Great chapter. My only conplaint is that its too short!! Please update soon 9/10 : )

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm still trying to figure out this story, when I do, the chapter length will increase significantly. :)

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The situation really suck for Connie but she is so unreliable as a narrator that I am not sure what to believe. After all, if Magical people are so snobby and awful, then why was she still hanging around James and Co. three years after he started Hogwarts? I believe that they probably treat her like she has a disease because she's in an even worse position than a Muggle but since she "should" have been magical, she's a mistake, a pariah. I don't know why she fell for James if he turned into a bigot or ignorred her because she wasn't magical. Or why she considered herself his best friend when he was away for ten months of the year. Why didn't she know about his best Magical friend, Ken, earlier? Like two years earlier. It isn't like he ignorred everyone at Hogwarts when Connie was his best friend and obviously not at Hogwarts with him. What is up with that?

What does suck for Connie is that everyone is conspiring to get her to forgive James so that she will not hate the Magical world so much or whatever. He obviously hurt her very badly, thus ruining their close friendship. Connie is not part of their world so trying to being her in comes off as condescending and self-centered. Why would she want to go back to being friends with people that didn't bother to contact her and/or hurt her badly? They have completely different lives and James has no idea or apparent interest in Connie other than to apologize. It seems like Connie's mum and Ginny just want to turn back the clock to when they were happy kids, and James wants forgiveness so that he can feel better by clearing his conscience. Why should we think that he cares about Connie when he only wrote her one personal letter and presumbably made no effort to see her in TWO years? Although it would be good for Connie to make peace with these oblivious Wizards and move on with her Muggle life, I do not see that happening. If she is stuck, give us a reason to support James and everyone else that treated her horribly.

Author's Response: Thanks for such an interesting review.

Connie is very unreliable narrator (like most of my narrators, I think it makes the story more interesting because the reader only sees the world in their skewed glasses) , whether it's obvious or not, she's extremely self-conscious because she's a squib, she's extremely paranoid, while she hasn't suffered torment, she certainly hasn't been welcomed by everyone.

James is not bigoted, neither are Andrew or Molly as they've grown up with Connie, so for them, they've always known her as a squib, so in a sense they're okay with her.

There's a lot of story left, we're only like 5,000 words in and lots of the thing you've highlighted in this review will be ironed out. :) xx

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Oh, I absolutely hate Kendra already. Good work!
Hope the next chapter comes soon.

Author's Response: Don't hate her, Connie's the one to blame, she keeps reading her wrong. :) x

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I really love this story! I absolutely adore Connie and I cannot wait to see what's going to happen next :)

Great chapter and I hope you can update soon!

10/10

Author's Response: Thank you :)

I'm glad you like the story and Connie.

-nell :) x

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For a long time, i've been searching for stories out of the box, and i found this!! Lovely storyline, brilliant characters!
Cheers:D

Author's Response: Aww, thank you :) xx

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I FEEL YOU CONNIE, I FEEL YOU I KNOW HOW IT FEELS TO BE REPLACED BY THE GUY BESTFRIEND YOU LOVE VERY MUCH I FEEL YOU JRDFGNFKDLERGJVFNCKLERGFDX

Author's Response: Hahahahaha, it's an emotion lots of girls go through :) x

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YOU HAVE AN AMAZING STORY COMING ON BRO. I LOVE IT! :D

Author's Response: Thank you! :) x

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Very interesting! I'm looking forward to hearing more about Molly and Andrew and Connie's relationship because it looks like a good story. Also, I really liked the way you made Connie's feelings about James' new best friend very realistic. I could see her reacting and it was well-written and believable which is the best when it comes to writing relationships. Update soon!

Author's Response: Thank you for the lovely review, hopefully their relationship will develop well over the course of the story, Being replaced is painful :) xx

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Great job nell!

I love the whole Andrew turning hot bit, just like his dad;)

update sooon!♥♥

Author's Response: Hola!
I shall try, but life is superduper busy :)


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mooore, i need more. this is amazingly original and well written, bravo!

Author's Response: I'm glad you want more, thank you ♥

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Oh i cant wait for a drunk connie. Poor connie it sucks to be replaced. Please update soon 9/10 : )

Author's Response: I've never written a drunk character, so let's hope it goes well. Thank you ♥

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Its me, I'm back! I was sort of surprised to see this, even though I knew it was coming...I dunno why. Hm.
The thing Connie said about kissing is so true, I remember thinking it was gross when people kissed, so it's kinda the same thing.
Ahahaha. It's like a play within a play. Sort of. Well it would be if she started writing ff. But seriously, i like the bit about the web. That is the main reason why I wouldn't want to be a witch.
I hope we'll be seeing plenty of uncle Rolf. He sounds like the sort of person who makes for humourous situations. However, I am curious. Do you mean kilt, or quilt? (*hopes you do mean quilt.*) hang on...Is Rolf rolf scamander? Because that would kinda make sense. With the thestrals and all. And with the advice for /animals/ title.
Interneted is my new word of the day. Just saying. &also I am curious about this Elliot guy...and I dislike him. I dunno why. He just seems suspicious.
'nice face' is some comeback. very Connie, though, so I like it.
I'm also suspicious of Ken (and barbie?). Maybe I'm just too suspicious, though.
Charlie
X
(oh, and I totally think you should make -ie names your thing)

Author's Response: HOLA!

Connie will not write any ff, she's a reader, not a writer.

Uncle ROLF is her only relative, so he'll be cropping up.

Don't hate on Elliott! ;) xx

hmm...barbie? maybe ;)

Thanks for the review! :) xx

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Nell! I love this story so much; I'm so glad that you updated!!! The premise is great and as are the characters and writing! I can't wait for the next update :D

10/10

~Jess

PS: I plan on reading your original fiction once I find the time to do so; I let you know what I think (I'm sure I'll love it though; you're such a great writer! :D)

Author's Response: Thanks Jess! I missed writing this story, it's a fun one! :)

P.S: don't feel like you need to ♥ It's really different from this stuff :) x

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Aw, poor Connie! No! :( Stupid James! If i didn't love him so much i'd hate him right now :D Amazing chapter! You rock!
Please update soon! Im SO favouriting this and you!
100/10! Yes, THAT epically awesome :P
Becky

Author's Response: Feel free to hate James, don't let other James's bias your hatred for this James. Aww, thank you! :) ♥

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Aw, such a good first chapter! I LOVE the idea for this fic, i can't wait to see where you take it! Connie is so cool - love them muggle glasses ;) Amazingly written! :)
Becky
10/10! Love your writing!

Author's Response: I'm glad you like it! Thank you ♥

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I'm going to have to bring out my social skills, dust them off and then actually use them.

Story of my life. *sighs* Everything seems so much easier behind a computer. Anyway, I thought this was another excellent chapter. I wish more would have happened though because I think this could have fit in with chapter one but then again I'm not the writer and you need a balance of introducing characters and plot points. I wonder what James is working on...hm...sneaky James, sneaky, sneaky James.

Author's Response: The next chapter will definitely be longer, quite a bit happens. A lot happens before we get to the point I intend on ending it.

Life on the computer is so much easier, Connie is an internet addict.

James is working on many things and I think they're pretty cool!

Nell :) xx

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hahaaa, i loved this chapter. molly makes me laugh, and im glad to see that there is some of the longbottom family in this story :)

hm... i feel like we're getting a little closer to the reason that james is mad at connie - and i think that andrew might have had something to do with it, what with him asking her whether she was still mad at him.

and the update wasnt that bad! there are some authors that are a /lot/ worse.

ellie :) xx

Author's Response: Hola Ellie! :)

I'm glad Molly makes you laugh, I don't want to fall into the trap of the useless best friend, who gets forgotten in the midsts of romance.

Eh, we're not close at all. ;)

Nell :) xx

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Yay, an update! I was a bit worried this was going to be one of those great starts that never gets off the ground... I worry, because I write tons of them, hahaha.

I think Connie is really funny. The internet bit was hilarious, I choked on my orange juice when Molly announced the bit about getting the house 'interneted'. It's interesting to see the interplay of magical and muggle, kind of the same way it's interesting to watch teenagers explain texting to their grandparents. Also, it's really funny :D

And, I sense melty times in the future for Andrew, because 1) I love Neville Longbottom and 2) I love Neville Longbottom. Naturally, his offspring should be equally lovable, and I think he will be. Over all, though, you've got a really good start on next-gen, and you've avoided the cliche of everyone being exactly their parents. I like it, particularly James, the geeky mama's-boy.

My favorite bit was at the end, where Connie realizes she's been 'replaced' by this Kendra girl. I think we've all been there, and you did it really well, without getting over dramatic. Connie's really interesting, and I can't wait to see where this goes next. Update soon!

-Elle :)

Author's Response: I will finish this story, I can't stand not finishing things, it begins to eat at my soul.

I have to say it's one my favourite aspects to write in this story. I had to teach my grandma how to use her laptop, so it's an experience I can relate with.

Thanks for that, I wasn't trying to avoid cliches, it just happened, but I'm happy that I have. I would really love to see a next gen with a stupid Rose it would make my day.

Thank you for the lovely review! :) xx

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great chapter!!! can't wait to read about an intoxicated Connie

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. I'm nervous to write an intoxicated Connie

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This was a great start. I love the story please update soon. 9/10 : )

Author's Response: The next chapter is in the queue :) Thank you ♥

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I really like the first chapter. Definitely interested in reading more about what happened two years ago and all of the tension between Connie and James. Update soon, pretty please?

Author's Response: I'll try, I'm glad you like it :)

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Um, I love this immensely you fantastic writer. I can't wait for more and I can't wait to see where this story goes :) Deffoes going on my favourites list xx

Author's Response: Aww, thank you but I'm not :) xx

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I am loving this story, Connie is such a strong and amusing character and I love the way you describe her. I can't wait to see her interact with more magic and I'm wondering how awkward it will be when everyone meets her. I'd quite like to see her showing them muggle stuff as well. I think if Connie was a real person, I'd be friends with her. Keep writing, you have me addicted!

Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoy it, there's actually going to be a lot of muggle and magical items in this story as Connie is hyperaware of these things. The next chapter involves phones! :)
Thanks for the review :)

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This story seems uber interesting. I really hope u update soon cause Im totally hooked :D

Author's Response: Thank you! I should be updating soon! :)

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Great chapter I'm intrigued. Hope you post an update soon!

Author's Response: I should hopefully be posting it into the queue, tomorrow :)

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