I like your story - it's cute! Sarina is a bit prickly and very protective of her identity. I like her family and their relationships to each other. Mothers are mothers across most cultures. I am WAY old and my mother still comments on my clothes! I love the glimpse of Louis that we got - he's a favorite character of mine in Next Gen fictions. My family has a Chrome that has given us repeated problems lately, too. Thank you for the update and I look forward to reading more!Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah, she is. I think I'm trying to make it as realistic as possible, while trying to keep it humorous?
Yeah, my mom too. "You're wearing that? Really? Do I not buy you clothes?" kind of annoying, but at least I know she cares!
and yes, Louis is extremely pliable, so you know, lots of fun there! Report Review
I luv ur story! It's actually avijao and I luv the shah rukh oajol refrenceAuthor's Response: Eh, I guess it depends on your family/dialect.
and thank you! Report Review
I am totally looking forward to reading more of this story. And Kuch Kuch Hota Hai is my favorite Hindi movie. Shahrukh Khan is amazing, and paired with Kajol...absolutely brilliant! My mind actually went straight to that movie when those lines came up. Can't wait for the next chapter!Author's Response: I love Kuch Kuch Hota Hai, mostdef. Shah Rukh's not my personal favorite though, but I understand why he's yours!
aahaha YAAY, it worked!
and it should be out soon, *fingers crossed* Report Review
Nice, he knows they're sisters! LOL!Author's Response: yes he does. :D
aahhh, i'm totallyyy hooked already :D need MORE :) and Al found out Sarina is the minister's daughter, nice. Next chapter, pleasee fast. Heart it much :)Author's Response: yepps. heheh it should be out soon, sorry for the long waaait!
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Great chapter XD
I can't wait to see what's going to happen now, it's going to be so funny!!
Please update as soon as you can :DAuthor's Response: AHAHAH i'm trying!
thanks for reviewing! Report Review
*gasp* A CLIFFY?!?!?!?! HOW COULD YOU?
I wonder how Al found out. The guy's smooth, I'll give him that. Something's telling me he's gonna flip out to some extent now that she's finally admitted it. Oh Sarina, I told you it would come back and bite you in the arse! hmph, shoulda listened to me. but then again, this is gonna be entertaining to read about so i don't actually care that much, haha :)
Louis is as crazy as i pictured him to be, ah i love that kid. i also love the way you write all the dialogue! it's so witty and quick, just how i like it :) Sarina's snarky responses never fail to put a smile on my face.
Really great chapter and i hope you update soon! Chizz is goin' down between 'em...
~Maddie xAuthor's Response: I KNOW. I always said I'd never do a cliffie, but I've found that they actually are good ways to end chapters. Oh wells, what can you do? *shrugs*
I sincerely hope it will be entertaining and that I can do your hopes justice.
&& oh gawd, I love Louis too! He's so fun to just play around with.
hehehe thanks for reviewing, Maddie! (: Report Review
WHAT BAD THINGS?!?!?!?!?!?!?! I MUST KNOW!Author's Response: LOL. God, Swarley. All in due time. Report Review
Ahh, I do believe the nagging and whining is something ALL mothers have in common. and the lovely thing with her mother trying to make her change and then her sister sticking up for her? That's something that commonly happens in my family ;)
I like their umbrella related banter, the fact that Al remains clueless about who she is, even with the convo with their fathers (which I found all too funny for some reason), and just Al in general is someone who I still ADORE.
And I can't wait for her mother' tirade :)
-Briellle :DAuthor's Response: LOL probably. But my mom's Indian, so I have limited experience. OH YAY. I don't have a sibling, so the family dynamics I'm writing about are definitely new for me.
oh yay you thought it was funny. (:
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I love this chapter.
So, A) I like how it moves ahead in time without a lot of warning. Then, B) I like how she remembers what happened, and this is a direct continuation of their last meeting. Al is sweet Author's Response: Aw, thank you! Yeah, I need to work on my pacing, but I hope it worked out.
Thanks for the review. (: Report Review
That was really cute! I like how you write them. They're very flirtatious with each other and that keeps it really interesting. I also like how you write Al. He's so slick and smooth. He's got real potential in this story :)
I love the relationship between Sarina and Aisha. It's really cute. The bantering is nice to watch. It's neat to show such parallel lifestyles between two sisters as well. I think I'd be the journalist but I can really respect the idea of being a Healer too.
Plus, you know, I love Ravenclaw :D It's my favorite House. ~writergirl8Author's Response: I feel like that is always how it is in the beginning, you know? Starting out really fluffy and light, but it gets more and more deep.
I don't actually have a sister. So that is probably the highest praise I could receive. Thank you. *bows*
Really?! SLYTHERIN FTW. You know, post-War. (: Report Review
Hi! It's me :) This is a really cute story. I like the summary. So often in fanfiction you find stories that have these huge plot lines that are tedious to get through because the suspense is too much to bear. Sometimes you can find stories with writing good enough to bear those, though... This, however, gives off the impression of a normal story about two people falling in love. It's a really unique idea because the story is rarely told in simplicity. There are always millions of complications. So... mazel tov on that!
I like the fact that Serena's dad is the Minister- that should be interesting! I also like how there are so many students at Hogwarts at the moment. I have a feeling people who survive the war would have that attitude- "Let's go at it like bunnies because we can!" You know.
I actually laughed out loud several times, so good job with that. ~writergirl8Author's Response: HI RACH.
yayayay. My goal is to make each chapter fulfilling. So that you guys like what's going on but the wait isn't SO horrible (like cliffhangers).
AHAHA you laughed?! Yay! (: Report Review
I love this story!!
I really like this idea, it's nice to read something that doesn't have all the cliché’s and is simply a love story XD
I can't wait to see what's going to happen, please continue as soon as you can.Author's Response: Ah, yeah. I figured...no one wants to read something they've read before. Plus, it's fanfiction. People like nice and light. And I really wanted to write something that doesn't have drama and extensively confounding plot lines.
I like that you like it. I will be updating as soon as I get the chance! (:
Thanks for reviewing. Report Review
I really enjoyed reading this chapter. Much more amusing than the first one! And I'm starting to love Sarina's character. Especially the part of zoning out and laughing at Aisha. And the meeting with Potter was good too! I didn't expect that, and he was really on the ball with his suave attitude. I loved his sangfroid flirts, just amazing! I really think you have gift of writing here.Author's Response: heheheh thanks.
you should take tips from Potter. (aka, me).
AW THANKS YOU. Report Review
Is dream_BIG and ramiatoraa indian? I'm guessing you are, but I am not (I am Australian) I was also wondering who is the people on the banner, my friend wanted a indian character for her story so she needed an Indian name and a indian person for her chapter image and banner. She made it a competition and I am failing miserably so I was wondering if you knew the person in the banner. This story is really awesome and I can't wait for the next chapter! Please update soon! I really like it!Author's Response: They are, yeah. But they are both also really good HPFF writers, and that's why I wanted ramitaarora to be my beta. Plus, dream_BIG is good with graphics.
Um, well it's Sonam Kapoor on the banner.
Thanks for reviewing! Updates may be a little slow, but it will mostdef be up in the next couple weeks. (: Report Review
I thought it was very interesting towards the start of the chapter, but then towards middle way it started to become a tad bit dull, and towards the end it seemed a bit cliche. But other than that it was good, but seriously Potter? Shoulda seen that coming.Author's Response: ah, darn. Help me! I need to make sure I avoid all dullness.
Oh, you SO shoulda seen that coming.
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Oh I love Al. BUT WHY MUST SHE LIE. JUST TELL HIM ALREADY, SPARE AL THE EMBARRASSMENT. Seriously, though, Al and Sarina banter is spot on. I love it. And I loved how you pulled Harry in there for a little bit.
Oh Al is clueless.Author's Response: LOL. There will be SO much fun with this!
teehee well you told me to. (:
This is great :) I love the culture mix here, gives the story a nice edge to it. You're definitely a great writer. Hope you update soon! :)xxAuthor's Response: thank you! yeah, their differences should be fun to explore. (:
i'm glad you like it. Report Review
I absolutely love your story so far. (:
"Hi, Pot." He stuck out his free hand. "I'm Kettle, it's nice to meet you." I am also in love with this line!
I'm really curious about when Albus will find out that Sarina's the daughter of the Minister.Author's Response: hahaha I love Pot/Kettle lines. I try to make them all original.
I'm still deciding that, actually, but it may not be for another couple chapters. Report Review
Hey, this is a really great story - its funny and DIFFERENT. Which is always great :)
Just a tip about the Minister, you have to be british to be a member of parliament etc etc - being british only means you have a british passport - you can be any race you want. I think you may have meant that he was the first non-English Minister for Magic...? Anywho, I only noticed it because I'm british and I notice these things.
Again, this is a breath of fresh air, a real break from all the usual Al/OC stories. Take care!Author's Response: I was going for different! i love that i've achieved that, thank you!
OH, okay! Thank you for clarifying that. I'll put a note about that in the next chapter. (:
i'm really glad you like it! thanks for reviewing. Report Review
Haha, this chapter was really funny! XD I loved the banter/flirting between Al and Sarina, it's cute. :) Ooh, Louis' birthday should be fun, but somehow I think the fact that she didn't tell him she was the ministers daughter will come back and bite her in the butt! Hmm...we shall see...
Overall, great chapter, I think you're really getting into the swing of the story now, it flows really well. :) And I know I said this in the last review but I really love Sarina's voice!
Can't wait 'til the next chapter, you're a great writer!
~Maddie xAuthor's Response: Aw, yay. I'm glad you like it!
Louis' birthday shall be fun, I hope.
Oh. Oh, it's going to bite her in the butt, yess. Hahaha, I love Sarina's voice, too. She's like me but cooler.
aw, thanks! I'm already writing it. (: Report Review
I really like this story because it's just so original. Can't wait for the next chapter!Author's Response: thank you! it should be out soon.
thanks for reviewing. (: Report Review
oh, I laughed so much in this chapter ;D very nicely done.Author's Response: I'm really glad.
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I love the story so far! It really is a refreshing change to the usual Al/OC story, especially having an Indian main character, there's so much you can do with that. I also love the fact that it's set after Hogwarts, there aren't enough of them around!
Sarina's voice is entertaining and I adore her sense of humour. The line about saving people's lives causing you to loose your own had me nodding in absolute agreement, I know all to well what that's like, haha :/ And Al...well, I think I already have a little crush on him (she admits bashfully) even though it's only been 2 chapters! Eh, what can I say? The boy makes me soft ;)
So yeah, the concept of the story is really good and I love your banner and summary. I did catch a few little spelling mistakes, like an accidental extra letter but it's nothing too serious so it doesn't really matter. I can't wait to see where you take this story, I'll definitely be keeping an eye on it!
~Maddie xAuthor's Response: Thank you for your review! I wasn't sure how receptive people would be to the whole OC being Indian thing, especially since there are a lot of little quirks and culture differences that come with a story line like this.
I wanted to be original while writing something I knew, and your review makes me feel like I ACCOMPLISHED MY GOAL. WOOHOO. (:
I honestly did not realize that there aren't many post-Hogwarts stories. I shall keep this in mind.
Why thank you. Oh, wow, apparently everyone has a crush on Al. Well, he's based off of someone real, so (;
I've already started writing Chapter 3, it should be out soon.
You'll have to thank dream_BIG for the awesome banner. My heart pretty much stopped when I saw it, because I loved it THAT much.
Ah, spelling mistakes. I'll try to catch those next time.
thanks for your review, I really REALLY appreciate it! :D Report Review
I love Al, Sarina and how you've managed to come up with an original story line using pieced from different culture as well! Update soon this is amazing :')Author's Response: Thank you! Sarina's going to be a fun character to write, since she's white-washed on the outside, but her innate Indian-ness will definitely shine through. It'll keep Al on his toes.
Oh, well, the storyline is going to be pretty simple. Hopefully there won't be any random twists and turns, but I hope you continue to like it!
thanks for reviewing. (: Report Review
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