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Review #51, by GingeredTea Fortunes

14th June 2014:
I never really thought of how one would write a female Voldemort. Reading this, I'm now not sure how I'm going to like a female Voldemort. She sounds as cruel as him but with control over her temper. It was Voldemort's lack of control and lack of key knowledge that was his downfall; this lady seems to have what he was lacking, and that worries me.

I have a feeling Harry is going to regret this little hesitation: "Harry thought it over. He would have preferred to keep at least one of the better duelists on the security detail, but he wasn’t sure how to suggest it without giving away the true nature of the mission. “That sounds fine,” he replied."

Harry always did feel lost without something to do - something large and dangerous to get near and "kill".

You managed to capture Harry as a no-non-sense boss, and did a brilliant job. :)

I love how you started the chapter with the concept of 'fortunate' and ended it there as well, illustrating so well the perceptions of good and bad from different sides of a war. :)

Brilliant chapter. Can't wait to read the next one. :)

Author's Response: I think you've got a pretty good feel for her already. Where Voldemort was half-mad, she's as cold and calculating as you'll ever find. What she lacks in raw power, she makes up for with meticulous planning and an almost effortless ability to manipulate people.

Harry might well regret that. At this point, he doesn't realize how much danger the Malfoys are actually in.

That's just Harry's mental makeup. I think he gets very uncomfortable if life is too boring for too long.

This chapter was all about fortunes and misfortunes. With one or two exceptions I can think of, I don't name my chapters until after they're written. Usually I can find some common thread running through each one or something that it reminds me of.

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Review #52, by dobbywhisky Prices Paid in Blood and Sorrow

13th June 2014:
I want ginny back... I always fwlt like sye wasnt developed enough in the books. So to be honest I'm kind of happyesme is dead

Author's Response: Ginny definitely got the short end of the stick, character development-wise. I can see why so many FF readers don't like her. I'd probably feel the same way if not for my expansive head canon that fills in the gaping void that JKR left in her character. ;)

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Review #53, by magnolia_magic Any Sufficiently Advanced Technology

12th June 2014:

I've heard so many people rave about this story, and when I saw your name in review tag I had to take the opportunity to come check it out. I am so, so glad that I did! I can definitely see why everyone loves it so much. (Do you ever get tired of hearing stuff like that? Hopefully not :))

Anyway. I'm so impressed (and baffled, really) by the level of detail that you've put into creating this post-war world, and how you've portrayed the Weasley family as it's evolved. Harry as a doting grandfather just warms my heart; I always knew he would be a devoted family man. And Ron and Hermione make me laugh! I love your imagining of the trio as they've gotten older. They are so true to the characters we know from the books, but it's still clear that they've experienced a lot more life.

I think the buildup of mystery is going at a great pace so far, and I can't wait to see what unfolds from here. I'm so glad to finally be on board with this story! I can't believe I'm just now checking it out, honestly. Awesome job!


Author's Response: Hi, there! Very long time, no see.

Ha. I never get tired of hearing stuff like that. It's always good to hear that somebody's reading and enjoying the story.

I started writing this story right after a period where I was reading a lot of post-war fan fiction, so I had a lot of head canon stored up. For better or worse, a lot of it came gushing out in this chapter. I'm really glad you find the characters true to the books. That was more important to me than almost anything else.

I'm pleased as can be that you've decided to give it a try. Look forward to hearing what you think.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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Review #54, by dobbywhisky Friends and Allies

11th June 2014:
I read this obsessively on my phone. Whenever I have a free moment I just whip it out. Its permanently saved on my browser. Thought you should know.

Author's Response: You definitely know how to make a guy smile, you know that? Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!

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Review #55, by GingeredTea Strange Bedfellows

11th June 2014:
I always mean to do a rolling review, but then I get sucked right into your story and end up halfway through before I realize I should be noting my reactions. LOL

That said, I was really impressed by your description of the sisters shopping. My amazement probably has to due with the fact that I hate shopping and therefore wouldn't ten know where to begin describing someone who does. Kudos to you!

The way you write Daphne rushing to tell Astoria something, then forgetting as she admires the dress she picked out for her sister had me laughing.

The scene with Hermione had me on the edge of my seat, and that's probably where I forgot about the review - swept into the story. Will Hermione make a full recovery?

Harry just seemed so Harry here, making everyone worry with his worry.

Then you transition into the Astoria Flint scene and you have me on the edge of my seat again. Draco came at just the right/wrong time. I have a feeling Astoria might have managed a bit more gracefully without him, and maybe with them thinking she could still sway Draco. Her demand/order at the end made me smirk.

Harry speaking to the portraits was a nice breather between the chaos otherwise filling this chapter.

Then you jump right back in with Draco and Harry. I was tense as I read the paced but still dramatic conversation.

I loved this line. “Come to turn yourself in, Malfoy?” Harry said, startling him.

OMG, YOU ARE KILLING ME WITH LAUGHTER! TORTURE! "“Well done, Malfoy,” Harry replied coldly. “You’ve really come a long way, you know? For a moment there, I thought you were going to call my niece a mudblood, and I was about to remind you how it feels to be a ferret.”"

This was an awesome chapter! I wish I had more time review this, but work has been crazy right now. I'm really enjoying this. :)

Author's Response: Rolling reviews are harder than they seem. If I manage to successfully write one, it's not usually a good sign for what I'm reading. ;)

Shopping is probably the only hobby that Astoria and Daphne have in common. They're about as different as sisters can be, but they both have a weakness for retail therapy. Daphne much more than Astoria, obviously. She's also rather easily distracted.

Hermione has a long, difficult recovery in front of her. All throughout this story, I tried really hard to portray war for what it really is. People get hurt. And when they get hurt, they don't just bounce back the next day like they always seemed to at Hogwarts.

I imagine that Harry was a really good boss in most dimensions, but yes, he's really getting on everyone's nerves in that scene. Fortunately, he has Ron and Susan to rein in his less productive managerial tendencies.

Astoria definitely had Flint going before Draco showed up. She was also right at the point where she was going to have to knee him in the unmentionables, though. Draco and Astoria make a good team, even if he's not really willing to admit that he needs the help.

Isn't the Headmaster's office always a bastion of serenity? You know, unless you've just discovered that you're meant to die. ;)

Even if they did learn to tolerate one another and even behave somewhat cordially in the interest of their joined families, I highly doubt that Draco and Harry ever came to *like* one another. The animosities and the philosophical differences just run too deep. It was a lot of fun, writing their bickering and subtle displays of alpha behavior. Even in their sixties, they can't let go of the rivalry.

Your review was very enjoyable! Thanks so much!

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Review #56, by dobbywhisky The Silliest Thing I’ve Ever Heard

7th June 2014:
Amazing. No words. Must.keep.reading. ...

Author's Response: Big smile on my face over here. I'm really glad you're enjoying it! Thanks for letting me know!

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Review #57, by GingeredTea A Friend Indeed

7th June 2014:
You lulled me into such a sense of pleasantness at the beginning of this chapter; outlining how Draco basically restored his life, how he came to experience the true love for a child through his grandchildren, etc. etc. and then you brilliant flip all this niceness on its head!

Marcus Flint is up to something. I wonder what he's after.

"“Oh, that?” he tried to keep his voice calm. “He was from Gringotts. They’re very eager to get that paperwork resolved.”" Draco's still not very good at lying, is he? LOL

The conversation between Astoria and Hermione was exquisitely written and I loved the aloofness that Astoria tried to maintain and Hermione gently basically telling her 'I can't do anything if you're not going to give me anything'.

The scene at Records was AMAZING!

And the ending, with Draco so terrified for Astoria was really an unfair place to end. ;-)

Author's Response: Hi, there!

In my own mind, I figured Draco's life would have turned out basically alright, subject to certain ups and downs. He is very happy with his family, but Narcissa's inability to manage the family finances has left him in a difficult spot.

Marcus Flint is up to several things, as you'll soon see. :)

I would modify that statement slightly to say that Draco's not good at lying *to Astoria*. As you'll see later, he's fairly adept at lying to other people.

I imagine basically all conversations between Hermione and Astoria as negotiations. It comes naturally to Astoria because of her aristocratic pureblood background and Hermione is a no-nonsense kind of person when she's annoyed. She's definitely getting annoyed by the end of this conversation. ;)

Magical records! The first duel scene that I wrote for HPFF. I'm always kind of partial to it, so I'm glad it played well for someone who knows a bit about writing duels.

Ha! Fair has nothing to do with it. :p

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Review #58, by whisky dobby No More Secrets

6th June 2014:
I am addicted to your story.i keep meaning to write a review but then greedily turn to the next chapter.so glad I dont have to wait for you to post them and its already completed. Yoy deserve the reward!

Author's Response: Thanks! I really appreciate it. Would love to know more of your thoughts and reactions.

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Review #59, by mischiefalwaysmanaged The Injuries We Can’t See

2nd June 2014:
I know that you've long since finished this story, but my enjoyment of the novel (mingled with my fear of being reincarnated as a squirrel :) ) has compelled me to leave this review. Great work! As always with your stories, I'm eager to see how it plays out. you're shaping up to be my favorite author on this site!

Author's Response: Ha! Nobody wants to end up as a squirrel. I'm very pleased that you chose the safe path. ;)

I'm really glad that you're enjoying it! Thank you for sharing your thoughts and reactions!

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Review #60, by mischiefalwaysmanaged Strange Bedfellows

27th May 2014:
Damn, this story is amazing! It also helps that it fits in flawlessly with the storyline from Padfoot4ever's Delicate, which I recently finished reading. I'm glad that I ran into Detox because it introduced me to the rest of your amazing work! Can't wait to see how this novel ends! :)

Author's Response: Hello, again! So one quick suggestion: be careful with language in your reviews. I wouldn't want to see you get in trouble with the site rules so soon after joining.

Delicate was definitely an influence on this story, along with a few other stories on the site.

I hope you enjoy the rest of it. Please take a second to let me know if you do! Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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Review #61, by GingeredTea Those Who Don’t Learn From History

26th May 2014:
Once more, this was a brilliant story. As someone who has tried to write Harry as a guest teacher - I give you many many gold stars.

This whole chapter was jam packed with information, although I'm still itching to know what happened to Ginny. I liked how you didn't make Harry's grandson super great at dueling.

The scene with Dennis - I could see how much that would bother Harry and what he did to rectify such a misunderstand/lack of information as both brave, brilliant and a bit rash (a perfect Harry plan).

Professor Binns...why don't they just move the classroom and professor Binns can just talk to an empty room? I honestly feel like from cannon description he wouldn't know the difference!

Brilliant chapter! Thank you for the chance to swap!

Author's Response: I can't tell you how much fun I had writing the whole dueling lesson. It was one of those times I could really indulge my love of writing action scenes and also give Harry a rare happy moment in the sun. I really can't stand stories where every member of the Potter and Weasley family is automatically a super-talented duelist and automatic Auror material. Harry's grandchildren are having to work for it like anyone else.

Keep an eye on Dennis as the story goes on. Harry opens his eyes to some unpleasant truths in this chapter. Dennis is sort of a microcosm of a wizarding world that's become complacent and naive about the dangers of dark magic.

Interesting you should say that about Professor Binns. Try to remember that thought when you make it to chapter 40. ;)

I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks to you for the swap, as well!

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Review #62, by GingeredTea Losses

20th May 2014:
I read this chapter a while ago - probably between essays - but it is just wonderful how it all stayed with me. I just had to read the first line or two, and I knew exactly where I was.

The way you entered into the chapter was wonderful - showing us a Harry we more easily recognize. Diligent, emotional but strong. I could sense him looking around the court room and knew exactly where his eyes were landing based on your descriptions. It flowed as if it were a movie in my head.

The way you broke from the courtroom and the family reunion to the scene between Percy and Harry was brilliantly orchestrated. Harry asking Hermione and Ron if they knew how much they meant to him, and Ron's sincere but casual (which is what Ron has always seemed to me when he isn't being hot-headed) response was about as perfectly Ron as I have encountered!

The scene itself with Percy was...perfect. I'm not sure how else to say it.

"“You know what we’re here to discuss,” replied Harry, regarding his brother-in-law levelly."

I could see Harry doing that, see his expression.

And then when Percy described the killing curse and Harry doubted - as Harry always does - the evilness of Tom, that was also so...Harry.

To end it with a discussion between those we lost - Lily, James, Sirius, Dumbledore - it left me wiping at my eyes as I scrambled to read on.

Thank you for such a brilliant read. As always, this was a beautifully written chapter! :)

Author's Response: Hi, there! Sorry for the embarrassingly long delay in responding.

I'm glad the courtroom scene was easy to visualize and it was easy to imagine Harry sitting there. Several of the small details in this scene turn out to be rather important later, so I hope they stick with the reader.

Ron is pretty tricky to write, so it's gratifying to hear that he sounded right. You can't make him too soppy or it just doesn't work in my experience.

Keep Harry's discussion with Percy in the back of your mind as the story moves forward. I don't want to give away too much, but there's a lot more going on with Percy than meets the eye.

The conversation between the portraits wasn't in my original draft. The idea hit me while I was editing the chapter. I have to say, I'm rather pleased with how it turned out.

I'm happy that you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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Review #63, by marauderfan Everything That Ever Mattered

2nd May 2014:
Review tag swap! :P

That's quite a title for Harry. Imagine if he had to put all of that on a nametag.

Sorry, I should have warned you I'm a really rambly, scatterbrained reviewer. Anyway, I definitely laughed at the fact that Al's daughter is named Lillian, and James's son named Artie. This family is seriously all about recycling names :P

After I had finished giggling about Harry's musing to himself about how ridiculous he looks sitting there and how "the supper club is missing their prominent eccentric", it dawned on me how rambly Harry is in this as well, and Ginny's not responding - and then I just realized Ginny is dead. (So, I guess the part in the prologue wasn't an illusion or anything, she just actually was dead. I assume now that it was after a long period of time has passed.) And it really shows Harry's reminiscing in a different way. I think it's sweet that he takes time to talk to his dead wife and update her on the things that are happening in life, awww. I like the way you wrote Harry as a grandfather, just thinking about all the events and the people in his life. He seems very at peace here.

The way you describe the Potter estate is just lovely! It sounds so peaceful and picturesque with its pond and grassy field. Kind of like an Impressionist painting.

I had been thinking, in the beginning of this chapter after I figured out that Ginny was dead, that she had died of old age or something - after all, Harry is a grandfather by this point. but with the bit about Harry not being able to save her, it seems something more sinister happened, and I'm wondering how long ago she died, and in what way... (I suppose that's what the rest of the story is for.) The part when Harry cries at how he couldn't save Ginny was heartbreaking :(

Well, great chapter once again! I am really eager to see where you go with this.

Author's Response: Hello, again!

Ha! I suppose Harry would just have to get that printed on a t-shirt or something. It's a mouthful.

Please don't apologize for your reviewing style! I love hearing everyone's thoughts and reactions. I imagined a lot of family names being passed down among the Weasleys, with the exception of Ron and Hermione's family, of course. The definitely blew up the pattern with Rose and Hugo.

I tried to conceal the truth about Ginny for a while. I don't know whether it was that effective. Maybe I was in denial more than anything. Harry certainly is. Not having her be a part of this story was definitely the hardest decision I had to make. :( He might seem at peace in the beginning, but believe me, he's anything but.

Yeah, I figured that sooner or later Harry would buy a nice place for his family to live. I always imagined him as the sort of father who would want all the things for his children that he didn't have growing up: love, attention, kindness, toys and a huge place to play surrounded by friends and family. Since he had the money to make that happen, why not?

You'll find out pretty soon what happened to Ginny, but some of the particulars won't come out until the very end. Her death is very wrapped up in the core mystery of the story.

I'm glad you're enjoying it. I hope you have a chance to read more. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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Review #64, by marauderfan Prologue

2nd May 2014:

Wow, I can't believe it's taken me this long to read some of your writing; I've been meaning to do so for a long time!

From the very first sentence I could tell where Harry was, so impressive job on setting the scene with only one sentence. I like how Harry's not really too bothered about being dead, since he's been here before, and just kind of waits around to see what's happening. I guess he's in no hurry.

Interesting that he can't remember how he died, though. Or perhaps he isn't dead, because I can't imagine you've written a 40 chapter story about someone who's already dead. Maybe he's just standing in King's Cross after some rebellious teenagers have vandalized the clock and stolen its hands, and poured Bolivian Instant Lightness Powder everywhere, which is probably something like Peruvian Darkness Powder, only with an opposite effect.

Or I could just read to find out, because I'm probably wrong. Anyway, this prologue raises SO MANY QUESTIONS and it's basically brilliant. I will definitely be continuing reading this! Great start!

Author's Response: Hi, there!

Wow. That's a pretty impressive draw from the first sentence. I'm glad you liked Harry's fatalism about being dead... again. It's a part of his personality that always sticks out in my head when I'm writing.

He can't remember how he died *yet*. The scene you see in the prologue is actually the first part of a scene that plays out in chapter 38. There are good reasons for what's happening here, but I can't tell you any of them without ruining the rest of the story.

If you have a lot of questions then this prologue accomplished its intended purpose. I hope you get a chance to read more. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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Review #65, by writeyourheartout Everything That Ever Mattered

28th April 2014:
Why hello again, Dan! ^.^ I've come back for more!

So, I have to start by pointing out what is quite possibly an extremely arbitrary detail to be bringing up at all, but whatever, I'm doing it anyway: that opening paragraph cracks me up! Not because it's particularly funny, but because it's just this long list of honorable and/or cherished titles - ranging from Order of Merlin First Class to grandfather - that comes to a close with Harry doing the most normal thing in the world: simply chillin' outside sipping on some water and chatting with his wife! LOL All he ever really wanted was normalcy, and there it is. hahaha Love it.

There is something so endearing about 64 year old, grandfather Harry. The way he talks about his granddaughter, Lillian, getting sorted, and then about their interaction after one of his classes (love that he's teaching, by the way - I assume DADA?) and it makes him all misty eyed... ugh, so sweet. In fact, every time he thinks fondly about any of his children or grandchildren, it just warms my heart! It says to me that life after the war was mostly good to him, which is really what he deserved. After a childhood with the Dursley's, it's just nice to see that he got a true family of his own in the end. :)

And the Neville bit! Ha! I think he'd be a great Headmaster, and it was a really sweet touch to mention how the portraits of all the Headmaster's past seem to approve of him, with the exception of the ever surly Snape, still with the power to frighten Neville, even in pint-sized proportion! hehehe Poor kid can't catch a break from that man, can he? ;)

...So I'm about a quarter of the way through this chapter, and I was just hit with the overwhelming feeling that Ginny might be dead... She hasn't said a word yet and Harry's just rambling on and... I don't know, man, did you kill her off? *reads on* Still hasn't said what's happening outright yet, but the more I read, the more I think that perhaps she's still there and alive, only there's something seriously wrong with her... like Alzheimer's or something akin to what Alice and Frank Longbottom suffered from... Eep! I'm all nervous now! *bites nails* OH GOD HE'S CRYING, IT'S COMING - WHAT IS IT? O_O

No! Dan! She's dead! Ugh, my heart! I don't even like Ginny all that much, but the way you built that up and revealed it was so gut-wrenching! I mean, this right here: "Why her? Why not me? . . . I'm supposed to protect everybody. Why couldn't I save her?" Rip my heart out, why don't you? Really, it's beautifully unfolded and incredibly sad. Harry always did struggle with survivor's guilt, and he's so hard on himself when someone passes and he's unable to stop it. I can't tell if whatever took Ginny's life was something that he actually could have prevented, but I think it's probably just him taking responsibility for something that he would never have been able to control, no matter what he'd done differently. I assume we'll eventually learn what killed her? *pokes for information* :-p

Even after he sobers, the ending is still quite heavy and emotional. This part is particularly poignant: "At the moment, it sat empty with all the children off at school and the adults going about their daily lives. Almost as empty as Harry felt." It must feel impossible at times to be all alone in that big house, and it sounds like he's about at his wits end. I have to hope that he doesn't do anything so foolish as give up on his own life to be with Ginny, because as someone with a relatable experience, I can tell you that that would be really unfair of him to do to his kids and grandchildren and friends - anyone who cares about him, really - because you don't walk on your family like that. It's selfish, and Harry is better than that. At least I certainly hope he is... *glares at Dan* ;) I'm under the impression that he'll soldier on, though, because that intro springs to my mind... I feel like he must have died much more heroically... ah, I don't know! I suppose I'll just have to keep reading to find all of this out, huh? I have no problem doing that. :-p

Anyway, back to some other stuff: I love the way you've worked in details about Harry's family and the life he's grown into during the 20+ years since we last saw him in the epilogue. It's just small little bits and pieces that help us string together the time that's passed without overloading us with information. I think I mentioned this in my last review, but I really dislike it when too much information is doled out all at once, because it just becomes too much to keep track of so immediately. You've spread it out and really only given us the bare minimum to hang onto for now, which is perfect because it's still enough to connect the dots. It makes for a really pleasant read.

So basically, after all of that which has now been said, I've drawn but one conclusion: You're a great writer, dude. ^.^ Seriously, this was another excellent chapter, my friend, and I sincerely look forward to reading on!

Tanya ^.^

P.S. Happy 1,000th review, Dan. ;)

Author's Response: Hi, Tanya! Time to catch up on answering reviews and that means responding to this one, probably the most rewarding review I've gotten since the very first one. Thank you, thank you, thank you!

I did want to start this chapter off by showing Harry in a completely relaxed moment of total, mundane, bland, ordinary normalcy. Because I agree with you. That's what he always wanted growing up and he could never really have it.

Believe me, I got *very* endeared to "grandpa Harry" while I was writing this. Again, I just loved that idea of his life ending up happy and normal. Well, as normal as Harry Potter's life was ever going to be, at any rate. Harry is sort of like a guest lecturer at Hogwarts. He teaches a basic defense class for first years and an advanced dueling class for sixth and seventh years. It winds up being a form of recruiting for the Aurors, not that he doesn't enjoy doing it just because.

Neville is a fantastic Headmaster. You'll find out just how good later on...

Your intuition is... well, I'm sad to say that it's accurate. One thing I learned while writing this story is that finishing a long novel involves making a lot of tough choices. The choice to not have Ginny be part of this story -- well, most of it, anyway -- was the hardest choice I made. It was really sad for me, because here Harry is living this relatively charmed life and he loses the one person he most wants to share it all with. You'll find out much more about the circumstances surrounding her untimely death as the story unfolds. There isn't much I could tell you at this point without totally ruining it for you.

I think I've said it in a dozen or more review responses: at the time, this chapter was the most emotional thing I'd ever written. I wasn't at all sure I'd done it justice until I had a few more chapters under my belt and I could go back and reread it. Reading it still makes me sad, even to this day. I guess that suggests I did an OK job with it.

Sometimes when I reread this chapter -- which I don't do often because it's sad -- I feel like maybe I dumped too much back story into it. Other times I don't. Eh, who am I kidding, I'm almost certainly not changing it at this point. I'd have to probably reword the next 4 chapters to get all of the information back in.

What can I say? You made my day, my week, and I think I'll always look back fondly on the month of April 2014. Thank you so much!

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Review #66, by GingeredTea Any Sufficiently Advanced Technology

21st April 2014:
One moment he's that relaxed eccentric Harry having dinner with his best mates and a cute kid. I thought you'd introduce something dramatic like a fist, but instead you chose to sneak it in and leave me breathless. The fact that a boggart, something Harry has never had great luck with, revealed this truth to us is something of a brilliant writing strategy. Harry not finding anything funny about his wife's death - you portrayed it so well. I just can't say enough good things about how you maneuvered through that scene!

A muggle gun? I'm so very intrigued.

I loved your portrayal of Hermione and Ron (and their...proclivity toward fighting). This Percy thing is interesting.

Harry explaining it to the child was heartbreaking. What's up with Percy? Why does Harry care so much about Percy?

I'm sorry this isn't longer. But I really really want to read the next chapter before I fall asleep. :) Review you again soon!

Author's Response: Hello, again!

I'm glad you liked the boggart. Like you said, I didn't just want to drop that plot point in bluntly because it didn't seem like the kind of thing that anyone would be eager to discuss. The boggart felt like a perfect way to introduce a bit of the circumstances surrounding Ginny's death without having it be some mopey flashback scene.

There are a lot of details regarding Ginny's death that have yet to be revealed, however. Some won't come out until the very end of the story. ;)

I'm pleased as can be that you like Ron and Hermione. Out of all of the canon characters, I found them the hardest to age realistically because Hermione was always mature beyond her years just as Ron tended to be immature for his age.

What's up with Percy? Well... you'll soon see. And you'll see more and more. Percy's troubles are actually very integral to the plot of the story.

Don't sweat the length, I really appreciate the review. This one, as it turns out, is #999 for the story. :)

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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Review #67, by GingeredTea Everything That Ever Mattered

21st April 2014:
Hello! I'm here for our penciled in review swap. :D

" sat in his comfortable muggle lawn chair, admiring the sunny autumn day. He took a long sip of ice water before he continued to tell his wife about his day." This is a Harry I am going to have to adjust myself too. A relaxed Harry is always hard to wrap my head around, but it is kind of pleasant at the same time, you know? :) I like how you start the story (considering the last chapter is somewhere closer to the end, I assume in terms of timeline), with a Harry that is so different from what we left the series with. It is sort of puzzling but like a gulp of fresh air. The ease with which you jump into all the names and relations and what-not all while maintaining dialogue that sounds real impresses me. I sorta have to introduce my own characters a couple at a time so that I don't confuse them all... O_o

"A 64-year-old man sitting in an old plastic lawn chair under a shade tree, sipping water out of a sport bottle. “Some muggle supper club is missing its most prominent eccentric,” he mused to himself." Sounds about right...that's what I was thinking!

The aspect of Ginny - whoa that was a whole bunch of drama to begin a story with. :( It almost made me cry! I am morbidly interested in how she died and why Harry feels all this guilt (okay, Harry ALWAYS feels guilty, so that's not as critical to my curiosity).

Great story! Great Chapter. I'm off to the next one. If i can finish the review before I conk out, you'll see it soon, if not before bed tomorrow. This chappy was short compared to mine, so I think a 2 for one deal is in order. :)

Author's Response: Hola! I really enjoy your reviews! They always make my day.

I think a lot of readers take a few chapters to mentally calibrate to the Harry presented in this story. He's much older than we normally see him. He has a large family with school-age grandchildren and he's approaching the twilight of his Auror career. In many ways, he's reached a point in his life where he's enjoying the fruits of everything he fought and suffered for as a young man.

You're correct that the prologue occurs near the end and this is really the start of the story. I'm really pleased that Harry's dialog sounded real to you. This chapter was tricky to write because I did want to deliver a certain amount of back story without having it sound stilted.

It's funny, I sort of pulled the term "supper club" off of Google without understanding much of what it actually meant. I guess it worked alright.

Deciding to not have Ginny be a part of this story was the single hardest decision I made. I love Harry and Ginny together and I always felt bad about leaving Harry without her. In the end, I think it worked well, though. I hope I get to see what you think about it.

I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!

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Review #68, by GLacerda Epilogue

15th April 2014:
I read your story and reread several times the chapters in which Harry and Ginny meet in Kings Cross, especially the last chapter, and every time I could not hold my tears. In fact, I'm trying to stop them at this very moment as I write this review. I am a young man of 19 years living in Portugal. The Harry Potter saga has had and continues to have a major impact on my life, because she accompanied my adolescence. I recently started reading the online fanfiction and I was very touched by "Harry Potter and the winters after the war" and "Harry Potter and the Summer after the war". Now, I found your story and I just can thank you for this wonderful story you wrote.
I can only hope to find a girl with whom I can have such a great connection as Harry had with Ginny: a bond that lasts beyond the veil.
God bless you

Sorry for any errors (I'm not a native speaker ;) )

Author's Response: Hi, there.

I'm really pleased that you liked the story and that you felt such a strong emotional connection to it. Reviews like yours put a huge smile on my face that doesn't go away for quite a while.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!

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Review #69, by writeyourheartout Prologue

11th April 2014:

Ah, wait, hold on - let me backtrack for a second: Hi Dan! Just thought I would stop by and help you on your journey to that elusive 1,000 reviews mark! You're so close, it's crazy! And now that I've begun reading this fic, I can absolutely see why it's racked up such a huge following! I've only just begun and already I'm loving it. So onto the actual review, now, yes? ^.^

Wow, what a prologue! Where do I even begin?

I love the opening, the sort of soft mystery. It's not a panicked onslaught of handfuls of characters mid-attack with a thousand things happening around them and none of which I would understand, but it's a gentler introduction to the world we're about to experience, which makes it just as intriguing, but easier to follow. I much prefer this sort of introduction to the crazed, high-energy ones that throw you into some high-stakes scenario and then cut you off with too many things to wonder about - I tend to feel overwhelmed with the quantity of information I'm meant to contain and usually just forget the scene entirely, but this prologue leaves us with the same sort of mystery, sans the overwhelming case load to try to remember. It's all a balancing act and you've done it fantastically!

""Great," he mumbled to himself, "you're dead again."" - Hahaha! I actually laughed out loud when I came across this line. Too funny, and I love when stories tie back to canon moments in this way; it makes the story in its entirety feel so very authentic and plausible. I also love when stories that are generally darker and more intense fit in these small moments of humor to lighten it up now and again. And this is just the prologue! Ah, I'm very excited to read on. ^.^

"He thought that perhaps he would get to see Professor Dumbledore again and it brought a smile to his face." - Awww, this breaks my heart a little (in a good way, of course ;)).

"He noticed a clock on the wall that unfortunately seemed to be missing its hands." - Is this meant to sound creepy? Cause it's giving me the creeps... haha A handless clock - a clock without a time... HE'S DEAD, ISN'T HE? CAUSE NO ONE TELLS TIME IN THE AFTERLIFE, RIGHT? *shakes fist*

Oh man, Dan! Is this really death?? Harry's no help at all - he can't even remember how he ended up here! I'm trying to consider a scenario in which he ended up at an empty and silent King's Cross Station, surrounded by nothing but eery white mist and a clock without a time, and I just have no clue how he could be alive under these circumstances! But then part of me is all like, 'Well, Dan probably wants us to think Harry's dead, which means he can't be! It's just meant to seem that way, right?' Ugh. I don't know, my head's spinning.

And then Ginny shows up! Of course, this too is no help at all, thank you very much! Is she dead, too, then? HOW DID THEY GET HERE, DAN!

In case you can't tell, this short, sweet, and precise little intro has stirred up just a whole plethora of questions and intrigue in me, which is really just phenomenal. Nothing better than beginning a new story and feeling immediately pulled into it! It takes a lot of talent to pull that off, too, so kudos to you! Again, it's right back to your ability to balance. I've always believed that the mystery genre must be the most difficult to write because you have to give us enough to keep us interested, but not so much that you give yourself away. I can already tell the rest of this story is going to be just an adventure of epic proportions, and I really can't wait to dig in deeper! I've so many questions already that make me want to just shake you and yell, 'TELL ME NOW', but I suppose the better option would simply be to continue reading... And so I shall. :-D

It's a great start, Dan; it really is. I'll try to be back soon with another review! Only four left, now! Woot!


Author's Response: Tanya! This is far and away the longest review I've ever received for a 500 word prologue. I love it!

I'm with you, I really don't like opening chapters that throw too much information at the reader. I'd much rather ease into the story and set the mood. In the case of this story, the whole thing is a mystery, so I thought a mysterious tone was the way to go.

That line is definitely one that I'm proud of. It just sounds like something Harry would say. He's so fatalistic.

Is he going to see Dumbledore again? Is he dead? Is Ginny? Well, all I can tell you without ruining the surprise is that the prologue is actually the first part of a scene that takes place in chapter 38. All of your questions and more are answered there, I promise. And I agree, the hand-less clock is creepy. ;)

If you have a lot of questions and intrigue, then the prologue has done its job. I didn't want to hit the reader with too much, just to pull them into the story by dangling a mystery or three in front of their eyes. I hope I've done the mystery genre justice with the story. Lots of people have tried to shake the truth out of me along the way and I haven't broken yet. Well, not completely. I confess to slipping Jami some hints from time to time, but she's threatening and scary. ;)

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!

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Review #70, by Courtney Dark Transitions

23rd March 2014:
Hey there!

I loved this chapter! Arabela/Lady Tenebra is like
the ultimate villain!

The scene between Neville and Harry was great. I
feel so bad for Harry and I'm so happy about the
person Neville has grown to become! I couldn't
stop thinking about how much he was mocked and
teased at school!

Aw, Octavia:) I love the way you write from her
point of view! And I'm curious to know more about
this 'mysterious voice'.

Great chapter!


Author's Response: Hi, Courtney!

First off, let me say how happy I am that you tagged me. I've been the last post in the thread for over a week. I was starting to think that maybe I smell funny or something.

Lady Tenabra brings her master plan full circle in this chapter. She's disposed of the Minister that she used to claw her way to the top and now she's installed Percy, who she controls with the dark spells from Herodonthus's book, in his place.

One thing that always bugged me while reading the last three books -- and especially OotP -- was why nobody ever just grabbed Harry and shook him and yelled, "stop being such an idiot!" So now he has Neville to fill that role for him, and I really enjoyed writing that particular confrontation.

I tried really hard to keep things appropriately childlike when writing from Octavia's PoV. I'm glad that it worked. You'll find out a lot more about the mysterious voice before the end of the story.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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Review #71, by hpfflover1 Epilogue

2nd March 2014:
Wow. Just finished reading and I have to say your story was amazing! Loved it!

Author's Response: I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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Review #72, by Courtney Dark Small Victories

1st March 2014:
I loved the first section of this chapter, with the aftermath of the battle, and I loved that it was from Ron's point of view. The fighting between Draco and Ron was just fantastic and the interactions of all the other canon characters...you just write everyone so well! I love that Ron got to show how great an Auror he can be in this chapter. Poor Harry:( He has had one of the most painful lives I have ever known - he constantly seems to be losing the people that he loves.

The Dennis scene was great - I love all the Hogwarts chapters, as they make me feel very reminiscent. And I liked that there was a bit of humour injected into it. A much needed change after the events of the last chapter!

The section from Octavia's point of view was great, too. I love the way you write her voice, with her calling Arabela/Lady Tenabra the 'mean lady' and all the little comparisons she makes that only a small child would think of. Although I'm dreading finding out what's going to happen to her...


Author's Response: Hi, Courtney!

I really liked writing Ron's PoV throughout the story and I sort of regret that I didn't have more chances to do it. By this point in his life, Ron has become an exceptionally skilled Auror, both in terms of his magical abilities and his strategic ones. Part of the point of this chapter was to show that he's completely capable of taking control of a situation when he needs to.

I really grew to like Dennis by the time I was done writing this. He starts off so belligerent and ignorant and turns into a generally likeable guy by the end of it. You'll definitely see more of him.

Keeping Octavia age-appropriate was a real challenge because she's surrounded by so many older characters. I'm glad you thought she sounded right.

Thanks so much for all of the great reviews!

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Review #73, by Courtney Dark Prices Paid in Blood and Sorrow

1st March 2014:

Oh my God this chapter was so packed with action and amazingness that I hardly know where to begin! Maybe the beginning would be a good starting point...

Rory Tennant is a vile, vile person and that's all I really have to say about the section from his point of view.

I loved the section from Harry's point of view with all the members of the Order of Phoenix - it was nice to see the appearance of some of the 'lesser' next gen characters, such as Roxanne and Dominique.

Scorpius' point of view was great! I always love to read about Draco, and the way he handled the whole situation was awesome. And as I'm sure I've mentioned before, you are fantastic at writing confrontations and action packed scenes.

The fight between the 'good guys' and the 'bad guys' was intense, dramatic and just downright amazing to read - I seriously don't know how you do it!

Thank God Rose and Octavia are alright! I loved the bit when Hermione observed Draco running unashamedly towards Octavia, that made me smile! And I am so relieved that Hermione managed to get rid of that horrible darkness inside of her.

And so Lady Tenabra reveals herself - I KNEW that she was Arabel Dynt, but that didn't stop this whole segment from being shocking. The threat to Octavia, Percy giving himself up...and then Esme's death. I absolutely did NOT see that coming and I am so shocked. But I can totally see why you did it. Poor Harry:( Poor Rose and Scorpius:( Poor Percy:( Actually, poor everyone!

Amazing chapter, as usual!


Author's Response: Ha! I'm pretty sure you've had Arabela figured out for a while now. Fortunately -- or unfortunately, if you're our heroes -- she always has another trick up her sleeve.

I enjoyed writing this chapter as much as anything in the entire story. The action barely stops.

Don't worry about Tennant, he'll get what's coming to him when the time is right. ;)

I pretty much threw the kitchen sink into this chapter in terms of including characters. It's the last hurrah for the huge, ensemble cast before things become a little more intimate.

Poor Scorpius is in over his head, but he follows his father's lead and makes it through. I'm sure he enjoying seeing Gamp die as much as his father.

I'm glad you liked the battle scene. If I have anything you'd call a trick to writing them, it's making sure that I can visualize what's happened and who's standing where and then trying to get that across to the reader without breaking the flow of the action.

I really enjoyed the idea of Draco sprinting across the warehouse, myself. There have to be a few things in the world that cause him to lose that stiff upper lip. The darkness is gone from Hermione, but it isn't gone for good.

Wow, you're getting close to the end! Thanks so much for sharing your thoughts and reactions!

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Review #74, by anythingcouldhappen Any Sufficiently Advanced Technology

23rd February 2014:
Hello! I'm back!

I loved this chapter for getting to see Ron and Hermione. It's really amazing to me sometimes how much I love and know these characters. They're so familiar, and they were just as familiar in this chapter. Another job well done on aging characters! I especially liked the bit about Harry sort of clinging to his glasses instead of getting surgery done. I couldn't imagine Harry without his glasses!

Also, Hermione's glass discovery was a nice addition! I saw in your AN it was inspired by another story, but I think it was a great way to show Hermione's ingenuity and general awesomeness. Oh, and her conversation with Harry before she leaves is soo characteristic of her--I just love how close all three of them still are, after all these years. All the houses and funds and stuff Harry set up are perfect! They made me sad and yet happy that Harry memorialized all those people. The Dobby House.I got tears in my eyes.

Octavia already seems like a fantastic character! She's young and cute, but also a strong little girl. I'm so curious what Harry meant when he asked if she knew where she was when Ginny died.

That's another thing--this chapter, while filling in some more back story and stuff, raised some more questions for me, which was nice. I love mysteries and stories that keep me curious!

This is just a tiny error I noticed, but something you could fix if you ever happen to be editing this: When you talk about Harry's money, you say "and he give away a great deal of the proceeds". In a chapter with no other noticeable grammar flaws, that just stood out to me.

I look forward to reading the next chapter! Awesome job, yet again!


Author's Response: Hello, again!

First off, thank you for pointing out that typo. I checked and this chapter hadn't been edited in nearly 2 years! It was sort of nice to go back and change something and see the story jump up to the top of my Manage Stories page.

You'll see a great deal more of Ron and Hermione throughout the story. They are two of my favorite characters, as well, and I hope that I've really done them justice in this story.

I did borrow the idea of using genie glass to shield electronics from magic from a fantastic story called Harry Potter and the Winters After the War. I highly, highly recommend it. I'm sure that Harry, Ron and Hermione stayed very close for the rest of their lives. I will never be convinced otherwise! ;)

I'm really glad that you like Octavia, because she will be around until the very end of the story. Where she was when Ginny died turns out to be very important, as you'll see later on.

Questions, questions, questions. This story never has any shortage of them. Hopefully, I can keep you guessing for a long time.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!

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Review #75, by GingeredTea Prologue

21st February 2014:
Well, this certainly has me interested!

Is Ginny dead as well - Harry almost acted as if he wasn't surprised to see her there although clearly he knew he was dead and that meant she was too...

Off to read more! I've been meaning to read this for ages!

Author's Response: Hi, there! Very nice of you to stop by!

I can't actually tell you much about why Ginny's there without ruining any number of surprises. I think the best thing is just to tell you that this prologue is the first part of a scene that's completed in chapter 38.

I am giddy! You're such a brilliant author in your own right, I'm very excited to see what you think! Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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