I love this story! The first chapter really got me interested, you know. Usually, I hate stories with OC characters, but this one was very good!Author's Response: Thank you! I hope you continue to enjoy it!
Thanks for reviewing :) Report Review
So they both have famous parents, they're overshadowed by. The both have only on difference between their physical appearance and this famous parent and they are both losing that difference. They're about to be thrown into ancient runes together.
Still don't know where this is going or what type of story you are trying to write here. The writing is good I just think you could have made your two characters more unique and more approachable or motivated. They both wish to be different but are unwilling to do anything about it.
Maybe your saving this for later, but want to know now!
Hope you post soon.Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! The idea that they are so similar yet aren't aware how similar they are is a big part of this story.
I hope you continue to read and review. I'm always looking for ways to improve! :) Report Review
Hmmm I think Ms Porter and Mr. Potter may be destined to spend some time together. Still unsure where this garden path is leading ... but you still have me wanting to find out.
Will 3rd year bring romance, danger or deeper introspection?
Had hoped for a more definite direction, but I'm still reading the next chapter. Report Review
Nice introspective feel to this, interested to see where your going to take it. Little short for an opening chapter, for my liking but hey ... that's just me.
Keep up the good work. Report Review
Great chapter ! I can't wait to read more !Author's Response: Yay!! Thank you so much! Your reviews really mean a lot to me! I am working on Chapter 4 and hope to have it in the queue soon!
Once again this was a great chapter !
I don't know how I would react to being deaf, but I would certainly take the news badly !
Please update soon :)Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I'm glad you are liking my story so far. Now that the main characters have been introduced, I can start writing the better part of the story! :) Report Review
I love it !
You really are a great writer !
Please update soon :)Author's Response: Thank you, thank you!!
I have chapter 2 just about ready to submit so it shouldn't be too much longer. I am so glad you like it so far and hope you continue to read and enjoy! :) Report Review
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