Amazing chapter, as per usual! :)
Oooh, I'm eager to learn more about this girl Albus potentially likes. Maybe she'll help solve the issue of the whole James/Natalie/Al love triangle. Then everyone lives happily ever after, if James and Natalie ever get around to actually admitting their feelings :P
I'm frustrated with Natalie (and James actually :P) but I guess I'll just have to wait and see what happens! Awesome work, keep it up!
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Gah cute James/Natalie-ness! I adored this chapter, you did a wonderful job!
The idea of a St.Mungo's library/sixth floor is a stroke of genius! It's such a unique idea, but it makes so much sense I'm surprised JKR didn't include it. :P
It flowed well and I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, good job! :) Really fantastic work so far, you're a great writer and I love this story!
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Really good chapter, I liked it!
First off, I have to say I'm seriously loving Luke :P I want him as my best friend ;) he's just that cool :P
Anyway, I'll move on now... :P I'm loving all the little James/Natalie moments, they're just really cute when they're actually getting along for a few seconds hahaha.
I'm excited to see what happens on their visit to Natalie's mom's, and what she's like. I'm itching to read the next chapter, so this review is kind of pathetic. *offers cookies as an apology*
You're such a great writer, keep it up! :)
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Fantastic job! I loved James' point of view, it was really great to see his thoughts/feelings about everything.
I also loved the interactions between all the Weasleys, I think you write them really well and realistically. Great work! I think Fred's rapidly becoming my favourite Weasley cousin ;)
I loved the insight into James' insecurities too, through the fight with Ginny and how he thinks they favor Al over him. It's good to see other layers of him, and you've written him really well, revealing new aspects of his personality at different times.
I'm getting more addicted to this story every chapter, you're a great writer and it's a creative plot. Awesome job! Report Review
Amazing chapter, you're a great writer! I particularly loved the flashback, it was a really good way to depict how close Natalie was to the Potters and how she started to fall for James.
I'm really excited to read the next chapter and find out what happens with all the Witch Weekly fallout, so this is a pathetically short review. Sorry about that :(
Awesome work, I love it! Report Review
Great chapter, once again! Now I'm anxious to know what's up with Natalie's sister! So much mystery :P
Luke's character was really interesting, I hope we see more of him in the story. We got to see even more of James' personality this chapter, which I obviously loved :P
Amazing job, keep it up! Report Review
Great chapter! I liked seeing more of the differences in Natalie's behaviour when she's not around James and being guarded.
I'm interested about how much the rest of the Weasleys know about the whole situation? Looking forward to finding that out in other chapters, possibly :)
Another awesome chapter, great job! Report Review
I really loved this chapter, it was awesome! We're getting to learn alot more about all the characters, like Natalie and her Healing training.
I really like how you write dialogue too, it's great. You write natural dialogue, instead of having characters say unrealistic stuff that people probably wouldn't say in real life. I loved it!
Fantastic writing so far! I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter! Report Review
Sooo, I'm getting kind of addicted to this plot :P
I loved the part where you had James trying to back away further when they were at the Potters, it just seemed like something he'd feel the need to do. We got alot more insight into your depiction of his personality this chapter, which was great.
I hope we get more info about what happened at the muggle carnival in later chapters. I'm kind of confused as to what happened to Savannah and Al and the others while all the stuff with James and Natalie was going on.
I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, and this was a really great chapter! Great job! Report Review
I really love how you're slowly giving us more information about all the characters pasts and their relationships with each other. I'm eager to find out what kind of relationship James and Natalie has before, how good of friends were they?
I'm also excited to see how Natalie's personality is going to develop! I can see James resenting Al because he thinks Natalie prefers him...this is gonna get interesting :P
One thing to work on might be the flow of the story, it was a little choppy, but nothing too major. Everything else was good, I'm excited to keep reading! Good work! Report Review
Hello there! I liked this, it's a really good opening chapter. You did a good job with leaving the reader wondering about some things, and it helped draw me in to the story.
I'm anxious to find out more about the situation with Natalie's parents, especially because it doesn't seem like Oliver to leave his family (unless that's just me cause I love him :P)
Overall, a really solid start! Good job! Report Review
I LOVE your story. Please update it soon! I want to find out what happens between those two!
*sad face because I have to wait*Author's Response: I'm so glad you like this and I'm sorry for having you wait! I'm working on the next couple chapters and they should be up after the queue re-opens.
Thank you! :) Report Review
So have you left this story?Author's Response: I haven't abandoned this I promise! There will be an update soon! Report Review
Next Chapter, Pretty Please?
I really am waiting desperatelyAuthor's Response: Hi there! I'm so sorry, I promise promise there will be an update after the queue opens again! Report Review
Great story! I can't wait for the next chapter! they are so cute together.Author's Response: Aww thank you! I'm working on the next chapter right now--it should be up the end of September at the latest :)
Thank you again! Report Review
LOVE this story! Can't wait for the update! :)Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm sorry, I'm lagging on the next chapter but it's in the works--should be up by the end of September at the latest! Report Review
Natalie has quite the back story. She and her mom have significant issues. Natalie can't seem to trust James which is sad. He seems amazing. I look forward to reading more - thank you for the update!Author's Response: Natalie definitely has trust issues but hopefully as the story progresses, we'll see her dealing with them. Her family life has a lot of issues as well but I think that James (as she starts trusting him more) will be able to help her get through this :)
As always, thank you so much for reading and reviewing! Report Review
oh man, they are getting so much closer and so much further away at the same time!! James and Natalie need to get their acts together and realise they love each other already lol
thanks for such a speedy update and looking forward to reading more! :)Author's Response: That's such an interesting description of their relationship and you're so right. It's such a strange line between them right now but I will say that they'll both be getting their acts together soon :)
Sorry I'm lagging on updating the next chapter. It'll be up by mid/late September! And I hope you'll like it--it should have some interesting developments :) Report Review
OH. MY. GOSH.
That was totally unexpected.
BUT GOOD UNEXPECTED DON'T WORRY!! :)
Just make them song already!! :P
Okay, so I'm gonna try and insert a heart here, but it might fail...so yeah. Cause I love this story so much. :)
♥Author's Response: Actually, I'd been leaving hints throughout all the previous chapters but it was a bit "read between the lines" lol. But anyway I'm glad it's a good unexpected :)
Just saying, I think you'll like the next chapter! And thank you so much--it makes me so happy to read reviews like this :) Report Review
THEY HAD BETTER BE RESOLVED OR MY FATHER WILL HERE ABOUT THIS! (im sorry, but that couldn't be avoided) hehe, once again a brilliant chapter! could you possibley possibley read my storyits called Her we go and its a FredII/OC! thanks! xxAuthor's Response: Oh my god. I laughed so hard at that. Thank you for reviewing again!
And I'll definitely check it out sometime this week! Report Review
thats just sad
just plain sad
i love this story, i just never got round to writing a review!your a really talented author, so well done!! :)Author's Response: Oh gosh. Thank you so much for reviewing! I love surprise reviews like this haha. And I'm so glad you like the story :)
Thank you again! Report Review
ALL IN GOOD TIME?! NO! She didn't. Oh no she didn't.
How can you say no to him!! They are absolutely meant to be!!
argh. Now that my frustration is out, about the actual chapter.
Nothing else to say.
Have a great holiday! And I can't wait until you update :)
imacullenpottergirlAuthor's Response: LOL. That definitely made me smile. I'm glad you liked the chapter in spite of all of the frustration towards Natalie! I must say, I loved reading everyone's reactions to this chapter! But seriously though.all in good time :P
hehe. Anyway, thank you and thanks for reading! :) Report Review
Oh, gods! Natalie, you idiot! -facepalm-Author's Response: Oh gosh :P I should have been expecting reactions like this lol. Totally understandable. But trust me, keep reading and all will be well...soon!
:) Report Review
Puh, Natalie is starting to annoy me, to be honest. ;) She really needs to gather some courage and talk to James. Talking about James, I start to like him more now. It made him a lot more congenial, when he was sad about Albus not talking to hin after his win.
I'm looking forward to the next chapter! Have a great vacation!Author's Response: Haha, I think I'd be annoyed too if I was the reader. But trust me, she definitely has reasons for why she's like this! And I'm so glad you're liking James. I think he's such an interesting character with a lot more depth than he gets credit for in a lot of fanfics. Well, at least I'm glad you like my interpretation of him! :)
Thank you and thanks for reviewing! Report Review
Natalie should have let James talk. It will be a long miserable six months followed by a miserable future unless she can get her act together. I hope you enjoy your vacation - thanks for the update!Author's Response: She should have. But the next couple chapters will show that she has a reason for why she avoids things like this!
Thank you so much, and thanks for the review :) Report Review
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