Oh, PS here's a virtual cookie! (:::) It's chocolate chip!Author's Response: Thank you, that's my favourite :) Report Review
I. LOVE. THIS STORY. I love how it's not only 3 different points of view, but that each girl is completely different and has her own story to live. And I really like this quote:
I started to walk up the staircase and Albus, stupidly, started after me. As soon as he set a foot on the staircase, it turned into a giant slide, and both he and I slid down, landing in a pile at the bottom of the stairs. He started to laugh, but I, not seeing anything funny about the situation, stood up, dusted myself down and climbed along the railing up to the girls’ dormitory without so much as a backwards glance. Which was good. Because if I had looked back, he would have realised that I was crying.Author's Response: N'aww love tht bit too :/ Rose is too cute :D Thanks Report Review
Me likey! I really like this story and I'm eager to read the rest. So I'm gonna go do that now. See you next chapter!!! :DAuthor's Response: Hahaa thanks :) see you then :D Report Review
This fanfic is one of the best I have read and beats mine by a mile, you kept to the story really well and I Like the way you switch characters,please please write more soon!Author's Response: Thank you! What's yours, I'd love to check it out? Thanks for reviewing :) Report Review
Oooog, side POVs! Now I'm really excited for the master plan... so keep updating! (:
~KhanhAuthor's Response: The master plan will be the epitome of epicness! I'm doing edits at the moment, haven't been on this story in ages and none of it feels quite right :L but will have new stuff up soon! Report Review
Lolol, you go Rosie! Go win that Malfoy kid back! :DDD
~KhanhAuthor's Response: YES! Best moment :L Thanks Report Review
Scorpius likes Lily?! Whoa, complication. Haha, I love Lily's, James's, and Albus's relationship. :DDD
I still love the Rose and Lily POV the best, since there isn't really much of Victoire...
~KhanhAuthor's Response: Yeah, lots of people are saying that, I really need to work on Victoire... :) Yeah, Lily, James and Albus are like me and two of my best guy friends, who are like brothers. Report Review
Ohohoho, Harry Potter as the DADA teacher? This is going to be good, I can just tell. (:
~KhanhAuthor's Response: Good stuff :D I always imagined Harry doing so many different things, so I decided I might as well stick him in a classroom and see how he responds... haha I feel like an evil puppet master :) Report Review
Awww, so sad at the end. ):
I hope Rose and Albus can mend their friendship...
I love how you gave all of the characters a bit more depth than the obvious cliche stereotypes... Great job! (:
~KhanhAuthor's Response: Thanks! I just got so bored of reading about spoiled Lilys and depressed Roses, so I thought I'd make them more interesting... each POV is kinda like a different side of me, so their words and their thoughts just come really easily to me. Report Review
Great story. So far I like Lily's POV the best, maybe because she's just starting so things are a bit more exciting? Or maybe because of who her dad is. :DDD
By the way, Harry is supposedly head of the Auror Department, not "unemployed." You might want to change that...
Other than that, pretty good. Nice job (:
~KhanhAuthor's Response: Oh whoops, did you read that on Pottermore? Because I didn't get in early, my Internet was down for about a month just when I found about it... But hey the world's conspiring against me. Thanks for the review :) Report Review
I love that you included the POVs of the minor characters in this chapter.
I really like Tim. I think you created a really ineresting character. I love the rest of them too.
I hope you keep writing the story.Author's Response: Thanks :) I love Tim too :) thanks so much for reviewing! Report Review
Since I can`t send you cookies I`m leaving you a review ;)
I think your story is nice so far. I like the way you spred it in the three points of view. That makes it really interesting.
just one little thing I noticed: in the first chapter you wrote that Rose is now in third year and in this chapter you wrote, after the flashback: "And now, exactly one year from that day...", so she would be in second year. I don`t think that is really importand, I just noticed it.
I`m really looking foreward to read the rest so I`m off to the next chapter. I really enjoy the story.Author's Response: Thanks for pointing that out! Im doing a big edit at the moment, just done chapter one, but I'll fix that ASAP :) Report Review
I love this story sooo freaking much! I keep having the feeling that your a fellow starkid! I love it so much keep on writing! :)Author's Response: Thankyou :) reviews literally make my day! Report Review
PLEASE, PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!
I love your story!Author's Response: May not be happening any time soon, but thank you so much for your review :) Report Review
I enjoyed everyone's perspectives on this whole love... polygon thing... ahaha... TIM/ROX for life!Author's Response: Definitely a love polygon LOL your review made my day! I love Tim and Roxanne too, don't worry, more on the way from them :) Report Review
I see dark skies ahead for the weasley+potter+delacour girls...
yeees you've made it Rosie+Scorpie... my heart is singing. heartheartheartAuthor's Response: goodgoodgood :D thanks so much xx Report Review
aww mannn. um so.
I'm not the hugest fan of Scorpily. I'm kinda hoping that it won't come to that... ^o^;; It's just a stupid preference... I don't particularly have any reasons for it. I started next-gen fics with Rosius, so anything else feels like a betrayal. ahhaa
That being said, I think your shifts in POV are excellent. They are well timed and move the plot forward.
I ADORE your Lily. I love Rose and Victoire too, but I think your Lily steals the show. She's just so vivacious and cool for an eleven year old. haha. What I would give to be a first year at hogwarts...
sighsighsigh...Author's Response: Don't worry, I'm not a huge fan of Scorpily either (brilliant name by the way), Rose/Scorpius forever, so don't worry, without ruining it for you, there's plenty of Rose/Scorpius on the way :D thanks for the review, I love Lily too :) Report Review
heehee: "I'm SOO GONNA PASS MY DEFENCE AGAINST THE DARK ARTS NEWT!"
That was lovely. :D Urggh stupid hoes. "like oh-em-gee Albus Potter is so fit! When we date I'm gonna call him Albie."
Great chapter. And I love Tim too. The sad part is something like that's happened to me too. Except we're not like BFFs now... :(Author's Response: Argh God yeah that girl is so based on someone I know. LOL. Thanks so much for the review :) Report Review
**cringe** okay so bad news first: I'm not a fan of the flashbacks... There were too many of them all clustered together to have the impact it should've had. The flashbacks, instead of being fleshed out, were bits and pieces of Rose's memories that oculd have been just told through narration.
That being said, I think Rose's story is a compelling one. I like the spin on how Albus gravitated towards James because he was the "cool older brother." Hmph! Well Rose will be hot. So THERE!
Good transitions from train to Hogwarts.
Oh~! LOVE LOVE LOVED the Sorting Hat's song.Author's Response: Oh thanks, constructive criticism is always good! And Rose will so be hot, if Cintia Decker is anything to go by ;) And thanks, I ended up spending about an hour on that, with help from my dad and a rhyming dictionary! LOL :) Report Review
I like ALL of your POVS. I think my favorite would have to be Lily's actually. The magic of finally starting hogwarts has such a wonderful quality about it. Lily's happiness is infectious. I love how family dynamics are played out here! Plus - Redhead!Victoire is such love. I bet you she's gorgeous though in everyone else's minds. Oh... your picture for chapter one doesnt work. :D
I'm interested to see where this fic goes.Author's Response: Oh thanks for pointing that out! Must fix :) Victoire should so up her self-esteem :D Report Review
hmm this is really interesting so far! I think i like rose the best, then Lily, then victorie. All the different characters in the weasley/potter clan and all their friends are a little hard to keep track of, but the detail is amazing and the characters seem so realistic. just curious, why did you name the chapter 1.09.2017?Author's Response: Oh, I'm such a massive nerd with no life that I managed to work out that two years after the last chapter of DH would be 2017, and the first of the ninth (September) sooo. Thanks for review! :) Report Review
Yay, finally another chapter!!!
So much goes on in the students' heads during breakfast. You should do another chapter like this, in the point of view of those surrounding the three. I'd like to see James and Scorpious's inner workings sometime =) Another amazing chapter, please update soon =)
- Alie VAuthor's Response: Oh yeah, doing the boys POVs next... bit of writers block though :/ Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
This story is awesome. I hate Lily and Scorpious. GO SCROSE! ;D
Update soon. :)Author's Response: Oh God me too. Think I might have just ruined the ending :P Thanks for reviewing, I'll update soon :) Report Review
Hahaha I love this story. You're doing really well, update soon!
10/10Author's Response: Thanks so much! I've got the next chapter in the works, nearly finished xx Report Review
I read this chapter a while ago and still can't find the words to capture the awesomeness of this chapter. Hope there's an update coming soon =)
- Alie VAuthor's Response: Aw thanks, that's so sweet! I had a MAJOR case of writer's block for a couple weeks back there, but as soon as the queue opens up again I will have Chapter 6 straight in there :) Thanks so much! Report Review
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