LOVE SIRIUS JAMES UPDATE SOONAuthor's Response: I'm like OH MY GOSH, 75 REVIEWS :D Thank you so much, I'm glad you love him :) Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
Oh no, a cliffhanger! I'm dying to know what happens, and for that, you get a favorite!! Harry's characterization was spot-on. And Ginny was perfect too! Her fiery temper was portrayed perfectly too!
The only thing that bothered me was the overuse of "?!?!?!"
The question mark/exclamation point punctuation seems wierd if used to often. Not a big deal, just pointing it out. Overall, wonderful plot and flow. Keep on writing!!
~RosieAuthor's Response: lol yeah, I do get a little carried away, but I can't help it sometimes! :P It was a big shock for him to not be there for so long so that's how I tried emphasizing that. Maybe I'll try something different at some point.
Yaayy! a favorite! (ok I understand more about what your bother was lol) I'm just excited. I'm so happy you liked it so much :) Thanks hun :) Report Review
I'm here from the lovely review swap - sorry for the delay! :)
I think I'll have to do the same as you are with mine and read back from the beginning to answer some of my questions - and if they're not covered then I'll be sure to ask! :P
This chapter in itself was lovely to read :) I like how you included both Ron and Hermione despite them being abroad at the time (and you made Ron sweet instead of gormless.. so 10 point go to you xD).
You've really got the family relationship - as well as Mr Weasley's excitment for going to a Muggle cinema! :P I also liked how you included Teddy - many fics which are post the BoH seem to forget him!
Your little added details were fun to read - like the food tasting different to Muggles! Made me smile when they all thought it was a dump xD
Anyway, great chapter and I'll go read the rest.. or pre-chapter now xD
Keira :)Author's Response: Thanks hun :) yeah, the funny thing is that Hotel, really does exist in Cornwall (which is where it was here) and did look a little like a dump lol. But It had Trelawney's Menu ON the Website for the Hotel, so I had to put it in :)
Anyway, yes I'm sure you have a lot of questions :) lol, and Arthur's just watching a VHS which I'm sure is just as exciting 'cause he can see the muggle contraption :P
I'm sooo glad you liked the relationships, they're really important :) as I'm sure you know based on what I read in your story, which I HAVE to go back and look at :)
I hope you enjoy the rest, and feel free to tell me your thoughts on those, I'm sure I won't be able to resist when I read yours lol
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Hey here with a review swap! Sorry I'm not actually logged into my account, I got logged out and am too lazy to go and log back in before I review.
Anyhow. On to the review. I think it's an interesting story. It's strange, I love Romione and am alright with Harry/Ginny but I rarely ever read stories about them, so this was fun. You've got a lot of elements of the story going on but I think you handle them well and you obviously know your characters well and know how you want them to be, which is good in any story.
And yes, writing cliffhangers is very fun! I always enjoy that satisfying feeling of leaving the readers hanging, haha.
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More cliffhangers!! I get it though, that is a good point that it makes you want to write more. I never thought of it like that :)
For some reason the whole time I was reading this I kept thinking "But, it's supposed to be James Sirius"-- yeah. I'm slow.
I liked what you did with the restaurant! That's so neat that muggles taste differently and see things differently than magic people. It was a really heartfilled discussion; it was really beautiful to read.
I noticed a few spelling things but now that I go back and try to find them I can't, so it's just really minor stuff. I think you should put Hermoine's letter in italics-- it was just a little confusing because it's at the beginning of the chapter. for some reason, because you have 'ginny, at the top of it, I thought it was Ginny speaking about Hermione's brother. It could just be me being slow, because aparently that's happening a lot today :p
I thought this chapter was really adorable. I love how Ginny doesn't know how to pronounce m-o-v-i-e. I laughed every time :)
Lovely chapter! Again i'm going to wait patiently because you left me with another cliffhanger!!!Author's Response: That's ok hun, I get slow sometimes too :P
I'm glad you liked my idea about the muggles not tasting the same taste and things like that. That's a good idea with Hermione's letter I thought putting the ' ' on either side would be enough, but maybe not. lol yep it occured to me that since their not exposed to muggle things they'd have trouble saying them too. especially how in the books it was always the 'felly-tone' lol. Ok, I'll try not to keep you guys waiting too bad, but I know I have college to work on so... next week week after?
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I really liked this! Poor Ginny, after she realized that Fred was gone when she saw Ron and Hermione together. This was very well done. I love Harry/Ginny, it's my favorite ship. Ron/Hermione comes in as second, and I loved how you tied both in together. All in all, very well-written! :)
~RosieAuthor's Response: good, I'm very happy you like this :D yeah... unfortunately since everything happened the way it did, I couldn't have her stay happy. It'd be a short story :P Well you'll certainly like this! I have both as my main characters :) I also have a bunch more that will be making appearances :) Thank you soo much hun, I try hard for the well-written part lol :D Report Review
This chapter is like a happy and sad milkshake, The death of a family member and new life coming into the world at the same time is tough enough in the real life but then throw in every thing that happen to Harry and explaining all that to Ginny should make a Muggles head explode.
You really have a great understanding of who these characters you bring so much life to them, When you expressed how painful Remus's death was felt by everyone I couldn't help but think about how I felt when I heard Rowling killed off Remus and Tonks it was so upsetting to me and shocking because I haven't read all the books and only knew what the movies were telling me as they came out, I loved his character so much it was like I lost a friend too(and its all Rowlings fault!).
Anyway you were able to get me very wrapped up with how Harry and Ginny were feeling which makes you amazing.
I have sooo much more to say about this chapter but I'm tired so i'll just sum up..I love this story I can't wait to read the rest, your world after the war in my mind fits in great with the original books.
Keep writing your personality brings a lot of originality to already classic charactersAuthor's Response: Aww this was such a great review!!! I'm very flattered. I try my best to put what I understand of the characters into the story, but of course I want to make sure my point gets across. This story really is about 'what means most' and if I don't do that my job isn't done. I'm really happy you were able to feel what Harry and Ginny were, they're going through so much right now, it gets hard to convey sometimes.
Yes, I should be getting to sleep too, Thank you for leaving such a wonderful review so late at night!
I'm so happy you feel that the characters are original and classic! I feel very proud, this will help me remember my talent in writing, and keep me at it. Thanks you! Report Review
I cant wait for the next chapter this is such a great story! I absolutely love Serius James. He is just too cute. I cant wait to see what the rest of that letter says. Keep writing!! xoxoAuthor's Response: Aww, you're so sweet! I'm so glad you like the story, and Sirius James :) He really is a cutie. I'll try to get some writing done this week, I'm hoping to get my homework done, and get some inspiration :)
Thanks sooo much for reviewing! Hope to see more of you soon :) *hugs* Report Review
I can't wait for your next chapter so I can find out what is happening.Author's Response: Good to know! I'll try to get it done by sometime next week :) Thanks again for reviewing! It really helps keep me motivated :) Report Review
I have to say, when I started reading and it was in multiple POV's I was a little worried, but as I kept reading this chapter I noticed that it was really well done.Author's Response: lol to tell the truth I was worried too, but I liked it in the end :D Thanks for reviewing!! Report Review
The thing that I absolutely adore about this story as a whole is how you have thought of everything. From Hermione'sparents, to the funerals, to meeting baby Teddy, and now the deaths of the goblins and Hannah with the leaky cauldron. It just really shows such a spectacular attention to canon details, that I truly adore.
Sirius James was just adorable as always, I' love to read about Arthur and the Television :) It'd be cute to read it from the perspective of James Sirius, and him teaching how to use everything.
It was really sweet of Ginny to do that for her mother. Professor Trewlarny sloshed was the funniest thing :p I'm really glad Ginny was (hopefully) finally able to pull George out of his funk. It really took some stern love to get him to see what his exilation from his family was doing.
Oh my god and then the ending! What is it!? Seriously, You can't do that to me! Is Ron proposing? My first thought was that someone else had died (please don't make it that!!!), but I'm hoping it'll at least be something positive. Maybe George wants to go to lunch with Mrs. Weasley, Ginny and Cora? Alright.. I'll stop guessing :p You MUST update soon so I can find out! Great chapter, I really loved it.Author's Response: lolol you're fantastic you know that? Just to slightly put you out of your misery, no one's dead lol. I'll do my best to update soon (you're really keeping me from procrastinating here lol) But I do have some schoolwork to do tomorrow, so I'll have to get that done first. I'm so glad you love all my canon details. I thought of the many people that thought of the ministry giving them a reward for defeating voldemort, but I don't think the Goblins would go along with that. Maybe they'll give them a medal, but not money that the Goblins are in charge of. George will still take time to get over things, but at least now he's getting that he can't hide from his family no matter how big it is :) lol and I hope I did a drunk Trelawney good enough, I think that was my way of putting in her own part of the tragedy that happened.
Thank you sooo much for reviewing! I hope to see many more :) I'm glad you're as excited I am about it :) Report Review
The little part about Kreacher and Sirius James becoming friends was the cutest thing ever. All of your Ron and Hermione scenes are absolutely wonderful.. they just make the most perfect couple.
As do Mr. and Mrs. Weasley. I loved the small moment you included with the pair of them, it was very heartwrenching.
I didn't think it was choppy at all. I think the different perspectives flowed well, because you had them start up one right after another, not leaving anything out. It was great to see that the smiles and talking is coming, slowly but surley, back to George. I love how great Ron is with little Sirius James. He's just going to make a perfect father one day.
I'm glad I reconizied this now, but I must have reviewed your chapter 7 ages ago. (I read so much on here it's hard to keep track sometimes :p ) I will still owe you three more reviews, so I deffinatly can't wait to read more of this absolutley wonderful story! Thanks so much for the swap, I look forward to reading more!Author's Response: I'm glad you agree with me about this chapter not seeming choppy. I think having a dinner at the Weasley's will be having different character's POV's. I'd love to do whole stories about my favorite characters, but it'd take too long and might seem repetitive. So I've compromised :)
I noticed you'd reviewed my last chapter too lol
Anyway, I'm so happy you like my characters, and Sirius James. I'm going to have to do more with Cora at some point. I love her character since she's in my short story, but no one else really knows her yet.
I look forward to seeing more of your spectacular reviews! You have no idea how happy I am, I'm very much more motivated to keep going :) Thank you so much! Report Review
We have the same favorite characters :) That's why I LOVED this chapter so much. I think the way you mange to write such heartwrenching scenes, while still making it fluffy and adorable is truly a talent you should be proud of.
I loved the hug between George and Luna, I always pictured it would take a lot to get George out of the funk of losing his twin, and I think with the help of Luna he will be able to slowly recover.
I felt so bad for her with her dad going into insanity. I think you captured her character so well here, as well as Neville's when he was meeting up with his parents. Brilliant chapter! This is truly wonderful.Author's Response: :D
I really am overwhelmed, thank you so much!
I loved Luna's idea of sharing hugs, don't ask me where it came from, but these kind of things pop out and click :) If you're interested in more George-ness he's in a short story I wrote too, no Luna, but I may edit a little to at least include his thoughts after the hug or something somehow.
I'd always pictured something happening to her dad, after seeing him in the movie, and how crazy he was getting, I couldn't really picture it any other way. Also I thought her and Neville would be good going there together. I'm glad you enjoyed yourself despite the sadness :) Report Review
Oh wow. Alright.. I need a minute to process Sirius having a child!
The funeral was sad.. the bits with Mrs. Weasley were just very beautifully written. I LOVED that George set of fireworks in honor of Fred. I liked how you told the funeral from Hermione's perspective.
Sirius has a kid. God don't get me wrong, Sirius James is ADORABLE, but wow! I have to agree with you, the little part at the end with them playing tag, and Sirius James jumping on top of Ron's back were so adorable, I loved them as well. Another brilliant chapter!
Great work on this. I love all of the details, and the plot twists you are putting into this! It really shows a level of "attention to detail" that you put into writing this. I love it dearly.Author's Response: My With Sirius Black story will cover what happened. It had been a one shot, but a waaay too long one shot lol, so I'm breaking it down. If you're interested in it I'll get to putting it back together, but for now I'm focusing on this one :)
I'm so glad you like this! I hope you stay interested when I continue it :) I love your input on all the different details that I'd hope readers would love :) I'll respond to your other reviews, but I'm not feeling great so I'll have to save it for tomorrow. Thank you so much! Report Review
I really loved this. I dont think you have anything to worry about as far as it being 'too happy' or anything like that. I agree with you that live does go on. The scene with Andromena and Teddy, while heartbreaking to see such a proud woman crying over the loss of her daughter, was still adorable with Teddy. The way he changed his hair to match Harry's was truly adorable. Teddy sort of perfectly represents the 'live goes on' topic, and I think you captured that beautifully here.
This is such an amazing story, thanks so much for taking up my request to do a review swap! I really love this! (I said that twice. I just really do!! :p )Author's Response: I'm glad you liked this chapter 'cause it was one of the hardest to write to be honest. Really, in spite of ourselves, after grief life does go on. I thought the changing hair was a little cliche, but appropriate :)
you're seriously soo sweet, I'm shocked how much you like it! Though I'm very happy someone else is just as excited about it all as I am :) especially all the details you go into that are the ones I hope readers see :D
Thank you so much! Report Review
♥ Ron and Hermione time! :D I love them even more than Harry and Ginny! Which is saying a lot. You instantly nailed their characters when you had Hermione say she was too tired to argure, instantly followed by Ron's comment.
I loved the waking up to the kisses scene. Seriously.. this is some amazing heartwarming writing, you should be really proud of this! (I loved the line in DHpt2 when Seamus says that Ginny's got plenty of brothers but there's only one Harry :p Best line!)
Oh god.. please tell me Luna's dad is ok. I really liked your portrayal of Luna. She's my favorite character, and it is always great to see her well written, and not overboard. I think you did that very well here.
Brilliant work! I really loved Ron and Hermione here, and the stuff about Luna instantly made me want to read more.Author's Response: I'm finding so many people loving them, I wasn't expecting to write them so well :) I'm glad you found their kissing scene heartwarming, it's one of my favorite Ron/Hermione moments, plus Ginny was very silly too running away from it :D
Luna's another character I'm proud is turning out so well, thank you soo much for the great review! Report Review
Ok.. so I can't say anything about the fangirls pinning after Neville, because I would be doing the same exact thing to Matt Lewis :p But, I see where Ginny's coming from.
"Ron loves Hermione, Ron loves Hermione, boy, wait 'til Fred and George see them, they're gonna... I stopped mid dance"
I WAS SO HAPPY FOR THREE SECONDS! Seriously, you can't do that to me. I just wish Fred wouldn't have gone!! This line is great, I think it captured Ginnyís views so perfectly. I liked the way you portrayed Harry briefly there; Iím glad to see he doesn't entirely blame himself for this!
Ok.. So the mental image of Ginny levitating Harry was amazing. I can't stop laughing. Harry and Ginny fluff is just the greatest thing in the world, and I loved the way you portrayed the pair of them in the eating the sandwiches scene. I really liked all of the little details from Harry's perspective of him watching Ginny, happy she wasn't mad at him, and he still loves her :D
This is very brilliant for being your first story. Seriously heartwarming stuff. Great work! On to chapter two (:Author's Response: I'm glad you liked that bit about Neville :D
Also, I thought it was important to really get across the loss and happiness, and how important they both are to the characters. How often is it that we encounter something like that? grieving and rejoicing?
lol Ginny levitating Harry was great :D I'm glad you liked it. I also think Ginny's been through enough with Harry not to be too mad at him :)
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If only Ron would have realized kissing Hermoine makes her stop talking, they could have saved SO many argurements :)
This chapter was really cute, I liked it alot. Great job :DAuthor's Response: aww, thanks so much :) I know! But it would have cut out a lot of plot for JK too lol. I'm so glad you liked it :D Thanks for reviewing, it just came out so I was a little anxious about it, especially since it doesn't have too many reads yet either.
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Gee where to begin, You really have a great grasp on the characters emotions and how they express themselves, I also really like the Section with Luna having them tell her what happened with her Father because it is quite clear that he was losing his mind, having said that I would really like to see a story about Luna going to find her Father.
As a writer you're very good at making all the love that theses characters have for each other felt through your words. I know the part with Hermione and Ron in bed makes me miss my girlfriend a lot I love that feeling of lying in bed with her,
Great Chapter I look forward to reading the rest.Author's Response: Thanks a lot :D I'd never thought about a story about finding her father. You'll see more with her later, but it doesn't really go into that part. I'm glad you like that scene, I found it fun to write 'cause my boyfriend sometimes snores, and I find it more fun to wake him up that way than poking him :)
can't wait to hear what you have to say about the rest!
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I'm here with the long overdue review, I'm sorry it took this long for me to read it, I've been booked :(
But I'm here now, and that's what counts:D
And I quite liked it:) I like how you go through each couple, I thought that was a good idea, and not focusing on one main couple. Gets a better audience that way:D
I'll be back for more:)
HarryandGinnyForEverAuthor's Response: :D I'm glad you'll be back for more! And don't worry about being so long, I'm pretty booked too, and I really shouldn't be on here now, but I had to check up on it :) I'm glad you liked me going through couples, I was slightly worried it'd be too much, and I'd need to narrow it down to a few. I really like writing different characters though, so I'm happy you like it!
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I like this story so far, but fluff and relationship stories aren't really my thing. Not your fault. The story is really good, though! I like how Ginny is playful, if slightly OOC, and how Harry is embarrassed, which is more cannon. 55 reviews!Author's Response: hmm, I never thought Ginny being playful was OOC 'cause she did have Fred and George as older brothers. Thanks for reviewing though even when it wasn't something you normally read! :) Report Review
So I'm on a tear here...
The scenes in this chapter were heart-warming, especially between Harry, Ginny, Andromeda and Teddy.
Overall, I really would have like it if this chapter were longer. You could have spent more time exploring the conversation between Harry and Ginny about the year on the run and it wouldn't have slowed things down much. There also seems to be a lot that Ginny needs to tell Harry about living at Hogwarts under the Carrows.
I thought you did better in this chapter at conveying the characters' grief. It's still not quite what I think they'd actually be feeling, but better.
On we go...Author's Response: I have to admit, I'm not an expert on grieving... when I do personally, I'm extremely level headed most of the time, but then again, I still haven't lost a close family member yet... maybe that's why... but don't worry, we'll be getting even more into grieving soon. I'm so glad you still are enjoying it though!! I appreciate all the helpful feedback here too :) Report Review
So I liked this chapter even more than the first one. I thought you hit a better balance of grief and joy with this one. The talk of funerals and Luna's appearance really helped with that.
I feel like your characterizations are spot on. Everyone is very recognizable, even under very unusual circumstances.
It was fun to be inside Ron's head for a while. Most writers -- myself included -- tend to give him the short end of the stick relative to Harry and Hermione.
Bravo! I'm enjoying this.Author's Response: :D I have to say, I wasn't expecting to enjoy writing Ron as much as I have, but I really do. I enjoy writing everyone, which is why I've done multiple POV's :)
This was an unusually fun chapter to write even with the sadness. I think it was because I knew things were overall improving for everyone, it's hard, but they're all there for each other.
I'm so glad you're enjoying this, and I really appreciate your input, it helps a lot! :) Report Review
Hey again, really liked this chapter too, good mixture of happiness and sadness, appropriate given the circumstances, and again I found the characterisation very believable. Personally I like the first person style, which reminds me of an author on here called sand_dollar, which is a good thing, I highly recommend their stories if you haven't seen them. To give a more specific comment about the tense- I think the present tense helps draw you in to the moment and is a lot less pedestrian than the 'he said, she said' listing which you've avoided very well even in this tense, using the interjected thoughts and stuff. Great job :)Author's Response: sigh of relief :)
I personally really enjoy writing in the present tense, so I'm so happy that it's working for this story!! :D
I'm so happy that I remind you of an author you like, I've been really trying hard with this story, and I kind of feel bad for my readers since I haven't updated in a while... I'll be doing so when the semester's over I promise lol. Anyway, I'm really happy you liked it! Thanks for reviewing again! Report Review
This was lovely. It's always nice to read these stories of recovery in the aftermath of the battle, and yours was particularly well done. I couldn't find any spelling or grammar mistakes, and I enjoyed the way you told it from both Ginny and Harry's point of view.
If I was going to suggest anything, it would be to spend a little more time on letting the characters grieve. I don't know, that's probably just my bias from having read several stories set in this time, but it felt like Harry and Ginny were a little too happy, given all they had just been through and how many friends and relatives had just perished.
Otherwise, great read! On to chapter 2...Author's Response: Aww, yay! Yeah, I had been thinking similar about the grieving but there's certainly more of that in later chapters. Thank you so much for reviewing! I'm glad you liked both Harry and Ginny's POV, one of the things I worry about for this story is if I'm doing too many POV's, I'd love it if you gave me your opinion :)
Thanks for this one! glad you enjoy yourself, that's my main objective writing on here :) Report Review
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