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Review #26, by Dalek194 The smile I gave her

23rd May 2011:
Really great one-shot! I loved the concept, it was really well written, and was just generally a really lovely, cute little story. You wrote James and Lily perfectly, and the idea of James making her smile without her knowing (plus the fact he realises how in love he is at the end) is just marvellous; bravo!

I spotted one tiny grammar thing, though it was very small;

- "than to let Alice and Marley in charge" (should be than to have left)

Appart from that, really good work. Great job! :-)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you love it. It was really hard for me to come up with a way to make a smile secret for the challenge, and make sure they were in character. Thanks for letting me know about the spelling error, I'll change that when I can.
(pulls out pan full of cookies) thanks again! :)

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Review #27, by bri_5_stars The smile I gave her

11th May 2011:
My only criticism (if I had one) would be Grindylows don't gallop... but it's a saying therefore totally allowed to be ridiculous.
I can't find anything wrong with this, its utterly adorable and heartwarming. You tell just enough about each of them to see what there relationship is, so that it's not confusing. Details were great. And they both felt in character.
The last line is the best, not gonna lie. Very cute.
5 stars. :)

Author's Response: Hi, sorry it took me so long to respond, I guess I had talked about the fact you reviewed, just never wrote back, lol. Yeah, the point of the password was to be ridiculous, passwords have been known to be lol. I'm really glad you thought I gave just the right amount of details. I could have kept going with it, but it was supposed to be a one shot. Woohoo! I got 5 stars! lol I'm soo happy you enjoyed it. Thanks so much for reviewing :)

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Review #28, by TenthWeasley The smile I gave her

11th May 2011:
Aww! This was so incredibly adorable, hands-down - I love the entire premise of it! I love this non-prankster, sweet side of James, and his totally cute and innocent love for Lily. I think it's just like him to send Lily up a toasted ham and cheese sandwich (and I totally made a grilled turkey and cheese from reading this, by the way - you inspired me!).

I think everyone was really in character, and the plot was cute and just the right length. Great job - I hope you really do well in your challenge! Thank you for swapping with me! :3

Author's Response: YAAY! thank you sooo much! Yeah, I thought, if there was a way to make lily smile, in a marauder type of way, that would be the best way to go about it for me. Let me tell you, it was really hard coming up with the right way to go about it. I'm glad I succeeded :)
I hope I do well to :)
Thanks :)
Oh, and I'm glad I inspired you to make a turkey and cheese :) the idea of the ham nd cheese came from when I went to go visit my uncle in england, and it was all I wanted to eat sandwich wise lol it was sooo good lol.

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