Poor Moony! I really wish I could have a friend like him :( please please please update as soon as possible!Author's Response: Thanks for the review! :) Make sure you read the Moony Eyes Christmas Special, which has another chapter underway right now! Report Review
Okay so this is the best portrayal of Remus in such a long time, qith the exception of mine of course lol just kidding!
I just am in love with this is story and I am so looking forward to some J/L scenes
Keep on with the flow
kissesAuthor's Response: Thanks a bunch! :D Make sure you keep up with the Christmas Special, and you just MIGHT get your wish... ;) Report Review
i actually loved this!!Author's Response: I'm glad! :) Thank you very much! Report Review
CANT WAIT TO SEE WHATS HAPPENING NEXT!! this is a perfect story >>> THANK YOU! now go back to writing the story and being at an internship. :)Author's Response: Ahahah thank you! The internship is over now, however, and the first two chappies of the Christmas Special are out! :) Report Review
Great chapter! awww, James at the end :) feeling a bit bad for him...and Remus...and Sirius...oh, boy.Author's Response: Haha thank you! :) Report Review
cool a Christmas special it sounds good so you better live up to my expectationsAuthor's Response: Haha I certainly hope I do! The first chappie is up, the second should show up soon enough :) Report Review
Your characterization is PERFECT! You really capture the marauders' characters well! Well done, 10/10 :)Author's Response: Thanks so much! :) I'm glad you liked it! Report Review
if only snape really did look like that. xDAuthor's Response: Oh how I wish that were so... Report Review
Hey dude. I sorta need help with my story and I couldn't think of any other way to ask. A) How do you make banners? B) How do you put photos up? (It keeps rejecting mine) I really hope you don't mind me asking :SAuthor's Response: I use photobucket to upload my banners, and they have a certain size limit that I'm not sure of, so that's probably why it rejects yours. If you want, you can write on my livejournal (linked on my author page) and I can help you out. If you want, I'll even make you one! Report Review
ITS SO GOOD. cant wait for next chapter and following ones.Author's Response: Thanks so much! :D Report Review
Those Slytherins are really nasty. That was really well done, and totally in line with what JKR said the first war was like at Hogwarts. It gave me chills, it really did.Author's Response: Thank you so much for all your reviews! And I'm glad you liked it :) Report Review
Your depictions of these characters have me thinking about how hard it would have been for Sirius and Remus when Lily married James. Like, I've never really seen it this way.Author's Response: Thanks so much! :) Report Review
That was just amazing. Seriously, I am astounded. Sirius having a thing for James explains so much! Remus having a thing for Lily but not saying anything, icing on the cake. Just, wow. And it all being from Remus' point of view gives it that extra mile.Author's Response: Thank you so much! :) I hope you like the rest! Report Review
I love moony eyes the best Remus/Lily story I've read :D i really want to write a Remus/Lily story i was wondering if you could give me some tips please? :S xD I'm worried that i won't get the characters personality right.. also when are you going to add a new chapter? :DAuthor's Response: Well what's in the works right now is a Moony Eyes Christmas Special, and the first chapter of that should be showing up any day now. And thank you for the compliments! :)
As for pointers, the best advice I can give you is to just read the HP books with sections on the characters you want to write again and again. Get to the point where you know how they would act in various situations, and then it's up to you to make up the situations! :D Good luck on your story! Be sure to tell me when you've got it up and I'll come review it. Report Review
Hi Jess, I'm so happy your internship went well! I was so lonely without a new chapter for Moony Eyes. :( Anyway this is great. You really should give yourself more credit. The Remus James Lily triangle is really heating up and I can't wait for the Christmas Special! Brilliant, as per usual. :DAuthor's Response: Thanks so much! :D Christmas special coming very soon! Report Review
Yay! You updated! I don't think that was boring at all, it was definitely a filler chapter but I quite enjoyed it. Especially the last bit from Remus' pov! He needs a hug!
Your writing really is wonderful! Again, I'm amazed at how believable the growing relationship between James and Lily is coming about. It's very subtle and realistic, I just feel so bad for Remus though! He is far too good of a friend! He doesn't know that Lily thinks he's gay right? I wonder how he'll react when he finds out. As much as I love the way you've written Lily and James together I do want to see a bit more between Remus and Lily before it's too late. Also, what's up with Kelsey? Does she have a thing for James or is she just being protective of him as his friend and captain? Either way I liked seeing her confront Lily so good job with that too!
Another thing that I'm loving is how you're developing Severus and how he's slowly getting more and more mixed up with the death eaters! This is also very realistic to me. I really don't know how you're doing it but somehow in only 10 chapters you've managed to develop several very believable complex plot devices that feel very true to the characters involved and that don't feel at all rushed. Plus, on top of everything else you've also introduced multiple original characters that are actually likable, it's very impressive and makes for a really fun read!
Please update again soon, I can't wait to see where you go from here and the Christmas special sounds entertaining as well :) Keep up the fantastic work!!Author's Response: Thank you sooo much! :) I'm really happy you like it! The first chapter of the Christmas Special is coming soon! Happy August! Report Review
Thank you so much for updating, this is easily my favourite story :) keep up the absolutely incredible work!! xAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! :) New chapter is in progress, keep an eye on the livejournal for updates! Report Review
Ah! Well, I can hardly wait for the next chapter. This is killing me! I wish I had the ability to write something like this, where a few characters know something that the others don't that they really SHOULD know, and... yeah. I'm dying, as I've said. I also really love how you show Lily being annoyed and confused and feeling like she ruined everything between her and Remus. I think that's exactly what she would've thought. And the whole thing about noticing James. Anyway, sorry for rambling. That Christmas Special sounds awesome, and I can't wait to read more of this story!! Happy August ^-^Author's Response: Thanks so much! :D I'm glad you like it! And Happy August to you too ^_^ Report Review
HUZZAH! NEW CHAPTER! WHOOP WHOOP!! I love it even if it is a bit short and doesn't contain much, loved how you ended it by the way, that was brilliant!!! 10/10Author's Response: Thanks so much! :) I just needed a filler/passage-of-time sort of chappie, you know? Glad you liked it! Report Review
YES, I completely missed you!! I'm glad the internship went well! This chapter was NOT boring, I loved it! I can't believe Kelsey did that to Lily. That was quite unexpected. And I loved how Remus was "definitely not" looking at Lily, that was hilarious. I can't wait for the next chapter and I look foward to the Christmas special! You are excellent, keep it up! :DAuthor's Response: Thanks so much! :D I told you there was going to be more of Kelsey coming up ;) I enjoy tormenting my characters. *Sadist Jess is Sadist*
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Awww it's SUCH A GOOD STORY!Author's Response: Thanks a bunch! :D Report Review
This chapter is great!Author's Response: Thank you so much! :D Report Review
Yes, I think Rob Moore's a good remus too! Well written, this chapter, and I like how you voiced the characters.Author's Response: Thanks a bunch! :D Rob Moore is truly adorable, isn't he? Report Review
More please! as soon as possible! very good so far! please have scene where sirius tells lily about remus and why he did everythingAuthor's Response: I'm writing more, I promise! :) And thank you! Report Review
Aww, this was sweet. I like that Lily is finally getting to see the (slightly) less obnoxious side of James.
Childlike James in his semi-conscious state was quite adorable. It was a great way for Lily to "find out that Remus is gay". I just love all the tangled mess that is this story. So much is going on and Remus is really the only one who knows it all.
I'm excited that Peter got himself a girlfriend. Good on you, Peter! I can see why though if he looks like that character image you posted of him a few chapters back. I'd date him :) (Speaking of chapter images, I vote for B. Unless you have a picture of Salt, then I want to see it :))
I liked your Quidditch segment and would love to see more of Kelsey. She seems fun. Ooh...her and Maddie could be an awesome couple. Then James and Sirius could hook up, leaving Remus free to go after Lily again. And Peter can stick with Mary and not betray his friends, and everyone can be happy. Well, except Snape, but that poor guy is never happy.
Also, I loved Maddie's line: "Who knows? Maybe it's fate. Maybe the world will be the better because of it."
Like, maybe Lily and James will get married and give birth to the future saviour of the wizarding world, like that? Step aside, Trelawney, Maddie's coming to town!
And I've now read all of your chapters, which means that you should write more, because I love your story and am a bit of an impatient person :P I hope your internship is going well!Author's Response: I do indeed have a picture of Salt ;) He's quite hunky, let me tell ya! I've gotten a majority of votes for extra main characters, so since I have an extra each for Remus, Sirius, Peter, Lily, and Maddie I'll do those first. After that (if the story hasn't ended yet) I'll go onto the minor characters and I promise that Salt will be the first!
And as for Kelsey... we'll see ;)
And thank you SO much for taking the time to read and review all the chapters! I'll definitely have a new one out in August, so stay tuned and I'll get it out as soon as I can :) Report Review
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