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Review #26, by Jared R. Epilogue

4th March 2013:
Hello and thank you for the amazing trip. Where to begin, well your story structure is something else. I don't mean this in a bad way (I just read this overnight and just couldn't stop.) and it just took some getting used to. I also have to say that this is one of the smoother multiple viewpoint stories that I have read on this site. That detail may have seemed minor, but it was crucial to the effect of the story in my opinion.

The layering you put into this was so complex I felt like this novel was several books put together, but you always wrapped it back into the 'canon' of your work and I was left dumbfounded. I don't think I could fathom putting together a 50 person tree (I saw your attempt to post it in a review and that did help me understand your efforts). I think my favorite non-canon character was Mr. Northway. I loved Dennis' character being so gryffindoresque while in slytherin with the loyalty, stubborness and courage... brilliant job granted by the end of the story i'm sure most of the humans are in some way related in some way to either the Potters or Weasleys anyway... but that is a whole other problem now isn't is?

On the note of Lady Tenabra I had guessed by chapter 15 it was Arabella, but I was trying to decipher the name from the beginning. Of course with all your hints you led me to Luna first, but she was too old... and it was awesome to know you led me, the reader, on successfully along the rollercoaster you had constructed.

Finally thank you for Rule 32: Enjoying the little things. Whether the trip to Ginny's grave, the Ministry, France, the past, or any of the other locations you got me there and then some. Thank you for this story and the only questions I have are what the final shape of Octavia's scar when it healed and does it contain a horcrux? Perhaps this is a story for some day in the future, but anyway thanks and keep up the great work.

Best wishes,

Jared

Author's Response: Hi, there!

I fell in love with the idea of frequently changing the narrative voice in a few other stories I read on HPFF. It offers an opportunity to see events through a lot of different eyes and get inside the heads of a lot of different characters. At any rate, I'm glad you thought it added to the story.

This story started off with a relatively simply plot concept and to be honest, I got sort of lucky that some of the other subplots came together for me and I was able to work them back into the whole. I published this as I wrote it, so it definitely evolved quite a bit over time. Dennis, for instance, wasn't originally meant to be such a big part of the story. But when I decided that Hogwarts was going to be the setting of a major battle, it was nice that he was already established and I was able to wrap him back into things.

Congratulations. You figured Arabela out earlier than most.

For me, the little things always make the story. When I go back and read bits and pieces of the HP books, I always find it's the small details I didn't even notice the first time through that put a smile on my face.

I'm really glad that you enjoyed this. It was a labor of love, and I'm quite proud of it. Thanks so much for taking a moment to review!


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Review #27, by Courtney Dark Those Who Don’t Learn From History

1st March 2013:
Another awesome chapter.

Your characterization of Harry is so spot on and amazing-when reading this chapter, I actually felt like I was reading a sequel J.K Rowling had written, it was just that good. I loved the idea of Harry going back to Hogwarts and lecturing the older students-and it was nice to see what the latest generation seems to be like.

The idea that this generation, or at least some of the students, don't seem to know much about Voldemort is very interesting, and I am definitely wondering if this ignorance of dark magic is going to add to the plot somehow-I can't wait to find out more!

Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hello, again!

I think that's the highest compliment that anyone can pay to this story. I've tried very hard throughout to keep those essential things that make Harry who he is while also aging him in what I hope is a realistic way.

The youngest generation of characters -- as well as the children of Harry, Ron and the others, to a lesser extent -- don't understand much at all about what the war was really like. It's sort of like trying to explain Vietnam to somebody who was born in the 90's. Most of the context is lost. I think it does make them vulnerable to making some of the same mistakes that past generations made.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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Review #28, by Courtney Dark Losses

23rd February 2013:
Another incredible chapter, of course-I'm kind of still getting my head around it!

When I first started reading the trial, I was initially under the impression that Harry, Hermione and Ron were part of the Wizengamot...when I learned that they were the accused, my mind started whirring. It definitely makes sense that they would be accused of killing the man that murdered Ginny, but that doesn't make it any less horrible! This chapter also raised a lot more questions-I am now wondering which direction this story is going to take...and if Ginny's death is part of something much bigger? Hmm..I guess I'll have to wait and see!

The scene after the trial was so emotional and heartbreaking, I honestly don't know how you do it! It was so nice seeing the whole family together, and so fitting. I am looking forward to seeing more of Harry's relationship with his kids.

I love the idea of the portraits! And Harry's conversation with his mother was absolutely perfect-and all the others; Dumbledore, Sirius and James were so perfectly in character that it made me smile and look like a dork. I also liked the touch of humour that Sirius brought to the chapter-I'm looking forward to learning more.

Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hello, again!

I never thought of any of the trio as being the sort who would wind up on the Wizengamot. Hermione probably couldn't stand all the pretense and hypocrisy, Harry wouldn't want the attention and Ron just doesn't have the patience. So yes, they were all accused of possibly being the one who killed the man who murdered Ginny. Even though I think the standard to convict a person of a crime is roughly the same in the magical world as in the muggle world, I think the standard to accuse somebody of something and put on a big, showy trial is much lower. Especially where the use of Unforgivable Curses is concerned.

The scene outside the courtroom, after the trial, was definitely tough to write. Very sad and intense.

As soon as they surfaced in the books, I loved the idea of magical portraits and the possibilities they held. Like a lot of things, there just weren't enough pages for JKR to give them the attention I thought they deserved. So I've tried to build on the concept in this story. And I did enjoy giving Sirius that snappy one-liner. ;)

Thanks so much for reading and leaving such a lovely review!


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Review #29, by Courtney Dark Any Sufficiently Advanced Technology

23rd February 2013:
Well, will you look at that? I'm back! Currently I should be writing/sleeping or doing work but I just couldn't get this fantabulous story out of my head so here I am!

This was yet another awesome chapter. I love your characterizations of every single character and how they react with each other. Ron was especially perfect. I loved the fact that he was still uncomfortable with Rose and Scorpius and the line: “Every time I try to talk to Mum and Dad about the rows that Scorp and I get into, she tries to psychoanalyze our whole relationship and dad just starts drinking” was great.

Rose's relationship with Harry is so sweet! She seems like a really awesome character, and I thought it was funny how she referred to Hugo and Fiona as the Perfects-there were actually quite a few moments throughout this chapter which brought a smile to my face, which I love.

Anyway, I'm probably waffling on and making no sense as usual, so I'll just say one more thing. I love the mystery that surrounds this story. I'm looking forward to finding out more about what happened to Ginny and also learn more about Octavia too-who is an absolutely gorgeous character by the way, but I could say that about all your characters.

Okay. That was more than one more thing. Onto the next chapter, methinks!
Courtney:)

Author's Response: Yay! Look who it is! Sleeping and doing work can be overrated, although I would feel badly if I kept you away from your writing. ;)

I spent a lot of time throughout the story on trying to keep the canon characters' voices true to the way I remembered them from the books. I'm glad that part worked well for you. Poor Ron is such a creature of habit. Old grudges die hard.

I imagine Rose as being sort of an average of her parents, personality-wise, so I think it makes sense that she and Harry would get along really well. Plus, being wealthy and a little child-like in his own way, I think Harry would be one of the world's most awesome uncles.

There are an awful lot of revelations yet to come about the circumstances surrounding Ginny's death. And a lot of those have their own mysteries tied to them. I apologize in advance for that. ;)

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!


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Review #30, by Courtney Dark Everything That Ever Mattered

21st February 2013:
This chapter was so heart wrenching! And you wrote it absolutely perfectly.

At first I didn't realize Ginny was dead, so there seemed nothing off with Harry talking about his children and grandchildren-you do an excellent job of characterizing him, by the way. I would never be brave enough to attempt it! But about half way through I started getting suspicious and then everything Harry said seemed that much sadder and that much more important. I particularly liked the bit about Cissy Malfoy passing-how Harry said she was only eighty nine years old-this line seems so much more powerful when you realize Ginny is dead.

I admit my eyes started to get a tad (okay, maybe a lot) watery when the lines italics began. Harry's thoughts were so perfectly sad and so in character...and I am left with still more questions! This chapter takes place before the first, right? So now that I know Ginny is dead...does Harry die too?

Great chapter, once again.
Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hello, again.

This chapter was one of the most emotional things I've ever written. I'm really glad that seems to come through to the reader. Harry's situation and the emotions that it evokes became very real for me. Throughout the story, I kept coming back to his grief whenever I felt tempted -- as I often did -- to stray from the plot and just let the guy be happy for a while. All I can tell you at this point is that things end better for him than you might expect.

Sorry, I can't really reveal what happens with Harry yet. It would ruin the story for you.

Thanks so much for two awesome reviews!


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Review #31, by Courtney Dark Prologue

21st February 2013:
Tag!

Oooh, how intriguing! I am already captivated by this story, and I think I might just have to go on and read the next chapter! This was everything a prologue should be and more-it is clear that you have a great writing style that is hooking and captivating.

I already have so many questions, especially for a chapter that has so little words. The main one is: what is Harry doing at Kings Cross? Is he dead? Sort of dead? Something else all together? And what about Ginny?

Well, I'm not going to spend too much time waffling on-off to the next chapter it is!

Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hi, there!

Thank you for all of the kind words. I'm really glad that you enjoyed this and that you found the writing style appealing.

All of your questions are answered in due course, but I'll give you the following bit of information: the prologue is the beginning of a chapter that takes place near the very end of the story.

I'm just tickled that you found the story worth continuing! Thanks so much!


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Review #32, by CassiePotter Any Sufficiently Advanced Technology

18th February 2013:
Hello! I'm back to leave you another review!
I really loved this chapter. I think you write all your characters so well, and I love the feeling that we get from reading Harry's relationships with Ron, Hermione, Rose, and Octavia. The part with the boggart was really intriguing, and I can't wait to find out more about who that man was, and how Octavia fits into everything! The end of the chapter was so sweet, and I loved the toy unicorn :) I'm excited to read more! 10/10
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Hello, again!

I'm really glad you like the way I write them. I tried really hard to stick close to the way that I remember them all from the book.

You'll find out very soon about the man that the boggart was imitating. For the true extent of Octavia's role in all this, you'll have to wait a bit longer, though. ;)

Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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Review #33, by CassiePotter Everything That Ever Mattered

16th February 2013:
Oh my gosh. This chapter was wonderful, but so sad! I think you portrayed Harry's love for Ginny so well, especially because he continues to visit her grave even though it hurts him, and it's so hard for him to do so. I loved the way you talked about the house and the many generations of Potters and Weasleys, and can't wait to find out more about them! 10/10
Cassie :)

Author's Response: This chapter is definitely one of the saddest, most emotional things I've ever written. I'm really pleased that it all works well for you. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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Review #34, by CassiePotter Prologue

15th February 2013:
Hello!
That was a really intriguing start to this story! I'm curious to see what's going on with Harry and if he's really dead again. That line was wonderful, by the way. I could definitely picture it being something Harry would say! And the end was really sweet, too. Maybe Ginny can tell Harry where he is? 10/10
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Hi, there.

I'm really glad that you liked the prologue. It's short, but it is actually the beginning of a chapter that comes near the end of the story.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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Review #35, by FredWeasleyIsMyKing A Friend Indeed

15th February 2013:
Hello once more :)

I love the character development of Draco here and also his family. Narcissa in particular seems to have gone through the biggest change and I really liked that idea, especially the part where she stood up for Scorpius when Rose fell pregnant. I think you got Draco's character very right in terms of his personal hell being very different. He learnt in a very harsh way that the Dark Lord didn't care and that he was just as dispensable as anyone. I also liked the part that his relationship with his grandchildren is much better than with Scorpius. Again, it feels right.

So the plot does thicken... So, Marcus Flint is out of Azkaban and is after The Dark Lord's journal. Not only that but there is someone in the ministry who is involved too. Well, whatever plans are in there can't be good, that's for sure. I loved Astorias reaction though, not taking any chances with Flint being loose or the fact the book may be in the house. The two of them fit really well together. I don't read much Draco to be honest but I enjoyed reading this version of the two of them.

I just have to say that I loved the line 'My husband's problem is that he spent so much time in the Dark Lord's company that everyone else seems benign by comparison.'

I did not see the guy with the toupee being in on the attack! When he shot the spell at Hermione I was really surprised! Her arms and legs felt as though they were on fire? That doesn't sound particularly good. Someone's supposed to have died too - this surely can't be Hermione though as she doesn't work for magical records. Also I'm sure this is a trio fic and you seriously can't be so mean as to kill of both Ginny and Hermione, can you? I'll more than likely take a sneak peek at the next chapter before I go to bed!

As always, I loved this chapter. I don't particularly have anything to offer in the way of CC or anything. I enjoyed the POV changes and the flow to the story was as excellent as always!

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Hello, again!

Draco is one of my proudest accomplishments in this story. His family, in general, actually. For me, the most important thing was to keep him true to his characterization in the books, which is to say very ambiguous. I never saw him as a "good" guy by the conventional definition. He has deeply engrained prejudices, he looks down his nose at people and he has a mean streak. But, I think the war taught him that none of those things are worth killing or being killed over. And he's also not the maniacal arch-villain that some authors make him out to be. He's definitely a sympathetic character when viewed in a certain light.

Flint is on the loose, along with certain other names you'll recognize from the books. He had help getting loose, which will be explained very soon. Astoria is another character that I grew to love while writing this. She's Draco's backbone and his moral compass. She's the main reason that he didn't find a way to end up in Azkaban after the war. I hope you'll continue to like them together.

The guy in the toupee is also someone you'll recognize, and his identity is revealed fairly soon. The spell he hit Hermione with was very nasty indeed. You'll find out a lot more about it as the story goes on. And you'll find out very soon whether Hermione will be alright. ;)

This chapter is where the plot of the story starts in earnest, so I'm glad that you loved it. Hope to see you back soon! Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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Review #36, by FredWeasleyIsMyKing Those Who Don’t Learn From History

14th February 2013:
I'm back once again, enjoying more amazingness.

I love that Neville is headmaster of Hogwarts. I think it would definitely be something he would go for after being the Herbology professor. The conversation between the two of them was so easy to read and very in character. I really hope we get to see more of Neville in future chapters.

I've like the idea of Harry going in teaching students to duel - it took me right back to the DA days of OTTP which were some of my favourite moments by far. He does have a flair for teaching too although the relaxed atmosphere of the class does suit him much better. I liked the fact that the scene wasn't rushed in the slightest bit, you gave us plenty of details and lots of things to enjoy but it didn't drag either. You kept the action going with Harry not being able to resist showing off a little.

I really like the next section and how you explored the possibility that the next generation wouldn't appreciate the war as they should. I took a dislike to Northway straight away - a tad unfair maybe, I don't know but I just didn't like him. When he said Fred probably blew himself up I kind of wanted to punch him. I like the way Harry dealt with the situation though - showing him these things did happen. A much better way than simply lecturing him. It was nice to see Frank and Alice too - even if it is bittersweet as there is no hope for them.

I'm very glad you brought up the Magical History class - I always wondered if the curriculum would change, although knowing Binns, you almost certainly got it right. I'm glad Harry is looking to get some much needed change! He's right that ignorance is dangerous.

A great chapter as always.

Lauren

Author's Response: Hello, again!

Neville's done quite well for himself, hasn't he? To my mind, there was somebody in between McGonagall and Neville because JKR said that she was retired by the time Harry and Ginny's kids were at Hogwarts. Maybe Flitwick? At any rate, he and Harry are still very close.

Harry is a natural teacher. Not only is he a master of the subject matter, but he has such an easy, unassuming manner about him. I feel like the kids would really gravitate toward him. And he definitely couldn't resist putting on a little show for their benefit. He isn't the Head of the Aurors for no reason, after all.

I'm not sure which generation you're describing, but definitely the youngest generation -- the grandchildren of Harry, Ron and the other Weasley brothers -- only knows about the war in very abstract terms. It's the same what that kids today are learning about the Vietnam War, basically. Don't judge Dennis too quickly, I guess. He's a product of his environment, and he gets a pretty harsh lesson in reality.

I always thought that Magical History was one of those things that Dumbledore completely neglected in his zeal to stop Tom Riddle. The subject could have been so valuable to Harry and the others -- just look at how many times something Hermione read in Hogwarts: A History helps the trio out -- but instead it's taught by somebody who's been dead for all of the most relevant portions of wizarding history.

I'm so glad you're enjoying the story. The next chapter is the beginning of the "real" plot of the story. Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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Review #37, by FredWeasleyIsMyKing Losses

13th February 2013:
Hello!

Gosh - what an amazing chapter. There's so much happened I can barely get my head around it...

So, the trial. I was quite surprised at first to see the trio being put on trial, I was surprised they were even suspected to be honest. But, the more I read it the more it made sense. the man who murdered Ginny - of course Harry would be suspected. The strength of the curse of course didn't go well in his favour. You wrote the scene very well too, it had a very formal feel to it which is obviously what it needed and the language was perfect for the court room.

I was cheering Percy on when he delivered his closing speech! I love what you've done with his character and how you've developed him since the war. I really enjoying reading stories where he is now a part of the Weasleys again and does something with his life.

The scene with the Weasleys after they were charged not guilty was absolutely heart breaking. Reading that they'd put the grief on hold and stayed together as a family unit then reading them all break down once again, gosh - it just made me fill up. It's a beautiful piece of writing and you captured the very heart of the family here.

Ooh, you dropped a bombshell with the whole Percy is the killer there didn't you? When Harry took him to the Forest of Dean and started talking I did kind of see where it was going but even still, I was shocked when I read my thoughts were correct. I absolutely loved the twist here but the actual turn of events was particularly well thought out on your part. The minister expecting this to happen and getting in touch with the only member of the family he felt he could trust who turned out to do exactly what he feared. Just wow. Percy's description was particularly excellent to read. You really got across his struggle between regret and feeling good about what he did.

We then move on to the final scene where can I just say I was astounded once again by your genius. The portraits are absolutely fantastic! I can't believe Harry gets to talk to his mum & dad, Sirius, Remus and Dumbledore once again. I actually can't believe I've never read another story with this idea in - it's great. Lily and Harry talking were lovely. It's not quite the same of course but it's like he's getting a bit of his mum back and I loved it. Cue then the hilarious end to the chapter with Sirius 'He doesn't need Father Christmas over there gifting him any more Herculean tasks' I giggled out loud to that and got some strange looks... whoops. Good old Sirius though, says it as it is. You write Dumbledore's lines particularly well too - I know he can be a hard man to write!

The only other thing I have to comment on is Octavia. Is there something special about her? I'm guessing you won't answer again but it's kind of bugging me. The comment about her being able to do the ridikulus charm and the fact she was with Ginny when she died. I get the feeling there is more to this than meets the eye although I may be way way off. You did say she had a lot of her grandma in her I suppose.

Excellent chapter again. You have such a talent at making me want to laugh and cry in such a short space of time. The flow and pace of the story is spot on and leaves me with the same sense of satisfaction as I got when reading Harry orginally. I'm honestly hooked on this story - it's a fantastic read.

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Woo-hoo! Finally caught up on responding to reviews. I've been behind for 2 weeks. It feels icky.

Harry, Ron and Hermione were suspected for many reasons, most of which the prosecution attempts to use as "evidence". The substance of the trial was obviously quite thin. In my mind, I was picturing the whole situation as being the sort of political theater that Fudge attempted to use to discredit Harry and Dumbledore in Order of the Phoenix.

Percy definitely saves the day. I hope you'll continue to like Percy throughout. At times, he's going to behave in such a way that you'll question his sanity. Just stick with him, alright? ;)

The Weasleys are an incredibly strong family. They've been though so much, and they always pull together when it matters most. Without them, I don't think there's any way that Harry ever manages to survive the books and defeat Voldemort. I really couldn't imagine them reacting any other way.

Quite a surprise on Percy's part, huh? I've always thought that he was an underutilized character, and I was determined to do something interesting with him. I thought a lot about what it might feel like to cast the Killing Curse. It's sort of the ultimate act of evil, but in a way I thought it also might be addictive. Wizards who use it seem to fall into a pattern of that behavior.

I loved the idea of the magical portraits in the books and I felt like JKR could have made so much more out of it. Given the opportunity, and he certainly has the money, I felt pretty sure that Harry would have wanted a way to regain some small part of his relationship with his parents, Sirius, Remus and Dumbledore. Ginny, on the other hand, I think it would have hurt too much. And I loved that little dig that Sirius takes at Dumbledore. I don't think the two of them ever really got along. Sirius must have disapproved very strongly of sending Harry back to the Dursleys each summer, even if he understood why it was necessary.

There's something very special about Octavia. I can't tell you what it is yet, but suffice it to say that she's very pivotal to the story and she'll be part of it until the very end. And she has a lot of both grandmothers in her. When you get to know Astoria, I hope you'll think that's a good thing.

Aww, I never start off with the intention of making anyone cry, but it seems to happen sometimes. I'm glad that you find the story so emotional. Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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Review #38, by FredWeasleyIsMyKing Any Sufficiently Advanced Technology

12th February 2013:
Hello again,

So it turns out I can't keep away from this! Not that I mind, I'm just neglecting RL a bit.

I really enjoyed this chapter, althought it made me want to both laugh and cry. What I really want to know though is what Arthur did to get Hearthrow evacuated?

I really enjoy reading the way you've progressed the wizarding world in this. The idea of the genie class is great and who better than George to see it's true potential and make millions? Of course this meant you got the line in about Mario Bros later on which I really did laugh at, 'How about that one where the nice Italian plumber saves the princess from the gorilla'. I'm glad to see Mario is still popular in the 2040's.

I found the section where it shows all the things Harry has done with his fortune so touching, putting his money to good use. I think all the people he did the things in the name of would be proud and it would definitely be something Harry would do. I did fill up a bit.

Another section that made me laugh was the bit about Ron and Scorpius: 'It had been forty-five years since they finished school and over fifteen since Scorpius married Rose and Ron still struggled with the concept of a Malfoy infiltrating his family.'. This is such a Ron reaction and made me laugh so much.

Harry is so sweet with Rose. This is the first story I've read where I've seen such a close connection between the two of them. Maybe it's because you've wrote her as much older, I'm not sure, but I really enjoyed reading it. You've also given lots of hints about the circumstances surrounding Ginny's death. So it seems she was killed by a Muggle man with a gun and Octavia was with her?

I absoutely can't wait to read more! Your writing has such a lovely flow about it that I just loose myself completely in the story.

The only one tiny tiny bit of CC I would have is actually a Briticism - you use mom instead of mum. Obviously not really an issue or anything, it's just because I'm from England and mom sounds so weird to me!

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Hi! I find myself neglecting real life in favor of HPFF quite a bit, too. Real life can be so stressful. Not like reading. ;)

So the bit about Arthur causing Heathrow to be evacuated is a small tip of the hat to Delicate, which is the source of nearly all of my Scorpius/Rose inspiration for this story. Genie glass is a tip to another favorite story of mine, Harry Potter and the Winters After the War. As far a Mario goes, it seems that the wizarding world is always about 30 years behind the times when it comes to adopting muggle customs, so console video games were probably *huge* in the wizarding 2010's.

In my own mind, Harry was always very uncomfortable with his considerable wealth. He came from such meager beginnings and his adopted family struggled to survive on Arthur's Ministry salary. So I feel like he's always be the first to jump in and donate when he saw a worthy cause.

I've always been very taken with the idea that Harry would have been very close to both his godson and his goddaughter. (I *think* it's canon that Harry is Rose's godfather. If not, well, he is now. ;) Rose is such a great mix of her mother and her father that I think Harry would have been drawn to her. You've got the circumstances of Ginny's death correct. Much more about this to come...

Thanks for pointing out all the "moms". I went in and patched those up this morning.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!


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Review #39, by FredWeasleyIsMyKing Everything That Ever Mattered

12th February 2013:
Hello again!

Okay - I just need a minute to get over the shock of what I've just read. So I'm guessing this is happening before the prologue, but Ginny's still dead? So Harry was going back to meet her in the prologue? Well you certainly know how to catch a readers interest don't you!

I love how this is set much later on in Harry's life - the fact he is a grandad is really great. I'm up to date with all the characters so far but with the number of Weasleys to write this must have been so confusing for you! I find just the next gen hard to keep up with.

I know I said in the last review but you really write Harry well. I usually avoid Harry fics as he's never quite right but I feel really comfortable reading your Harry. The opening line is great, starting with his list of achievements so to speak immediately gets you pretty much up to date with where he is in life. The way he speaks of his family is really sweet to read too, even though he doesn't actually say it, you can see clearly how much he loves his children and how proud he is of them.

Can I just say, their estate sounds amazing!

When he told Ginny how beautiful she was, it was so lovely. After reading the prologue though and thinking it strange that he seemed to be having a very one-sided conversation I was getting worried about where you were going to take this. Then he looked to her grave and I pretty much choked up with him. The pain you got across, while still putting in Harry's need to blame himself for everything was beautifully written.

The only thing I can say on a happier note is that at least Ginny had a good few years with Harry. The message on the gravestone was just perfect for her.

I can't wait to come back and read some more soon!

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Hi, there.

I'm sorry to confirm that Ginny is indeed dead in this story. It was the single, hardest decision I had to make at any point, but it was very important to put Harry in the mental state I wanted him to be in for this.

The entire story is set around fifty years after the end of the war. Harry, Ron, Hermione and the other canon characters are all parents and in most cases grandparents by this point. It was really, really difficult to keep up with all of Molly and Arthur's children, grandchildren and great-grandchildren. In the end, I cribbed together a family tree I could refer to.

I spent an awful lot of time agonizing over Harry's voice as I wrote this story. I wanted him to be perfect. Well, I wanted *everyone* to be perfect, but he was at the top of the list. Selling him was the key to everything, I thought. If Harry didn't sound right, nothing else was going to be believable.

I'm glad you like the end, where Harry was agonizing over her death. It wasn't much fun to write, very emotional. But it seems to connect really well, so that makes it worth it. Mostly, anyway. ;)

Ginny and Harry had many good years together. Assuming that they got married around age 20, they were married for 40 years before Ginny's untimely death. Long enough to raise children and see all of their grandchildren born, as long as James, Al and Lily don't have any more kids after this story ends.

I'm so glad you like the story. Looking forward to seeing more of your thoughts and reactions!


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Review #40, by FredWeasleyIsMyKing Prologue

11th February 2013:
Hello!

I've been meaning to come and check out this story for a while and I've finally got around to it! Wow, just the prologue and you immediately have me hooked. I have so many unanswered questions already.

You write Harry very well in this. I love his reaction 'Oh I'm dead again' when he realises he's in Kings Cross. No panic, no stress just 'Oh okay.'

I was slightly worried though... he seemed to have no concerns for his family which I would hope he has left behind (I know that sounds bad but I just mean I hope all his family including all the Weasleys + Teddy etc etc are all okay!). He doesn't though, he just wonders around the empty station.

Then Ginny is there! Is she dead too? I'm guessing you won't answer that or will tell me to read on (which I most certainly will be doing) but I'm really worried about how this is starting - too many characters appear to be dead.

This was a really well written prologue though. The descriptions are fantastic, I can see clearly everything you write about. As I said, you had me instantly hooked and I was gutted the chapter ended there. Looking forward to reading more!

Lauren :)
P.S This is my 100th review :D

Author's Response: Ooh! So excited to see you here! I've been hoping that you might decide to check this story out.

The story is obviously very Harry-centric, although I tried to explore a lot of different characters at various points throughout the story.

I... um, don't want to say too much at this point about who's dead and who isn't. It would ruin the surprise. All I'll say is this: the prologue is the beginning of a chapter that takes place near the very end of the story. You'll recognize it when you see it.

I'm really glad that the prologue seemed inviting to you. And I'm honored to be the recipient of your 100th review! Thanks so much!


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Review #41, by TheHeirOfSlytherin Epilogue

11th February 2013:
And one by one, they all leave the world and depart on the train. I felt like I had to say good bye and it was so hard. And then Harry came and, oh, I might cry. Happy tears, I think. He finally died naturally, as he should, and now he's with Ginny again.

I really loved how you ended this story; having their words of remembrance next to each other. And Harry's quote was perfect, I just can't think of a better way this story could have ended.

I'm so sad it's over, but so happy was I able to finish it. You've genuinely written my favorite story ever; the action and the mystery and the dark twists and the bits of romance and the few tears. I've loved every single moment of this. I just don't know what to do now.

Thank you so much for writing such an amazing story!!!

A lifelong fan of your stories,

Sam! :D

Author's Response: Hi, Sam!

We've come to the end. More than anything, thank you so much for sharing all of this with me. An awful lot of people have read Conspiracy of Blood at this point, but not many have taken the time to review every chapter.

I was really pleased to be able to give Harry and Ginny this sort of ending. It felt good, it felt right and it was an absolute joy to write.

You'll never know how much I appreciate the time and effort you put into this.

All the best,
Dan


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Review #42, by TheHeirOfSlytherin Only What You Take With You

11th February 2013:
Oh, so many things to say...

I'm really glad Hermione is the History of Magic teacher. Going back to what I said in the last review, kids definitely won't be so out of touch with their history now. I doubt either Harry or Hermione would ever allow it. I think the two of them and Susan will be great teachers and I'm happy Susan is back with us, even if it was only small; she quickly became a favorite, too. I loved the speech about Neville, he was always be a hero.

Dennis is a prefect! Yay. It's small, compared to what he did to help, but just as awesome. I bet he'll be an awesome prefect.

The conversation between Harry and Hermys was so sweet. I thought he would cry when he thought Al would set him free. And Harry calling him a part of the family brought a huge smile to my face. I just can't imagine not seeing Hermys as a part of the family after reading this.

And... I really hope Percy and Audrey are able to reconnect and be together again. :)

Such an amazing chapter.

Sam.

Author's Response: This was my attempt to close up all the loose ends that I thought were left over at the end of the story. As you can see, there were a lot of them, 11,000 words worth.

Harry will make some very big changes at Hogwarts, although he'll be sure to keep the important things the same, I think. I loved being able to give both Hermione and Susan roles. Beyond the fact that they're both enormously qualified, they need some time, I think, to put things right after what happened in the Gaunt Shack.

Dennis deserved something good, I think. He definitely earned it.

In my mind, Harry came to understand elves better than just about anyone, Hermione included. He sees them as equals, just as she does, but he has also taken the time to understand what matters most to them and he doesn't allow his own conscience to try to decide what's best for them.

Percy and Audrey will be alright in the end. It will definitely take time, but they love one another and Audrey is just starting to understand what he's been through.

I'm really glad you liked it. It was a lot of fun to write! Thanks so much. One more to go...


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Review #43, by TheHeirOfSlytherin End Game

11th February 2013:
I find it very awesome that it was Octavia who just essentially saved the day, standing in front of Harry and taking the curse. Brave, brave girl that that she is. She's still one of my favorites, it has just been reinforced.

Harry resigned! I said way back when that Harry would make a good teacher and I still believe that very much. Hogwarts has always been his home and he'll be amazing, the students won't be so out of touch with their history like at the beginning and they'll love him... Well, maybe not all of them, but I imagine the majority.

I just loved how you ended this chapter, with Ginny's words. It all went back to Ginny, with saving Octavia, she's awesome even when she's gone. And Harry deserves to have that smile.

Amazing chapter!

Sam.

Author's Response: Ah, here we are at the end of the story proper. This has been so much fun for me!

Octavia is a very smart, very brave little girl. She heard what Harry was saying and realized that she was safe and that she needed to keep the others safe. So she offered herself as a target. I see big things in her future. Now I just need to go write them...

Yes, Harry is changing professions. He's taking his promise to Neville very seriously, but I think there's more to it than that. The quite life of a teacher definitely started to appeal to him much more by the time this story was at its end.

I really couldn't think of a better way to end it. Some things are eternal.

Ooh, only two more to go. Thanks again!


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Review #44, by TheHeirOfSlytherin Ginny's Story

11th February 2013:
Oh, Ginny! I'm so glad you found a way to put her in the story. And I think this was the perfect place; she is Harry's voice of reason, the person who can truly help him, and you just know she'll wait for him. Always. Gah, I love Harry/Ginny! Like with Ron/Hermione and Draco/Astoria, there's just no one else for them. Well, there could be someone, but it'll always be different. It's just not the same.

You wrote this amazingly well. Happy tears, at last! Harry is coming back and Ginny saved Octavia! Knowing that she didn't die for nothing might help Harry a little, I think.

I loved this chapter so much!

Sam.

Author's Response: This is my single favorite chapter, bar none. As I said in the A/N, it took me a long time to write. Months, actually. I had to do it in bits and pieces because it was too emotional.

Harry is in a much better place at the end of this than he was at the beginning. That felt very good, to say the least.

I'm so glad you liked it. BTW, PM me if you figured out who the Trainman was! ;)

Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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Review #45, by TheHeirOfSlytherin Check

11th February 2013:
I figured it out - Ginny, Hermione, Rose, Esme, Neville, now Harry; you just want me to cry. ;)

It's working. War is just... Gah, it's bigger and stronger and scarier than either of Voldemort's wars. I just want to hide in a corner and hug these characters because I have no idea what's going to happen next and who's going die in the next chapters. But I still just love the mystery and the suspense.

I am so hoping that Harry is not dead. That it missed or he gets a choice again. And he chooses to come back. Will he see Ginny again??? *needs to read*

I've loved this chapter!

Sam.

Author's Response: Ugh. I really, really don't mean to keep making you cry.

I think one of the big differences between this war and the one in Deathly Hallows is that the reader is constantly in the middle of the action. Since DH was mostly told through Harry's point of view, and he spent so much time running around, ticking off bits of Voldemort's soul, the reader wasn't constantly immersed in the fighting.

Remember waayyy back in the prologue, when Harry visits King's Cross? Well, he's about to go back.

I'm really glad you loved it. Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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Review #46, by TheHeirOfSlytherin Fury

11th February 2013:
Harry was just... Deadly and dangerous in this, wasn't he? Not himself, but in a way so natural to see. After everything he's been through, everyone he's lost, I think I'd have been more surprised if he hadn't snuck off to find them and do what he did. And what he did to Nott, what he said kinda put chills down my back. It's odd for me to say this, but your Nott really got what was coming to him.

I said it would be Draco, it could only have been Draco who followed Harry in my head, given everything he's done so far to help get Octavia back. But to see the four working together to bring her back, that is strange to see. But that's family... I love that their common goal in saving Octavia brings them together.

Amazing, if a little scary, chapter. I'm kind of afraid of how Harry will pull through this.

Sam.

Author's Response: Yep, my Nott is a very different character from yours. He definitely earned his one-way trip to the permanent care ward at St. Mungo's. Harry was being Harry, same as always. This time, however, there was somebody else who could see what was coming.

Draco brings a definitely practicality to things, doesn't he? In a lot of ways, he's better able to see things for what they are than Ron or Hermione because he's not burdened by their optimism.

This was definitely one of my favorite chapters, having Harry dance on the edge of darkness. You're almost to the big finale!


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Review #47, by TheHeirOfSlytherin Impossible Choices

11th February 2013:
Oh... N-N-Neville. I'm not sure what else to say. Shock and sadness does not begin to describe how I'm feeling. But this - I only ask that you let me finish the story before you pass final judgment. Everything happens for a reason. - has me not breaking down and shutting off HPFF for a bit, but continuing to read. Yeah. I'm just gonna... Oh, Neville. And he was smiling as he died. I suppose I can take some comfort in that. ;(

Tennant needs to get what's coming to him. To threaten Harry and leave him to be killed? I'm so glad the kids came when they did. And that it was Dennis who knocked him out; after he was being chased by Tennant sending curses his way, he really did deserve to knock him out.

I can't wait for Harry to get Tenabra and end this war!

Such a sad, but still brilliant, chapter.

Sam.

Author's Response: Hi.

Once again, I'm so sorry for springing something so ugly on you. Neville's death was another very difficult decision that I had to make to get the story to where I needed it to be. It wasn't fun and I agonized over it. You can ask my beta reader all about it. So knowing that it had to be that way, I tried to give him the bravest, most noble death I could. Nothing seemed more appropriate to me than letting him give up his life to save a group of terrified children. It's so like him.

Tennant will be dealt with in good time. Don't fret over it.

The end is coming very soon. Sorry for the tears, but I'm really glad that the story made such an impact. Thanks for sharing it with me!


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Review #48, by TheHeirOfSlytherin Transitions

11th February 2013:
It's all coming out now, telling the Minister how it was all her. Then again, she did plan on killing him anyway, so it's not like anyone else there will know yet. I wonder what will happen when she has them all together. And the Minister really would have done anything to protect himself, wouldn't he? Going to kill her? If only he'd known she was evil enough to control his mind and get there first... The only person I liked in that room was Percy. And she's controlling him!

Oh, Harry, so self-sacrificing and, yeah, kinda self-loathing. I guess not even having people bring him out of it father the second war can really take it away. I shall now call it a Harry trait. He should listen to Neville, go Neville! Making Harry mad to get a reaction and to get him to see was a pretty brilliant idea, normal talking just doesn't seem to work, and I'm glad you wrote the scene with Neville. It reminds me a little of the speech he says in the DH movie about Harry to Voldemort, like a leader. He makes a good one, especially when he's underestimated at first. You're like, whoa, yeah! :D

Rose potentially being like his parents must have brought back bad memories. I feel so sorry for Scorpius, having his daughter taken and his wife having gone through what she did. I hope Rose will be okay.

And Octavia; she's a really brave kid. I just love how she thinks; that even in the situation she's in she can hold her own somewhat. She's definitely one of my favorite characters. I wonder who the voice is. Is it a trick of some sort?

I think Dennis is also a favorite of mine in this story; reading him change and grow throughout the story has admittedly been some of my favorite scenes. And now he and Artie are two of the only people who haven't been caught and could potentially do something. It seems almost right to have it end at Hogwarts, but must have a horrible sense of déjà vu. I can't wait to find out why they need the Bloody Baron.

Amazing chapter!

Sam.

Author's Response: The Minister was another pawn in Tenabra's plan, but definitely not a very likable one. He was arrogant and lazy and had a high capacity for self-delusion. It made him a very easy target for somebody like her. She was able to steer his career exactly where she needed it to be and he accepted his good fortune without asking too many questions. But once his usefulness came to and end, curtains!

Harry is Harry. I think that something inside his head got seriously bent during all those years of the Dursleys loathing him and probably blaming him for every little thing that went wrong in their perfect home, whether it was his fault or not. Neville is there to snap him out of it, though, at least temporarily. Neville has been by Harry's side -- or in his face -- at a lot of key moments in his life, hasn't he? That's part of what I love about the guy.

Octavia is very brave, in part because she isn't really old enough to understand everything that's going on around her. I don't think it's truly occurred to her that she could be killed at any moment. The voice is not a trick, but it might not be who you think it is.

Remember way back in chapter 5, when I told you to keep an eye on Dennis? Well, here he is, playing a key role near the end. His eyes are completely open now and he's almost ready to do his part. Soon...

Wow. You're getting so close to the big finale. It makes me really excited. Thanks for another awesome review!


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Review #49, by TheHeirOfSlytherin Small Victories

10th February 2013:
I think you broke Harry. Even when he used his badge to issue Code Black, I just felt like he was broken and I just wanted to cry for him because I feel like he's run out after losing so much (bear in mind, I am listening to Eva Cassidy's version of Fields of Gold as I type...).

I really hope Draco's leverage works, or buys them time at least. I just don't want to think of Hermione being right and Tenabra using that kind of magic on a little girl, I don't want to think about what might happen to Octavia. I imagine she's already trying, that was what the spell was, and I'm glad it didn't work.

Greet chapter!

Sam.

Author's Response: Harry is really close to broken by this point. It seems like eventually loses everyone he allows himself to get close to, with two notable exceptions. That's a rough song to listen to while reading something sad, BTW.

Draco's leverage will prove to be quite important, but maybe not in the way that you think. Let's just say that it will drive Lady Tenabra's plan to a conclusion faster than she might have wanted.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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Review #50, by TheHeirOfSlytherin Prices Paid in Blood and Sorrow

9th February 2013:
I KNEW IT!! FINALLY AN ASSUMPTION I GOT RIGHT!!!

*cough*

So, yeah, I knew something was up with Arabela, I think I said in a previous review, but I didn't see the anagram. That's a pretty awesome clue, really. But it all makes sense - how she could get the book, get to Percy, to the Ministry. Oh, such a clever, manipulative, so-very-scary villain.

Can they destroy the book without the sword? If they can get it back? I hope they find out about Rory before she kills him, I want to see the look in his face when/if Harry arrests him for aiding a criminal.

And speaking of Harry... *wipes away tears you've let free* first Ginny, now Esme - he could have been happy again. I was beginning to accept it, I should have known it was too good to be true... I'm going to really miss Esme. ;(

Such a sad, tearjerker of a chapter - just when you think it'll be okay for a while, with Rose and Octavia found and Hermione okay, bad things happen and tears fall. That last line was it, really. Oh, Harry... ;(

But still a great chapter.

Sam.

Author's Response: Congratulations! Not many people figured out who Lady Tenabra really was. Theories abounded, but few actually got it right. Arabela has positioned herself close to power for her entire career, but remained largely in the shadows. She is very cunning and incredibly manipulative. More on her is yet to come.

The book can be destroyed. I don't think I'm giving too much away by telling you that. But it isn't a horcrux. It's something different. I think I've said this a few times in responses: the book behaves like a horcrux in most ways that matter.

I'm so sorry about Esme. I tried to think of a way to do this that wouldn't require her to die. I really did. I grew to like her a great deal as I was writing this. But some things simply aren't meant to be, and in the end I just couldn't think of any other way that was satisfying.

I always hate to make people cry, but I'm glad that you enjoyed the chapter. Hopefully things will improve for you very soon! Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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