Can't wait til Ginny find out Harry's cuts on his arms. I can't wait for more! update soon please!Author's Response: The next update is in the queue and your questions should soon be answered. Report Review
thank you so much for the update :) I really liked this chapter. I wish Ginny would just get on board with her and Harry dating though. What's holding her back? She knows why he had to leave her last time and she knows that he loves her. So she should just accept it soon. I am glad that Ron is okay with it now though. That's a good sign. Harry being an auror and having to go away for that could make things tough though especially since Ginny will be at school. We'll see. Again, great update :)Author's Response: I love the feedback. Your question could be answered in the coming chapters and I hope that you keep reading. Thank you so much! Report Review
Nicely written! I liked the ending of the chapter. Is anyone going to confront Harry about drinking firewhisky and (maybe I'm mixing up with another story:cutting?) UPDATE SOON PLEASE!Author's Response: Same story! And there is going to be some interesting developments on the whole alcohol and cutting in the coming chapters. Report Review
Can't wait for more! I'm curious how Harry and Ginny get back together. I love stories where they get back together slowly not immediately. UPDATE SOON PLEASE!Author's Response: I love the feedback! I agree with you that stories that have Harry and Ginny get back together at the beginning are a bit unrealistic. An update is coming soon, I promise. Report Review
THIS STORY IS AWESONE! please write more!!!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm working on getting the next update out soon. Report Review
That was pretty good! I still see a few spelling errors here and there, but overall your writing is improving! Glad you got your muse back too. I would love to you carry this through to the end!
Nice job, HopelessAuthor's Response: Thank you so much, I would like to see this story finished too, and I think I can do it. Report Review
I've enjoyed your fanfic so far! I think that you are very creative.
I would like to share some information with you though... For example, "you are" is contracted as "you're", not "your". You've done that throughout all seven chapters so far.
Another thing to note is your use of "apostrophe s" ('s). The apostrophe s means possession or contraction of the copula "is". For example, you would say, "That wand is Harry's" because Harry owns the wand. Or, you might say, "Harry's really brave." Where the "apostrophe s" means that "Harry is really brave."
Just watch out for those grammatical errors. They are simple to fix, but when left in the story they can really distract the reader from your story.
Good luck. Keep writing! :)Author's Response: Thank you for reading! Also thanks for the corrections. While I am not planning on going back and editing until the entire story is done, I will keep these in mind when I do edit and as I continue to write future chapters. Report Review
YAY! Finally an update! I kept checking everyday whether it updated! Glad Harry got out finally! Question is how badly will the experience effect him? UPDATE SOON PLEASE!Author's Response: I will, and thank you so much for the feedback. It really means a lot and I think your question should be answered by the end of the next chapter. Report Review
Hey, I just started to read your story and I just want to let you know that I'm really enjoying it :) Please keep writing, I can't wait until the chapter!Author's Response: Thank you so much, I will be updating as soon as possible! Report Review
Write the rest please..Author's Response: I'm working on it! Report Review
Interesting male villain name Her-strong. Well gives Harry a reason to make fun of that deatheater. Good job on describing Harry's prison. (Although I was confused whether he was bound to the wall or not, or whether he was laying down or sitting up) UPDATE SOON PLEASE!Author's Response: Thank you so much. I am working on the next chapter so it shouldn't be too long. Report Review
This chapter seemed a little rushed and there are a lot of unfinished or poorly structured sentences. Also, even though this carries a mature rating, the use of the F word really doesn't do anything for your story. If you are sticking to cannon, I don't think Ms Rowling would approve.
On the other side of the coin, it's great the way you've brought George into the heart of the story, it's so much better than seeing him all bummed out all the time. Good job! Looking forward to the next chapter.
~HopelessAuthor's Response: I will admit, it's a lot harder for me to write Ginny than it is to write Harry. I'm still working on mastering it, and this chapter proved that. However, I will take what you say and I'm glad that you did find things that you liked. Report Review
Oh a bit of a cliffie here! I am normally not a fan of them, but I think this one works well. Your writing gets better with each installment!
I like this story very much and just added it to my fav's. Now I have to go find out who grabbed Harry :)
~HopelessAuthor's Response: I'm glad that you liked it. I am also very glad that you added it to your favorites. I love how you always review, it really reminds me that I need to keep updating. :) Report Review
I think your writing is great, but again you need to pay more attention to spelling and grammar...
“Good, your up.” your s/b you're or you are.
apparate to her - meant here?
He wished a couple Galleons - wished s/b fished??
And yes this was a bit dark, but without darkness we would not have light!
Nice job, HopelessAuthor's Response: Thanks so much! It's like having a beta :) I'm very glad that you liked it and I love the little line on the end. Very well said. Report Review
Since you asked for corrections.. You think you escaped didn’t you? s/b escaped, don't you? Next - but he knew that he would be able - I think you meant would not be able.. and “Your up early - s/b you're or you are up early... “Breakfest is breakfast and for cannon I would think Molly would have said Arthur not Mr. Weasley.. then “Harry. I forgive you. The was has done so much??? not really sure what you weren't trying to convey here. oh - was eating a huge breakfest. s/b were eating... I am going to stop now I think you get the gist... But honestly - great story and please take these as corrections which are not a bad thing... and you asked :) ~HopelessAuthor's Response: Thanks for the corrections. I will remember them when I edit my story, but I'm going to try and get it down first. However, I will keep these in mind! Report Review
Hello there! This was actually a really good start to a story, a little bit of drama and lots of love - which is exactly what the Weasley's are all about. And since it was such a good opening, I hope (PUN LOL) you don't give up on it. I've read and reviewed so many that start out awesome and then they just fade away or the author just abandons the story.
As far as errors and keeping to cannon - so far so good :)
~HopelessAuthor's Response: Thanks a lot, and while I don't plan on giving up, when does an author? However, I've got chapters that are keeping on coming and I hope that my muse keeps up. Thanks so much! Report Review
Wonder where Harry was taken? I'm guessing it wont' be an easy rescue. UPDATE SOON PLEASE!Author's Response: The next chapter is in the queue so don't worry. Report Review
Loved it! Please keep going. I know you already have but still.:)Author's Response: Thank you so much, and just so you know, I try to post a chapter every week. Report Review
Uh oh, what's gonna happen?? Thanks for the cliffhanger ;)Things are getting interesting! This chapter was well done, keep up the good work!!Author's Response: Thanks very much and stayed tuned for more. Report Review
Aww! That was so sad, almost made me cry if I hadn't been holding it in. Even though it was extremely sad it was also really good. I think it's the best chapter i've read so far. The thoughts of everyone were hearthbreaking but so well written and realistic. I loved it! And the parts with Ginny were sweet, when she hugged him. And the last part when he was talking to Fred's casket was so good. Also i wanted to say i think all of the chapter sizes are perfect. :)Author's Response: I've wished that I could evoke emotions like that in people when they read, but I never thought I would actually do it. This really means a lot to me. I'm glad that you enjoy it. Report Review
Nice cliffhanger! I'm guessing those are deatheaters kidnapping Harry! (call me weird but I find those type of stories interesting) UPDATE SOON PLEASE!Author's Response: I guess I will have to say that you're right, but you can't tell anyone. :) And please stay tuned, there will be an update soon. Report Review
This is so good! I love this story, it's very interesting and i love all the thoughts going through Harry's head, very realistic. I can't wait to see what happens next.Author's Response: I'm glad that you think it's realistic. Sometimes, as an author you worry a lot about whether it is or not, and it's good to hear that it is. Report Review
This story is very well written!Author's Response: Thank so much! Report Review
I like darker chapters ;) I have read several stories that start right after the battle and Harry is usually a depressed mess but I've never read one where he drinks away his sorrows like this. As far as improvements are concerned I did notice some grammatical errors and typos, so really just be more careful when your proof reading. Anyway though, I am quite curious to see how Harry continues coping with everything so please continue!Author's Response: I have to admit, I wasn't too sure about this chapter. I've written before, but never something that had someone like this so in the dumps and hurting them-self and it so I'm glad that it's good. I keep that in mind, when I proofread. Report Review
This one seemed a tiny bit rushed and fragmented too me, but it was still a good read. I'm a sucker for torture so I like that Harry isn't doing so well, both mentally and physically! 2 down 1 to go...Author's Response: I'll remember that when I go to edit, and I wanted to be realistic. I mean Harry wouldn't be totally happy about the results and he would probably beat himself up about it, so I'm glad that you liked it. Report Review
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