Wonderful chapter, as always :D

10/10

Author's Response: Thank you so much! :) I'm glad you liked it!

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I love this story! Great update! :)

Snape's response was surprising to me, I guess because so many fanfictions write him off as wholly evil. But I love that you write him with the kind of cool-exterior and subtly scathing tones that we all know from the books--very realistic!

Well done! Looking forward to the next update!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked Snape's response! I definitely got for a more moderate interpretation of his character than a lot of people, despite the fact that I'm not a huge fan of him - I really do want to keep things realistic.

Thank you so much for the review! I'll get the next chapter up as soon as I can. :)

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Its me again!

Well, I don't really have much to say that I haven't said in my previous reviews! Once again, the description is very good! This is a very sweet holiday story and I liked the gifts. The flow is very smooth and Lily and James are great. Good job!

Author's Response: Thank you! :) I'm glad you liked it!

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Its StormThief again!

I don't know if you're still worried about description, but I think its fine! There's enough to set up a picture in my head, but not so much that it gets boring.

Overall, this is another fun chapter! I thought it would be strange to have just a series of one-shots rather than more consecutive chapters, but you write it in such a way that I don't mind. Its very easy to read :) And I think you've got James and Lily's characters just spot on. They are romantic but not overly sappy. I like that! The other characters are also great, and I think I like this chapter best so far! I think it was a clever idea to have Snape corner Lily while she had veriteserum. Anyway, sorry I don't have much CC, this is a great story!

Author's Response: Oh, I'm *always* worried about description. It was really my weakest area when I first started writing fics, and even though I think I've improved a lot since, I still do worry about it.

I'm glad that you liked the chapter, and I'm sorry it's taken me so long to respond. Thank you for the review!

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Hey, StormThief again!

Again, I really like the description! You have a way of making the surroundings and environment very real. I can picture the snow and the cold very easily. As before, you might just jot down some bits about the characters themselves, especially the OCs. But nice job!

I'm really starting to fall in love with your writing. It is so smooth and simple, but really quite beautiful at the same time. I never have to go back and read a sentence again because it makes no sense. You're characters are lovely, not too simple but not going crazy and thinking about absolutely everything. Nice work again!

Author's Response: Again, totally see what you mean about description - that was definitely my weakest point starting out (and probably still is now). Just a little extra of the people could definitely have helped set the scene better.

Thank you so much for the review! I'm really glad you like the story so far. :)

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Hi, StormThief here with your review!

You asked what I thought of the description--I think its really well done. When you keep refering back to the rain it really keeps the image in my head of how wet out it is. One thing I would do is describe Lily and James a bit more. I know that everyone already knows what they look like, but its just good practice I think to describe your characters' looks. Maybe a bit about the rain on James' glasses, the water making Lily's hair look darker red, I don't know, stuff like that. :)

Now, just some general review notes. I thought this was very nice. It has a very easygoing tone which made the story just slip right into my head without me having to try and figure out specific points or sentences. Lily and James have a nice chemistry and it's good to see a story where Lily makes some jokes and isn't getting all tense around James. So yeah, that's it for the first chapter, I'll do your next soon :) Good job!

Author's Response: Hey! I'm sorry it's taken me so long to respond - I've been away on holiday.

I definitely see what you mean about adding in a little extra description of what they look like - I'll go back in and add some in as soon as I get the chance. :)

Thank you so much for the review. :)

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I just wanted to say that I LOVE this story and this pairing. It appears that there is a new chapter but it is not showing up?

Author's Response: Oh, thank you! :) I'm glad!

This is the most recent chapter - you may be seeing that the story is marked as "updated" because I edited one of the previous chapters. :) I'm working on the next chapter, though, and I hope to have it up soon! :)

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“Your parents are worried about your virtue. James’s parents know that he has no virtues, because he’s an idiot.” - ha ha, that made me laugh so much! Sirius is a great character. I loved the banter between James and Sirius in the beginning. They have such a fun and easy friendship. That was part was very fun to read.

Ouch! Lily's run in with Snape was quite harsh, but I'm not a fan of Snape - he totally deserved what was said to him. I like your descriptions and portrayal of him. Very accurate, I think!

Wonderful chapter! :)

Author's Response: I'm glad you think that Snape was accurate! :) I always worry that I'm being a bit too hard on him, but like you, I've never been a fan (especially after the revelation in DH that he was so obsessed with Lily), and I feel like in FF he's often sanitised and romanticised to an uncomfortable extent (at least to me). At the end of the day, I find his obsession a bit creepy, you know? Yes, I respect what he did for Harry, but I think it was for the wrong reasons.

Anyway. Enough of my ranting on Snape.

Thank you for the review! :)

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That's so sweet :')))


Lovely chapter, looking forward to the rest of it! :) x

Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! :) I'm glad you liked it!

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Ohhh is that what that story is about, I'll look into that one too. I love love how you ended this :D The whole chapter was great!

Author's Response: It is! :) All of my fics (with one obvious exception, noted in the story summary) take place in the same overarching universe, so characters are always consistent story-to-story.

... if that makes sense.

Thank you for the review! :)

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This was a great chapter, because it implied that even though her and her sister had bad times, there were still good ones. If people were all bad it'd be easy to get over. I really liked how Petunia liked James :)

Author's Response: "If people were all bad it'd be easy to get over."

So, so true. I'm glad you liked that - I was afraid that people would feel like I was sanitising their relationship too much, but I really wanted to show a good side to Petunia rather than turn her into a complete villain.

Thank you for your review! :)

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wow, this is your first James and Lily fic??? For the record, it's amazing, I think you have them pegged :D I love the fluffyness of it all! Also I like how she seemed she had been annoyed with James, but it didn't seem like it was a hate. There was definitely dislike, but I got the impression Lily didn't Hate a lot of people.

Author's Response: It is! (As of now, it's also my only James/Lily, but I'm working on a sixth-year one-shot atm that may or may not ever see the light of day.)

I completely agree with you about Lily's character, and it's a bit of a pet peeve of mine that people often fall into writing her as a bitter, spiteful person, at least where James is concerned. It just doesn't make sense to me.

Thank you for the review! :)

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Go Lily! No, I'm not going to let myself feel sorry for Severus, I love Lily and James too much and I don't like him being nasty about them or trying to sabotage anything. But it was written very well. I feel like telling him they were sleeping together was a mistake - is it about to be spread around the school or some such nonsense? But it was kind of worth it! (Sorry, I am being nasty to Severus here.)

Looking forward to more! Thanks :)

Author's Response: No apologies necessary about being a bit nasty to Severus - he's actually not one of my favourite characters by a long shot, and I tend not to think too highly of him. I am glad that you felt like it was well-written, though! I was hoping my dislike of the character wouldn't shine through too much.

I think you might be surprised at what the ramifications of her letting that slip will be... so I will try to get the next chapter up soon so you're not left in suspense. :P

Thank you for the review! :)

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I Love it!!! This is really great!! Post more soon please! :) :)

Author's Response: Thank you! :) I'll post the next chapter as soon as I can!

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Aww. Poor Sirius. He is gonna walk in on something he really doesn't want to see. :) I love this chapter. I can't wait to see what you do with it next. :)

Author's Response: Haha, maybe a little, but since they know he's coming back they won't get too carried away. ;)

Thanks for the review!

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Maybe Severus finally gets it - Lily is not only with James but belongs with James. Great chapter! It is nice to read a Lily who appreciates and does a lot to take care of James and their relationship. Often other stories show a very one sided relationship where James is always the giver and not usually the receiver of Lily's care and love. Thank you for the new vignette.

Author's Response: I agree about the way James and Lily's relationship is often portrayed, and I definitely wanted to avoid that. If it's that one-sided, it's not a real relationship, you know?

Thank you so much for the review. :)

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Your parents are worried about your virtue. James's parents know that he has no virtues.

^ Haha.

I really felt for James in this because I never think about his parents. They were so much older than his friends and yes, wizards tend to live longer than muggles but they do die. I think seeing one of his mother's friends sick has to be a bit jarring because as kids, especially our parents kids, we tend to think our parents are invincible and they can't leave us when we need them.

Severus is something else, isn't he? You can't help but feel bad for him because he's so consumed with hating James and wanting to be with Lily, it's unfair that he's so unhappy. I understand why Lily did what she did but it was a bit mean on her end. When I read her like this, being snarky to Severus, I just can't imagine why she would write to him years later in the first place. I suppose we all grow up and realize the mistakes we made when we were younger but it's kind of amazing how Severus was still unwilling, after all those years, to give up on the Lily he fell for.

Author's Response: I'm actually a little confused - I don't recall Lily writing to Snape years later. When did that happen? The only letter she wrote that I recall appearing in canon was to Sirius (the one Snape took part of). Blegh, I probably ought to be better versed in JKR's interviews.

At any rate, the way I see Lily's friendship with Snape is that while Snape never really let go of Lily, Lily moved on from their friendship and didn't spend much time dwelling on him. Beyond everything else, she had other people in her life. She didn't need to dwell on the past. Snape didn't, and I think that's a huge part of why he did.

I dunno. That's just my take. I'll also admit that I don't really like Snape all that much - I find his fixation unhealthy and honestly a little disturbing. I'm going to refrain from going into a rant about Snape, though. :P

Thank you for the review! ♥

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Oh I'm so glad that you updated! I really loved this chapter - as usual. I thought the parts with Sirius and James were great and the confrontation with Snape at the end was really well-written. But I especailly love all of the James/Lily cuteness :)

Can'tt wait for the next chapter! 10/10 :D

Author's Response: Aw, thank you! :) I'm glad you're continuing to like this story, and I'll have the next chapter up as soon as possible!

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AH! Updates make me happy:) Especially with this story! James/Lily is something that I've more recently gotten into. I think this is actually the first James/Lily story I really read!

Anyways, back to the review. I think the part with Snape was really well written. Some people tend to go a bit overboard with writing Snape and Lily, but I thought you did a fantastic job!

10/10, can't wait to read the next part!

Author's Response: Oh, I'm glad I've gotten you into them! :) Lily/James is one of my favourite ships - I just love them to pieces.

I'm glad that you thought that the Snape bit was good - I agree that a lot of people go overboard, and I wanted to avoid doing that without going to the other problematic extreme, which is ignoring him completely. :)

Thank you for the review! I hope you continue to enjoy the story!

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Awe yay finally!!! Great chapter!!! Update soon!!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! :) I'll update as soon as I can - thanks for the review!

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I missed reading this story! You're such a talented writer and I can't wait until the next chapter comes out. :)
Keep up the amazing work!

Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I'm so flattered that you feel that way. :) I'll work on getting the next chapter out soon. :)

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snape is an idiot. lily is awesome. sirius is hilarious. james is AMAZINGLY sweet. enough said. LOVE THIS STORY!

Author's Response: Aw, thank you! :) I'm glad you like it so much!

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Loved this chapter!!
Really sweet moments between James and Lily and the confrontation with Severus was great.
I really can't wait to see what's going to happen next, please update as soon as you can. :D

Author's Response: Thank you! :) I'm really glad that you liked the confrontation with Severus - I always worry that I'm going overboard with him because I don't like him. :P

Thank you so much for the review!

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Aww Petunia really did love Lily. :) I love this chapter. I wonder what James did to Vernon. I can't wait to read the next chapter. :)

Author's Response: She did - I tend to see the sisters' relationship as loving but very complicated. James and Vernon (you find out in Pottermore, so spoiler alert) had a big fight when they went out to dinner with Lily and Petunia that ended in Lily crying and Vernon and Petunia leaving. I considered depicting the scene, but decided against it - I want to write about the in-between moments, not the ones where everyone knows what happens! :P

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I love this chapter. :) I can't wait to see what happens next. :)

Author's Response: :) Thank you for the review!

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