I really like your story! Your characters all seem so real, especially Gwen, of course :)
And I can't seem to decide whether I really want her with James or not... They seem perfect for each other, but then on the other - she has suffered for so long, and Joshua is so cute!
Nevertheless, I want James back! He can't just disappear! Make him come back - soon, please :D

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I really hope you haven't given up on this story, it's probably one of my favourites on this site and right after Gwen finally tells someone she is in love with James? Why do you do this to us?

Anyway, hope you're life is amazingly good at the moment and you're having fun in whatever you're doing!

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Really amazing story. I really would love for Gwen to be able to talk to James about her feelings. They're so close and she clearly doesn't want to ruin their friendship by telling him and of course now there is Joshua who seems pretty perfect for her. I really have no clue who she will end up with at this point, but I'm hoping for James. Update when you can!

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Aahhh!!! Please update soon! I really hate Kat:(
When's James coming back? This story is amazing!

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I discovered this story a few days ago and love it! Thanks and keep it up! :)

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Another long hiatus. You are making me nervous Elenia! Just remember, Gwen's story deserves an ending. Please update soon!I need some Gwen/James in my life right now.

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I think the only flaw in this story is the fact that this is the last chapter written...

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Oh you suck! I freaking love Joshua he's beautiful but she has to end up with James! Poor Joshua :( I hope that he doesn't turn out to be a tool and that he ends up with someone lovely!
Loved this chapter! Stoked that she finally told someone she likes James! Even if Rose only thinks its a recent development at least someone knows!

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I lilalove the interactions between James and Gwen - they have this atmosphere around them, a certain aura that instantly captures me. I think they are wonderful as best friends, but you must be blind not to see that there is a spark lingering underneath the 'friendship facade' and even though they are still so far from even anything that comes close to a couple, they are so so close at the same time. I don't think this made any sense (in my head it did, but you know how difficult it can be to bring some words onto a paper, or well into this little review box thingie) but somehow I hope you vaguely understood what I meant haha :D
Anyways, I'm off to bed now, dear, and I expect a new chapter when I wake up ;) Just yesterday I read the whole 19 chapters again for the second time :P And YES that means I really do love your story (:
Stay as you are!
Lots of love,
Sally

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Lovely chapter as usual! I was worried you had abandoned this awesome story and so after doing my usual check to see if you had updated I almost cried tears of happiness! Keep up the great work and I can't wait to see where you take this.

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Hanna. YOU ARE A NAUGHTY AUTHOR. You get me SO into these people, like I'm ready to jump through the screen and force them to just be together already.

He's practically torturing her! I could absluetly feel her shiver down her spine and I wanted so bad for James to just realize it and not pull away and kiss her and ugh! She's giving you hints without even meaning to, James. GO FOR IT. Why must these characters be so frustrating??

Okay. I'm backing up a bit to try and leave a coherent review. I *really* liked seeing Gwen get ready, and I'm a pretty girly girl myself so I sort of wanted to go there and slap a nice revealing black dress on her :P

And now what do we have here... Kat kat kat. She shouldn't have let the anger get the best of her. Does she really think just a month or so of dating would get James to like her enough that she could try and tell him to choose? I'm so happy to see her gone.. but it's the kind of happy that I don't really think will last.. considering there are way more chapters and it can't really tie up this soon. So what else to you have up your sleeve, missy? ;)

Now this conversation with Hayden. I'm frustarted with both of them because, on one hand, James is so easy to see through. He's only telling Hayden the 'one day' thing because he knows that Gwen won't ever like him. But this does make me thing.. if he likes Gwen a lot, and he knows Hayden does, maybe that's why he's holding off? To be a good friend? But at the same time, am I keeping up my optimism too much by being so sure they have to love each other? Hmm. Sneaky characters.

I felt so bad for Gwen that she had to witness that. But I hope she also realizes that if one of her friends asked her, she'd deny liking James. He can very well be doing the same thing! Of course she doesn't realize this, it's Gwen.

I loved the little look into the past. So maybe if that never would have happened she'd have the courage to give it a go years ago. You're sending me over a roller coaster of emotions, Hanna!

I really enjoyed this chapter! It felt like it resolved a few things, or at least one blonde haired slimy thing, but it also felt like you're building us up again for something bigger...

Awesome story so far, darling ♥

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You are a complete goddess. I love this story so much. It's like a roller coaster of emotions and I'm constantly riding it. I think I knew from the beginning that something fishy was up with this Kat person, cause she seemed so two-faced. I'm so happy that I was right! (so weird going backwards to review your awesomness, but Imma make this work ;))

I can't get enough of this story. I know I'll be sooo sad when it comes to an end, but geeze I just have to know what is going to happen. Will Gwen stay with Joshua or go where her heart has been for years... James. Ugggh. All the feels.

Anyways enough of me spazzing out on you. Love this and I love you. You better keep updating ;)

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Gwen! He pretty much admitted to being in love with you! Well, maybe not exactly that. But he did saw that she would be surprised at how well he could act... and he's acting! He's acting at being your best friend because HE'S IN LOVE WITH YOU. Okay. Just had to get that out.

I'm still not liking Kat, but I'll give her points for creativity. You make it very clear through her actions that she cares only about being James Potter's gf. Because she's willing to endure things she clearly doesn't love, like Gwen and James's friendship, but she doesn't say anything because she knows he'll get rid of her like *that*... smart girl. Annoying, ridiculous, slimy... but she has her manipulation skills down to a T.

I liked the meeting with Joshua, although I don't like the idea of anything distracting Gwen. Because I'm hoping if she gets miserable enough she'll just blurt out that she's in love with him. But still, a gorgeous man can't be bad to be in an elevator with :P Even if she broke her fist. (Also this is a small correction. But with first, I'd suggest you use hand. Fist is more the shape you make when you make a fist. So when you punch something, you'd break your hand). Like I said, a very small correction but I thought it'd be worth pointing out.

Anyway! I really enjoyed the scene at the Potters. I love that you've shown how Gwen is part of them, part of their unit, and Kat is very much an outsider. Take that, you blonde... well. I'll stop at blonde to keep this 12+ :P

Your story continues to get more captivating and frustrating all at once! Frustrating in a very good way, that is ;)

Awesome chapter ♥

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Thanks for the update! Sorry to hear you've been having a rough time! Great chapter, but I'm worried about Gwen and James! Can't wait to see where you take them! :)

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Hi there!
So, I love love love love love love it and I wish I could hug you to convey my feels. *_*
This chapter is a brilliant start to an even more brilliant and perfect story and I want to eat it ;)
The way you started it, with the different love types, makes pretty much every reader identify with at least one type and hence pulls one directly in - so yes, basically I'm calling your story a supermassive black hole (shh I love metaphors and yes - it's a compliment ;)).
I have a huge weakness for James/OC stories and I'm reading yours since about forever now, which should tell you that you did an excellent job here!
You're an extraordinary writer and I can't wait to see more from you!
Lots of love,
Sally

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OMG.
I've been waiting&waiting for this chapter.
I was worried someone Avada Kedavra-ed you!!
Thank you so much for updating:D
PleasePleasePleasePlease bring back James in the next chapter;because to be honest,its a bit boring without him:$
Once again,thanks so much!!
And update sooon(:

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WHY IS GWEN SO NICE. WHY. She's absolutely a better person than me. Because I would have number one asked him to stay with me during the incident when they both woke up. I mean I would have said no once, then when he said again that he would, I'd have been all over that deal :P

THEN I would have called Kat out on her slimy best friend. You really want to date a girl who has slimy best male friends that try and creep on your best friend, James?? NO!

Ugh. You're not going to make this easy, are you? I wanted them to kiss so bad in the beginning of the chapter. It was like, if they could have just stayed in their sleepy world for a bit longer it may have happened. If only she wouldn't have thought about leaned forward just an inch.. just to see his reaction...ugh.

I loved Rose's introduction in this. She's so sympathetic, and the detail about her rushing out during their Christmas unpacking was so awesome. It not only gave a really fun mental picture, but it showed us just how much she cares about Gwen. It's nice that she and Rosie are friends in their own right, and not just because of James. And you really demonstrated that friendship well in this chapter.

I don't think I've mentioned this yet, but I really like that you're writing in first person. I love the kind of connection we have with Gwen. We're so close to her, yet she doesn't hear me screaming at her to just KISS JAMES :P

I really enjoyed this chapter!

Jami

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I'm seriously confused. If I can't decide if James or Joshua is better than how can Gwen?

They both have something to offer her. James is comfort and familiarity. Joshua is more of a stable person he's not going anywhere.

I know whatever you pick is going to be great (: Can't wait for the next chapter!

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So, when I saw this had been updated, I had some weird fan-girl arm-spasm... Maybe Joshua could check it out for me? ;) Aha. Anyway, lovely chapter, and it was worth the wait, but without it would be preferable next time? ;) Team Joshwen! Or Gweshua... I can't rememeber what I called it before ._. Anyway, absolutely amazing, as per usual :) xx

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Ho, ho, ho! This is your Holiday Review Swap Extravaganza Thingee review!

Holy Toledo! Has it really been four months since Gwen beat up Kat and James left on his soul-searching quest? Four months? Doesn't seem possible!

It seems as though Gwen's having about as hard a time with six days as I've had with four months, though. ;) I love the way you keep her personality so consistent throughout this. She has that thin, easy-going facade over her relentless worrying and introspection. She's been torn between pursuing her feelings toward James and moving on for the entire story, but the conflict has never felt quite as intense as it did at the start of this chapter. The arguments she's having inside her head combined with the serial broom polishing made for a really vivid portrayal of her frame of mind.

I really liked the way you portrayed Rose in this chapter. I could see so much of her mother in her. It was partly the way that she always seems to find the right question to draw Gwen a bit further out, but that's well balanced with the way that she knows when to just stay quiet and let Gwen talk. She also seems to have a knack for keeping the conversation from getting too intense by backing off into more comfortable topics when needed. She should definitely be a therapist of some sort.

Gwen's progression through her conversation with Rose was really exciting and heart-warming to read. She takes her walls down little by little, starting out with her admission that she hasn't heard from James either. I love how Rose's reactions make it clear exactly what a capital-B Big capital-D Deal it is for Gwen to be opening up like this to somebody who isn't James.

"I had ‘accidentally’ managed to destroy every single one of her belongings that I found in James’s flat" - Awesome! That's my girl!

Ouch. And there's the cloud around the silver lining. Seems like she's been avoiding Joshua quite a bit. Now the part of me that's still very suspicious of Joshua is pretty pleased about this. But knowing only what Gwen knows, this is definitely not emotionally healthy for her. It's funny that she blames James, in a way, for destroying all of her past relationships. Here we see her plainly sabotaging the most promising thing she's had in many years and she's doing it while James is who-knows-where. It takes two to be in a self-destructive non-relationship.

I thought the whole section about Gwen's dad was huge for her. Not quite as huge as her final revelation, but still huge. With Rose's help, she manages to think just a little beyond the fear and anger and hurt and actually ponder what it means that her father chose to remain in Azkaban. She considers some different points of view on why he did the terrible things he did. It will be a long, slow process for her, but this seemed like a start. And I really love the part where she apologizes to Rose for never opening up about her dad. Rose is definitely right; Gwen had nothing to apologize to Rose for. That apology was all about Gwen, and it was very heart-felt.

I have to say, Joshua showed up at just the right moment. I really felt Gwen starting to chicken out again before he arrived. And just like that, she gets a reminder of why she needs to sort out her life where James is concerned. Your timing was fantastic there.

Wow. Rose pulled such a Molly Weasley moment when she confronted Gwen about her relationship with Joshua. I loved it! Finally, somebody other than Vic who isn't tip-toeing around Gwen and her relationship problems.

Ha! It sounds like Rose almost inhaled something when Gwen drops her final bomb. Gah! I feel Rose's pain so much here. I know that she just wants to hunt James down and slap him upside the head with Gwen's admission. We all do. But she has to be a good friend and not betray the newfound level of trust between her and Gwen. Sometimes, being a good friend really sucks!

On to Joshua's apartment. I really liked the way that Gwen allowed herself to relax a bit and explore. She's starting to feel more comfortable about being part of Joshua's life and not like she's intruding on everything. She checks out his personal things and his old pictures. She learns a bit about his family. She sees his ex-girlfriend's dog. It all came across like very healthy relationship growth and I was happy for her. Eventually, you're going to make me regret feeling that way, aren't you? :(

Joshua's honest admissions about his past and his ex-girlfriend were starting to rope me in a bit, I have to admit. He obviously has gone through difficulties of his own and sacrificed a great deal for his career.

The ending was really sweet. The contentment was just radiating off of my screen, and I felt genuinely happy for Gwen. Oh, man. I know know you're gonna make me regret this!

Based on this chapter, I'm starting to adjust my predictions just a bit. I'm now betting that James is going to come back and confess his feelings to Gwen, but she's going to be very into Joshua by then and won't be ready to believe him. But shortly thereafter, things will fall back into line with my original prediction. There! I'm on the record.

Oh, my dear, how much I've missed this story! Please don't go on such a long hiatus again. This is just too good! Until next time, Happy Holidays!

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OMG! YOU ARE BACK! =D I CANT BELIEVE IT!! amkjkdnmhdjnkajdkaKJMD.Ah.

Sorry about that.

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Amazing Chapter!

Im so confused i LOVE both Joshua AND James!! Arghhh why must you make it so hard for me! Haha


Amazing chapter (again)!!!

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Hi there!

So I'm partially here for the review swap and partially here because I'm just plain in love with this whole story. I've been following this story from pretty much the beginning and I'm so excited that you've updated it again.

I've been along for all the ups and downs of this story. I've been in tears too. I love tragic and sad stories.

You do such a great job with your characterization. I always feel like I'm there with Gwen, James and now Joshua. I just know that Joshua's heart is going to be broken, and that makes me so sad. I really do love James, as a whole, but part of me is rooting for Joshua. He is sweet and would be so good for Gwen.

Anyways, enough of me gushing. I just really hope you continue updating this story. I love reading it :)

Kristina

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Hi!

I am so so happy that you updated. So happy. And I absolutely loved loved loved the chapter!

Is it wrong of me to say that I kind of prefer Gwen with Joshua than with James? I just think that Joshua has been so sweet to her, and its obvious that she likes him, and that they could be great and happy together, if she just gets over James.

James just has a little bit of baggage with him, and although she does have feelings for him, she needs someone who will reciprocate her feelings. And plus, Joshua is DEFINITELY a keeper. Not saying that i don't like James. I DO.

Anyways, I'm glad that she told Rose, and I loved the chapter.
Thank you for updating!
- Abhi

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Hello, my dear. ♥ I'm here to return our swap.

Your grasp of the English language is amazing, so I hope you'll forgive me if I push you a little further. (I know that this is all stuff you may well have improved upon since writing this chapter, so I'll be brief.)

There were a lot of points where you included dialogue tags or descriptions that I didn't really think were necessary, and actually impeded the flow of the chapter a little. I also think that you should be careful about overusing qualifiers - things like "a moment" and "little" aren't always necessary.

For example, your first line would have sounded a little tighter if it had read, Fred Weasley threw himself on my couch. "So, what's the plan for Friday?" rather than "So, what's the plan for Friday?" Fred Weasley asked as he threw himself on my couch. It's a subtle difference, but it does make the writing come across as more polished.

Similarly, a little further down, rather than have "I had a fight with Jen," he revealed and a small frown appeared on his face for a moment. You don't really need the dialogue tag he revealed - it's clear that it's Fred speaking, and you typically use dialogue tags when either it isn't clear who's speaking or there's something distinctive about how they're speaking. This isn't really either. Instead, I think A small frown appeared on his face. "I had a fight with Jen." would have felt a little more polished.

Again, it's not a huge deal - your writing is perfectly lovely as it is. I just think that there are a few little things you could improve upon here and there to make it amazing. :)

Anyway. Onto the actual content. :P

I definitely believe Gwen's unrequited (?) feelings toward James, and I think you've played the best-friend-in-love thing perfectly, and in a way that's in keeping with the character you established Gwen to be. I could really feel how hurt and upset she was when their friends decided that they wanted a party and James went along with it, and I thought that keeping it in and pretending she wasn't bothered made sense. You don't want to force someone to spend time with you, you want them to want to.

I also like that she did end up blowing him off in the end, even if she felt guilty about it - unrequited love doesn't need to mean that she becomes a complete doormat, and I'm glad that you seen to be avoiding that pitfall.

I think that my major issue thus far is that I like Gwen a lot, but I don't really like James. I'm not quite sure what it is, since I tend to like the overconfident devil-may-care characters, but there's something about James that isn't clicking for me. I don't know, maybe it's just that right now, James is coming across as a bit selfish and thoughtless without a lot of redeeming characteristics. I don't dislike him, I just don't really see what Gwen does in him, and I'm kind of rooting for her to find someone else and get over James rather than for them to get together, if that makes sense. I just don't feel like he deserves her.

That said, this is still in the early part of the story, and it's entirely possible that James will end up becoming far more likable as it progresses. This was not a chapter that I think he was supposed to really shine in.

All in all, this was a really good chapter, and I'm definitely going to have to find the time to r&r more of it! ♥

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