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Review #26, by MC_HK Welcome to Romania

8th July 2013:
Hello there :)

I must say, this was a successful chapter in terms of the description and detail in between each dialogue. I feel like you really captured Charlie and the scenery very well, but Luna and Rolf, not so much. I feel like their characters are very flat and monotone, and considering they are the spotlight of your story they should be emphasized more. Luna didn't really seem like Luna in the fact that she is kind of a daydreamer. She was very down to earth in this, and didn't seem to talk much. I've always taken her as a bit of a rambler myself. The most that I would suggest is look at just the dialogue. You could add so much more to give Luna her unique character, and add some more detail on Rolf to add to his personality. Their conversation didn't really seem all that riveting.

This was still a good read, and I did enjoy it, but I would like to see more of Luna and Rolf's personalities shine through a bit better. I look forward to reading more from you :) MC_HK

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for stopping by!

I'm sorry you weren't a big fan of Luna and Rolf. I really struggled with trying to make them weird in very overt ways, though I did try to convey it with more subtle things (like Luna acknowledging that yes, you never do know what you could run into out in the world). I can see what you mean about them seeming flat and I appreciate your suggestion that maybe the key is expanding the dialogue a little bit. Part of it may be that I had trouble seeing this as a one-shot, and maybe it will turn out better if I write more, so I'm glad you said in your PM that you felt like it would work well as a short story. Anyway, hopefully you still enjoyed the other elements in the story, like the dragons and travel and whatnot.

Thank you for your kind review!


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