. I'm always learning when I write :) N'aww, thank you! :D

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Review #27, by theblacksisters I Agreed To

23rd January 2014:
I love the internet people talking. It's so funny. Anyway, the plot is definitely getting better. Update soon! :)

Author's Response: :D thanks! Ooh, yay- I'm glad you think so. I'm trying to get a chapter a week up, to keep it steady. So... soon, definitely!

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Review #28, by The Empress Paper People

18th January 2014:
I'm intrigued by the idea of a superhero! Very creative :) I think it's interesting, the idea that a witch could use her powers to be a superhero to the muggles. And having to avoid being caught by the ministry!
Great idea.
If I would give one criticism, it's that it gets a bit hard to follow at one point toward the end. When your main character is reading the paperwork. I had to read it twice to get where her thought process was going. I guess, personally, I was confused how she went from not knowing about this 'superhero' to being them.

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I was very enthusiastic about it when it first popped into my head :) Everything just seemed to fit really well, and my imagination sort of ran away with me.
Oh, does it? I'll have a read through now and see what I can tweak, hopefully make it clearer. She simply never made the connection between who her friend was talking about- a guy- and herself, but yeah, I'll definitely look at reworking it.
Thank you for the helpful criticism and lovely review! :)


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Review #29, by theblacksisters Apathy

18th January 2014:
Getting better; keep writing and update soon!
You misspelled Encylopedia.

Author's Response: Oh, thanks! I always seem to take a couple of chapters to warm up.
...I will correct it now. Silly me!
Thank you for all your reviews! I really appreciate them :)


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Review #30, by theblacksisters Hopeless Fantasies

18th January 2014:
I think that the Muggles blogging about 'him' should come up with some kind of epithet ('The Masked Crusader' or something) to call 'him.' It sounds a lot like something they would do.

Author's Response: Hmm... I'll have a look and see if I can do something like that. It might fall away later (you'll see why) but I might put it in for now. I like 'Masked Crusader' actually. Thank you for giving me something to think about!

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Review #31, by theblacksisters Paper People

18th January 2014:
A very interesting idea. I'm looking forward to reading more, and the comments about the internet are very true. Keep writing!

Author's Response: Oh, thanks very much! I'm glad I'm not the only one who thinks so. I will!

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Review #32, by Lady of Tears Paper People

7th January 2014:
Oh em ghee. I loved this! Like really, really loved this. It's brilliant! Fresh! Genius! I've never seen anything like it before and I can't wait to see what happens next.

I'll admit, I got a bit turned around at the end, because I didn't know if I was jumping perspectives or what not...but once I got it, I got it. Very Clark Kent!

The only critique I would have would be to check for clarity. For example, I couldn't tell if her roomie was a muggle or not. I guessed, but until she said it quite a bit later I wasn't sure. I think it's better to just let us know those sorts of things in a more obvious way. If that makes sense.

Can't wait to see where this goes! I am a bit fan of AU and completely original character stories, so I'm so glad I stumbled across this!

-Lady of Tears

Author's Response: Oh thank god! :D I was so worried it was too... weird... but you've completely eased my mind. I'm so glad you liked it! Thank you so much, that's really amazing to hear.
I'm glad it cleared up for you by the end, this chapter was a serious struggle for me, which is unusual in first chapters.
Oh, that absolutely does make sense- the character is very self involved and doesn't often talk about others that much, but you're right, I probably should have put that in sooner. Thanks for pointing that out, I'll try and be more direct in the future :)
I'm so excited that you're excited! I promise to have lots of original characters and lots- a ton- of AU stuff. I'm really happy you did too.
Thank you for the lovely review!

GingerGenower


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