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Review #26, by StormThief17 Stardust

16th June 2012:
Hi, StormThief here with your review! :)

Wow! This was very good! It is a very different style than what I usually read, but very refreshing. The use of metaphors was skillful, and I especially liked "He moved through life fueled on the words and praise of them, that faceless mass that both plants and uproots the stuff of dreams". It really made me think!

My favorite line was "And by setting out to gain it--it vanished." That just blew me away. It was a perfect ending!

I really can't find much wrong with it! I wish it were longer because I enjoyed it so much, but the length works great for the story. Good job! Sorry I don't have any constructive criticism to offer, this was just a fantastic story! Keep it up!

~StormThief17

Author's Response: Thanks so much for leaving such a speedy review -- I'm very happy you liked it! My one-shots always end up a bit different than my longer stories; whereas things like 'Leaping Obstacles' and 'In The Black' are fairly straightforward prose, I've been getting a bit more whimsical with these of late. It's just fun. :D

I worked very hard on that ending line, and I'm glad you appreciated it! And no worries about the lack of constructive criticism -- hard to complain about that. ;) Thanks again for taking the time to stop off with a review!


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Review #27, by MrsJaydeMalfoy Stardust

15th June 2012:
There is really no point in my leaving a review. Why, you ask? Because you already know what I'm going to say. Amazing, fantastic, and hauntingly beautiful. Absolute perfection. The tone in this matches Percy's state of mind... or at least, what I'd expect his state of mind would be. Another well-written, flawless piece! 10/10!

Author's Response: Ahh, Jayde! I'm so pleased you took the time to read this -- I know you definitely didn't have to, and yet seeing your name here really made my day!

Gah, thank you so much for all your kind words. ♥ I'm happy you enjoyed it, too! I love Percy, and he just needs more stories about him. Trufax. Thanks so much for being so awesome! ♥ (Two hearts in this paragraph, because you deserve them!)


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Review #28, by LittleWelshGirl99 Stardust

15th June 2012:
Y-you wrote this in an hour? -runs away to weep- HOW? JUST HOW ARE YOU SUCH AN AMAZING PERSON, YOU?

I suppose you can't really answer that without seeming egotistical but I WANNA KNOW YOUR SECRET 8D Let's leave it as a rhetorical question then.

Just, everything about this. It was so wonderful, you captured the essence of Percy incredibly. I think this line was my favourite 'he was the middleman, firmly planted between the great, and the ordinary'. It's so true of Percy- he's stuck in the middle with people to prove himself to and people to look up to him, and follow his lead. The middle is a hard place.

Nice use of parentheses, by the way! I've experimented with them before as well, and it's a fun writing technique to play around with. I like how you managed to incorporate it into the story.

What a lovely story Jane, slightly melancholy but so very /Percy/. Gah :3

~Annon x

Author's Response: That first paragraph made me laugh so much! ♥ And then, of course, it was hard to explain WHY I was laughing... I mean, I was at work and this story sort of emerged. And that's all I know how to tell you! :D

I love that line, too. :) I'm so happy you liked this! I feel a lot like Percy: Bossy, ambitious, stuck in the middle. Sometimes it's difficult, and I think one of the best thing about the Potter fandom in particular is that there's always someone to relate to.

Ah, I've recently come to adore stylistic parentheticals! I don't really like them in normal, standard prose -- I feel like it detracts from the flow of the story -- but if you're using them with a set purpose, I'll gobble them up. :P

Thank you so much for being willing to come by and read this! It seriously made my day so much when you said you would. And I'm so, SO pleased you enjoyed it! ♥ You are tremendulent. Full stop.


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Review #29, by FallenAmaranth Stardust

15th June 2012:
I don't even know what to say.

Usually when reviewing I will pick out a few grammar mistakes, maybe mention some descriptions that could be worked on, or comment on the characterization, and give advice on how to improve it.

This, this cannot be improved. It's perfect. If I ever read one-shots, it's usually because someone has requested a review, and I am so glad you did just that. Finally being able to actually see Percy's realization of his mistake in such an amazingly beautiful piece of writing is something that I never knew I needed nor wanted, yet now I've read it, it feels like it's lifted such a heavy weight off my mind.

Your writing is far too stunning to be worthy of my review. But you've got one anyway :')

Author's Response: How am I even supposed to respond to this review? I just... Wow. I am blown away -- thank you so, so much!

Percy's a really fascinating character for me, and I think that there's a lot of ill feeling toward him in the fan fiction community (although admittedly now not as much as there once was). His personality so closely matches mine, though, that I love getting the opportunity to write about him. I'm so happy you gained something through reading this; as a writer, that's just incredible to hear.

Gah, I'm so happy you liked this -- and you reviewed it so quickly, too! You've no idea what it means to me. :3 Thank you so much!


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Review #30, by firefly910 Stardust

15th June 2012:
Jane you continue to amaze me with your talent.
I loved the style of this piece. I totally got that it was meant to be Percy's conscience. I think you portrayed his character perfectly. I always imagined Percy to feel as though he needed to life up to what his older brothers had done but not follow in their footsteps.

I feel like Percy, rather like Snape, had a one-track mind. Percy wanted to be successful and because of that other things in his life had to be forgotten.

I'm glad JKR had Percy realise what he had done to his family in DH because most of the time people in Percy's position do realise that they need their families in the end.

Great story :)

Author's Response: For a story that I wrote in about an hour, I'm very attached to it -- and thank you so much for being its first reviewer. :) I'm really happy to hear that you picked up on the conscience thing, too!

Percy and Snape do have fairly similar attributes, and they were both led astray, in their own ways, which is very interesting. Out of all the Potter characters, I know without a doubt that I am most like Percy, and so writing about him's always a bit weird. Hopefully it's not a glimpse into my future. :D

Percy /does/ need his family -- and that, in the end, is his Heart's Desire. :3 Thank you so much for being willing to give this a shot, Callie! It means so much to me that you did! ♥


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