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Hey! Just wanted to say this was a great read - it wasn't too sappy, it balanced the Weasley family dynamic really well, and every character was very believable. Overall, just super well done. Keep writing!Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed the story! Report Review
Ugh! I just want to lock them in a broom cupboard for an age(too cliche?) merely just so they can't walk off and end the conversation.
I love Scorpius and Rose's conversations, because they're both civil and even when he's not. Obviously they're more open about their mutual dislike when he's not there but they aren't constantly exchanging snide remarks, which get boring extremely fast.
I like the idea of Fred being an older relative, I know I've mentioned that he's usually the same age as James, but now I imagine him to be a someone who they'd look up to(being older) and he's still a prankster and joker, and would gladly get involved in mischief, but it seems better, because he's not immature and is genuinely funny, rather than just messing about.
I really can't wait to see how things turn out when Scorpius attempts to jinx her(he'd better, otherwise she'd have gone to all that trouble for nothing) and am also weirdly intrigued to see if and what Fred will write back. I hope to see what kind of guy you've made him ^_^
I also really like the whole family secrets sort of thing with the invisibility cloak and map, in a previous chapter when Damien brought up that they never got caught and Roxanne replied that it was a family secret or something, it was sort of nice. I never thought that things about the Peverell invisibility cloak and the Marauder's Map should just be blurted out. They share it between them but if everyone knew about it then there would be less of a point in it really.
I also like that Rose is taking cautions, remembering that there are certain members of staff who know of the 'family secrets', which is realistic and, well, smart really.
I'm really not envious of the Gryffindor team thinking about that practice, but I guess that's what makes them awesome :D
- Emily Report Review
I've realised that my favourite thing about this story, is that it's so realistic! They all think, talk and act just like normal teenagers, what with all the chatter about homeworks, studying, asking older students for advice, it's so believable and it's something that easily happens to me a lot. I felt that I could easily relate to Rose, when I was in my second year of GCSE's I was constantly asking for advice about choosing A-Levels from both my elder siblings.
This reminded me of a challenge I saw on the forums a few weeks ago, called the Overworked Student challenge or something, which basically mentioned that quite often we see stories that are way too centred around a certain romance or quidditch, and that's all the story is, there is no worry about homework and the only time it focuses on them being in class is if their arch-enemy-true-love-to-be is paired with them. This story is a brilliant example of what the challengee was looking for; the most normal, believable and realistic thing that would feature in a story circulating the life of a fifteen year old. School.
I have to say I thought Al and Scorpius's conversation was amazing, not only did it show what great friends the two of them were, it also gave a valid reason as to why Scorpius dislikes Rose. It's not one of the vicious hates that never seems to have a cause, he actually doesn't like her and he can say that whilst still having a clear head. What I'm basically trying to say is that it's explained to the reader(and Al) why he doesn't like her, which I don't usually see in other ScoRose's - they just seem to have mutual hatred embedded in their genes.
The other reason it was amazing was, well, because Rose overheard it. Obviously! Gosh, she was so devious when she lead the two of them through the secret passage way! Also, I totally get where Scorp was coming from with the whole problem of thinking she was hot - if I dislike someone quite a bit, yet find myself attracted to them, it only heightens my dislike because, quite frankly, it's annoying.
And can I just please say I love you so much for the fact that you remembered and mentioned the swamp. I am a canon nut myself and I honestly just adore any mention of those little references to things that most people would forget(including myself, I am ashamed to say) because it is those little things that really make a story.
I also like this because I feel that you have a real believable way for Rose and Scorp to get together, I mean, Albus and Scorpius are often friends, but they're also often just shoved together as friends and we never really get to feel their friendship.
I'm seriously in love with this story right now, so much so that I'm worried I may not get much sleep tonight ;)
- Emily :D Report Review
Well hey there!
I loved this, honestly. It has been so long since I have read a good ScoRose fic, I'm afraid to say my obsession with the Potter boys has rather got the better of me ;)
This was written fantastically well, I thought the introduction with Rose's view on Slytherins was brilliant, it was nice to see the not everyone disliked them, and the references to Hermione were great.
I'm really honestly glad that Albus and Scorpius are friends, but are still in separate houses; I never pictured Al as a Slytherin, nor Scorpius as a Gryffindor, honestly if I had to give them a different house it'd probably be Ravenclaw for both of them. Dumbledore would be very proud of your version of Albus :)
So, James's chair...I seriously wish I could own it. No really, it's brilliant, although when I first pictured it in my head it looked all magnificently mighty with a high back and arm rests(like a throne, because James is my prince) and then spent ages trying to figure out how he'd manage to sit on that backwards :D I really did like the whole conversation that they had before practice though, I thought it was very realistic and casual, and it was a fabulous way to introduce the whole team without just a massive paragraph which would easily be skipped over.
I want us to set records that no one will ever beat. I want us to be remembered as the best team this school has ever seen.
^^ This quote literally made me squee, not because it was the best quote of the whole chapter(I don't think I could choose) but because I'm currently writing a quidditch based story, and what James said is pretty much the exact thing my MC wants, and when I read that it gave me an extra little bit of motivation :)
I thought that you did great in portraying the family dynamics and relationships in all of their interactions. They were all different, yet you could see how much they cared for each other - especially with how Rose put up with Albus's Slytherin friends just for his sake - and also James and Roxanne were very obviously brilliant mates, which makes a change from it being James and Fred.
Although we don't know huge amounts about the canonical next-gen children, I thought they were very in character for how I imagined them(I keep reading it, but the guys were never going to be TOTAL heartless playboys) and indeed they definitely had character.
Scorpius and Rose's relationship seems to be interesting, and I look forward to how Scorp fares with red hair ;)
I'd like to thank you for a brilliant read, I think the most exciting part for me is that there's another 28 chapters waiting for me to read and review! So that's probably where you'll see me next! :D
- Emily Report Review
James and Roxanne are great!Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you like them! :) Report Review
I love what you've done with the characters so far! And this chapter was well written. Very intriguing, I can't wait to read more.Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! :) Report Review
Hey it Whiskey from Holiday Review Swap!
I don't read much New Gen, so I am not sure I can comment on originality, but I would still like to point out a few things I liked:
First, the team conference in the beginning was a great way to introduce the characters smoothly. It didn't seem forced at all and also put the characters in a situation where they had to accept praise, something people,as a rule, react to very differently. So that scene provided an additional opportunity to compare their individual reactions,thus informing the reader not only of who they are but what they are like. All in a few short paragraphs :)
New Generation is interesting because of all the ways we can imagine the wizarding world to be different from the Hogwarts era. But there is also the much used saying that the more things change, the more they stay the same. Although I suspect others might dislike the way Gryffindor-Slytherin rivalry seems to live on in this story, I feel that you presented it in a way that makes sense. The amount of children that Harry and co had (at more or less the same time, too) would create, I imagine, a kind of elite at the school. Elitism is the best breading ground I can think of for self-entitlement and arrogance and, as a result, resentment.
But, if you don't mind, I would like to offer some critique as well. Although I am generally not a fan of the hate-at-first-sight shipping device, I am a girl like any other and don't mind reading it once in a while XD And I think it would work very well in this story if the dialogue between Rose and Scorp was a bit more natural. Everything was fine, actually, until Albus left and Scopr asked this: "Do you really like Care of Magical Creatures?" I found it strange that he would *volunteer* to keep up the conversation, especially with a sentence that not only seems to care about the conversation partner's opinion but also imples the two sharing a moment of honesty. If all Scorp does is try to make Rose's life difficult, he would have done anything but that. Maybe he would have remained quiet and grinned at her, or he would have made fun of something she was wearing, or he would have tried to transparently manipulate her into doing his homework...etc.etc. But since he did something that seemed so unnatural,the rest of the conversation appeared to go rather awkwardly as well. I realize that you are finished with this story, but if you ever have the time to go back and edit it, then I would really advise you to have a careful look at that conversation. I suspect it is an important one for further events and it is supposed to tie that chapter together.
Apart from this one thing, I really had no other qualms and quite enjoyed the chapter! Happy holidays :)Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review - I'm glad you liked the chapter, and the way I've developed the world.
I understand what you mean in terms of Rose and Scorpius's conversation, and I'm actually glad that you picked up on it not really making sense if all he does is bother her and make her life difficult. That's certainly Rose's perception, but her perception is not necessarily accurate. :P
Thank you so much for such a lovely, detailed review, and I'm sorry it's taken so long for me to answer it! Report Review
Hello It's wytchkitty13 from the holiday review swap! :)
This took me a while to read but now that I am finished(and trying not to jump to the next chapter) I'll review this chapter.
First may I say what a great event this is that we get to read each other's stories. You wouldn't believe the gems you find this way! And this is certainly one of those gems.
I'm enjoying seeing the next gen already. And Albus- oh I'm already in love with his char lol. Rose is so strong, and determined. She kind of reminds me a bit of Hermione.
James is also a character that is really addictive. And Scorpious calling Rose "Red" and just the banter with them was cute. It's already becoming an addicting story and I'm curious and excited for which way it will go :)Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! I'm sorry it's taken me way too long to respond, but I really do appreciate the review and I'm glad you enjoyed the story so much. Albus is so much fun to write - he's one of my favourite next-gen characters - so I'm really pleased that you mentioned him in particular. :)
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Very sweet story. Loved it! Just wish there was more...continuing here, unless you do a good follow up in the next story ;)Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I hope the sequel has lived up to your expectations thus far. :) Report Review
Really liked reading Lucy here...great update! Darn, I'm almost finished with this story ;)Author's Response: I love Lucy. She's so much fun as character. One day I'll write a story about her... when I finish all my other WIPs and have some time, anyway. :P
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Oh, wow! Love it! Such a different way of presenting our characters especially now with their (real) first kiss together! :DAuthor's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. :) Report Review
Another fun chapter...I love how you've characterized Albus and James as well as their relationship with their cousin dearest Rose...so different from other stories I remember. And I just KNEW Malfoy poisoned her! :DAuthor's Response: I'm glad you like Albus and James! :) I tried really hard to make Albus in particular interesting and distinct, because I feel like a lot of Albuses and Jameses just kind of blend together.
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Excellent chapter, interesting laughing bit. But oh, a lioness! One of my favorite animals :DAuthor's Response: i like lionesses, too - they're so cool. I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter! Report Review
Great story, not sure if I read some before but delighted to be enjoying it today :DAuthor's Response: Thank you! Whether you've read it before or not, I'm glad you're enjoying it now! Report Review
:O THAT WAS THE END! HOW WAS THAT THE ENDING?! Oh I am crossing my fingers that there is a sequel!Author's Response: Aw, yeah - I felt like it was time for Rose and Scorpius in school to draw to a close, at least for this fic. I'm glad you enjoyed it, though, and I hope you like the sequel just as much. :) Thank you for reviewing! Report Review
I love this story and have for quite some time. You're an excellent writer, and I love the Scorp/Rose relationship--it's different than everything else out there in the FF world! Thanks for writing a story that has truly been a pleasure to read!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so flattered that you feel like I've managed to create something different - I was definitely trying to do so, but it's one thing to want to do so and another to succeed. :P
Thank you so much for reviewing! I really appreciate it, and I'm glad you liked the story so much! Report Review
Loved it :D
Will be checking out some of your other stories at some point too :DAuthor's Response: Aw, thank you! :) I'm so glad you liked it, and I hope that if you read my other stories, they don't disappoint! As a quick note, all of my stories take place in the same 'universe' unless I specifically note otherwise, so if you read something and think, "Wow, this Albus/Victoire/James seems really similar to what I saw in 'Curiosity' and 'Wrinkle' - well, you'll be right. :P
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I LOVE Roxanne and James... That made me laugh SO much...Author's Response: Aw, I'm glad you liked this scene! It was definitely one of my favourites to write. :P Report Review
O.k I am reviewing this chapter because it is 4am and I really should stop reading and go to bed as I have to be up at 8.30...
Loving it... tis fab and such other words being used to describe things as awesome as this fic... :P
:D laters xAuthor's Response: Aw, I know the feeling - that's happened to me before, too. :P I'm really flattered that it's one of my fics that's pulled you in so much that you're staying up a lot later than you meant to!
Thank you so much for your reviews - they were all so sweet and really left a smile on my face when I logged in and saw them. :) Report Review
That was sooo scorpius!
Gotta admit though I may be little hyper on caffeine of the tea variety too... :P
Excellent Chapter :DAuthor's Response: Tea is the best. Any time I have to be up late (or early, or have a sort throat, or am just in the mood), I always go for tea. :P Thank you for the review! Report Review
Loving Rose's last line in that chappie... :D actually had to cover my mouth so my laughter wouldn't wake my flatmates :PAuthor's Response: Aw, I'm glad you liked it! :) Thank you for the review! Report Review
I really should stop reading and go to sleep, but I can't seem to do it... :PAuthor's Response: I'm sorry it's taking up your sleep, but I'm glad you like it so much! :) Report Review
Hello Review Box!
Interesting first chapter though, liking the blatant name calling, well written so it reduces the cliché of it :D
Good Start :D xAuthor's Response: Aw, thank you! :) I'm glad you liked it! Report Review
One of the best Quidditch scene i have read in my short fan fiction reading. I really enjoy your story, which is much more sensible than usual Romeo and Juliet stories floating around the place for Scorose.
What were everything else might be, they are just two kids who seem to like each other.
Good going :)Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I'm glad you liked it - Quidditch is hard to write, so I'm always a little worried about whether I've pulled it off. :)
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