Reading Reviews for Task One Challenge
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Review #26, by MalfoysCarolinaGirl2010 Reclaiming the Sword of Godric Gryffindor

18th July 2012:
ok first off I know there was a limited word count on the entries for the challenge but i felt it was a little too fast paced. I think you had a little too much going on at once.

Second: The characterization of everyone was done really well and I enjoyed Neville's nervousness at the beginning and his Spunk at the end. I never would have guessed Neville would willingly attack a teacher like he did. and I agree that all three were very lucky with only getting a detention when it could have been so much worse.

Third: As i've already mentioned i felt it was a little too fast paced but overall the plot development and flow were written very well and the events flowed together seamlessly.

Great Job for your first fic

Author's Response: Hey there. Thanks for stopping by and having the time to leave a review.

The fast pace of the story was kind of intentional. I know it felt like everything was too rushed but I wanted it to be that way to transmit a feeling of urgency that I felt the moment had. They had to get the sword and fast. Thank you for pointing it out though. I will be more careful with future works so as to slow it down a bit, maybe mix a bit of imagery more.

I'm glad to hear you enjoyed Neville's characterization. This aspect is one of the most important for me and I always fret over it. So it's a pleasure to hear that it came across as real and believable :)

Thanks for reading once again. You made me very happy!

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Review #27, by Shortie Reclaiming the Sword of Godric Gryffindor

12th July 2012:
I must say, this is TOO GOOD for a first try. I told you right, my first one went horribly wrong :'( But this is great. I don't know how this idea came across your brilliant brain because it never came across mine. I love the beginning, love the ending. It's very captivating :D Job VERY well done.


Author's Response: Aww! Thanks for stopping by, reading and leaving a review dear. I'm terribly sorry it took me so much to respond. I almost forgot I had a story posted on the archives haha

I'm glad you liked it. I'm sure the same idea could have come to you as well. It's a missing moment that I have been wondering about ever since I read the book, so the task provided me with the opportunity of exploring it further.

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Review #28, by ginerva_molly_weasley Reclaiming the Sword of Godric Gryffindor

11th July 2012:

That's amazing! I really like how you interpreted this and wrote about this! There's another story entry which uses this event but they're so different from each other which makes it even more special!

I love how you tried to show the angst within this and even explore some of the punishment some of the students were subjected to whilst the Carrows and Snape was in charge. I also feel you got Ginny's fieryness and Luna's personality spot on in this

Well done!

Author's Response: Heya! I'm so glad you liked my take on this specific event from the book. Everything just started with an image and slowly expanded.

The character's voice just came natural to me. I'm happy to know that you think my characterization of Ginny and Luna are accurate enough.

Thanks for the lovely review!

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Review #29, by TyrannicFeenix Reclaiming the Sword of Godric Gryffindor

11th July 2012:
Man that was really excellent. Great work bringing that moment to life, a minor passing reference in the books was not enough. Top stuff.

'There are more than one things that can go wrong' should be 'there is more than one thing that can go wrong'

Love when Luna pokes the Slytherin kid. Nice image, and so Lunaish.

Loved it, really can't wait for more of your great writing.

Author's Response: Hey there! Thanks for pointing that out. I shall edit it at once :)

Yes. Luna will always be Luna and I'm glad that you think I captured her essence in this entry.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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Review #30, by Toujours Padfoot Reclaiming the Sword of Godric Gryffindor

10th July 2012:
Hello, fellow Gryffindor!

I love the premise of this! I've never read a story that explained what happened when Neville, Ginny, and co. ransacked Snape's office looking for the sword. I thought you told it very well, weaving in suspense and action and all of the prompts. I especially thought that your use of the Sleeping Draught prompt was well-done; it blended in seamlessly with the story. I think my favorite thing, however, was Dumbledore's portrait and your portrayal of Snape. Ginny probably attributes getting off with only detentions with Hagrid to luck, but of course it must be more than that. Ahh, Snape, putting up with hatred hitting him from all sides when he can't tell anyone that he's actually working on Dumbledore's orders.

Great job! Gryffindor ftw

Author's Response: Sarah! It feels great to have you read my little entry!

I'm very glad you liked how I used my prompts. I'm actually very surprised by how every scene struck me. They came one by one which is most unusual because I always felt I had to 'prepare' all the story. This one was more spontaneous :)

You don't know how happy I am that you enjoyed my portrayal of Snape and the others. It means a lot to me because characterisation is one of the things I worry most about when writing a story.

Thanks a bunch for the wonderful review!

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Review #31, by Erised Reclaiming the Sword of Godric Gryffindor

10th July 2012:
Hey Debra! I'm very proud of a) this wonderful entry for the house Cup and b) that I'm the very first person to review your very first story! Yays all round! Haha.

Well, this story is great. I think you've shown a really interesting angle from mainly Neville's point of view that really highlights the theme of flourishing in the face of adversity, as well as developing your characters excellently. I love the scene between Ginny and Neville and the beginning - it just feels really real and sets their characters up really nicely.

I thought you fitted the prompts in really well, like seriously well! They blended in really nicely, especially the Dark Detectors one. Snape was extremely creepy as usual, and it's amazing that they only got detention isn't it? I suppose it's fitting in with the whole 'double agent' thing he had going on.

Luna in this was hilarious and kooky as usual, and the plot flowed very well too. Your writing style is excellent. This is a piece to be proud of! Go Gryffies!

Author's Response: Hey Jenny. It's a pleasure to have you here. Thanks so much for proofreading and helping me me improve it :)

I thought about writing this story from Neville's point of view because I knew that the 'trio' would meet Snape and who fears Snape more than Neville? I considered it would be most interesting to put the spot light on him and see how he handles the situation.

I'm happy that you liked how I wrote the characters. I am in the process of re-reading the books but as I remember her, Ginny has always struck me as being quite impulsive so it only came natural for her to go bursting into Snape's office with a half planned plan. So naturally Neville would try and talk some sense into her. Not that that did any good anyway.

Thanks so so much for this lovely review!

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