I just hate how Al, Lily and the others just go on about how Scorpius used to hurt Rose, and none of them thinks about how she hurt and provoked him just as bad. And Rose never admits to that either, what really annoys me about her!Author's Response: Alright so what you said did slightly get to me so much that I had to go back and read the chapter because I swore that she did admit to starting the fights as well. Somewhere in the scene with her family and they are talking about what their parents are going to say when they look back on their children Molly says "Think back on our childhoods they are autamatically going to say Rose was the smartest but man she had a temper remember the way her and that Malfoy boy would fight." That wasn't Molly defending Rose that was her acusing Rose and Rose even admits to starting the fights in the next line "He initiated just as many fights as I did." and Rose even says that Albus fought him too, which leads Albus to say "You two would beat each other up for no reason."
Now in Al, Lily, and the others defense they havn't gotten to know Scorpius the way that Rose has and admittedly as you see in chapter three (I think) Rose has had more injuries than Scorpius and her's do tend to be worse simply because Malfoy is stronger she could walk away from a fight with a broken ankle and his would only be sprained or fractured so they already see him as being threat. Not to mention their family loyalty is rooted so deep within them that they feel they have to choose Rose's side, even though there really isn't a right side because they both used to fight it was never one sided.
I hope I didn't offend you in this response, it's just that lately especially I have had to become a huge advocate for Rose and yes she is misunderstood, but she does know her faults and I don't want you to think that she didn't admite to what she was doing. Admitedly at the time of the conversation they still didn't know about her relationship with him, so she couldn't defend him like she wanted to but you do see towards the end of that scene that when she tells albus that he better learn to trust Malfoy. Also you will see agian in a few chapters that Albus knows full and Well that those fights weren't all of Scorpius' fault.
Anyways I hope I cleared some things up I just don't want anyone to hate her because she isn't honest. Hating her for being a child or immature or in some circumstances for being a coward all of that is fine but not because she didn't own up to her part in the situation. So thank you for the review and sorry about the explanation, since I am writing the story I guess I feel a little protective of Rose. Report Review
I love it! You always use the perfect language in your chapters! Enchatee!Author's Response: I am so glad that you ae enjoying it I hope that the rest is just as good. Thank you for the review. Report Review
This is the best story I have seen on this site. Very romantic!Author's Response: Well I am so glad that you liked it. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. Report Review
I wanna cry but at the same time i don't because i wanna laugh and smile at the same time! one word: Brilliant!Author's Response: So glad that you liked and please don't cry although laughing is good. lol Thank you so much for the review. Report Review
LOVED IT! I LOVED IT! IM FOAMING IN THE MOUTH!! FLIPPING AROUND OM MY FLOOR SQUEALING! THAT WAS FANTASTIC! I LOVE YOU!! . as a writer of course :P If i could i would give you a thousand points!Author's Response: Sooo glad that you liked it. Thank you so much for the review. I hope that you enjoy the rest. Report Review
I love how you wrote this! And it's a long span of time so its not like a big BAM I love Rose kinda thing! Love this!
Confession time: I was one of the people who wrote your first chapter before it was finished... and I didn't like it! But I saw you had completed it so i thought "what the hey" and I LOVE IT! You did a great job of turning it around!!Author's Response: Yes I am a huge fan of time in books. I was trying to avoid rushing their releationship so I am glad that you are enjoying it. Thanks for giving it a second chance. the reason I have the first chapter tha way is because I felt that it was a good set up also I am a huge Ron and hermione fan so I wanted to do something with them. Thank you for the review. Report Review
Love :) can't wait for the sequalAuthor's Response: The sequel is already posted it's called confronting temptation. Thank you so much for the review so glad that you enjoyed it. Report Review
I'm so glad I found this fanfic when I did because if I had found it any earlier I seriously think I would have died waiting for the other chapters! I'm loving your story so much! This chapter in particular is really good! Excellent job!Author's Response: Well good thing that you dont have to die. Thank you so much for reading it and Reviewing and I hope that you enjoy the rest of it. Report Review
OH MY GOD!!! I THOUGHT YOU HAD A BETA BUT I HAVE SEEN SO MANY SPELLING AND GRAMMAR MISTAKES IN THIS THAT I THINK I MIGHT START SLITTING MY WRISTS (wrists is the plural of wrist not wrist) AGAIN!!! Joking but seriously get a better beta. Good story though, a bit choppy at times but still better than anything I could write.Author's Response: Yeah my grammar sucks big time. I did have a beta for a while. I'm not entierly sure that the grammar gets much better, I do try to catch it more now, because this chapter was written nearly three years ago so... As for the choppy that does improve, like I said three years ago, my writting (in my personal opnion) has improved sense then and I continue to look out for a choppy structure. I'm glad that you like the story, but I am sorry that the grammar isn't better. But thank you for the review. Report Review
gawd m hating you so much right now!! i was hoping for a happy ending.. arrghAuthor's Response: It was sort of happy and there is a sequel. If that helps. Sorry. Thank you for reviewing. Report Review
The chapter dobbled up it has the last couple of paragrafts two timesAuthor's Response: Wow, how bizzarre. I swear it wasn't like that the last time I checked. Anyways I have fixed it soit should be alright after it is re validated. Thank you so much for letting me know. Report Review
I love this story. I have been waiting for new updates since chapter 26ishh or something. This story is very deep and you portray the characters emotions very well, but you can improve by watching your grammar.(no offense It is still understandable by me;this is just a tip to improve next time)
Still 10/10 because of the good plot.(No FanFiction is perfect) =D Thanks for this story!!!Author's Response: Trust me no offense taken. Believe me it has imporved compared to where I was three years ago, and I do catch more of my mistakes now, so it is something that I am working on. I am so happy that you love this story and that you have kept with it so long because i know chapter 26 was like during the summer I think. Anyways thank you so much for the review and if you read the sequel I hope you enjoy it just as much. Report Review
great story be proud of yourselfAuthor's Response: Believe me I am extremly proud of myself just for finishing the thing. lol. Thank you for the review and if you read the sequel I hope you enjoy it as much. Report Review
I started to read the sequel right after i finished this one and i'm waiting for chap2 ^^ u did an amazing work, my fav author ^^ normaly I don't read story that is WIP but yours is different :) u don't change the whole ending just because the readers want that, there aren't any teenager pregnancy that I really apreciate because I think it's stupid to get into situation like that, and most of all, you always have logical explain for your ideas :xAuthor's Response: Chapter two is having some issues right now, but it will be ready to go by next weekend. No I am a very stubborn person and I'm not changing the ending to please any one, although I did try to end it on a more happy note. lol. As for the teenage pregnancy some people like that plot line, i'm just not that crazy about it, also i'm glad that you felt i did a good job in making things seem logical, I always want to give a reason. Anyways thank you so much for the review and I hope the sequel is goood. Report Review
I love this ending! I love your ideas about letting Rose travel like that, time will makes they both more mature so they think carefully about their relationship, not just 2 teenagers who are deeply in love anymore :) absolutly love it. I'm waiting for the sequel, keep up the good work ^^ love u Author's Response: Yeah, I feel that a relationship can be full of Love and passion but it doesnt always make it work out. I think they will have better luck in the sequel. lol. The sequel is already out so you shouldn't have to wait for it. Thank you for reviewing and I am glad that you agree with my ideas on the ending, I think traveling will really bennefit Rose, when it comes to growing up. Report Review
Great chapter and everything but I'm just saying that you can't actually predict the exact date the baby is gonna be born on. I mean, you have to due date and everything but the baby could be late or early. But really, good chapter.Author's Response: The way I saw it when I was writing the chapter was that they live in a magical community, so they could probably predict when she was going to be born, also I have a very strong feeling that with Rose they proobably had to enduce labor with her because she was probably too stuborn to come out on her own. lol. The only reason I added this chapter is because I am a huge Ron and Hermione fan and I thought that it would be a sweet begining. Thank you so much for the review and I hope that you enjoy the rest of the story. Report Review
I knew they wouldn't end up together--I agree with you on Rose is still lost a little with her character--but I still liked it anyway! I'm excited to read the sequel :) xxAuthor's Response: Well in all honesty when I first started the story I had planned on them ending up together. I am happy that you agree with my reasoning and that it didn't ruin the story for you. I hope that you enjoy the sequel just as much. Report Review
Yay! Congratulations on finishing!! I agree, this ending is much more realistic then them getting together and their families magically getting over their hatred of each other. Can't wait to read the sequel!!Author's Response: I'm glad that you agree people hated it so much when I broke them up and they were just anticipating them getting back together and every time I read a review about it I was like Ahh these people are going to hate me! so it's nice that you dont. Hope you enjoy the sequel and thank you for reading this story. Report Review
Thanks for the awesome story...can't wait to see if the next one has posted yet ;)Author's Response: Im so happy you liked the story, I put so much energy into it that it would have really sucked if people hated how it ended. Anyway hope you enjoy the sequel. :) thank you so much for the review. Report Review
Hi, my name is Jo, I'm from Germany and I want to ask you if you want to have your story in german. Because I really want to translate it!
If you actually have someone who translates your story please ignore my review. I just have to say that your story's really amazing!
I would be glad if you say yes and I can translate it.
I also can translate the german reviews for you if you wanna read them.
LittleBassistAuthor's Response: I would love to have it translated. I actually took german for three years in highschool so I think it ould be really exciting to have it translated. Thank you so much for offering. As for the german years I havent seen any but I probaly would have typed them into a google translator to have found out what they said. Once again Thank you, email me lemmylemonade at gmail. Report Review
Loved the last few chapters!! So intense!!! Great reasoning, I completely agree that she needed to live her life, figure herself out and leaving them together would have been totally unrealistic. Love, love, loved this whole story, thanks for writing. I'll be getting onto that sequel now ;)Author's Response: I am so happy that my reasoning made sense, I was worried that it wouldn't so it is nice to hear that people are alright with it. Thank you so much for the review. Report Review
Very nice story. I liked the characters that you created. This kept the families apart, which I think would have really happen. The Malfoys and Weasleys may be together at some point but not in the next generation. Thanks for the great read.Author's Response: Well I do have hope that Rose and Scorpius will end up together that is primarily what the sequel is about but that is in the far off future. The reason I think they could be together is because I don't actually think there was that much hatred between the two families in the epilogue of deathly hallows. I just think Ron holds grudge which you see in the end of that book. Now I did take things to the max and I kind of based my story around the idea that they Hayes each other not for the name but for the fighting which was a bigger issue to them. Draco because he is trying to overcome his name and Ron because scor was hurting his daughter. I also like to think that destiny is karma and Rose and Score are meant to be together because of all the family history and you know karma can be a jerk. Really the main reason why I didn't have Rose and Score together at the end of the book was because I personal felt like they were to young to decided that they were going to spend the rest of their lives together, so I wrote Rose to be a confused individual. But that's just my perspective on the idea.
I know that this is a long response especially for such a sweet review and I like that you don't hate me for breaking them up, but I guess I like to believe that there is some hope for them. Thank you so much for reviewing and I do see where you are coming from, interesting perspective. Report Review
The story was awesome! I so love it!!!Author's Response: Well I hope that you enjoy the rest of it just as much. :) Thank you for the review. Report Review
T^T I remember when I first found this story...I bow to you.Author's Response: Thank you, I am so glad that you liked it. Thank you so much for the review and if you read the sequel i hope you lke that just as much. Report Review
You did a super job on this. You deserve thanks and accolades! You're a fine writer and you have real promise for characters of your very own. Meanwhile, keep working on these. We're thoroughly enjoying them.
I agree that Rose needs some real adult living first before she gets seriously involved again. You threshed her out real good, the others too. I feel I know her much better now. Scorpius, too. And yes, I'm so happy you have a sequel coming and much promise for these two star-crossers.Author's Response: Thank you so much, it was really this site that gave me the confidence to believe in my own writings so I don't think I could actually eve give up on hpff.
On another note I am so happy you agree with my reasoning on Rose, personally if I had left them together I would have felt a little like a trator because Rose has so much ahead of her and not that Scorpius would have draged her down, but they would have spent so much time defending their relationship, that I think it would have hurt them in the long run. Time is always the answer. lol. The sequel is out and I hope you enjoy it as well. Thank you for the review. Report Review
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