I'm already terrified! Seriously terrified!
Fraternity? Bad guys! *shakes fist at them* Don't hurt all of my favourites!!
Poor Richie he looks so shocked and scared :-(
Who's killing! No I can't believe any of them are murderers, it must be someone else.
No Rose keep moving, you need to be safe :-(
Scorpius be careful!! *fights with them* Take that Fraternity!
NO! Not Richie! :-( He doesn't deserve this, he only wanted to meet a girl and have a date.
Oh no Scorpius, I'm so sad right now, why are you doing this to me? I'm almost a quivering wreck!
Rose needs to snap out of it! Please Rose snap out of it!
What on earth is that noise! *is scared still* oh no a werewolf, please don't let this end badly for anyone but the Fraternity.
Ok I must say that that scene was just amazing! The emotions you put across in that and the fighting, Rose falling apart and Scorpius acting like an animal, just oh my god! Amazing! just pure amazingness!
Oh Scorpius :-( He's such a good friend, the best.
WHAT! Oh my... what? Oh my that ending was so good!! when? how? why? How? What?! Seriously I need this next chapter!
I can't wait for more! Seriously can't wait! Report Review
Do I want to trust this private detective? mm he seems ok so far. *is suspicious of everything and everyone*
I liked Tracey, she seemed quite cool.
Ooo he's Theodore Nott? Yay the others are in a house. Go Theodore!He's cool, I like him now.
Oh that cheeky Roxy, how has she not seen an Auror? she must be good at hiding.
No not Fred and Louis! :-( No I don't want them to be caught, they'll be sent to Azkaban. *wants to cry*
Oh James asking for help, bless him, although is he covering up his traitorous ways? I really need to stop being so suspicious of everyone.
So someone is changing all of the files?
Oh no I'm suspicious of Lily now, where is she? She can't be looking at the stars that sounds too suspicious.
NO! Who is it!
I think you like to see me so worried about everyone, otherwise you wouldn't have such amazing ends to chapters! Report Review
Erm. So many things to process and I'm full of feels and sadness and my mind is boggled! That was such a fantastic chapter, from the action packed bits you're so good at, to the kind of subdued bit once Rose and Scorpius had just about gotten through it. Some of the description was really lovely, especially when you described the werewolf. And then, just when things seemed to almost be slightly calm again, you dropped that bombshell! Can't wait to see how this plot is going to turn out, and great news about the sequel :D
- Olive xxAuthor's Response: hey gurl :D
I'm so glad you liked this, it means a lot to me! action is my favourite, so I'm happy you think i did that well, and I looove you! :D
thanks for the review xx Report Review
No, don't let them get to Rose, I'm terrified still, for Rose, Scorpius, myself.
Phew she's trying to escape. Eeek so worried for them!
Ah! RUN! RUN FOR YOUR LIVES!! Please be safe Rose and Scorpius! I might cry soon, I hope they don't get caught.
No Scorpius! he can't be in pain, what have those mean Aurors done?
please let him be safe!
NO! PLease tell me it's not true, he can't be gone! he's going to be a dad and he has a wife that he probably has had some sort of conversation with!
OH MY! He's fine! Don't do that to me, my poor heart can't take it! *cries* I'm so glad that Rose saved him.
Who's this girl? Wow she has strange ways of getting wands haha.
You leave the best (not for my poor heart and feelings) cliffhangers ever! You always keep me on the edge of my seat!Author's Response: NO! Don't worry Tammi, I would never let anything hurt you! Please don't cry, my characters will be fine :D I promise! Well, mostly promise. Kinda promise. Nearly all of them will be moderately okay, I swear it.
I'm so glad you like/hate my cliffhangers, I'm always like, YAY now all my readers will hate me! and then I wonder later if they were actually cliffhangery at all.
thanks so much for reading and reviewing, you are a beauty! Report Review
That's a very weird dream, I wonder if it means anything? mmm
They're in the hospital? I hope noone finds them there.
Aww it's christmas and they're on the run? Poor them, their families must be so worried about them, talking of families where are the others? I hope we hear from them soon and that none of them are too seriously hurt.
No! Hugo gave himself up! Not little Hugo :-( oh wait he might not be, please don't scare me like that.
I like that Rose is considerate to steal expensive cars, instead of needed cars, I like that they have sides like that to them :-D
No! Please don't let the Aurors catch them, please *hides eyes behind hands* I've never been so worried for characters this much before.
Oh Carrow how I hate you! Leave them all alone! even if he does have a reason to do what he's doing I guess?
Seriously you are such an amazing writer! I love this story!
P.s I hope your holiday was good :-DAuthor's Response: Oh, of course the dream means something ehehe hehe.
And I know, Christmas! So cruel, I am a horrible human being- not like Rose though, see, she is a nice person (kinda).
Thanks for hating on Carrow, he deserves every bit. And thanks for reviewing! My holiday was great :D Report Review
Gah I totally forgot to write in the other review about them escaping so I'll do it now.
AH! They escaped! I was hoping that they would! and it was great to see them using their skills again.
Oh Rose threatening Scorpius's wife, I still can't believe he's married.
They must be all so suspicious of each other, I don't think they'll be trusting each other as much anymore. I can't wait to find out who the traitor is, Is it obvious? Is it staring me in the face and I can't see it? I suspect everyone! Even the muggles who own the house that Rose and Scorpius are in
Oh so he doesn't love Louisa, wait pregnant?! Wow Scorpius is going to be daddy-o Scorpius, I was hoping for a Rose/Scorpius love haha.
Oh poor Rose with Zach/Bradley, she deserves so much better than that creep, although Iím very glad Lorcan beat him up.Author's Response: Yeah, Scorp being married was a shock to everyone, I think :P
I think that the traitor is obvious, although I would, because I know... and who says there still can't be a Rose/Scorpius? :D
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, Tammi! Report Review
Dennis Creevy is head of the court? But in my mind he's still a little student all cute and small-like, I can't imagine him being a grown up, so I shall imagine him in an oversized suit, and not being able to see over things :-p
I hope this goes in their favour.
Mmm everyone thinks that Hugo was there with them? I wonder why he is?
And who is this other guy?
Scorpius is married? to a muggle? I don't see that going down well with his family somehow, especially with his grandfather.
On to the other chapters! Can't wait for more!Author's Response: n'aw, that's an adorable image. I chose Dennis because I think he's be the epitome of fair play and justice, which of course, doesn't happen :P
Hugo, I know, OMG
Who is the other guy? I KNOW OMG
AND SCORP IS MARRIED OH EM GEE.
:D glad you like it, and thanks so much for the reviews! :) Report Review
I love that even though Rose has been arrested she's still stealing :-D Trust her hehe.
No Hugo can't be the traitor! I just won't believe it, but I don't know who it is *cries*
If they go to Azkaban I bet they'll just break out of it :-p
Oo What's Harry going to do? He's going to get his awesomeness on and try to help them all!
You write such amazing chapters! Seriously amazing! I bow down to your amazingness! *bows*Author's Response: Old habits die hard! :D Omg, I think I've just realised why the Die Hard films are called that... wow, epiphany much?
Thanks so much for the review, YOU are amazing Tammi! Report Review
No! Scorpius is going to be arrested!
Wait all of them? No this can't be happening. Oh no they can't be arrested what will happen to them?
Gah! I need to find out!
Another wonderful chapter my lovely! Loving this story!Author's Response: NO SCORPIUS! All of them? What? :O What could possibly happen? Oh god, whyy? *cries*
Thanks for the review, and I'm so glad you like this! :D Report Review
lovelovelovelovelovelovelove hope you win!Author's Response: Thanks so much, I hope I do alright :)
PS. I love your penname :P We're similar! (although yours is cooler) Report Review
Holey Mokey, you certaintly have weaved a mystery novel here! It's pretty awesome! I keep reading and more questions come up. Hope the next chapter is up soon :)Author's Response: The questions... ah yes :P hopefully, I'll remember to answer them all! I'm so happy you like Hattie: the next chapter is in the queue! Thanks for reading, and reviewing! Report Review
Lily is a werewolf! Oh good Merlin! Well that was a surprise, but it really fits when you read back. Richie - NO! I am quite sad about this, because I don't think he really knew what was going on when he was being taken. And the whole limping away part made me really feel bad for him.
Rose froze up a lot. And who is the Murderer Upstairs - the Upstairs Murderer? I'm trying to remember who was upstairs. But anyway. Scorpius was great in this, and I think you showed his pain very well. He didn't break out in sobs, but he did cry, because of the tears, and I'm glad you put that in.
So all in all this chapter was pretty amazing, and Lily being a werewolf gives her character more depth.
Keep up the good work!!
I had more to write, but I can't remember, because I'm trying to solve the mystery of the Upstairs Murderer. I will have more to say in the next review.
padmoonyfoot7: over and out!!
xoxoAuthor's Response: I'm glad it wasn't too out of the blue and surprising :D but I'm glad you are surprised, too!
Oh yeah, I'm really sorry about Richie too. Someone had to go, and I am sorry it was him. Rose froze up because this was the first time that the real consequences of this fight hit home, in front of her eyes. Before Richie (and the Upstairs Murderer) everything bad had been worked out, and ended up fine. I needed a tragedy! And the people upstairs were Albus, James and Lysander. So, it was one of them. XD
I'm glad you liked how I presented Scorpius, because I wanted to show him breaking down in his own way as well. He'd known Richie for a very long time, and it was the equivalent to a family member being murdered.
Thanks so much for reviewing :) Report Review
Amazing!! I was not expecting that in a billion trillion gazillion years, I love love love the climax and then the sudden cliffhanger. You write this so well, delivering the duh-duh-DUHHH moment at just the right point.
Also, Richie dying adds to the daunting seriousness of the story, and, as much as I hate myself for saying this, I think it was needed. Short, sweet and action-packed chapter with unpredictable twists and turns that keep you hanging on and savouring every words. Love your writing!Author's Response: .you wanted me to kill Richie? :O I'm pretty sure you can be classed as an accessory to a crime now! :P
No-one has said they wanted Richie to die, but I thought it was necessary- Rose is almost treating this like a game at some points, and I needed to bring her back down to earth with a good sharp shock.
Thanks so much for the review, it means so incredibly much for you to like my story :D Report Review
I'm REALLY CONFUSED. Which I'm hoping is a good thing and I literally don't know what to do with myself after I read this. How do you come up with this stuff, seriously? I can't write mysteries to save my life(please if I write a novel summary I'm afraid I'm going to give away too much). Seriously, you deserve all the love you're getting for this novel :))Author's Response: I cheat on summaries by using cryptic quotes [see my author page *headdesk*]
I'm so so happy you like this story, and I hope the confusedness is a good thing too :P
Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
aw. I love Richie :'( And Lily, ooh i wonder what shall happen??? So have you got the traitor in the group planned? I'm so very confused coz i thought it was James but it wasn't, i thought it was Lily but now i'm not so sure, but i think it might be Dom... hmmm... upload soon!Author's Response: Sorry about Richie :/
I've known who the traitor in the group was right from chapter one! I'm glad I'm keeping you guessing, and thanks for the review :) Report Review
FJAGH:LKSDJ SO i thought that the other chapter was the last one, but its this one and THIS IS EVEN MORE UNFAIR. of course you're getting nominated for everything, this story is brilliant. please, PLEASE update again soon. i'll go crazy if you dont.Author's Response: Ahahahaha, I saw your other review, got confused and then this one popped up! You really made me laugh.
Thanks so much for the compliments, I'm so so happy you like Hattie, and I'll be updating soon. Thanks! :) Report Review
dude, i just read this whole story. and its freaking AWESOME. i love it. it's so original and fantastic and PLEASE PLEASE update soon. i love it.Author's Response: Dude, I'm so happy you like my story, it means so incredibly much to me :)
I'm also incredibly impressed you read ALL of my story, it is rather long.
Thanks so much for the review, you make me very happy :) Report Review
Oh. My. God. He DIED! YOU KILLED RICHIE! ugh. And LILY is a werewolf! Agg! NOT expecting that. Who killed him? I want to know who's alive! NEED TO KNOW. Update soon please!
Shindig :DAuthor's Response: I know. I'm sorry :( The guy that killed Richie was the leader of the Fraternity, and the Upstairs Murderers identity is as yet unknown. :P
And yeah, Lily is a werewolf. Unexpected, huh? :P
Thanks so much for the review, I'll try to update soon! :D Report Review
this is such a gripping story! I love it - such awesome characters, especially Dom - so uncliched! I love it's originality and we all love something that's new and unique :D Extremely cool and brilliant mixture of humour and action, with some other pretty cool stuff thrown in as well :) Just love it, love it, love it! Please write more!!Author's Response: I'm so glad you like this story, it's my baby and I love to write it.
Thanks for the review, and I hope you carry on writing! (next chapter is up now!) Report Review
This was probably one of my favourite chapters you've written! I was on the edge of my wheely chair the whole time. Your plot is so intricate, those details about weight in the Gringott's account was a genius idea. You're so good at writing about thievery and planning that I'm starting to actually think you are a criminal!
- Olive (I've got my eye on you) xxxAuthor's Response: I LOVE YOU OLIVE, THANKS FOR THE CUTIE-PIE REVIEW.
I am a thief. Duh. And James Bond and a pirate.
I'm so glad you like the plot, I get a little worried it's too complicated and unfollowable.
Thanks! :) Report Review
You are updating from an internet cafe? Wow. Thank you. This was an action packed chapter. I hope ROse and Scorpius find a way to escape. I can't wait to learn more about Carrow and see why he wants to take revenge. About Hugo. I hope the paper is lying and he is not caught yet.Author's Response: Haha, I went on holiday, and had to rescrict the time I spent in the cafe because the price of the coffees were EXTORTIONATE. But still, I did it, for my lovely readers :D
Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
Eoin colfer. YES. And this is really good!Author's Response: Ahaha, I love Eion Colfer's stories. Thanks for the review! Report Review
Carrow's vault also got robbed? I am really confused. I thought he was the villain. Why will his vault get robbed? They are getting arrested! Oh no no no. Hugo escaped, didn't he? This is bad. very bad.Author's Response: YES! Oh gosh! I wonder what's happening. *bites nails* Well, you'll have to read on! :P
Thanks so much for the reviews, they make my day :) Report Review
"especial regards to Miss Victoire Weasley and Mr Theodore Lupinís health"
I read death instead of health. I was shocked. I had to read your author's note and then reread the last few lines again to clear out my confusion. Silly me.
Everyone is acting suspicious. First Freddy and Lysander. Then Dom and Lily. Harry and Ron are onto something. I wonder how long the next generation kids will be able to hide their secret from their parents.Author's Response: No! Health, not death :P They're not dead! *phew*
Harry and Ron are suspicious, and they'll not be able to keep their secret lives secret for long!
Thanks so much for the reviews :) Report Review
Wow. We finally found the villain. He is a Carrow. The Wotter clan is poisoned. I hope they find out who the traitor is before it is too late.Author's Response: The villain is a Carrow! And the Wotter Clan is poisoned! sadtimes.
Thanks for the review. Report Review
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