Pretty please update!! I have to find out what happened!! Plus please tell me there is some James and Isa action coming up!Author's Response: I'm working on it I swear! I am almost done! And possibly. . . . . . Report Review
ITS BEEN SO LONG!!! when are you going to update??? By the way please shove Isa and James in a broom closet!!!Author's Response: I AM SORRY!!! I have bits and pieces of the next chapter. I just need to sew it together and make it sound pretty.
I've been thinking about writing all night, so this is giving me motivation! SO THANK YOU! Report Review
I loved it! Please update as soon as possible!
xx AAuthor's Response: Thank you! I'm working on it! Report Review
omg please write the next chapter!! please please
please! i love this fanfic Author's Response: I am I promise! It's slow progress, but it's coming! I PROMISE Report Review
omg please write the next chapter!! please please
please! i love this fanfic Author's Response: ANOTHER DOUBLE REVIEW?! WHAT IS THIS MADNESS
(this isn't madness, this is Sparta)
(I'll shut up now) Report Review
OMG i love this fanfic!! plz write the next chapter soon!! Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm working on it! Report Review
Hello! I really like this story and the concept of Isa's blindness. I also like your other story 'Blue'. I love all the characters in this story.
I was just wondering how many chapters you think this story will be?
Good job :DAuthor's Response: Thank you so much!
I haven't planned out an exact amount of chapters for this story (or Blue for that matter), but I'm planning on around 30 for this one. Maybe a little less. But this story does also go through their seventh year just so you know... Report Review
That was a cruel way to end it!! When is the next chapter??? Also just curious..are you planning on putting Charlie and Kate together? I'm not sure if that would be too cliche or really cute...Author's Response: Sorry! It just sort of happens that way. I'm working on the next chapter now, and good news (well not for me) but I'm sick which means i will probably be spending a fair amount of my weekend writing.
Just because you asked, I will tell you. No. Their relationship is completely platonic. All too often girls and guys aren't just friends, and I see nothing wrong with that. I think it would be way to cliche for them. So no, they're BFFs Report Review
OMG! Amazing chapter. When is the revenge going to stop? AND when are Isa and James getting shoved into a broom closet? They are so adorable and should just get together! This was such a delightful chapter. I really like the friendship you've build between the whole group. It makes me want to live in their world! Although i might already be. top secret.
It was truly worth the wait and I can't wait for your next update :D
~LoVe_SiriusAuthor's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you like it so much :) And I'm not giving anything away! You will just have to wait mwhahaha
I'm working on the next chapter right now. But you know with school, crew, sorority, and friends I got a lot of things on my plate. I will try to finish it soon! Report Review
YOU ARE REALLY GOOD! when is the next chapter going to come out?Author's Response: Thank you so much! Soon I promise. I have finished writing the chapter, but I think there are some things I want to change or rewrite. SOON I PROMISE. Report Review
Oh I loved it! I need a new chapter to survive my boring life. Update a.s.a.p!!!Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! I'll try my best darlin' :) Report Review
OMG. This is an amazing story. Please update soon :) I hope something between Isa and James happens :) Can't wait.
~LoVe_SiriusAuthor's Response: YAY THANK YOU SO MUCH!! I'm writing the next chapter and I'll try to post it as soon as possible :) Report Review
Awesome chapter. I love how this is new and she is blind. It's really sad but it's unique and different from other stories. I really can't wait to see where this is going. Lovely writing.
~LoVe_SiriusAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! As I can see from you're other review you kept reading and that means so much to me :) Report Review
And I'm back in love with it again.
Just like that.
I meant to leave a review a few chapters back (between the last one and this one) to say that I was mightily pleased by the fact that Charlie and Kate weren't sneaking around with each other because that's wayy too overdone, and I liked that you had a good actual valid reason for it.
Also, I like how everything just returned to normal, that's nice.
I enjoyed the Peeves pranking Glennie thing, that was cool.
And DFTBA. That made my day
Bryarly :)Author's Response: Yay!!! Thank you!
Ok you're actually like the first person to say how pleased they are that Charlie and Kate weren't sneaking around. One of my friends read this and were like YOU SNEAKY TROLL.
DFTBA my friend never forget it! Report Review
You're officially forgiven for the whole Freddie/Anna thing. That actually really annoyed me about not knowing, and now that I do I kind of understand why it wasn't addressed sooner.
But that raises another issue for me; Freddie said something terrible, and cruel, and Isa is all like 'he feels bad, try get over it' and Anna's like 'k!' and I hate that!
Bryarly :)Author's Response: The only reason Anna is like "K!" is because she is miserable. While she recognizes what Freddie said (obviously), she still loves Freddie. And the fact of the matter is that Freddie was just angry and said things he didn't mean.
Freddie is totally infatuated with Anna. he loves her. And no matter how much you love someone, if you get mad enough, you will say things that you don't mean. Report Review
So now I'm a bit pissed off.
I mean, I had really started to love this story. I mean, I started reading it this morning and in the course of about three hours I have been kind of uncomfortable, a little bit annoyed and I have loved it.
And now I hate it.
I mean, Anna and Freddie! Come on! I need more details than that! It's hard to feel anything in particular about something that's supposed to be so tragic when there are no details and the characters involved aren't really acting like something that's supposed to be that huge has happened!
And lying to Taylor was bad, fair enough but it is not on a par with what happened with Donny, and the fire wasn't even directly related to the lie and I don't get why she's so pissed off because she got a boyfriend out of it!
And Donny! I mean ok, that story actually made me kind of upset, because he died and that's sad. But the way he wasn't properly mentioned before strikes me as odd, especially in Isa's internal monologue, and I remember Taylor saying she talked about him to Louis, but I don't really...
I mean, I just can't feel it. It was sad, but it didn't make me cry, which with things like that I kind of don't like.
If something is sad, I want it to make me feel sad, but it didn't.
And James and Isa! Something is obviously there, and I'm kind of intrigued as to how it'll work out because her blindness would make her automatically shy of love affairs in general.
But it's not really getting addressed! And it should.
And anti-jokes are hilarious, you're quite right.
Bryarly :)Author's Response: Yea their break up was sad for me too :( you'll find out more later.
Taylor was mad that isa not only lied to her but almost died also. Taylor overreacted clearly, but she loves Isa and the thought of losing her was unbearable.
Donny was mentioned several times. But I didn't want to make it this huge thing. If I had a twin brother who died, I wouldn't want to talk about it a lot either. Report Review
So I'm actually starting to really get this story, I know I've been a bit sort of sceptic about it in previous reviews, but this chapter has really got me.
I'm glad I gave it the chance.
Because blindness is so close to home as a topic, I get very touchy about it, and stuff has to be done right and if it isn't I get... I don't know what the word is.
But you haven't screwed it up, so firstly that says quite a lot for your intellect and style of writing and second, you've made it funny without making it awkwardly so.
I mean, I felt awkward about parts of it before, I think I mentioned, but the humour seems natural.
So, I'm going to keep reading.
And then I might read Blue, because... Well, just 'cause.
Bryarly :)Author's Response: I hope I am doing alright. I don't want to make it awkward, and I want to do good.
Please keep reading and I hope it continues to be alright Report Review
Just a thing I noticed; the teeth thing isn't actually a problem, in book four, Hermione had teeth stuff done, and it took like... seconds. But I don't get why it's important... :/
Otherwise, you seem to have all the right buttons to make me giggle pressed. I do sit here laughing like a hyena.
Thank you for being funny.
Bryarly :)Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing haha :) Report Review
I have laughed quite a lot this chapter. Nicely done.
I don't really think you could call the Meddlers the Marauders 2.0 though, that might be stretching it a bit.
But I'm still reading, so you know... And all this is growing on me.
I mean, I prefer it a lot more now that it isn't just Isa going 'I'm blind!' over and over.
I mean, that was a bit... Much for me.
And I feel less awkward about the whole thing so...
I mean, the only thing I really have criticism wise that you could describe as vaguely constructive is to get a beta reader, to tune up the grammar a bit. Because the spelling is fine, it's just that you need to fine-tune it a bit.
Bryarly :)Author's Response: I'm glad it's getting better! :) Report Review
Well in fairness to you this is staying on a level that isn't making me want to throw stuff out the window.
I especially liked Polly's 'do you need help' and Dom's 'no, don't be stupid she did it by herself before she can still do it now.'
I mean, you write well, but I feel kind of uncomfortable about her blindness.
And I think that's what I'm hoping will improve. She's the main character, and I, as the reader, shouldn't feel so uncomfortable about her.
Bryarly :)Author's Response: Isa can take care of herself.
I'm confused why she makes you uncomfortable. I would love to hear your input so I could improve the character Report Review
So, firstly, apart from various grammatical incorrectnesses, you write reasonably well.
Secondly, I kind of like the idea of.. Um.. A blind character being the focus. I mean, I've seen exactly one story based on the same premise, but it was a guy. And he was gay. And I'm not against that or anything but I like to be able to relate to characters I'm reading about.
I like Isa.
But the thing is; it's completely fine saying 'there are things I can't do' but there are ways around at least some of those things.
I am half-blind, and I type where I can't write.
Now, I know magic doesn't allow for anything electrical, but typewriters aren't electric, and it's easy enough to teach someone where the keys are, especially if they have raised letters.
I do like the beginning, and I'm going to keep reading, but I hope it doesn't turn into one of those 'let me touch your face so I can see into your soul and know you much better than any sighted person ever could'.
Because that's bullshit and would really get on my wick.
Bryarly :)Author's Response: How interesting! You know I had never really considered a typewriter. Thank you for your insight, I'm gonna go read the rest of your reviews :) Report Review
Um. How can isa see charlie go into a broom closet?Author's Response: If I'm gonna be honest, I write so much and Isa is my only character who is blind. So sometimes I forget that she can't see. Thank you for telling me. I'm actually kind of embarrassed, but it's been fixed now! Report Review
Whats brown and green and if it falls out of a tree it'll kill ya. A pool table...Author's Response: HAHAHAA perfect! Aren't anti-jokes awesome?? Report Review
I'm so happy James finally got rid of Glennie, though she's obviously not getting over it anytime soon -___-
I like these long chapters btw, and I totally get how time consuming college gets. I haven't had time to do much since the semester started. I'm so behind on my hpff reading :'(Author's Response: She's crazy. I swear. And I have no control over her. I try to get her to do something and she's like "NO I WANT TO DO SOMETHING EVIL"
I like the long chapters too! But yea. College. So much work so little time. My free time is filled with sleep. Not good. But I have midsemester break this week so I'm hoping to write more Report Review
I'm sooo glad glennie is out...!
Isa is an amazing character. I'm so glad she worked things out with her sister and yes normalness :D
Oh I hope glennie doesn't do anything horrendous to them but I get a feeling she will :( well I can't wait for the next chapter!Author's Response: I love when life is easy! Thank you so much for reviewing! :) Report Review
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