I think this was a good start to the story... Elsa seems like an interesting character that I'd like to get to know better.
One thing, though. I think you should add dividers after a time-lapse. This makes it easier to read and less confusing, so everything is cut up into parts and not just one big chunk. :)
I think this was quite interesting so far, and I'm looking forward to reading more! ^^
~KhanhAuthor's Response: Thank you! And I've been meaning to go back and add dividers in certain chapters because I know it's kind of hard to read otherwise, so thanks for the reminder. Report Review
I love this story! I only just found it and have to say that it's pretty darn awesome! :D and I really love your Remus!! And I love the relationship between him and Elsa, whatever it happens to be :P I can't wait for more! :DAuthor's Response: Thank you very much. :) Report Review
Aw. That is so cute!! I can't wait for the next chapter!!!Author's Response: Thanks! :) Next chapter should be validated any day now. Report Review
I really like this story and I cannot wait for you to update again.
NatalieAuthor's Response: Thank you! :) I put the new chapter into validation a couple of days ago, so it should be here soon! Report Review
I'm usually horrible with posting reviews (I'm more of a favourite-r and a silent reader), but I've decided to come out of my shell to tell you how much I love this story. It's not everyday that I can come across a quality story with characters that have genuine flaws and yet remain lovable - while I don't mean to put any pressure, especially since you've just recently uploaded a new chapter, I can't wait for the next!
Oh, and while I'm rooting for Elsa and Sirius getting together (since that's what I'm assuming she wants), I'm all for Elsa and Remus having another chance - I'm a sucker for cuteness. :)Author's Response: I know what you mean- I'm like that too. :P Thank you very much, I'm so happy you like the characters! I don't like perfect characters, so I try my best to give mine flaws, glad to see my efforts have paid off! :) thanks for reviewing! and I just put the next chapter into validation this afternoon. :) Report Review
hahaha great chapter! i love Charity, she's so sweet :)
loved it, please update soon!Author's Response: thanks :) just put the next chapter into validation! Report Review
bwahaha! i have a feeling she'll end with Moony, right? RIGHT?! because, really, there isn't anyone more perfect for her than our dear Mr. Lupin. ;)Author's Response: maybe... ;) you'll have to wait and see. Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
The chapter is hilarious. I can't wait for more!!Author's Response: Thanks very much! :) Hopefully be able to put the next chapter into validation soon! Report Review
woah, sirius knocked her up? surely not? i want Elsa to be with sirius in the end! :( loved the chapetr though, brilliant as per usual ;) pleasepleasepleaasePLEASE update soon! you rock! :)Author's Response: ...well, I guess you'll have to wait and see! ;) Thanks for reviewing every chapter, that's really awesome to see as an author! I'll be putting the next chapter into validation tonight. :) Report Review
oh merlin, i dont know if i prefer sirius or remus now! obviously i love sirius but remus is just so sweet and perfect! :/ must read on anyways :) amazingly written, as always ;)Author's Response: I have the same problem when I'm writing these. haha, thanks for reviewing! Report Review
aw. poor Elsa, what will she do!!!? must read more! loved it, so billiantly written! you rock! :)Author's Response: Well, read on! :) Thank you! Report Review
poor Alice, you wrote this chapter SO well, it was so sad! i really am addicted to this story! you're amazing!)Author's Response: Thanks so much! :) Report Review
wow, amazing chapter, i loved it! :) aw, is Elsa falling for Remus now? this cannot end well!! must read on!Author's Response: It never does, does it? Haha, thanks for reviewing! Report Review
Im-an-idiot-syndrome. story of my life! i give this story a 10/10 because its just so awesomely awesome its the best thing since sliced awesome!
~~VAuthor's Response: wow, thanks! I'm glad I've got something right. haha, hopefully I'll be able to update it soon as well! thanks for reveiwing! Report Review
Oh i love how Elsa is so realistic. I've read so many fanfictions that are, although well written, unrealistic when it comes to characters. Elsa is probably the character that i've already related to so much in many ways and it's only the first chapter.Author's Response: thank you so much. :) I try to make her a real person as much as possible. Report Review
What girl wouldn't be somewhat horrified if her hair got singed off? XDAuthor's Response: So true. lol. Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
That was funny. Poor Alice. The chapter was fantastic. I can't wait for more!!!Author's Response: Thanks! I'm happy you liked it. :) Report Review
Your Remus is my spirit animal, omg. :D
Loved it!Author's Response: haha, thanks for reviewing!! :) Report Review
I really adore this story! I love that you've paired Sirius with Marlene! Great minds think alike. ;)Author's Response: Thanks! And of course Sirius is with Marlene. That's the best idea ever. ;D haha, thanks for reviewing! Report Review
I love this story, especially how Elsa is so relatable (and funny) :)Author's Response: Thanks! I appreciate the feedback. :) Report Review
Erm...I don't know if this means anything, but the word 'eyebrow' keeps popping up in random places...Author's Response: em... I'm not sure, sorry! Report Review
I must admit, I got a little lost here. It's been a long time since the last chapter and it was hard to remember what happen. Yes, I'm to lazy to read the last chapter again.
Anyways, it was one amazing chapter. I want Remus and Elsa back together. They were the cutest couple ever. Do something about it! :DAuthor's Response: Haha, yeah, I have that problem with stories too. I'll read something and then the next chapter won't be posted for months (*cough* thisone *cough*). But thanks for reviewing! Report Review
Aw. That's sad. Remus and Elsa need to get back together. Chapter was great. I can't wait for more!!!Author's Response: Thanks so much! Hopefully my updates will come a little quicker now... haha, thanks for leaving a review! Report Review
AH! I love it! Continue PLEASE! Elsa is my new favorite o', well... EVERYTHIN'! :D So: Remus and Elsa? Eh, ehh? O, I hope so. They were doin' so well towards the end of the story. Keep it up can't wait for more!Author's Response: Thanks so much! :) I guess you'll just have to wait and see. ;) Report Review
This is definitely my favorite chapter so far. I love how you did the whole Elsa/Remus thing in Hospital Wig. Especially when Remus calls her beautiful. I can't wait for next chapter! :)Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you like it! Next chapter will probably be put into validation sometime next week. :) Report Review
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