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Review #26, by marauderfan Secrets and Surprises

5th January 2015:
ONE YEAR? HOW HAS HE STAYED THERE THIS LONG WITHOUT TALKING TO HIS FAMILY. oh wait, he has talked to them, but only in letters. And ugh I can't believe he still hasn't corrected Liz's assumption that all of them are dead. After a YEAR? I can't imagine that's going to go over well when she finally does find out.

Gahh that infuriating Statute of Secrecy! As if Charlie needed any more secrets to keep, and that one ehhh is kind of a huge secret. But after everythign else he's keeping hidden, I wonder if he would have told her about being a wizard even if he was allowed to? Probably not.

Grrr I'm irritated at Charlie for proposing to her when he still won't tell her that he's been hiding his family for a year! HE SITS ON A THRONE OF LIES! :p ugh I need to have words with him.

Ok, but when he said she was the Molly to his Arthur *heart melts* awww seriously that's so cute. And the rest of the chapter was adorable, her reaction especially. EEE! :D I'm so happy for them. BUT I'M STILL ANNOYED AT HIS SECRET KEEPING

Awesome chapter Jayde... and sorry about all the capslock! :p

Author's Response: Haha.. I actually LOVE all the capslock - at least I know you're interested!

Yes, the poor Weasleys haven't talked to Charlie in quite a while, I'm afraid. :( At least, not in person. And nope, Charlie hasn't corrected that assumption either - I think it probably won't go over pretty smoothly, also, when/if Liz finds out what he did. :/

Yes, the statue of secrecy definitely gave Charlie an excuse to keep more secrets, but I agree with you - I really don't think he'd have told her even if he could. :(

Awww, don't be too annoyed at Charlie. Things will sort themselves out, I promise. :) I'm glad you thought it was cute, and liked the proposal!

Thank you!

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Review #27, by marauderfan New Development

5th January 2015:

Therefore, Charlie’s main reason for missing his ship that next day haha... he missed THAT ship but he got a different one which is the Charlie/Liz ship. Aha, so clever. :p

I think I had too much coffee, forgive me...

Ahaha, I love that Charlie's first reaction when he finds out Liz wants to be a writer is to think of Rita Skeeter. For shame Charlie, definitely should have read more books :p

I love that Liz convinced him to talk to the girl he likes! And her reaction was so priceless :D I'm so glad they got some time to just chat and get to know each other out of the bar and can actually have each other's attention. Poor Liz, that was an innocent question and there's no way she could have anticipated Charlie's answer, and gah it's so sad because Charlie isn't able to get past his survivor's guilt and lets that stand in the way of moving forward as if he believes he's not allowed to be happy anymore. He needs Robin Williams to step in and repeatedly tell him "It's not your fault," Good Will Hunting style.

Great chapter, Jayde!

Author's Response: Hello again lovely!

HAHAHA! Yes, he caught a new ship alright! :P

Don't apologize - it made me laugh! :D

And yes, Charlie definitely should have read more, so that he wouldn't automatically think of Rita Skeeter - but hey, Liz will show him soon enough that she's nothing like that! *winks*

I'm glad you liked Liz's reaction, and the interaction between those two! And HAHA! We'll hope, for that reason, that Robin Williams makes an appearance in this story... but I kinda doubt it. :/ Lol!

Thank you so much dear!

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Review #28, by Diogenissa After the Battle

19th December 2014:
Allo Mumsy--Happy Hufflepuff Hotseat Day! (a day late) :D

WELL, I must say this is chalk-full of sincere, honest and intense emotion that goes straight for the heart and succeeds more than well--it is intense and tangible, especially from Charlie and your heart goes out to him. It is almost like he is lost in this little world and one he feels safe in and doesn't want to leave (given the circumstances I can't blame him).

Bill's entrance is wonderful--being the older brother he knows Charlie very well as being the 2 eldest. Their connection is lovely and very intimate. No doubt as the eldest, they each feel the obligation to protect not only their parents, their younger siblings but each other, which is also very important and crucial. I love how Charlie comes to realize this is what Bill is there for in part. You can see and feel that closeness.

"Instead of answering his eldest son’s question, Arthur simply bit his lip and nodded his head slowly. “It’s your brother’s funeral,” he finally replied a few seconds later, sounding as though he was on the verge of tears. “I know it’s going to be hard, but your - your mother really needs you right now, and so does George.”" -- This entire paragraph sent shivers all over me, as it emphasizes the overall sense and need of a family to come together and support one another completely through such a time of tragedy. It is very pronounced and tangible here and you conveyed it very well through Arthur's eyes.

Powerful ending -- really sums up the whole of the chapter and all the emotions and feelings running through Charlie throughout.

Overall, straight to the heart as I said, hits home and a fantastic opening chapter. Very strong, beautiful and spot-on characterization along with the emotions. Beautifully done and thank you for a wonderful chapter (story)!

Karen xoxo

Author's Response: HELLO LOVELY!

I am SO sorry it has taken me this long to respond to your amazing review!

Awww, thank you for your comments about the emotions being real and sincere! That means so much to me!

I'm glad you like the connection between Charlie and Bill - that came across very well I think! ::)

:O Wow. I feel so flattered that my story gave you shivers! It feels so good to hear that I conveyed the emotion from Arthur that well! Thank you!

Thank you SO much for this amazing review!

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Review #29, by Your Secret Santa Six Months Later

19th December 2014:
Awww Charlie got a girl! Sort of. AW!
Okay now I REALLY want to give him a bear hug!

Now to the serious business. I love that Charlie tried to escape to the US. I can totally see that being a place that nobody would look for him. Seriously, why would Charlie be in the US? I also love the fact that he was so baffled by all of the muggle travel restrictions. The whole part with the passport made me smile.

I also love the way you characterize Elizabeth. She seems really sweet, but has an air of mystery. I can't wait to get to know her better. I love the way that Charlie gets all nervous around her, but tries to make sure he doesn't embarrass her. That is really cute.

I think the whole theme with guilt is really important and interesting, and I can't wait to see where it takes him. I have a feeling he won't be going home anytime soon, but how will the guilt continue to effect him? Really interested to see how it plays out.

Once again this is an amazing chapter! I love the story, and I don't know why I haven't read it yet. I love it! I hope you are having a fantastic day!

~Your Secret Santa
P.s. Do you know why there is a \ after every contraction? I'm not doing it on purpose, I swear!

Author's Response: Hello again! :D

Haha, yes! Charlie got a girl! lol. Feel free to give him a big bear hug as often as you want! :P

Haha, yes, those were exactly my thoughts in having him escape to the US, and with having him baffled by muggle transportation rules, etc. I'm glad you liked it!

And YAY for liking Liz! I've really started to love her, also - she's definitely very sweet, but there's just something mysterious about her as you said. Hm.. I wonder what? :P

Yes, guilt is definitely very important here, and will continue to be throughout the story. Let's just wait and see where it takes him! *winks*

Thank you SO much - I'm so glad you like it and I'm hoping to have more for you to read soon!

(And I don't see any /s! I don't know what was going on! )

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Review #30, by Your Secret Santa Enough

19th December 2014:

Ok, now on a more calm note...
Once again you were able to write a beautiful chapter. You portray Charlie so perfectly! I love him so much, and right now all I want to do is give him a big bear hug!

I love the confrontation scene with Rita. I think you wrote her character perfectly, and it made me scream with anger! It was perfect! I could totally see her saying all of the wretched things she said, and now I want to punch her in the face. The fact that you made me feel those emotions through writing is incredible!

You are a very talented writer and I can not wait to read more! Sorry this was a short review, but if you will excuse me I need to go read more.

~Your Secret Santa

Author's Response: Hahahaha!! Oh my goodness, this review made me laugh so much! :D

Awww, thank you for your comments about the chapter, and Charlie! I'm glad you've grown to love him, and I really want to hug him too, after all the torture I'm putting him through. :(

Oh no! Haha! I hope you didn't do TOO much screaming because of Rita, but I love that you think I wrote her character so perfectly that it really made you feel those emotions! You're not the first to say you want to punch her! Haha! :P

Thank you SO much! And haha, don't worry about the short review, it's perfect!

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Review #31, by Freda_and_Georgina The Other Secret-Keeper

18th December 2014:
Walking into a story called 'keeping secrets', I kind of expected a chapter like this one where several 'game-changers' (so to speak) are thrown at once. I think Liz moved quickly through the shock portion of hearing a secret (in my opinion, it goes denial, shock, anger) but the anger portion was definitely necessary. Can someone have magical powers and not use them for years/not know about them after a couple decades? Doesn't matter, you made it possible in this case.

Excellent chapter in an excellent story.

Author's Response: Hi ladies!

Thank you so much for this amazing review, and I'm so sorry it has taken me this long to respond to it!

Yes, I think the title really does prepare you for what's coming! :P And yes, Liz's anger was definitely necessary. let's just hope it's short-lived. :)

As for not knowing about their magical powers - well.. we'll see! *winks*

THank you so much! ♥

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Review #32, by likeness_of_a_seabird After the Battle

18th December 2014:
Hufflepuff Hot Seat Review!

Aw, poor Charlie! It's so heartbreaking to see him in such a state. And he thinks he's to blame for Fred's death? That's even more heartbreaking!

I loved how you portray Charlie: to me, he really comes across as someone who is mourning for his dead brother and who can't face his living family because he thinks he is responsible for his brother's death. I also liked how you made Bill and Charlie to have a special bond between them because they are the two eldest siblings. That makes perfect sense.

As much as I liked the beginning and the interaction between Charlie and Bill, the best (and the most heartbreaking) part of the chapter was Charlie speaking to Fred. I could literally feel his grief and guilt radiating from the words and that made me tear up a little bit. I hope he'll be able to open up to someone at some point and, more importantly, forgive himself.

This was a great chapter and I'm looking forward to reading more!

- Emmi

Author's Response: Thank you SO much for this lovely review, and I'm sorry it has taken me so long to respond to it!

Yes, it's really heartbreaking to see Charlie so convinced of his guilt. :( But, I love that you loved my portrayal of him. I promise, he won't be this down forever. :)

And thank you for your comments about Bill and Charlie's relationship! That will play a big part in later chapters! *winks*

Aww! Oh no! I didn't mean to make you tear up! But I'm very glad that the emotion came across there well.

Thank you so much Emmi!

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Review #33, by writeyourheartout After the Battle

18th December 2014:

Ugh, what a sad opening chapter! Why was there no warning of the Fred feels that would happen?! Bad Jayde!

hahaha I tease, I tease. Really, though, as someone still in denial of Fred's death (outside of writing it myself, because I am a walking contradiction), this chapter really hits hard. I liked seeing this from Charlie's POV, though. Normally I see stories about the aftermath of losing Fred from George's POV - and once from Percy's - but I've never read one based around Charlie's reaction, and it was really emotional and opens up the fact that while George probably feels it the most, the rest of the family is heartbroken as well, and that counts double for Charlie, I think, seeing as he's really the least featured of the Weasley kids in the books.

I really liked the relationship you created between Charlie and Bill. Being the two oldest, it makes a lot of sense that they would be close and that they would understand each other the way we see them do here.

This part here just about killed me: Bill had always known how to comfort Charlie, and Charlie knew that Bill would be able to comfort him now... but Charlie didn't want to be comforted. A part of Charlie somewhere deep inside wanted to keep suffering in silence, to continue punishing himself with seclusion and guilt. - Gah, that's so, so sad and painful and raw and true. Survivor's Guilt is a very real thing, and it's reflected perfectly here. It's so hard to be the one who's left behind with nothing but these 'If only...' scenario's running through your head. You always think if you'd done one little thing differently, then things would have ended up differently, and that turns into blaming yourself. It's a deep, dark hole to dig yourself into, and I hope to see in later chapters that Charlie doesn't dig himself too much deeper into that abyss, because it is hard to crawl out of. Poor guy. :(

Ah, and then this line! Looking into the eyes of Ron, Percy, and Ginny would only cause him to wonder if they realized, as he did, that Fred's death was entirely his fault. - No, Charlie! It's not your fault! Gah! I just want to grab him by the shoulders and shake some sense into him! And that feeling of wondering if other people might blame you, too... Oi vey. You better be nicer to him later in the story, is all I have to say! ;)

The ending line was really powerful. That apology really makes an impact and hits you right in the feels. It was an excellent way to end the chapter.

I really enjoyed this, Jayde! I think it's a great, albeit terribly sad and heavy, opening chapter! I look forward to seeing where it goes from here! Good job! ^.^


Author's Response: I don't even know what to do with this amazing review, and I'm so sorry that it has taken me so long to respond to it! *Squishes*

Maybe I should go back and include a 'Fred feels' warning in the summary, for future readers. haha! I really didn't mean for this chapter to hit as hard as it did, but it's kind of necessary for what's going to happen later on *grins evilly* :P

Yes, I think most people DO focus on George's reaction to Fred's death - Charlie is just totally under-represented in the series, so here's to changing that! :P

A lot of people have commented on the relationship between Bill and Charlie and how it makes sense, and I'm so glad you liked it, as well! It will play a huge part in later chapters! *Winks*

Yes, survivor's guilt is very real and hard to overcome, and poor Charlie is stuck in the middle of it. I think he will improve, though, just give him some time. :)

Haha! You're not the first to want to grab Charlie by the shoulders and shake him! But I promise, I will be nicer to him in later chapters! :D

I'm glad you liked the ending and thought it was powerful. And I look forward to your reaction of what happens later!

Thank you SO MUCH! ♥

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Review #34, by marauderfan Six Months Later

17th December 2014:
Haha, I love that he chose to get to America not on a plane, which would be the easiest, but on a ship. I mean, as a sailor I fully support this choice. But it still makes me laugh.

I can definitely understand how his planned escape from his past didn't work out as it just isolated him even more and gave him even more space to think about Fred's death, which is the opposite of what he was trying for. It does make sense for him to return now too, as Rita Skeeter probably still wouldn't be hounding him six months later. You wrote his loneliness very well, time seemed to have just gone by in a haze, and the only interesting thing is when he meets people in the bar.

The introduction of Liz was so great - she is quite a character! Telling her life story to a stranger in the bar, it was quite funny and I love that she caught herself right after it and mentioned how weird it was. She seems like the sort of person who has few secrets, if any, so she's already a perfect contrast to Charlie. I liked how instantly taken they were with each other! However it does put a spanner in the works in terms of Charlie's planned return to his family. Then again, I believe it's winter by this point in the story, and who wants to cross the Atlantic Ocean on a ship in the winter? Ew. Yeah, stay there Charlie :D I am really looking forward to see more of Charlie and Liz interacting!

Another excellent chapter, Jayde! :)

Author's Response: Hahah! I figured getting Charlie to America on a ship would be a little less muggle, therefore he'd be slightly more comfortable with it. :P I'm glad it made you laugh!

Yes, this escape definitely turned out to be the exact opposite of what Charlie needed/hoped for!

Haha! I'm so glad that Liz has been received so well by my readers! I really love her myself, also, she's adorable! :P And yes, it's winter, it's cold, and there's a girl who's interested in you.. stay there Charlie! :P

Thank you SO MUCH for another incredible review! ♥

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Review #35, by marauderfan Enough

17th December 2014:
Okay. After getting distracted at your Poe-inspired fic (and I saw there's another one! but I'll get to that next time, I guess :P ) I'm here to show some love for Keeping Secrets!

Gah, I can't even imagine how horrible it would be, not only to be suffering after your brother's death and all the other consequences that come with a huge war, but having mobs of reporters outside your house! Ugh! I don't blame Charlie for hiding.

I think it was quite sensible for him to go back to work though and I could really understand that as diving into work and having all these important distractions is, for me, a familiar antidote to grief. Well, except that then he had Rita Skeeter following him there and essentially rubbing salt into all the wounds, I can't believe she was so vicious and horrible! (actually, I can believe that) Poor Charlie, I just felt so awful for him as he completely broke down.

I'm glad he thought to leave a note for his mum when he disappeared - she would absolutely worry out of her mind and so I'm glad she's at least aware of why she won't be hearing from him.

Ahh so sad and I hate Rita Skeeter. That is all.

Author's Response: Kristinnn. ♥ I am So sorry for the completely inexcusable amount of time it has taken me to respond to this lovely review!

Yes, the poor Weasley family can't seem to get a break. :( Happier times are coming though, I promise. :)

And yes, going back to work after losing someone can definitely be a distraction - but it can also be the cause of a breakdown, as we see here... poor Charlie. :(

Yes, he had to at least leave a note for poor Molly- we know she's going to be upset. And I agree, Rita Skeeter is awful. *makes ugly face at Rita*

Thank you again!!

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Review #36, by Your Secret Santa After the Battle

17th December 2014:
Hey MrsJaydeMalfoy!
1st of all I just want to make sure that you know that this is an AMAZING first chapter! It allows the reader to understand the plot, the context, and introduces the characters wonderfully. It really hooks the reader in and makes them want to keep reading (which I will)!

I think you portrayed the grief beautifully. In this one scene you were able to show how everyone deals with the loss of a loved one differently, and that made it that much more realistic. I also love how you showed the guilt that people sometimes feel after a death, especially of someone very close. That feeling that there was something they should/could have done to save them. You wrote this beautifully.

On a happier note I really love your writing in this chapter. You have an abundance of imagery and beautifully crafted sentences that make the story 10x better! You were able to show Charlie, Bill, and Arthur's feelings in a way that was truly amazing. I can tell from this 1st chapter that you are an awesome writer!

Keep up the amazing work, I can't wait to read more!
~Your Secret Santa

Author's Response: It is ABOUT TIME I came and responded to this review! I am so sorry it has taken me SO LONG. I owe a few reviews to people, so I had told myself that I'd give out all the reviews I owe before I responded to my reviews - but that's still no excuse!

I want you to know I appreciate this review, and ALL of your gifts, SO MUCH! ♥

I'm so flattered at your comments and glad that you think this allows the reader to understand everything and really hooks them! I'm excited to continue the story and really hope you will keep reading!

Thank you for your comments about writing grief realistically and beautifully. I've had to deal with losing a loved one before, so I really wanted to do that feeling justice, and I'm glad you feel that I did!

Awww! Thank you so much! *blushes* This is an amazing review, and you were an amazing secret santa! Thank you!

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Review #37, by marauderfan After the Battle

20th October 2014:

So, this is weird but I don't think I'd read much on your author page except the HC story from last year! What?! :O So I'm glad I happened to click on review tag at the right time as it reminded me to go read more of your wonderful work! :D

I've read very few stories about Charlie, so this was a nice change. And aghh, this beginning chapter was just so sad. I suppose everything post-battle of Hogwarts is sad, especially when we're talking about the Weasleys, but you really worked those emotions in and it was powerful.

I also like that you touched on the issue of survivor's guilt - of course Fred's death isn't Charlie's fault, but it's easy to understand why he would feel that way, and his self imposed isolation in his room makes a lot of sense. The contrast you drew between his tough and strong exterior as a dragon tamer, but underneath is really sensitive, was really great and makes him a very real character, and it definitely adds to what I think will end up being an important theme in the story, that of putting up a front (I'm assuming, based on the story title, haha.)

I hope Bill will be able to help him get through it, as they are both suffering the same thing, and Bill totally seems like the sort of person who's good at listening. I love the way you've written him here.

Guh, post-war fics about the Weasleys always make me so sad, but I do love them! This is a great new perspective for a post war Weasley story and really well done on the first chapter! :)

Author's Response: HI there! *hug*

Aw! I'm glad you clicked on the review tag at that time too, because I got this lovely review from you! ♥

It's very true, you certainly don't read many stories about Charlie, and that's partially why I chose to write about him here. There not being a lot of Canon or fanfiction about him made me want to explore him more in-depth, and it also gave me a bit more freedom.

Awww, I know this first chapter is quite depressing, but I promise the whole story won't be that way! And yes, you're right, pretty much anything post-Battle of Hogwarts is going to be sad; I'm glad you thought the emotion was powerful - thank you so much!

I didn't even really realize that 'survivor's guilt' was what I was describing when I first started planning out this story, but that's exactly what it is. And that guilt will play a HUGE part in what's to come later - it's basically the thing that gets the ball rolling with the whole story. And I thought it kind of made sense, in a weird sort of way, for someone with such a rough exterior to be so sensitive on the inside - although I know he's meant to be a bit of a tough guy, I just really saw him a bit differently. I'm so glad that you think it makes him very real, thanks so much!! *hugs*

I hope Bill will be able to help him get through it, too. We shall see. :P

Aw, thank you SO MUCH for this amazing review, dear! It really made my day and inspired me so much! *Squishes*

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Review #38, by cathpath Too Much

10th June 2014:
Ooh, this is really getting going now. Can't wait to find out how
Liz adjusts to all this new information and how, with lots of tea no doubt, they all spill their secrets. How will Charlie react when he finds out about Mulicber? What other unintentional magic has Liz done in her life? Is Liz pregnant?
So many questions!
You are doing such a great job! Keep it up!

Author's Response: Hi there, dear! Thank you SO much for your review!

I'm going to try my best to get started on another chapter right now, (I know it's WAYY overdue!)

Thank you SO much for reading and reviewing!

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Review #39, by AIP Alexander Too Much

29th April 2014:
PLEASE DON"T DROP THE STORY! This is the only story i have ever started and continued reading on Charlie Weasley or any other member of the Weasley family apart from the usual characters (Ron, Hermione, and next generation). Your plot line enthralls your readers to a point it would be cruel to leave your story unfinished

Author's Response: !! Oh my goodness!! Thank you so much!! ♥ This review seriously brought tears to my eyes and made my day!

I am most definitely NOT dropping this story, dear. I'm just having a little trouble making this next chapter cooperate. :P But I'm hoping to have it ready soon!

Again, thank you SO, SO much!! ♥

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Review #40, by Tris  Too Much

29th January 2014:
Very creative. I hope she is pregnant and that was her secret. I hope you update son because this was a cliff hanger that made me want to keep reading!

Author's Response: Thank you so much, I'm glad you think it's creative. As for Liz's secret, hopefully we'll find out soon! :) I'm sorry it was a cliffhanger but so glad that you want to keep reading! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I'm hoping to update very soon! ♥

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Review #41, by slaidback Too Much

22nd January 2014:
Quite the page turner or the internet version of a page turner. Left field subject but good.

Author's Response: Thank you so much, for the compliments and for reading and reviewing!! ♥

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Review #42, by teh tarik Too Much

19th January 2014:

I am so so so happy to see this updated! And...a shoutout!?!? Bawww, I don't deserve it! *hugssquishesglomps*

This was such a fabulous chapter! I'm not sure I can decide which part I like the best, or which part made my jaw drop. I'm really glad that Liz decided to come home after going to her mum's place (and having the second bomb drop on her); I was half-expecting her to run somewhere far away, but I guess she isn't Charlie, and I'm kind of hoping that those two will patch things up between them quickly. I know this is meant to be a really dramatic scene with Liz getting all emotional and such, but I couldn't resist giggling at some of the things she said!

I'm a wizard, too.

And there were no wires or anything!

I think it had something to do with a pig...but that doesn't make sense!

Bahahaha! Sorry Liz, I know you're in a state of shock and all, but still, aahhckjafsdlkf. Liz is seriously adorable here. I love how she throws her arms around Charlie after declaring that she, too, is a wizard, much to his complete shock. And awww, love how he still hugs her back, even if he can't think of anything sensible or decent to say. ♥

I really, really love the idea of Liz magically mending her doll! It's such an original way of showing her magic as a child; I've not come across an idea like this in any other fic on HPFF, so well done on this! I can't remember if I was even helpful this, haha, but anyway, this turned out really well and I'm so pleased.

WHOA Amelia is looking positively murderous! There's so much about Liz's past and family that I can't wait to read about; I know quite a lot has been revealed in the last chapter, but still!! So many questions! The same questions that Charlie is asking himself: how has nobody noticed that Liz has magic, least of all, Liz herself? How does she manage so well with electrical appliances? Did Amelia somehow tamper with Liz's magic (if it's even possible)? WHAT IS AMELIA GOING TO DO TO CHARLIE? AVADA KEDAVRA HIM?

I kind of think that last one is a bit impropable, though. :P

Anyway, I loved this chapter, Jayde! This was wonderfully written, not to mention you ended it on a cliffhanger!!! Hopefully you'll update soon, and if you need any help with anything, my PM box is open! ♥ ♥


Author's Response: TEH! ♥


You're absolutely right when you say "Liz isn't Charlie". The poor girl - even though she's upset with her husband, when she gets in an argument with her Mom, all she wants is his support. *Squees* (Sorry... I'm a total 'Chiz' fangirl. :P) I think it's really good that she didn't run away - otherwise, things would have gotten even MORE complicated... and I don't think poor Charlie could handle MORE complications right now! :(

Teehee - I'm glad those little funny moments had the desired effect. I wanted them to be funny and a bit absurd, but without making Liz seem too Mary-Sue-ish, if you know what I mean. So I'm glad to hear it paid off! :)

I agree, Liz really is adorable. I grow to love her a little more with every chapter I write! ♥

You were most certainly helpful with the doll! Thank you so much! And you think it's an original way to show magic? *blushes* Thank you!! ♥

Yes, Amelia does look extremely upset right now. I'm a little afraid of her at this point... LOL! I honestly hadn't planned for her to show up in this chapter, she just sort of... arrived! Haha! :P And yes, there are still a lot of questions that need answering! I hope to get to answer some of them soon!

I'm so glad that you loved this chapter, and I'm hoping to have an update for you soon! Thank you, again, SO much, for all your lovely, amazing reviews! And I'm sorry it's taken me so long to respond to this one! ♥

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Review #43, by Santa Huffle Shuffler The Other Secret-Keeper

26th December 2013:
You know, since Liz's introduction in Chapter 3, I've been wondering if there was a reason that you made her British and living in the States. TURNS OUT THERE IS ONE: HER MOTHER (AND HER) ARE WITCHES!!! I honestly, honestly did NOT expect this! Whoa, whoa, whoa!! And her father was Mulciber (I think he was a Death Eater or something...). I'm just blown away by the shocking turn that this story has taken!

And poor Liz! I can't help imagining her being all so distraught and running to her mother's house, only to have her own mother wave about a wand and declare that she, too, is magic! Ooh, I've read you responses to your other reviews for this chapter, and I honestly can't wait to read the reason why Liz's magic has yet to show itself (or maybe it has and she just doesn't know it), or how come she's so comfortable with 'technology'. It does sound as though you have a few more surprises up your sleeve!

I love some of the tiny details that you used in this chapter:

The leather of the steering wheel got hot against Liz's forehead, and the air inside the car got stuffy, making it hard for her to breathe.

It made Liz's situation and emotional state so much more convincing, and I guess it really adds to her confusion.

Liz's dad sounds like a completely awful person; I'm kind of hoping she doesn't meet him ever :P I don't think she could handle it, especially not now when she's just found out that everything about her life is a lie. And wow, Amelia's reaction to her husband's rejection is also pretty extreme: to turn her back on the whole wizarding world and leave the country and vow never to have anything to do with magic. It's a really drastic step, and it really does say a lot about how she must have felt, so abandoned and hopeless. I guess Amelia might understand Charlie, if he came clean about the truth of his family? After all, he too, wanted to have nothing to do with magic and ran away from his old life...

Although right now, she sounds absolutely furious at Charlie for being a wizard...eep!!

Absolutely fantastic chapter, Jayde! I'm feeling kinda sorry that there are no more for me to read on! :( Here's to hoping that you'll update really soon! This is a fabulous story and I really enjoy reading it :) Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year, love ♥ ♥


Author's Response: Haha! I'm honestly quite glad that you didn't see this coming! I only hope it wasn't too unbelievable! And yes, Mulciber was a death eater... I guess we'll have to see how that plays into the story. :P And yes, there will be some explanations in later chapters for Liz's seeming lack of magical experiences, as well as the whole 'technology' thing.

I'm glad you liked the details! Description has always been one of my weaker points in writing, so I tried to rectify that some here.

I think you may be right... I'm not sure if Liz would be able to handle meeting her father! But I guess we'll just have to see how that all pans out! *winks*

And yes, you would think that Amelia would be more understanding of Charlie's situation, but she seems more angry right now... what's her problem?!? :P

Thank you again, SO much for all these amazing reviews! I'm hoping to have a new, finished chapter for you to read sometime today! ♥

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Review #44, by The Santa of Secrets Secret Number 1

26th December 2013:
Aaahhh! Cliffhanger!! :( :(

Awww, the big secret was nearly out, I kept wishing for Charlie to hurry up, just break the International Statute of Secrecy or whatever it's called already, to please just wave that silly stick of his and shout a spell, any spell, I could just see that Liz was on the very verge of walking out...and no :( He just lets her go. I suppose this mess is mostly his fault, his keeping secrets from her. This was quite a bit painful to read, that last part of the chapter. I do hope that Liz will come back, or that Charlie will go to her mother's to find her and that the both of them will reconcile soon, without too much heartache in between. I've said this over and over but they're such a lovely couple, really adorable, and you write them so well, their romance and everything, and you write them without too much drama, which is something I like very much when reading romance.

I also loved the way you wrote their married life, especially their happier days! ♥ I couldn't help but snicker each time Charlie confronts Muggle technology and makes all the appliances explode; I always, always love stories with magical folk living with Muggles or attempting to adapt to a Muggle way of life, and that's why your story is just so wonderful and gratifying to read.

Anyway, one more chapter left for me to read and review! :( Here I am hoping that you'll update soon so I can have more of this fabulous stuff! I'll catch up on your next chapter soon.


Author's Response: Aww! :(

I know what you mean... when you finally realize that the truth is starting to come out, you just want to yell at Charlie and make him do something to prove to Liz that this is real. Yes, this really is mostly his fault... but it's hard to be mad at him considering everything he's been through.

Thank you again for another incredible review, and I'm glad that you find Charlie and Liz to be such an adorable couple! :) ♥

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Review #45, by The Secret North Pole Dude Secrets and Surprises

25th December 2013:

This chapter took me completely by surprise, and in an absolutely fabulous way! I don't know which part to squee over first; I suppose I'll go in order. Wow, this is a fantastic chapter! First, I especially liked how there was a bit of a fast-forward in time, in Charlie and Liz's relationship; it doesn't always work in stories, but it works beautifully here in yours, because of the way you open your chapters with the detailed analysis/summary of your characters, so the reader always knows what's going on with them.

Some lines that I really loved from the first part:

Charlie's relationship with Liz, however, was wholly different. He and Liz's relationship had eased the guilt Charlie felt over Fred's death, and had brought him a joy he'd never known; it was exactly what he needed.

Beautifully written, my dear! I love how earnest and sincere your writing is here, how carefully you examine Charlie and his emotional state and his relationship.

...but Charlie soon found that he enjoyed doing things without magic: It helped him to further distance himself from the wizarding world and his guilt.

Aww, this made me a little bit sad, because while Charlie is feeling much better, he still has that residual guilt in him, and the way he shuns the wizarding world is really evidence of that. I do hope he'll be able to reconcile himself with his own guilt, that he'll be able to come clean to Liz about everything - his family, his life and all (I so cannot wait for him to tell her he's a wizard!!!)

And now, time to squee about the proposal.


THAT. WAS ABSOLUTELY FABULOUS AND SQUEEWORTHY. the moment he slipped that "round item" into his drink, I sort of suspected, and my jaw fell open. Wow! I love it! I love the idea of dropping the ring into his drink and how he teases Liz with her "it's bad for business" thing! :P

And awww, awww, Liz!! ♥ She's so lovely...Charlie, why is there an engagement ring in your drink? Seriously, I wanted to reach my arms into your fic and give her a hug and squeal. I love how you've written her reactions! Her whole motor mouth thing, her incoherence and I love the general warmth and friendliness of the atmosphere, the celebratory mood and the bar patrons all joining in the newly engaged couple's happiness.

This was an absolutely fab chapter, Jayde! ♥ I can't wait to read more and see how you deal with Charlie and Liz's engaged life!

Merry Christmas, my dear!


Author's Response: Teehee! I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter so much!! ♥

Thank you for your amazing compliments about my writing. I am definitely unworthy of your high praise. I'm really glad that you felt the time jump worked. As I've told other reviewers, the time jumps really are necessary for the plot I've got in mind, and I really hoped they would work - it's good to hear that they did!

Haha! I'm glad to hear you liked the engagement, as well! I struggled for a while trying to come up with the perfect proposal, but eventually one night I sat down to write and this is what came out! I'm glad you enjoyed it!! ♥

Thank you again!!

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Review #46, by Santa!!!! New Development

25th December 2013:
Ho ho ho, first things first, my dear: MERRY CHRISTMAS, LOVELY!! ♥ ♥ Here's to hoping that you have an absolutely wonderful day with friends and family, stuffing yourself silly with lovely Christmas feast food and enjoying all the good old holiday cheer and all!

So I loved this chapter very much! I absolutely adored that first part, where you dive into a very careful and detailed analysis of Charlie's feelings, and just precisely why he doesn't board that ship to go back to Britain, and what his feelings toward Liz are, and how he acts around clearly know your characters so well, and they're such a joy to read!

Each night he ordered a drink, hoping that Liz would show up before he finished it. On the nights when she worked, he had a few more drinks just to have an excuse to talk to her; on the nights when she didn't work, he left and went back to his apartment as soon as he finished his first glass.

^ THIS. This really speaks volumes about his feelings for her, and I absolutely love it! I also love how clueless he is about his own feelings (and later, how clueless Liz is, as well! They're such an adorable pair!)

I have to say that I admire Liz's patience with that Jeff bloke. He certainly is annoying, but at least he served his purpose! He certainly did bring Charlie and Liz a lot closer to each other, so yay! I LOVE the way Charlie decides to stand up and take action upon realising his feelings, after hearing Liz unwittingly give advice about how he should approach her. That made me giggle a bit; I can imagine Charlie putting his glass firmly down on the counter, pushing his chair back and declaring, Right, Liz, I'd like to walk you home! Or something like that, ahaha!

Awww, poor Charlie! He's still plagued by all that guilt, and I dunno, I really wish he could see that everything that happened to Fred just isn't his fault, and that perhaps it's time to let go of the past. It's certainly getting in between him and Liz, and I do hope he'll recover soon, or perhaps her companionship will help him become muh better.

I absolutely loved that last paragraph from Liz's POV. It's so sweet and lovely and very finely written! Such a perfect way to end the chapter! Really enjoyed this! Merry Christmas once again, MrsJaydeMalfoy ♥ ♥ I will be back to review the rest of your fic before the end of the month!

Author's Response: Hey there! First off, thank you for the lovely Christmas wishes! I had an amazing Christmas, and hope you did, too! ♥

Thank you so much for your comments about the first part of this chapter - I was really worried that I had gone too in-depth with that description... I thought it was a little distracting, so I'm glad to hear it wasn't!

Haha! Your comments about Charlie putting his glass down on the counter made me giggle. I don't know why, but I really DO feel like I know Charlie personally, and that definitely sounds like him! And, as long as that Jeff bloke pushed the two of them together, I suppose we can forgive his annoying-ness. :P

You're right, Charlie definitely needs to realize that what happened to Fred isn't his fault! Let's hope he comes to that realization soon!

Again, thank you so much for this, and all, your lovely reviews! ♥ It's making my day all over again just to re-read and respond to them!

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Review #47, by Santa Claus Is Coming To Your Author Page Six Months Later

22nd December 2013:
Hello again, my dear MrsJaydeMalfoy!! ♥

I'm back, after a period of absence, to deliver some reviews to you! :)

So, I love this story! I love how it focuses on Charlie, because Charlie is SUCH an underwritten Weasley and I can't quite understand it, because he's such a cool character in the books, not to mention he has an awesome tough-guy job as a dragon keeper in Romania. And wow, you really did an excellent (and very heartbreaking) job writing a post-Hogwarts Charlie, devastated and mourning Fred's death along with the other Weasleys. The first two chapters were incredibly difficult to read, with the grieving family, and as if that isn't enough, poor Charlie is being terrorised by that awful Skeeter woman. :P

I loved this chapter here! Mainly because your OC Liz is introduced, and it was really, really interesting reading her interactions with Charlie. She's quite adorable, the way she blurts out her most of her life story to a complete stranger, but I'm guessing it's because she somehow likes him a lot upon first meeting, and that she senses he's an inherently good guy and a trustworthy one to whom she can confide in. At least that's how I'd love to interpret it!

"My mouth doesn't have a filter sometimes. I know you're probably thinking how odd it is for some girl you don't even know to walk up and start talking about your accent."

^ This. So cute and squeeworthy. Charlie is one lucky man. I'm looking forward to see how their interactions with each other will develop! And hopefully Charlie will find some happiness soon.

I especially LOVED the ending sentences of this chapter:
Charlie wasn't sure whether he accidentally overslept the next morning, or he purposely overslept to have an excuse to see Liz again and delay his return home, but one thing was certain: He didn't catch that ship the next day.

Gah! Lovely! There's something so wry about the narration, so lightly humorous that it just really made me smile and squee a bit.

Lovely writing! I'll be catching up on your other chapters soon!


Author's Response: Hello again, lovely! :)

You know what, I completely agree - Charlie really IS an under-written Weasley... I'm hoping I can change that, at least a little! When I first had the idea for this story, I wasn't quite sure WHO to use as the Canon male, and then somewhere on the forums I saw Charlie's name, and it was like an epiphany! I just knew immediately that he was PERFECT for this story! I'm sorry to hear that the first couple of chapters were hard to read, but I really hope that it gets better with the rest of the story!!

I'm glad you like Liz! I'm really rather fond of her, myself!! I think your interpretation of her is pretty accurate - she really does like Charlie at first sight. And her mouth really DOESN'T have a filter - hence her random life-story blurting to a complete stranger. :P

I'm really glad to hear you loved those last few lines, as well! Thank you SO much for this amazing and squee-worthy review! ♥

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Review #48, by marauder5 The Other Secret-Keeper

18th November 2013:
A shocker within a shocker within a shocker sums it up pretty well, I think ;) It was certainly a twist, and it pulled me even further into this story. I'm quite sad that there are no chapters for me to read, but it will make it even more exciting when you finish writing the next one :)

As Liz started telling her mother, the thought hit me that Liz's dad might be a wizard. But I didn't think her Mum would be too! AND Liz. It is believable, though - it seems like Amelia did exactly what Charlie did and sort of fled into the Muggle world. The only thing that I was a little confused about was that Liz had no memory of doing magic as a child. It seems like she should have had some experiences like the ones Harry had before he found out he was a wizard. Of course, maybe she just lived in denial and came up with explanations, with the help of Amelia, or maybe she repressed it from her mind.

I just keep thinking about the next step from here; is Liz going to want to learn magic now? (I definitely would!) Are they all going to return to England and the Wizarding World now? Is that going to make Charlie have to tell her about his family too? And what is she (and Charlie) going to think when they find out that her father was actually a Death Eater? And the Death Eaters killed Fred, which is what caused all of this to start with... And I thought that things were getting messy in the last chapter, haha ;) It is SO good though. I can't wait to get some answers to all of my questions. You are a very talented writer to get me this engaged into the story. This was probably my favourite chapter so far! :) Good luck with writing the continuation (I won't nag you about doing it quickly, because I'm sure you'll do it as quickly as you can anyway).

Author's Response: Haha! Yes, this is quite a shocking chapter! The selfish writer in me is really glad that it's pulled you further into the story! :P

You're right - Amelia really did do exactly what Charlie did... let's just hope that when the two of them discover that, they can bond over it! As for your question about Liz not remembering doing magic as a child, that will be answered in the next chapter, which I am hopefully finishing today!! :)

Hm... I guess we'll have to see what happens with regards to your questions! :P And your questions about what will happen when Charlie finds out who Liz's father is are very good ones! And yes, at some point, Charlie is going to HAVE to tell Liz about his family... let's just hope that's sooner than later!! :)

I'm so excited to hear that this is your favorite chapter so far, and that you think the story is good! :) Thank you SO much for the amazing compliments, and for your amazing reviews! I'm hoping to have a new chapter finished today! *Crosses fingers*

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Review #49, by marauder5 Secret Number 1

18th November 2013:
Wow, what a mess Charlie has created here! But that's what you get for being stupid enough to lie to your wife like that, I suppose... I can definitely see why Liz would start to think that he's crazy, haha! Although I do have to ask - aren't you allowed to do magic in front of a muggle once you've married them? That's what I thought, but I could be wrong. Anyway, I hope he'll get permission to tell her so that he can prove to her that this isn't some mental illness thing, but actually true!

Great chapter, by the way! I'm quite amazed at how you can make it work even with these leaps forwards in time, but you really pull it off perfectly :) I'm going to go ahead and read the next chapter straight away. Great job as always :D I just love this story so much.

Author's Response: Yes, Charlie certainly has made a mess for himself! And you're right, it really IS all his fault! Hm... I'm not sure about whether wizards can use magic in front of their muggle spouses... that certainly is a good question! It would make sense if they could! But for the purposes of this story, we'll just say Charlie doesn't know that... haha! :P

I'm really glad you liked the chapter, and that the leaps forward in time don't mess it up for you! I really don't like doing these big jumps, but in all honesty, the story is more about what happens AFTER Charlie and Liz get married, instead of before. But, I still felt the need to include some details from before, so I sort of HAVE to have the time jumps.

Thank you so much for this amazing review! I'm so glad you love the story!

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Review #50, by marauder5 Secrets and Surprises

10th October 2013:
Oh, my God! This chapter had me going all over the place - if I wasn't in love with this story before, I certainly am now. I absolutely love your writing style - it's so simple and it flows so perfectly, and I read very quickly and then when I get to the end I just go.. what? Already? And I love it! I love love love it! :D

I still haven't lost that feeling of wanting to shake Charlie and make him realize that he's just running from everything. Yes, I see where he's coming from, but I feel like he's losing himself, a little bit, pretending to be all those things that he's not (although I must confess, if Charlie has to get any job in the Muggle world, I can't think of a better one than construction. I don't know why, I just think it fits him perfectly!) If he doesn't go home for George and Angelina's wedding I'll be REALLY upset with him! And don't let him miss the birth of little Victoire :( Haha, I feel like I might be a little too invested in this story, but you should take that as a compliment, because it shows how great it is! :)

And then Charlie reaches the bar and slips something in his drink. I wish you could have had a look inside my brain as I read that part. At first, when you described it as 'small and round' I thought: Oh God, he's going to propose! Yay! And then he put it in his own drink and I got convinced that it was some sort of drug and went: NO! What are you doing? What would Mrs Weasley say? Hahah and then when he asked Liz to check his drink I was SO relieved, because he was just proposing ;)

I'm so happy that they're engaged! For a minute, I wasn't sure if Liz would say yes, but I'm glad she did. However, I hope that Charlie realizes that this means that he HAS to come clean about all those things he is hiding from her, and hopefully she will encourage him to face his family again. And hopefully that will be just in time for George's wedding or Victoire's birth - whatever comes first ;)

GREAT job on this chapter! It was flawless :D

Author's Response: Aww! Yay for being in love with the story!! ♥ And thank you so much for your sweet comments about my writing style... that makes me feel really good and happy!!

I completely understand what you mean about wanting to shake Charlie; I want to shake him myself, sometimes, and I'm writing him! :P Haha! I'm glad you think Charlie being in construction fits him! It was the best job I could think of for him, too!

Haha! I'm glad that the first thing that came to your mind was the ring, I was a bit worried that the readers wouldn't understand what was going on there. In fact, your second idea is EXACTLY what I was worried about, but I'm glad it cleared itself up fairly quickly! :)

You're absolutely right, Charlie is going to HAVE to come clean soon, as you will see VEEERY soon! *winks*

Thank you so much for this amazing review! ♥ I can't tell you how much I appreciate it!!

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