Okay, I guess I should feel bad for Ava. And I do, because you wrote her emotions down so perfectly.
However, at the same time, I can't help but dislike her a bit, considering she was the one who broke up with Ian in the fist place, and he did wait for her for eight months.
In fact, Ian doesn't seem like a bad guy. At all.
I think he would have been a quite likeable character if we were to read about him eight months back. Ava leaving him seriously messed him up.
If there is anyone I truly feel bad for, it's him. He doesn't deserve what Ava's doing to him. And I hope she gets it together and doesn't wreck it with him like she did for Ian.
Beautifully written as always.Author's Response: I understand what you mean. Yes, she's in an awful place. Yes, she's absolutely devastated and heart broken. But let's face it - she did it to herself. He didn't want any of this to happen, but it did, and he's just protecting himself now.
He's not. He's really not. Hopefully that comes out.
He's a very likeable guy, in fact. There's a reason that as bitter and jaded as she is, she still managed to fall for him.
Poor guy. She's seriously messing with his head and just dragging him around like a rag doll, even if she doesn't intend to. It's not right, but she does it anyway.
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Ian? Ian who? Is Ian the reason she ran away? Dun dun dunnn, I'm going to read on and find out.
About the drunk hookup thing, well yes, I'll admit I saw it coming, I'll admit I found it cliche, but you say there is a twist coming? Another reason to keep reading. :D
Lastly, isn't Louis taking advantage of Ava? And he said he didn't need to get her drunk to do that. Doesn't that lower him to the same level as Matt?
Minus marks for Louis, I'm sorry.Author's Response: Ah, yes. The elusive Ian. Read on and you shall discover his secrets.
Haha yeah, I know. It's cliche. But it had to happen. Just trust me.
Hmm. Yes, I suppose he is in a way, but remember that he's drunk as well, so he's not thinking totally clearly. But still, it does take away from his points a little bit.
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Haha, this is brilliant. So ordinary, yet compelling to read. It's snarky without being annoying to the eyes, it's funny without trying too hard. And you've introduced the main characters so well that I can already form pictures of them in my mind without looking at the chapter images.
I'm interested to see where this story is going, because so far, the only hint of a plot is the fact that Ava's trying to escape the wizarding world.
Onto the next chapter. :)Author's Response: Haha, why thank you! I'm glad you like it. It's just something I decided to write for the fun of it, so I really didn't try too hard with the humor or descriptions or anything. This was just a little something I wrote for me that I decided to put up :)
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OMG. I love this. It's bloody amazing. I'm so excited to continue :)
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"Alcohol is the drink of the devil, I'm telling you. And I swear that I will not touch the stuff for a very long time after this."
Absolutely. I think that would be a very good idea, although I doubt she's carry through with it.
I have to give a thumbs up to Louis in this chapter. Ava is seriously messed up in some aspects and he still sticks with her. Usually, men run as far away from these issues as possible - because what's more scary than an emotional woman? But he keeps coming back and for that I bow in respect.
I hope Ava overcomes her Ian issues with the help of Louis, because as much as I understand that she has problems letting go of the man she loves, it was HER decision to leave.
Great chap!Author's Response: Haha, yeah, it's probably a great idea for Ava. You doubt her self-control? Gee, I wonder why... ;)
I give him the thumbs up as well. Men /do/ usually run screaming from any sort of female dealing with emotions, but he doesn't. (Maybe because he kind of sort of possibly really likes her.)
She needs to overcome her issues, no matter who's helping her out. You are absolutely right - she decided to leave. It's time to move on.
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Wow that was so sad. All of it. But...I mean I feel really sorry for Ava and how upset she is and everything...I really do...but she's so stupid. I mean about social views. And Ian is too. Even if their parents and the socialites don't like their relationship, that doesn't mean he can't work for the company and it doesn't mean they can't be together. Wouldn't most people, outside that small social circle, like that someone rich and famous was dating someone normal? That is if she's a kind, intelligent, normal person from the middle (or lower?) class? That would look good. It would make him seem more relatable and down-to-earth. I don't know what the company does, but I don't see why everyone would criticize their rationship so much...and if they're both still in love I don't understand why they would let that get between them.
But at the same time I guess I do kind of understand. Those kinds of things can be wearing on a relationship, especially coming from the parents. I'm also wondering where Ava's parents are in all of this. But while I feel bad for her and I do believe she loves him quite a lot, I can't help but think that...if they can't past something like that, even when they're in love...they're just not meant to be. Their relationship just isn't that strong.
I don't know, maybe I'm viewing this in a weird way, but that's just how I feel right now...maybe I'm biased because I love Louis so much and he likes her.
Speaking of Louis -he is so sweet. I adore him. And I think he was upset because Ava said their tryst was a mistake. He's adorable. And I feel so bad for him because he's really in a weird place, isn't he? He clearly likes Ava and cares about her, but she sees Ian every time she looks at him. I suppose it's probably not horrible right now, since they hardly know each other, though.
Matt is also great ❤
Update soon!!Author's Response: I know. It was sad. I seem to have that problem with my writing, haha. You have a good point - most people are thrilled when famous/important figures start dating normal people. However, in this case, it's the upper class that's the problem. Since Ian's family runs with the higher ups, those are the people they're concerned about. Those are the people's opinions who matter to them, and those people just don't like Ava. They don't like her clothes, they don't like her manners (or lack of them), they don't like her job, and they don't like her status. So it's not that /everyone/ was criticizing their relationship, just the peeps who Ian's family really care about. You know how it is, like on TV shows with the elite circle of people who know everyone's business. Yeah.
THIS. A lot of it also had to do with his parents - we'll see more about that later on. She /does/ love him more than anything, but you're right. If they can't get over this, then...
Haha, maybe you are biased, but I'm glad you love Louis :)
He is a sweetheart when you get past the exterior. He just doesn't like to share his feelings, you know? He's definitely in a weird place - I mean, that kind of situation is always awkward, regardless of how you feel about the other person.
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I'm really enjoying this story so far and I hope you keep writing more!
I felt so bad for Ava in this chapter-especially after she went to Ian's house and her turned her away. Ian seems like he is-or at least was-a really nice guy, but I could be wrong. Although I sort of don't blame him for acting the way he did. It's clear Ava broke his heart.
Louis must be getting super confused about what's going on! The way Ava just kicks him out at the end...wow. She still clearly has some very deep issues. And Matt is just so perfect! I love him.
Courtney:)Author's Response: Hey!
Thanks! I really enjoy writing it as well :)
A lot of people did feel bad for her, which was kind of the point. Ian is a really nice guy, and I wanted to bring that out. You're right though; he kind of has a reason for acting as he did.
Yeah... He's pretty confused. She needs to work things out before she can drag other people into her mess.
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okay i feel so bad for ava
but i love how you started it with 'i hate the rain' and you ended it with it, as well
that was pretty coolAuthor's Response: Me too :(
Good job noticing that! I do it in every chapter ;)
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Gah the chapter was depressing :( I love Ava/Louis but she really can be ignorant sometimes *sighs* especially since he is only trying to help...
PEASE PLEASE PLEASE GET THEM TO BE *coughmorethancough* FRIENDS SOONAuthor's Response: I know :( Sorry! I don't know that she's ignorant so much as she just doesn't think about people other than herself very much.
Haha, very subtle. I like it ;)
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LOVED THIS CHAPTER. So intense! I was on tenterhooks the whole time! Aw, poor Louis' only trying to help Ava.. :( Can't wait for the next chapter though. Please update soon!!Author's Response: THANK YOU. I'm glad you enjoyed it so much :) You're right, he's only trying to help... I'll try and update soon! Report Review
I like Louis a lot now, actually. He was really sweet in this chapter ❤ though I am a little suspicious about him bringing her a bottle of wine, of all things. Haha.
But he was really cute -I loved when he moved her hair out of her face and kissed her, and kept holding her, and taking care of her -just so, so cute.
I sympathize with Ava but I also think she's kind of dumb...but that's probably because she's a bit of an emotional wreck right now, poor thing.
So far my theories about Ian are mostly that eventually what other people thought started to matter and maybe something to do with her being a witch. Like the negative comments and thoughts from people like his parents and friends and associates were wearing on their relationship. And perhaps he didn't react well when she told him she was a witch? I wonder if she ever told him...what happens if you tell a muggle girlfriend or boyfriend about magic and then break up? Do they obliviate the muggle? Or just let them keep that knowledge anyway and then obliviate them if they start to make trouble?
Anyway I also feel bad for Louis because he clearly cares about her and probably/possibly wants to date her, but she's calling him 'Ian' while they hook up. That's really sad... It also probably complicates their relationship because how will he know if she ever likes him back genuinely or is just hung up on Ian?
Update soon :)Author's Response: Aw, I'm glad :) He is quite the sweetie deep down. And the wine thing was /definitely/ intended as a sort of tongue-in-cheek joke, I assure you.
He was pretty adorable, wasn't he?
She did act rather dumb in this chapter, but she's not normally a dumb person. She makes stupid decisions, but it's nothing to do with her intelligence level. Most of it actually can be ascribed to her emotional distress right now, as you thought.
Interesting thoughts... but I can't reveal anything. :P But I /will/ say that there is a lot more about Ian in the next chapter, so you'll be learning whether or not you're correct on those points.
Louis :( It is rather unfortunate for him that he's so much like her ex. The whole bit about calling him Ian was definitely sad for him, but I think I feel even worse for Ava.
The next chapter is in the queue :)
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Louis is such a sweetheart! AH, please update soon!!Author's Response: Ahaha, I suppose he is. An update is going into the queue tomorrow! Report Review
Hahaha, this is hilarious! I'm loving it! Ava is an original character, I'm quite interested into why she's living as a Muggle now (let's just ignore that she uses her wand to threaten boys, but that's legit). And she slept with him again? Really? She should stay sober for a while ;).Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you're loving it :) I've tried hard to make Ava as unique as possible, so it's good to know that it's coming through. (She's only left the magical world behind; she still uses magic when she's on her own/in the presence of other witches and wizards.) And yes. Really. She has problems. Sobriety would probably be a good thing for her. Thanks for the review! Report Review
YOU LIKE HOW I MET YOUR MOTHER (i'm hoping)!?!?!
I am a huge fan thus the excitement for the name of the bar...if not your probably creeped out but not to worry!!! I love your banner and the chapters!
Hehe the plot thickens!!!
Allrightio HAZAArAuthor's Response: Awww...
YES I LOVE HOW I MET YOUR MOTHER AND I'M SO GLAD THAT SOMEBODY FINALLY UNDERSTANDS MY REFERENCE.
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asdfghjkl your writing in this was just amazing! I really really really enjoyed the chapter. Like, really. ;) Louis is so sweet, going to such lengths to make sure she's okay... but Ava never learns from her mistakes, does she? :PAuthor's Response: Aww, wow, thank you! I'm glad you liked it so much. Like, really. ;) Louis puts up a tough front, but he's secretly a sweetie at heart. But no, Ava never does learn from her mistakes. Thanks for the review! Report Review
Aww! I love Louis in this :D Ava makes terrible life decisions, though... haha ;)Author's Response: Haha, I love Louis in this as well :D But yeah, Ava does make some pretty terrible life decisions... Thanks for the review! Report Review
write more! loved it!Author's Response: Thank you so much :) Report Review
love this, you are one of my favourite authors! love this plot and characters!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you love it! Report Review
i love this chapter especially the part when she says she wont be so stupid to sleep with him again and yet she does it anyways. i cant wait to see what happens when she wakes up in the same predicament that she was at the end of the last chapter.Also i was wondering when are you going to update (shenanigans) i have been dying to see what she is going to say. Anyway thank you for the amazing chapterAuthor's Response: Ahaha, thank you! I'm glad you loved it! Ava is definitely not going to be a happy camper in the morning :P (shenanigans) is a work in progress and should (hopefully) be updated in January. I know I haven't updated in a long time, but I'm working on it. I promise! Thanks for the review! Report Review
I really like this story, and I find Ava to be a very loveable although clearly she has some real problems with alcohol;) as does Louis. The way you put so much detail in makes the story really thought provoking and addictive. You have quite a flair with humour, the banter between Louis and Ava is really hilarious! I hope you continue with this, as I really think that this is a story to look out for. Also there are already some secrets that I'm dying to see uncovered like the elusive Ian and why they are working in a diner and not the wizarding world. Love this!Author's Response: Thank yoouu ♥ I do love Ava as well, although she does have some... issues. I've tried really hard to work on writing details into the story, so thanks for mentioning that! Ava and Louis are just so much fun to write that it's easy to make the banter come out ;) I am definitely continuing with this, so don't worry about that! Thank you so much for the lovely review! Report Review
I really like this story. Very original.
It was great to find more out about Ava's past.
I can't wait to see what's going to happen next, please update as soon as you can.Author's Response: Thank you so much!
You shall be finding out more about Ava's past very soon.
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awh i really liked this (:
Ian seems.like a jerk.
a muggle jerk.
a muggle rich jerk.
um, i really liked the ava/louis here, and i expected louis to be sad/mad when ava kept calling him Ian, but yay ! that he's not mad because then they'll have sweet sweet times together. & i ship these two darlings.
also, i really liked the fact that you used louis. he's not seen as much in fanfics unfortunately :(
ALSOO, i have actually been reading your story since chapter 1, but i have no idea why i didn't review before this.
(:Author's Response: Aww thank you :)
Well, he may seem that way.
But don't judge.
Before you meet him.
Um, yeah, I really liked Ava/Louis here as well ;) Yay! for Louis not being an angsty mess of tortured soul. 'Tis a good thing indeed.
I thought it would be interesting to write a story about Louis because he's not utilized enough, in my opinion, and there's a lot of potential for him as a character.
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oh nice chapter! thanks for updatig!
i've never been druk but i think you wrote it well :)
is louis named after cedric digory? or just random coincidence?
update soon?Author's Response: Haha, well you are welcome ;)
Thanks! I wasn't too sure about it, but I guess I wrote it fine.
Yes, he is named after Cedric Diggory. Nice catch!
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Hm... who's Ian...? perhaps the reason she left the wizarding world? why is Louis working at a muggle diner? and the diner reminds me of Johnny rockets. this is like a replay of matt. and I don't know if this is true for your story,but I read somewhere that veelas don't really get effected by alcohol. that would be interesting.
looking forward to the next chapter!Author's Response: You'll find out about Ian soon enough ;) AND OH MY GOD I TOTALLY LOVE JOHNNY ROCKETS. That's basically what the diner is - nice catch. Hmm, I hadn't read that about Veelas, but Louis is only part-Veela anyway so alcohol still affects him. Thanks for the review! Report Review
My dad loves Manchester United xD
great story though! Keep the updates coming! ha I love all the characters. You're a really good writer. you came up with this in a car ride! and now I want to know why ava ran away from the warding world...Author's Response: Haha, well I really have no feelings towards Manchester United, love or otherwise :P
Thank you! I'm glad you like it so far! And yeah, I came up with this in the car... You'll be learning more about Ava soon :) Thanks for the review! Report Review
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