Oh my goodness. Great chapter! Update soon?

Author's Response: I sure hope so!

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OMG I LOVE THIS STORY

Author's Response: Thanks! :D

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hi! so i just found this story today, and i only have one thing to say so far: love it! jane is a great character, although sometimes she annoys me just because she's so not similar to me, in that i'm totally extroverted and not at all one to run away from people in the way she does. One criticism i will give though: I'm not quite sure that i fully buy the process of sirius and jane getting together. I mean, i buy into it by the end of what you have written so far, but i guess it just kind of threw me for a loop because since jane is so oblivious to how other people see her, it seems like one chapter, he can't even remember her name, and the next, everyone knows that he fancies her. i guess i would just like it to be made clear why he fell for her, you know? i feel like explaining that might fill a bit of a plot hole and make the reader want the two of them to make it, rather than for her to get with remus (although we all know that won't happen since he's in a constant state of self-deprication and sacrifice). with this last chapter, i feel like we get remus way more than we get sirius, and we need to hear sirius's "sales pitch," if you will, since he and jane are such contrasting personalities. sorry, this whole review seems to be one giant criticism and mildly (or more than mildly) incomprehensible (i ramble, so if this is the case, i understand), but i really do love your story, and i can't wait to see where you take this with such a promising summary. :) oh, and i'm dying to know why curses rebound off of her. all in all, good writing, good story. looking forward to more!!!

Kat

Author's Response: Hey! So you're a bit rambly, but I like it! ;) I can definitely see your point about not buying into their relationship... it seems kind of abrupt. BUT you have to keep in mind that when they first get together you are mostly seeing it from Jane's infuriating pessimistic perspective... she can't understand why Sirius likes her either. I promise you will definitely get a better explanation from Sirius a little bit later on... he's got to build up to it because he isn't very good at sharing his feelings... boys **rolls eyes**
But overall, I really do appreciate your long ramble of a review. Thank you so much for reading!

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Hi Montague!
I'm really enjoying your story so far. I do like the change in POVs though it threw me the first time. I really enjoyed the Remus perspective - he just begs to be written as really angsty and I think you did really well. I'm loving all the characters you've created except your heroine - and only because I'm sometimes slightly annoyed with her - which means you've made me identify with the character :-). I think I understand Jane is really quiet and shy and plain Jane-ish ... but I would love it if she was thinking spunky things but just not saying them. I just don't feel she has as much depth as your other OCs - of which Lynn is my utter favourite. Hope to read more soon - and congratulations on a very entertaining story!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the feedback! I definitely agree with you as far as Jane goes... but bear with me! She's going to get spunkier, you just gotta give her some time :D

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Love this chapter! I totally agree with her view of presents.

Author's Response: Thanks :D This was a fun one to write.

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please please please write more!this is my favorite story on HPFF!!

Author's Response: Will do :D

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Excellent! I'm enjoying this story, SO much, please continue to write!

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I've greatly enjoyed youre story ! I think you're a great and creative writer and I cannot wait for the new chapter!

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Ahh!! Lovvved it! It was completlyyy fine that the chapter was longer and I think you did a great job with the changing points of view! Terrific story so far!

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ive been a silent reader for a bit, but i just wanted to let you know that i adore your story. its easily one of my favorites on here. so keep up and amazing work and cant wait for another update!

Author's Response: I'm glad you aren't silent anymore and are enjoying it! I promise I'll update as soon as I get internet installed in my new apartment! :D

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I think this is excellent so far! You're portrayal of each character has been flawless in my opinion, and the story line entertaining and original!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! :D

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Very well written. I love when people put balls in Marauder Era fics.

Seems like little Miss Jane is getting way to popular for her own good. I can't wait to read what happens next, so please update soon!

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Absolutely love it! Keep up the good work, and I can't wait to read more!

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Sometimes it's difficult to think of names, and I think this one suits the chapter just fine.

Keep up the good work, your story is very interesting so far. Just keep an eye on your verbs--there was one chapter that I think you wrote drug-instead of dragged or drag.

And the only reason why I noticed is because I do it too, but when you capitalize the beginning of a sentence, sometimes the second letter gets capitalied too, like this SIrius, LIly, JAmes..etc.

But other than that I absolutely love it so far. Can't wait to read more.

Author's Response: Thanks for the heads up on the verbage and capitalization! When I get a minute I'll have to go through and edit...

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Owww, I love it! Sirius finally did something about Jane, and even though she is shocked I hope she will deal with it as soon as possible :)) And I wonder if she's going to tell anybody about that kiss :D
Can't wait for next chapter!

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Good chapter but too short! :) You are off to a good start. I'm looking forward to seeing your character come out of her shell.

Author's Response: Just wait 'til chapter ten... I couldn't stop writing! I'm glad you're enjoying it, and thank you so much for reviewing! :D

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This story is great! I love all of the references, and you've developed your characters fairly well. I'm looking forward to the next chapter :).

Author's Response: Thank you so much! More are coming! :)

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i really like your story so far :) im interested to see where you take it. im hoping that you decide to make their relationship a bit rocky--after all, someone so painfully shy would have a very difficult time opening up and being in one, especially the physical part!! but keep it up, i like it :)

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Actually a pound of feathers and a pound of gold weigh the same.

Author's Response: Fixed! Thanks :D

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I love this story! cant wait for more :D

Author's Response: Thanks! :D

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I'm really enjoying this, i've been on the look out for new stories and this is a bit different! Brilliant so far :-)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad to hear you're enjoying it. I've been having a heck of time editing, so I'm glad the work seems to be paying off! :D

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