A great chapter with a slightly fluffy end.
The story continues to be an excellent piece of work.
Well done, keep it u[pAuthor's Response: I'm glad you found it fluffy :) I was going for that! Thanks! Report Review
I clicked on this story today and read all 15 chapters in one sitting. This is a marvelous story and you have a remarkable grasp of each character that already existed plus you have created characters that are fascinating in their own right. I am completely hooked and can't wait to read more. Please update soon.Author's Response: THank you so much for this! I'm I/P the newest chapter so hopefully you don't have long to wait! I'm so glad you were able to enjoy my story. It's a very precious thing to me. Report Review
I love this chapter :) It made me smile to see Draco and Hermione's relationship grow so much in that one hug and then for them to be able to share that laugh together. Draco's awkward question seemed spot on as well, and the avoiding eye contact scene made me laugh. Great job! Please keep writing more!Author's Response: I'm so glad you were able to see that growth and that you still found the characters likable despite the fact that their actions were considerably lighter than before. Thank you so much and I shall continue! Report Review
Thank Merlin Sybil wasn't in this chapter. XP I probably would have raged a bit.
Anyways, very cute chapter. I'm really glad that Hermione's dad is okay. I can't imagine what would have happened to her if he had passed. It makes me sad to think that she would turn in on herself again.
Loved the ending though. Really sweet. Hugs and laughs.. And he's making her dinner! Haha
"Hugging was not in the Draco-Hermione Friendship Booklet." was my favourite line in the chapter.
As always, can't wait for the next one.
BrittaniqueAuthor's Response: :) I would've killed Sybil off if I'd written about her two times in a row. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this! That line was my fave as well :) Report Review
Kjskhsbhkbsvbfkhbfvs I have no words for this story. Its so fantastically brilliant. I think I've been reading this story from almost the beginning and it blows my mind every time you update. Seriously. I write too and it's stories like your's and authors like you who inspire me so much :) Thank you.
This was seriously amazing :D Update soon and keep writing, you are great. xxAuthor's Response: You completely made my day with this, I'll have you know! :) Thank you for taking the time to let me know what you thought of it! Report Review
This is truly strange. You just updated this story as I was finishing the last chapter. I'm so excited! :D So even though you didn't request this review, I'm reviewing anyway:
Characterization: Woohoo! Draco is so sweet! He's helpful and caring and he hugged her! I'm so excited about that hug. And Hermione is trying to hard to hang out to herself and things just keep beating her down. It's so rough. I hope things start looking up soon. And I really hope they deal with Sybil soon and get her out of the picture. Draco and Hermione are wonderful together and I love the way you're writing them.
Descriptions: Spectacular. I loved the way you described her little cottage and the hug they shared. Wonderful.
Emotions: These were probably the best part of the chapter. I really felt Hermione's panic and sadness and exhaustion through everything that was happening. I do wonder how Draco was feeling through the hug though. Probably awkward, haha.
Plot: I love this story. And things are hectic again with Sybil and Mr. Granger, but Hermione and Draco are staying strong through it. I hope that continues. And I hope Sybil's threats don't ruin things between my favorite couple ever.
Interactions: THAT HUG. I loved it! That was my favorite part of the whole chapter. I'm so glad their friendship is evolving. And you're taking things at the perfect pace. Yay!
Keep up the wonderful work. Let me know when you update. GREAT job.
--EmilyAuthor's Response: Aaahh!!! Thank you so much for all the reviews! When I popped on and saw how many you left INCLUDING my new chapter (which IS strange but amazing that it popped up while you were reviewing) I was just ecstatic!! Thank you so much!
I'm glad that you liked the growth of the two characters in this one. I wanted to keep their relationship growing but still without making it too weird. I am trying to work on description in addition to all the emotional stuff that I like focusing on so I'm happy that you caught that! Report Review
And, it's me! I can't believe you're leaving me with such a cliff-hanger! You HAVE to return to my review thread when you've written more, okay? :]
Characterization: Ahh, I'm so glad they're friends. Have I mentioned that? And Ginny was pretty great in her scene too. Hermione's finally getting over her prejudice, and that stupid Sybil girl shows up. Didn't I say in my last review that she was going to be trouble? I knew it. Ugh. What a pain. I hope Draco finds a way to tell Hermione the truth before that other woman does.
Descriptions: Quite well done. I really felt like I was hanging out in a cafe in the middle of summer with them. And I could practically see Draco's apartment and that skanky woman bugging him. UGH.
Emotions: Ah, Draco's emotions were perfect. I know he's being "good" now and all, but I really wish he'd just hex that Sybil woman into a slug or something. She's REALLY grating on my nerves.
Plot: Hmm, things really are heating up! I really want to know how this conflict is going to be resolved. And Jemima? Has she been mentioned before? Sounds a little familiar. GUESS WORK: I'm guessing she had Draco's son and then left him. Hm, hm? Yes/no? You don't have to tell me. I'm just pontificating.
Interactions: I loved Hermione and Draco's coffee "date." They're so good together. Their friendship is adorable. And the interaction between Sybil and Draco held JUST the right amount of tension. Perfect.
Style: I love your style, haha. It's so refreshing. I love how non-cliche it is almost all the time.
Pacing: THINGS ARE PICKING UP AND YOU LEAVE ME WITH A CLIFFHANGER. RAWR. Okay, really though: I'm very excited to see what happens next. The story is flowing so nicely that I'm truly annoyed that I can't read more right now, haha.
Again, you're doing wonderfully. Please let me know when you update. I'm loving this story.
--EmilyAuthor's Response: Lol, you got lucky miss because my chapter made it through the queue before you signed off :)
I'm going to stay mum on Jemima's story until I'm ready to reveal it! I'm glad that it's getting exciting for you since I meant it to be so. Yay on my characterization still pulling through! Report Review
Me again. Am I getting repetitive?
Characterization: Yay! They're friends! (Sidenote: I don't mind the time-jump at all.) Continuing--Hermione is great here. She's finally making actual steps to moving on with her life. She's still sort of prejudice against Draco which is disappointing, but understandable. And Draco is doing so well. He's really manning up when he needs to and he's doing a great job of being supportive. It makes sense in the context of your story, though it's OCC in canon. I like it. :]
Descriptions: Hmm...I don't really know which way I'm leaning on this. I think we could've seen more descriptions of their facial expressions or surroundings, but it wasn't terrible. And their emotions were fairly well portrayed in this chapter. Pretty well done.
Emotions: Again, these were all right. There wasn't much going on in the ways of emotions here, but I think it was refreshing not to be smacked in the face by a Hermione-widow-breakdown.
Plot: Things are movinggg alonggg. Yay! I'm excited. I can't wait to see where they'll go from here. Now they're friends! But I feel like that Sybil girl is going to cause issues later. Ugh. How annoying. Stupid conflict ruining my love stories, haha.
Interactions: These were quite well done for the beginning of a friendship. They still have their awkward history, but they're trying to move past that and I can see that.
Pacing: I think I've mentioned this, but you're moving things along at a very good pace. It's not too fast. I appreciate that.
Good chapter! I'll read the next one very soon.
--EmilyAuthor's Response: I have been worried about my pacing because some people on another site I've posted on are all like "where's the Dramione???" and I'm all like "hold your horses! I'll get to it when and if I get ready!" I decided to hang it all though and just keep writing how I want to write it at since that's what matters, yeah?
Description of the surroundings and physical stuff is something I've been working on as you can see in the later chapters. But you keep reminding me on that and I'll keep improving on that!
I understand on the fact that there isn't that much emotional stuff and how that's good. I didn't want to keep being morose because life isn't morose!
Awww, I'm mentioned in your author's note! :] I'm really glad that I've helped in some way. With this review, I continue to encourage you to strive to keep moving forward and keep up the wonderful work. This is a spectacularly sweet story and you've been doing so, so well. I can't wait to continue reading, but first, here's your review:
Grammar/Spelling: I think I noticed...maybe two errors. So, nothing to worry about, but if you edit anytime soon, check for them. :]
Characterization: I loved Hermione's healing process in this chapter. She's doing better and better and you're doing a great job of showing that. I really like how you're characterizing her. Slowly but surely, she's accepting Draco. I love that you aren't rushing things. And Draco is so wonderfully contrite. He's such a sweetheart, trying to change over such a dramatic event. I like that he actually has a REASON to change in this story, rather than some stories where he just "decides" to. Well done!
Descriptions: I didn't see too many descriptions of the setting in this chapter, but see my next bullet:
Emotions: REALLY well done. I could definitely feel Draco's regret at what happened and his very real desire for Hermione to forgive him. And Hermione's frustrations are starting to ebb, which you're showing really well. And I like that Hermione is still mourning Ron. That's very appropriate and it's important to the story. Great job.
Plot: I love your plot. Have I mentioned that? I really do. I think you're doing a great job. You're avoiding a lot of cliches that authors fall into and you're holding up a difficult storyline in a believable way. Really well done.
Interactions: I liked the conversation between Hermione and Draco. They're finally starting to warm up to each other, and it's happening at precisely the right moment. I'm glad you aren't making them super friendly right off the bat. That's a relief. Sometimes I accidentally do that when I write Dramione. XD Oops!
Style: Emotionally, this was wonderful. You really portrayed what readers needed to see here and you did it in a consistent way. Keep it up!
Pacing: Again, I've mentioned this--you're keeping things moving along, but you aren't going too fast. That's very important and you're doing wonderfully.
Wow, all I had was praise here, haha. Good work! Keep it up! I'm on to the next chapter ASAP.
--EmilyAuthor's Response: I don't mind reviews that are just all praise :) I'm feeling a little repetitive with how much thanks you've gotten but you totally deserve them all because, as you can see, you have definitely helped me by encouraging me on this huge endeavor and also on improving on different aspects of my story! So THANK YOU!! Report Review
Hello there! This is DarkRose from the forums here to review for you! I'm really excited that you've updated. :D So, let's go over things:
Characterization: Well, Hermione's back to life and surprisingly obnoxious in my eyes. I like the new take you've given her--being the MOST closed-minded, rather than the least. It's a very interesting switch. And Draco's great. I love that he isn't perfect. He still loses his patience, but he IS trying. And I like that he's the one trying to get HER to talk to him, instead of the other way around. That's new and unique and I like it a lot.
Descriptions: I think you covered their emotions well and gave enough physical description to be realistic. Good job. :]
Emotions: These were awesome. I like how frustrated Hermione is. It's very believable. I wish she would be nicer to Draco and give him more credit though. Ugh. And he's moving along really nicely. I like that I can see his progression as he tries so hard to get her to accept him.
Plot: Ah! I just want them to get along! Hermione is making me so angry! This was quite a good chapter, plot-wise. I was a little confused why they fought over him apologizing for not saving Ron, though. That seems like a normal thing to apologize for...why did Hermione freak out? Just because he brought Ron up at all? And it's SO obvious that Jack is fond of Draco! I was really annoyed that Hermione would imply that Jack doesn't need him. Ugh.
Interactions: Dynamic. Dramatic. Very good.
Style: Wonderful job, as always.
Pacing: You're moving things along at a very good pace. I'm glad that they aren't instantly in love. That's never believable. Of course I want them to get together, but I can be patient. :]
So, great job! I'll read the next chapter ASAP!
--EmilyAuthor's Response: Hermione freaked out over Draco apologizing for not getting Ron because he was being mean about it in his tone, instead of at least sounding apologetic. Draco was being a right (blank) about that night because he was mad at Hermione's own (blank)ness.
Hermione can't be wonderful right now because she's still in her awful mode though coming up from it!
Thanks again for this! Report Review
The story is very good. I remember having read it previously. I loved it. Very well written and as to your concern yes you are keeping their relationship real. It seems like this would be realistic.Author's Response: thank you. good to know Report Review
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I must say, this story is drawing me in more and more with every chapter I read. I absolutely love how you've written Draco. He seems very in character, not too changed from his Hogwarts days, but changed enough to make it believable and show he's matured. The interaction between him and Harry was believable, and I love Draco's haughty, superior attitude. It was interesting to see the background of what happened the fateful night of the car crash.
I must say, I really like that this has been from Draco's perspective so far. It's not often you see that in a Dramione. It's refreshing!
I really love the way you write. Can't wait to see where this goes, and I hope Hermione makes some more appearances soon!
BriAuthor's Response: Oh, good. I'm glad you're liking this more as you go along.
With Draco, I didn't want to change him drastically. I wanted to see how I could do a Dramione (maybe, if this turns into one) with Draco still being recognizable. I'm glad that there was a good reception for the Harry and Draco conversation.
I found myself writing in Draco's POV a lot in doing this story and for some strange reason, have found it far easier to do. I think it's because I'm really trying to get into Draco's head, like somehow make it explainable why he's becoming a "good guy" so am spending a lot of time on his side of the fence.
Thanks again for all your nice words! Report Review
Things are changing slowly but surely. Gah, it's still so hard to see Hermione like this. “I’m a horrible mother.” The statement came out on a dejected whisper.
It's interesting how Ginny points out how things have changed. With Draco, in particular of course, but it kind of parallels Hermione in this scene. Look how they've both changed. One for better and one for worse, but hopefully not worse for long. And maybe stronger in the end!
The shared smile! 3 Gives me hope. Ahh.
I love how just taking care of Jack kind of has changed Draco in these subtle ways. It's dramatic but not at the same time. Kind of like this quiet transformation that doesn't really hit until they come out in his actions, like his gentlemanliness. But of course, sometimes it doesn't hold -- I really like that by the way. I like how hard it is for both of them to overcome their prejudices. It's refreshing: there’d be times when he’d have to swallow his words and eat crow. There are parts of him he's not proud of but that still stick with him and he might even have to just lie to get past those parts, but I like seeing that struggle.
So to answer your question, I do love the reaction! ^__^Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad that this chapter came across to you how I wanted. I definitely wanted to portray the changes, for the better and for the worse. It's hard to write Hermione like this but I kind of have to, you know? I mean its not like she'd be the greatest after Ron died.
I'm glad you're also like Draco's transformation. There's definitely still a struggle of twenty-something years of being an awful person to becoming someone who Hermione and the others could actually STAND being around.
Thank you again! Report Review
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I love the emotions and struggle you portray in your writing. I can just feel the anger and physical pain Draco is feeling, and the suffering Hermione is going through following Ron's death. You write the dialogue between Harry and Draco very well. They aren't too friendly, yet you can see that they've changed and matured since their Hogwarts days as they aren't nasty and immature towards one another either.
I think ending the chapter from Hermione's perspective was good. It really sucked the reader into how she's feeling and gets us emotionally invested, especially when you talk about how she can't even connect to or be near her newborn. I don't know if this was your intention, but to me it sounds like postpartum depression that's been intensified by the loss her husband.
This chapter was a bit short, and I was going to suggest you lengthen your chapters a bit, but then I looked back at the contents and see that the chapters only get longer from here. So just keep up the good writing! :)
BriAuthor's Response: Writing this exchange between Harry and Draco was actually kind of fun because I know that they won't be BFFs but neither should they be ten year olds about it. Life happened and has moved on, they're different and Harrys at least more mature.
There's definite depression on Hermione's end. I don't qualify it as anything other than severe grief.
Yes, this is short but as you said, it gets longer as I go along!
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Gosh I just love this story! It always makes me smile and I always know to expect the unexpected when I read it because I never really know what is going to happen.
I really liked seeing their growth in this chapter. I think that Draco is becoming more respectable despite what others think and I am glad to see it. I really like how far Hermione has come to even get over her feelings of Draco and past prejudice. Baby Jack I love. He just sounds like this adorable little guy who is showing Hermione that he is okay with Draco. Sometimes I notice that kids have their own ways of telling you things through signs that you may not see at first. That is what I think of every time I read about Jack. It's like he is saying "Look Mom this is who I want in my life. Deal with it please."
Sybil...makes my skin crawl. I love to have a character that you love to not like (I don't like Hate because it's to strong of a word for me). It just makes you see that the connections of that there really are people out there in life that are like this and that the magical world isn't any different. Sad really.
I just think that this story is brilliant and that you are a super awesome Author who is a great inspiration to others. Thank you for making me think outside of the box and for loving your story. It is seen very well throughout the chapters that I have read. I cannot wait to find out what happens next!! =)
Keep up the superb work!!
I am totally into Dramiones now. =)Author's Response: You are so sweet and I love you for the support you've shown me! Children do have such a clear eyed view of the world whereas adults like to inject all sorts of complications and analytical thought into it. Jack is my face to write about.
You just wait on Sybil...I'm not sure what you are waiting for though :P
Great on liking Dramiones! I'm so glad I was able to help you expand your horizons!
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I love it! Can`t wait for more. But, I think that Hermoine has a right to know the truth. She should know the whole story and try to understand it, maybe she would accept Draco then. and as for Draco he should not listen to that girl, she is just using him. Update soonAuthor's Response: Who knows exactly what Draco is going to do? I don't! So let's see what happens next!
Thanks so much for reading and dropping me a line! Report Review
Awe! You got me on that last line. Too cute!Author's Response: :) I'm glad you liked their meeting! Report Review
Jack loved the game Hermione had privately named "Balding Draco".
^ Now that was cute.
My minor characters are back and with a vengeance! But before I talk about that I have to say I truly am amazed with your writing because not many can pull off writing about babies. I'm really able to imagine Jack, the emotions from him, his movements. I think that's hard with children and babies because there are certain things about them that you don't notice unless you're around them so a lot of people miss key factors when writing them but you don't.
It'll be interesting to see how Draco handles Sybil. I see that it's going to be a big conflict but paying her off wouldn't help. I think if he came clean Hermione would try to understand. I don't know if she would completely but ignoring Sybil isn't the way to go. He has to do something, either outcome just doesn't seem like it'll be positive for him. It just might end up pushing his progress back.Author's Response: YAY! I was desperately trying to inject some minor fluff into such a heavy story so I'm glad it came out. I love babies. I love watching them and playing with them so writing them is just as fun for me :)
I don't know about Hermione's reaction. She hasn't been the most rational person lately...but who knows?
More minor characters in the next chapter by the by! Report Review
You do love your cliffies, don't you?
I'm impressed by the way you maintain the standards of both the plot and the way you write.
Sybils becoming as irritating as Pansy P. used to be. Can't wait to see how Draco handles her.
Great stuff, keep it up.Author's Response: Yes I am a cliffy person. I thank you for your compliment on my plot and writing style. Sybil is like Pansy except prettier and smarter.
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I seriously want to strangle Sybil. Ugh. She is so infuriating. I can definitely see her doing it too, which makes it so much worse.
Hopefully Draco figures something out.. I don't want Hermione stomping all over him... Even if it was kinda his fault. I definitely don't want Sybil to say something and make Hermione disappear again. That wouldn't be too good. Especially if Draco can't help and with Harry and Ginny gone.. >.>
Ugh. Sybil. Haha Anyways, excellent chapter. Can't wait for the next one.
BrittaniqueAuthor's Response: I am so happy that you are ragging on Sybil! I don't do the evil villain thing too often so when I do, I want to make sure you REALLY don't like them ;)
Hopefully Draco does figure something out soon! Report Review
:D All done reading and now I'm super anxious for the next chapter. So far I'm really enjoying this story. I love your characterization and your descriptions.
I don't feel like that this chapter was rushed at all. I think it had a nice steady flow to it and the transitions seemed fine to me but that's just my opinion. I didn't feel rushed during this chapter.
It was a very good story to read and I can't wait to read more! =DAuthor's Response: Thank you once again for taking the time to review everything! I'm so happy that you were able to let me know what you thought of each as it really did help in getting my creative juices going. I feel emboldened to continue in the manner that I have been going :) Report Review
I loved the exchange between Draco and Sybil. Sybil definitely deserved that after the stunt that she pulled so good for Draco for not crawling back afterwards.
I loved also the exchange and the way that you wrote him and Hermione at the park and the duck scene. :) I loved that you had Draco apologize and I do like how Hermione didn't accept it right away and how she told him that money didn't buy everything (which meant that money wasn't going to buy her forgiveness) and that added a nice touch to this chapter. I don't think that Draco was necessarily trying to buy her forgiveness back since he obviously cares about Jack, but I think that he was used to fixing problems with money so it was a good reality check for him.
Another good chapter! I'm so close to being done! Plot flow, characterization and grammar is perfect :)Author's Response: I'm so glad you caught Hermione's attempt to impart some common sense into Draco. It's true that Draco is used to handling things with money rather than just honest sincerity. Sybil will just get more annoying :P Report Review
I like the fact that Hermione finally learned that Draco saved her and the baby. It's about time and I'm happy that she finally was told that by Ginny.
Its so like Draco to start to get on Hermione's good side and then to say something to rub her the wrong way. Seems like that Draco has always been the type that doesn't quite have a filter and who doesn't really know when they need to stop talking or to drop a topic.Author's Response: Yeah, Draco isn't entirely on the side of good yet and hasn't gotten used to it quite yet so is going to mess up every once in a while. :) Report Review
The exchange between Draco and Harry was sweet and I was glad that Harry thanked him for getting Hermione to come to her senses.
I'm glad that this chapter was more circled around Hermione. It was nice seeing her coming to terms with Ron's death and it was refreshing to see her ready to face life.
It was nice to see Draco being willing to help her and I'm glad that she's beginning to recognize that he's there to help and not just judge her. I like Draco's bluntness. I think it's what Hermione needs (she doesn't need people sugarcoating things) and I think it's what helped her break out of her zombie-state.
This is so good so far :) I'm really enjoying this! =D I took the last few days off from school and work since I've been sick so I was able to catch up on my reviews and I'm so glad that I got to take the time to read this today.Author's Response: I am very glad that you are liking the development of Draco and Hermione's own path of coming out of this trying time. Thank you so much for reviewing these chapters and letting me know what you thought! It helps keep me focused and continuing on what I am doing! Report Review
I just loved how you introduced the chapter with Draco doing his service at St. Mungo's. I think that anyone who's volunteered before would say that there's a lot of stuff that happens behind the scenes that a lot of people aren't aware of.
I loved how shocked he was that Hermione wasn't there with Jack and I'm glad that Hermione is beginning to snap out of her zombie-state. :)
Very good chapter! :DAuthor's Response: I thought it would be good to include some background scenes as people in the background are unappreciated sometimes so I am glad you liked it. I'm glad you liked what happened here! Report Review
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