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Review #26, by patronus_charm Welcome to Romania

8th July 2013:
Ra, Ra, Ravenclaw! ♥ Just a prior warning I probably should be asleep, so if none of it makes sense I apologise now!

I really love the fact that you chose Luna to write about for a couple of reasons. The first being that sheís a Claw of course so it was really fitting! Then sheís an intriguing character and Iíve always loved reading about her. Then finally she has so many quirks, sheís such a delight to read. I think my favourite part was about her bringing a hammock along!

The idea of her being invited along by Charlie Weasley was really great! The letter was really fitting and definitely got me excited about her going to the dragon part. Iíve always really loved Charlie too, so seeing him here too was brilliant! I really liked how seriously he took his job and was really trying to test Luna, because it showed how passionate it was. The cameo from Alicia was also great!

The fact that Charlie brought Luna and Rolf together was really fantastic! Iíve always been curious by this ship too, because Luna doesnít seem highly romantic so I could never really see her falling in her love, but the way you developed it here makes sense to me and made me want to see more! The fact that they bonded over what they wanted to do and animals was really adorable. I can just imagine them venturing through forests and things now, and if you wrote a sequel in any form to this I would be really happy :D

One thing which really touched me was how Luna was reminded of going to the monkey house at the London Zoo. You almost forget that her mother did die due to her quirks, so it was really nice to see that you dwelled on it here, as it reminded me of another part of Luna.

Ah the ending of this was perfect, Amanda! The way she gave him the healing potion and he invited her out for dinner had me squealing away! It sounded very Luna-esq there way of getting together and it was just so lovely. This was a really lovely one-shot and fitted the theme really well! Iím planning on checking more of the Claws stories out in the next few days, so it might take me longer to get round to PS but I will be there! ♥

-Kiana

Author's Response: Heyyy!

Yeah, I don't really know where this plunny came from, but it felt really adventurous--which is not something I've taken on before--and Luna and Rolf seemed to be a good fit for the prompt because they obviously travel a lot for their chosen careers. It was cool to write this and I think I will continue it into a short story at some point. I didn't even consider that Luna was a 'Claw until after I had already started, so that was cool to think about :) Oh, and I'm glad you liked her bringing along a hammock. It seemed like a very quirky, Luna-ish idea.

I really enjoyed writing Charlie. I think he's got that same adventurous spirit that Luna and Rolf have and I can definitely see them working together and making a good team.

When I thought of how to describe the Breeding Center, the monkey house at the zoo in Washington, D.C. immediately popped into my head. My dad took me there as a kid and I guess I sort of transferred that onto Luna.

Thanks for your lovely review! It was a relief to hear that this story seemed to work okay :)

-Amanda


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Review #27, by MC_HK Welcome to Romania

8th July 2013:
Hello there :)

I must say, this was a successful chapter in terms of the description and detail in between each dialogue. I feel like you really captured Charlie and the scenery very well, but Luna and Rolf, not so much. I feel like their characters are very flat and monotone, and considering they are the spotlight of your story they should be emphasized more. Luna didn't really seem like Luna in the fact that she is kind of a daydreamer. She was very down to earth in this, and didn't seem to talk much. I've always taken her as a bit of a rambler myself. The most that I would suggest is look at just the dialogue. You could add so much more to give Luna her unique character, and add some more detail on Rolf to add to his personality. Their conversation didn't really seem all that riveting.

This was still a good read, and I did enjoy it, but I would like to see more of Luna and Rolf's personalities shine through a bit better. I look forward to reading more from you :) MC_HK

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for stopping by!

I'm sorry you weren't a big fan of Luna and Rolf. I really struggled with trying to make them weird in very overt ways, though I did try to convey it with more subtle things (like Luna acknowledging that yes, you never do know what you could run into out in the world). I can see what you mean about them seeming flat and I appreciate your suggestion that maybe the key is expanding the dialogue a little bit. Part of it may be that I had trouble seeing this as a one-shot, and maybe it will turn out better if I write more, so I'm glad you said in your PM that you felt like it would work well as a short story. Anyway, hopefully you still enjoyed the other elements in the story, like the dragons and travel and whatnot.

Thank you for your kind review!

-Amanda


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