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Review #26, by Anonymous The Day of Rememberance

14th November 2011:
hae you have a really nice writing style its really good but if i were you i would focus on developing the finer details of the plot and storyline etc because this chapter becomes kind of unrealistic because of how fast all the characters have moved on from the final battle and finer details like that, once you get a stronger storyline your writing will be amazing. =] keep working, yourll know when you've got it right.

Author's Response: Thank you, that's absolutely brilliant that you think that! I know the plot isn't the best and I guess I just wrote it down straight away without thinking about the finer details, so I guess before I add any more I'll go back and possibly alter a lot of it to make it seem a little more realistic. Thank you so much for your review, I have a few more stories being written at the moment and hopefully they have a much stronger plot line and they'll come off a lot better. But thanks! =]

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Review #27, by magicmuggle01 In the Slytherin Common Room

13th November 2011:
Wow, intense. I don't think Ron will react very favourable towards Harry if he ever finds out about that kiss. I wonder if he ever will find out? And has Hermie got mixed feelings?
Excellent chapter and 10/10. Plz update soon.

Author's Response: Thanks once again for your excellent review! I really appreciate the good comments. I guess you'll just have to wait and see whether or not your questions are answered during the next chapters!! I have the next chapter written although I may have to tweak it a bit more before I put it into validation. But it'll definitely be updated soon don't worry! Thanks again for the wonderful rating, really means a lot to me!

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Review #28, by Jennifer The Potions Classroom

10th November 2011:
I am enjoying it and want to read more.

Author's Response: That's great to hear, the next chapter is now up so I hope you like it!

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Review #29, by magicmuggle01 The Potions Classroom

5th November 2011:
An interesting reaction from Harry. I never expected that. And the intense feelings he was feeling towards Hermione, that certainly didn't sound like the Harry we've all come to know.
Can't wait to see what you come up with next. 10/10 and plz update soon. Adding to favs.

Author's Response: I put Harry across like that because sometimes I find in the books he gets easily irritated when he is on the brink of a discovery and gets annoyed with anyone and everyone that happen to be there at the time, well that's my opinion anyway, I reckon it's interesting that you see him in a different light and I'll probably take that view on board as it is probably shared by others. I guess the feelings put across in this chapter are rather intense and I suppose it's because I know what's going to happen later on so maybe I might edit it and tone them down a little, seeing as I may have gone slightly over the top. Thank you so much for the 10/10, that means so much to me and I hope I can keep that up for you. Thanks as well for adding it to your favourites. The fourth chapter is currently in validation at the moment so you won't have to wait long!!

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Review #30, by magicmuggle01 Professor McGonagall's Speech

5th November 2011:
I thought I had picked up a bit of love interest between Harry and maybe Hermione, though I could be wrong. I wonder where you'll go from here where that's concerned?
Another good chapter and 9/10. Must move on.

Author's Response: I think you may be right there. I guess you'll just have to find out what happens in the later chapters though to see what happens! Thank you once again for rating it so highly.

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Review #31, by magicmuggle01 The Day of Rememberance

5th November 2011:
A good start. I like how you have people remembering their friends and loved ones, that was a nice touch. But at the same time remembering that life goes on.
You have a great opening to what looks like an equally great story. So 9/10 and onto the next chapter.

Author's Response: Thanks, that means a lot that you've rated it so high. Hopefully I can fulfil your expectations on it being a great story.

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Review #32, by sirus29 The Day of Rememberance

29th October 2011:
I think of fanfare I've read so far you seem to one of the most authentic as you keep the personalities of the characters intact. It's not hard to imagine them acting and saying the things you write (I think it is extremely important to carry on the English flare to be believable, as well as Harry's traits. He would be concerned more about honoring those that had fallen in battle and feel the twinge of guilt that they risked so much in defeating Voldermort, but also for Harry's safety. Harry would
make sacrifices in his personal relationship with Ginny for what he considered to be the right next thing to do) Carry on ...

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your feedback, I'll keep it in mind for the next few chapters. I'm really glad you think I'm writing the characters authentically, I also think it's extremely important to do that so I'm glad I've somewhat managed it. I'll be sure to check out some of your stories too! Thanks again!

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