he-he-he. This was by far my most favorite chapter in this story so far! It's so cute and honestly I started squealing like a mad woman when Louis and Phoebe finally snogged! They need to be together, no exceptions! They're so perfect together, it's criminal! This is probably one of my favorite written pairings on this site, which is saying something because I have very few favorite pairings. :)

And Ellie. What a killjoy! She's horrible walking in on them like that. I am going to plead guilty in admitting I wanted to see some more Phlouis (Phoebe + Louis). I really did. >:)

And Cameron, that boy just doesn't know when to let go! He needs to, because he's not doing the Phlouis ship any favours. He just needs ta go! He deserved to be pawned!

Great chapter as always hun!

Author's Response: Oh my gosh! They're one of your favourite ships?!?!?!?! I feel so honoured that you thought that! Thank you so much! ♥
Ellie didn't know they were snogging, can you really blame her? But she did regret it, so if that counts towards anything! ;)
Yes, ew Cameron. He was trying to put holes in the Phlouis (they don't really have a great ship name - it's quite difficult to say!) ship but they're just smart and bring extra rafts. :p
Thank you for reviewing and reading, I'm glad you like my story!
Oh and by the way, your previous review was review number fifty! I was so happy but I forgot to mention it in the response before! So thanks for getting me to fifty reviews! :D

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Awh! This was such a majorly cute chapter! I loved it! And Louis is a tad creepy, a bit stalkerish, but he has good intentions, so its cool. I wouldn't mind it if boys were like him -- stalkery with good intentions, if that makes sense at all.

And his family! I loved the whole idea/thought to it. Of Louis being a creep and bringing his whole family. That must've been an awkward encounter. A lot of blushing I see, but they seemed purtty chill with it. I swear, the Weasley/Potter/Lupin family seems like the best family in the world.

Anywho, I'm gonna go skip off to chapter four now. I should be ashamed, I should be studying, but who needs studying when you're reading an awesome fanfiction?!?

Author's Response: *sigh* I have to respond to these. :( I like having them sitting here - I just feel so popular. *hair flicks*.
Okay, now to the actual response! :p
Yes, Louis is a tad creepy but he's just so adorable that you can't fault him! :p I wish boys were like this, I'm generally a very creepy person so if they were just as creepy, I'd probably feel a lot more comfortable around them! :p
Ahh yes, the Weasley/Potter/Lupin family would be the best family in the world. I just love the idea of such a close-knit family - even though there's about a million of them. :p
Yes, pfft... studying isn't that important - it only helps you in exams which then gives you a base for EVERYTHING IN LIFE! :p
I'll go respond to your next review! ;)

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This chapter was just filled with awesomeness, I am left with nothing much to say. Phoebe and Louis are meant to be with each other! I know they are! The fates have decided it! They have, they have!

Oh God, aren't I weird?

And I loved their conversation at the beginning of this chapter. It isn't everyday you start a conversation with a guy you don't know and talk about rapists then all of a sudden become best pals. It just doesn't work that way, even though I wish it did!

Oh, how I envy your style! Your work is always so light hearted and fun loving.

Author's Response: Hellooo!
Hahaha they are meant to be together, aren't they? They're just so adorable! :p
I'll let you in on a little secret, the best of people are the weirdest ones. ;)
I know it doesn't work that way, but I so wish it did! Life would be so much more fun!
I'm so glad you like the way I write, I just do it for fun! :D
Thanks for reviewing again! :D

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Okay, so after reading "Naive", I had the burning urge to start reading this. I. Do. Not. Regret!

I love Phoebe. She seems so awesome already. And the last part just had me cracking up. Oh Louis! He's a beautiful being, so of course he'd have all the girls wrapped around his fingers. Poor Phoebe, rambling in French. :)

Okay, so my favorite part:


"Did the usual chef make this?" Sniff.
"Yes."
"Did he mistreat it in anyway?" Sniff.
"No."
"Did he cook it at perfect 180 degrees?" Sniff.
I HAVE NO IDEA! WHY DON'T YOU GO CHECK FOR YOUR SELF?! AND WHILE YOU'RE AT IT, GET A BLEEDING TISSUE!
"...Yes."
"Are you sure?"
"Yes."
"Good. Now leave,"


I can honestly say that I actually read this out loud and sniffed to add in affect. Poor Phoebe, having to deal with such an insufferable old woman. It's the typical sterotype though. Aren't crabby old women the best?

Well, I gots to go scamper off and read the next chapter :)

Author's Response: HELLO AGAIN!
I'm glad you don't regret reading this story! :D
I love Phoebe too, she's just so - I don't really know the word to put here but she was a lot of fun writing!
Louis is a beautiful being, I just wish he was real. :'(
Phoebe rambling in French was so cringey to write for me. I was like, 'NOOO WHAT ARE YOU DOING?!'
Is it weird that I get so involved with my characters? Meh.
Hahaha, that was fun to write! I actually sniff whenever I read it as well!
Old women, ugh. I used to work at a chemist and they are always so rude and crabby so I decided to channel my frustration through the crazy lady. :p
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Aww it's over! :( Please tell me there will be a sequel!

Author's Response: Yes, it's over. :(
Sorry, there will be no sequel! I have no inspiration for a sequel and I have no time! :(
I'm glad you liked the story though!
Plus, I love your penname! Who'd you kill to get that? :p
Thanks for reviewing! :D

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That was a really cute story! :) Loved it

Author's Response: Aww thank you! :)

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Awww.I only started reading this story a little while ago, but I'm sorry to see it end. Louis and Phoebe are just so cute together!! Great story!

Author's Response: Aw, I'm sorry to hear that but I'm glad you still read it!
They are adorable together, aren't they? :p
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! :D

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aw no epilogue? I'd love to see what happens to them. Great story though

Author's Response: Nope sorry! No epilogue. :(
I wrote it so you can make your own endings about what happens to them. Personally I believe that they end up being together forever with gorgeous babies and they grow old and wrinkly together and make inappropriate jokes to their grandchildren, but that's just me. :p
Thank you so much for reading this and thank you for reviewing! :D

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awesome again. superb

Author's Response: Thanks! :)

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I love this story, Bee and Louis are so adorable and funny! and Bee's parents are really funny too, though if my parents were trying to show anyone my baby pictures, I would have hide somewhere until that disaster was over!
please update as soon as possible! (:

Author's Response: Aww thanks :)
I'll update as soon as I can, I just have a lot on my plate right now (both RL and FF) so I'll get to it as soon as I can!
It's third on my checklist, so hopefully it will be soon :D
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OMG this story is epic!!! Please please please
keep writing more I really want to read more!!!
XD

Author's Response: Oh, stawwp it! You're making me blush! :p
Ahahaha, I have exams so I shouldn't even be on this right now (woops :p) and I need to actually write the chapter for it to be updated!
I'm sorry!
But I'll write it as soon as I get a chance!
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OMGOSH! That was seriously the cutest chapter i've ever read! I was laughing and giggling the entire time! Louis is perfect. ♥ Bee is a very very VERY lucky girl. I absolutely loved the humour in this chapter, I could not stop laughing! Please update soon! I need another feel good chapter like this again!

Another AMAZING chapter, absolutely loved it :)



Donkey.
hehe.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! :D
I'm so glad to hear that I made you laugh! Louis is perfect, isn't he? I just wish he was real! :p
The update may be quite a while because I have exams and I haven't even written one word yet! :s
I'll try to write it as soon as I can, though, just for all you lovely readers :D
Thanks for reviewing :D

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I adore this story, I'm almost sorry to see it updated because then I know I'll have to wait for the next one.

Author's Response: Aww thank you! Glad to know that you love it!
Update may take a while because I have exams, and I actually haven't even written one word...
Oops...
But I'll try as hard as I can!
Thanks for reviewing :D

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I just wanted to say AWESOMEST STORY EVER! I fricking love this thing!

Author's Response: Aww thanks! :D

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AWWW that was simply the cutest thing EVER at the end. I FRICKING LOVE LOUIS! And bee is so cute and Ellie is so funny and matt and her dad so is Susan!M hahahahahahah I love burrito! I basically love your story! :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much!
I love them all too ;)
Glad you liked Burrito! :D
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I love this story! I especially love the way you've portrayed the characters. They're both unusual but in a way that goes together. Your characters also have a lot of depth, so you feel like you know them. Good job! I'm always so excited when I see you've uploaded another chapter :-)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! :)
I tried extra hard in making them not cliche so that's probably why they're unusual :p
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Oh my good golly gosh!!! This is now my new favorite story on this website!!! I absolutely fell in love with it, and it has been making me laugh hysterically the entire time I've been reading so yeah. I thought I would let you know that;) So you should update again soon, yeah??? Ok!!! I'm excited now:)

Author's Response: THANK YOU SO MUCH! :D
I just need to actually write the next chapter, but as soon as I do, I'll post it :)
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awww! I loved this chapter! Thank you!

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing :D

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Hello! I'm here from the review tag ;) So first off I'd like to say I like the concept, and how this is going!^^ You have cool characters, that seem realistic and the humor's pretty good. I'd only suggest working on some more description because the chapter is a little fast-paced and it's hard to follow with all the dialogue and hardly any description.

I know it's hard, I do the same thing, description's kinda dull to write when you're trying to fill in with humor and a lot of action, but it really helps the chapter flow and overall feel. It makes the chapter seem a little less charged and the humor's even funnier because it's more... hum.. "surprising" if you know what I mean? Since there are softer, more informal parts, the silly internal rants of characters sound even better ;)

Other than that the french was okay but with a few tiny grammatical errors. Don't worry, it's still pretty good, it's just because I did most of my schooling up until now in french ;) So basically it should be:

"Je suis desolee. Je ne parle pas anglais!"

You add an "e" because the speaker is feminine. I know, french is weird and complicated xD

and:

"Pas de probleme. Comment tu t'appelle? Moi c'est Louis et je suis francais, en fait... ma mere est francaise... Mais elle m'a appris la langue."

Here it's the same thing for the mon/ma. since her mother is (obviously) a woman, it's "ma" instead of "mon" as for the rest it's not important, just me twiddling so that's it's a slightly more realistic and less robotic french speech ;) the translation changes a bit though, it'd be:

"No problem. What's your name? I'm Louis and I'm French, well... my mother's french... but she taught me the language"

So now that I've finished my french grammar class xD (sorry about that by the way! I just can't help myself when I see french text ;) ) I just wanted to say this is really good!^^ I love Louis/OC and I really like where this is going! :D

xxx

-June

PS: The accents in the french quotes came out as weird symbols in the review so I had to replace them by the regular no-accent letters, you had the accents right though, just saying in case you were worrying :P

Author's Response: Thank you!
Yeah, it seems pretty fast paced to me as well but when I have more time, I'll probably add more details :)
I can't believe I forgot the extra 'e'! That was the only bit I used to be good at! Argh! But thank you for pointing it out :D
Hm... I may change it to your way, it does make more sense. I only learnt the robotic way in school ;)
It's alright, French grammar lessons are always welcomed :D
Thank you so much again! I love Louis/OC stories too ;)
Thanks for reviewing :D

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I was told their was an update and it lied. I absolutely adore this story and can't wait for more.

Author's Response: Oh sorry about that! But never fear, chapter five is in the queue! :D
Thank you for reviewing :D

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MAN, WHY DID ELLIE HAVE TO INTERRUPT!!! IT WAS THE PERFECT MOMENT?! Get them together. Now.
I hate Cameron. Are you proud of me?
(That kick must have felt very empowering. Family jewels huh? Priceless. :))
Matt is an awesome brother. And Rachelle is awesome as well.
Loved it!
Can't wait for the next chappie!!
luv,
imacullenpottergirl

Author's Response: hahaha it was the perfect moment, was it?
Yes, hating Cameron is something to be very proud of :D
The kick was good for Phoebe, sometimes you just need to get your ex-boyfriends and kick them in a special place to get your inner frustration out
hehehehe
Matt is awesome, there'll probably be more of him in the sixth chapter :D
Rachelle might make a come-back soon :D
Thank you! I'm about half-way through the next chapter right now, but I have a lot of schoolwork so it might not get finished soon :(
Hopefully I'll get it out soon :D
Thank you for reviewing :D

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:D Slut Name

This story is absolutely rocking

Author's Response: hehehe quite a few people agree with this, it must be a very popular name for nasty people :p
Thank you for reviewing :D

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Brilliant, Original Humor

Author's Response: Thank you so much :D

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Interesting and refreshing plot. Your best work :p

Author's Response: Thank you! This is probably my favourite out of all my stories right now :D
Thanks for reviewing :D

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Haha I thought that Danielle name thing was really funny. xD
As ever I loved this chapter! :D I look forward to the next one!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm working on the next one whenever I get bored of English, so it should be up soon :D
Thanks for reviewing :D

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