I've been reading stories on here since middle school, so about 8 years now. It's very difficult for me to find a story I enjoy because grammar issues and misspellings make it hard for me to concentrate on the plot.
That being said, this is a fantastic story! While there are a few mistakes grammatically (hence the 9/10 rating), they aren't overwhelming and I'm quite enjoying the plot because it's so well written!
Thank you for writing such a great story! I'm excited to keep reading!!
AllieAuthor's Response: Wow, thank you! This was my first story that I have ever written. The sagittarius in me makes me a bit long winded and I get a little side tracked, but thank you so much for your kind words. It was fun journey. I hope you enjoy the rest of the story. Kick tush!
~S Report Review
Since you said we could drop a review about any mistakes, I just wanted to let you know that the name of Bellatrix's husband is spelt like this: Rodolphus Lestrange. BTW, it's an excellent story so far!Author's Response: Thanks for the look out on the spelling snafu. Your the second one to point that out. Not sure how it came about though; originally I copied and pasted from hp lexicon, but still got it flupy in the end. In reality you can spell names differently and they still mean the same thing; so, I guess we'll throw that one up to fate and maybe it was supposed to be spelled that way; kinda like Jon and John; both still the same name but with an added letter. Glad though someone is paying attention enough to that detail to catch it. Cool beans and I hope you enjoy the rest of the story.
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Great story! I did have trouble understanding your fight scene paragraphs throughout the story but otherwise I loved the plot.Author's Response: Sorry about that. I am planing on going back and fix them. I hope they didn't ruin your experience. Thanks for your kind words, though. The fight scenes were my 1st that I've ever written so, not surprised that they came out a little flupy. Thanks again.
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No offence but you have some really bad spelling mistakes throughout the chapters...(patronus, rodolphus etc...) Other than that its a great story im loving reading it :)Author's Response: Yeah, sorry about that. I hope it didn't ruin your story experience. In due time it all will fixed. Thank you for choosing my fic when there are so many great ones to read. Thanks again!
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it was really a very wonderful story , thanks for giving the oppurtunity to read itAuthor's Response: You're very welcome. Thank you for reading my fic. Report Review
It was so fitting I cried, That was a wonderful ending. I think we all expected only good things to happen with Hermione by this point in her life. Ron and Sari Twins! I suppose there had to be some payback :)
I do hope you continue to write, learn and grow, Your very good you know.
One of your first fans
PatAuthor's Response: That is the best comment I could ever have asked for. I have to admit when I read it out aloud I choked up a bit too. I know the artsy thing would have been to end the fic with a tragic note, but its just not my style. They have all been through so much the least I could have done is let them live happily ever after. Thank you times a million for all of your support through 46 chapters. Your words have fueled me to keep this fic going. It really means a lot to me that there are kind people like you in the world. Every comment I read has put a smile on my face and I thank you for it. Now, on to SXRXRR I still have to finish that one and I have a crime drama in the works too called a bitter day just filled with Dramione. Lots of love- S Report Review
I am so glad you choses to write a happy
ending it was perfect i felt emotional haha can't
believe this fic is over they all deserve a happy
ending THANK YOU so much your the best if I
could i would rate it higher than 10/10 what
ever happens keep on writing you are really talented XAuthor's Response: Me too! I fought with myself if this fic should end tragically or on a good note. In my head I always saw Hermione sitting at her key board telling her story for the ending. I am glad I was able to end it just that way. Thanks again for all of your support. This whole experience has been wonderful and I learned so much. I never thought about writing before HP and I am glad that JK opened such a wonderful world for me. Thank you for all of your kindness over the last 46 chapters. It's been ruff at times to keep it up and today I am glad I did. But, I could only have done it with such awesome readers as yourself. Thanks again bunches ~S Report Review
I would like to thank you on my part for this beautiful story, it was incredibly mature, balanced, and romantic at the same time-a really good read. I will of course be looking forward to your next story but at the same time i would like to make a suggestion: You have very good grasp of character and this story is really good, try to turn this into a real story independant of Hp, you know characters remaining same but names different and premise different, I know some other fanfiction authors have done this, case in point, Fifty Shades trilogy which is actually a fanfiction of twilight. So, good luck and thank you.Author's Response: Wow! Thank you. To be honest I was thinking about just that. I didn't know Fifty was a TWL fic; wasn't going to read it, but now I think I will just for that fact.
This has been the most wonderful learning experience. This is my first real story I have written. It amazes me that anyone has read my fic, not to mention liked it.
Thank you for your kind words. I can't even begin to tell what they mean to me. I was so afraid that I went to far into left wing with my antic's. It was just supposed have been a normal Dramione, but fiction has a way to take the reigns and decide what direction "it" wants to take. Lol. It's been fun and I will miss it all. But, now I can focus on my others and turning this into a more universal work of fiction. I do have some of my short stories on Figment under the user name 'Carter Noir' if you wanted to check them out.
Again, thank you! I couldn't have done this without my awesome reader's support and comments like yours.
Hopefully, one day I can return the great support to you.
~S Report Review
I have stuck with this story for a good few months and I really enjoyed this chapter specifically. It could of been better, everything can be better, but I think it was a good ending, which coming from me, is a very good thing. I am very picky with endings of books, and I thought you did a great job. I like that Ron and Hermione both lived out great lives. This will always be a favorite of mine and I will miss seeing it in the queue. Thank You for taking the time to write such a wonderful story.Author's Response: Yeah, feel the same way about the last chap and most likely will be adding onto it in the near future. I am the same way about endings. It's hard to find good ones. So, many writers rush the ending or just end when things are getting good. I have tried to find the right balance of art and enjoyable fluff. In the end my romantic side won out. Both Ron and Hermione deserve a happy ending. Yes, it was different than what they thought it was supposed have been, but that was the point. Love finds us; not the other way around.
Thank for the great comment/review. I am a little lost at the moment without it, but time will sooth the burn and I have two others that now I can give myself over too. Thanks for being so cool and liking my fic even though its smeared with bad grammar and misspelled words.
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Aw an amazing ending for an amazing book. Hope u write more amazing books in the near future.Author's Response: Thank you!!!
It still amazes me anyone has read this story in the first place, then it a complete other thing that anyone has liked it. Thank you for such a nice comment it means a lot to me.
Keep an eye out, got two more I am working on. SxRxRR is currently published here on HPFF and I have one I am working on now that just has to be validated called "A bitter day"
Thanks again ~S Report Review
There were a lot of awkward phrases in here and the POV changed too much and was confusing. The story line is really good though, keep up the good work!Author's Response: Sorry about that. In time it will be all fixed. It's a big task to re-write 45ch's. Hang in there. Thanks for the shout out for the story line. It's been really fun to write and I hope you can get over the bad grammar and enjoy the story. Report Review
Yea! Ron is running around free, and it doesnt look like Hermione is the girl in the back front of his mind. Sari I hope is alive and well for the final chapter, Hermione has moved on...
You know I have enjoyed your fanticy life just as much as you have. Even with your missed letters and wrong words (To, two, too) lol, that was just part of the fun, I'm sure you will go back and edit to your hearts content now. The story was wonderful, I really got into it.
I do hope to see something else by you soon. I enjoy reading from a seasoned authur now and again. :)Author's Response: Thank you bunches my HPFF friend. Your nice words have made my day. This story has helped me find my writing style. Yes, there have been loads of mistakes and in time they will be fixed, but I am happy to have had put it out there. This was only one of my ideas about the lives of our hero's of HP. I hope there will be more coming soon. Thank you for your support. It's been fun. Thanks, thanks, thanks, times a million! Report Review
No way more like THANK YOU!! I love this story
from chapter 1 I can't believe its over...wow this
chapter was awesome thank you for updating I
seriously LOVED IT 10/10 XAuthor's Response: Thank you so much. Really needed the kind words today. Thank you more than you'll ever know for the smile you put on my face. Report Review
Hey. I really enjoyed this novella. It was very interesting. The whole thing was just... Well I don't really know, just interesting I suppose. But it was great! I loved how different it was!
However, the grammar, the constant changes from POV to first person drove me up the wall! If you want, I will be more than willing to help you with the corrections. I noticed a lot of misspellings, incorrect punctuation uses, and other things. Let me know how you feel about this and maybe, if you want, we could work something out.Author's Response: Sorry about all the mistakes. Just wrote this for fun. This is my first written story; still getting the hang of this writing thing, lol. I used this story to perfected my style. Sorry about the pov changes, but it could have been worse. Thanks for your offer; it a big under take though; 45 chap's. I have it sent out to someone at the moment. If they go m.i.a like all my other beta's have I shoot you a mess. It means bunches that you are willing to help me. Thank you very much. Report Review
For Hermione to commit adualtry is a bit much for me, I wish you had just had her share emotional depth of caring, and not cheat o her husband. Loss of control even in passion is a weakness, I ad hoped she would be stronger. but maybe the moral codes now are different. ron is horrible for goign to the dark side for whatever reason, but this bring Hermione down a peg to.. wish you hadn't, but guess that get attention. hope it levels out and she leaves him next, cause if she goes back after, then she is shamed..Author's Response: Thank you for the shout out for writing style. Now, for the Hermione part; Love and Marriage are very complicated things. Both Ron and Hermione are in a wrong for cheating on each other, but in the scope of the matter their marriage brought them on the path on to where/who they are supposed to be with; Real Righteous love I think is more important than rules that society expects us to follow. Plus, no body is perfect. Hermione is a girl; a smart girl, but still a girl who did what she was expected of her and more than, then found out that there was more to the world than her own personal beliefs. No offence taken. I am working on the whole grammar thing and have gotten a second beta. So, once I get the re-edited copies I post them up. Sorry if my errors took you out of the moment. But, Thank you for you comments they gave me plenty to think about. I hope you enjoy the last parts. Thanks again for choosing me fic. xoxox Report Review
For Hermione to commit adualtry is a bit much for me, I wish you had just had her share emotional depth of caring, and not cheat o her husband. Loss of control even in passion is a weakness, I ad hoped she would be stronger. but maybe the moral codes now are different. ron is horrible for goign to the dark side for whatever reason, but this bring Hermione down a peg to.. wish you hadn't, but guess that get attention. hope it levels out and she leaves him next, cause if she goes back after, then she is shamed.. Report Review
hope not being to mean,,,I couldn't begin to write anything this great. as u go along, the mistakes will be less, and you technique develop... having Ron get seduced then tell himself it was for Hermione he was doing what he knew to be wrong is sad... he can't protect himself let alone her. I hope later you have him try to change and help the right side.Author's Response: No offence taken. All will be good in the end
hope not being to mean,,,I couldn't begin to write anything this great. as u go along, the mistakes will be less, and you technique develop... having Ron get seduced then tell himself it was for Hermione he was doing what he knew to be wrong is sad... he can't protect himself let alone her. I hope later you have him try to change and help the right side. Report Review
I am trying to understand your story line, and all the subplots so far. the mistakes in pronouns and grammar are a bit off, I am not inot spelling and grammar myself, so if I am seeing it and the repeats there is a problem. so far do ike what have read, please proof read a bit more and for those who are simple like me, be slearer on who is who and which person you are talking about. thanks and will read more, have just started your work. Report Review
Ok my mind is blown. Can I marry this story? This chapter.oh my Rowling it was fucking brilliant.and that twist!!! Oh the twists! With the Polyjuice Potion and everything! You're like, the awesomest person in the whole world:) Author's Response: Don't know who you wanna marry. Justice would be a great catch; lol. Thank you so much. I do love twists. It'a fun to skate the line between it being fluff and tragic. Thanks for your comment. Let me know the up coming details if the marriage goes down;lol. Thanks again
I just realised I wasnt signed in hen I posted my last too comments oops sorry anyway this is me :) can't wait for ur next chap
emiilee Report Review
Hey I forgot to add something to my last review, your sooo going in the right direction with adding other relationships and character dynamics/background storys. many people (to their downfall)don't do that and I am thrilled hat I stumbled along your story because you have taken he time to add those extras in and for that I thank you.x
EmiileeAuthor's Response: I think there is more to the W.H.P. than what is known. It would be a shame not to have some fun within the world and the lives of other characters. Thank you for noticing. It means a lot! Report Review
Ive read all of your story so far and I must say I am hungry for more I can't wait to see if sari is ok and if Ron is freed and what happens in the Draco hermione Ron sari love triangle... Well square lol
Your a really good writer have faith In yourself can't wait to start reading another of your storys and I can't wait for your next chapter on this story. much love sairahi xxx
EmiileeAuthor's Response: It is so cool to think about that people actually read my writing; especially this story since it is so long. Thank you for coming along with me in my dramione tale. The end is near. Can't wait for the ending to come together. Report Review
Wonderful! My time feels wasted when I'm not reading this.Author's Response: You are too cute. Thanks a million times over. Report Review
Hello, me again.
It's getting more interesting by the minute :)
I'd be more than happy to do the Beta for you. On my profile there's an email address you can use to contact me.
- Bobby Report Review
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