I really love this story :) you've got me hooked with the plot and the characterization and everything! Keep on updating please please please please please :D Report Review
I love your long chapters! I get so lost in the story I don't even realize they are over until they are over. Please add more chapters! I'm nervous that you have abandoned the story and it is just too good to be abandoned. Report Review
I think your version of James's dad's disease is creative. It's magical without being too ridiculous. It is troubling that both of his parents die of a disease, but his mother has yet to be affected (that we as of yet know of course). This really is a destined tragedy, isn't it? Sigh. I also thought Alice's speech was rather poignant. It does put perspective on why the order members are so distant to the marauders doesn't it? In a separate semi related thought I am hoping for some kind of reconciliation between lily and Sirius. So far it seems like the marauders have accepted lily as James's girlfriend, but not as their friend. Report Review
Are you writing a book in real life? You should. Report Review
OK it's like I'm watching a movie in my head while I'm reading and I just don't know if I can sing your praises loudly enough. I'm curious though-i had expected an appearance from Mary. Report Review
I'm nervous and excited that things are picking up with the order! Report Review
Petunia is such a boar. Sometimes I do wish that lily was more passionate about her relationship with James though. However as per usual I am completely enamored with your writing! You are quite possibly the most talented writer I have yet had the pleasure to read on here! Please please update! If you are feeling stuck (I read something of the sort in an answer to another review) I'm sure any one of your readers would be thrilled to help bounce ideas! This one would in particular :) Report Review
Sorry if my nerd is showing but I am in love with your grammar. Also you are so good at writing dialogue! It doesn't over power the chapter and you capture distinct individual traits in each character. I am just as anxious as James for things to pick up with the order though Report Review
Please please PLEASE update!! I'm hooked, addicted, dependent- and now strung out! Report Review
I just started reading your first story, Once Defied, a few days ago and I got so engrossed that now I'm here. I just wanted to tell you that I think your writing has gotten stronger and stronger by the chapter. I like Twice Defied even more than the original and have loved everything you've done plotwise with this story. I had chills for this entire chapter. James's struggle to deal with his dad's death at the beginning is palpable, and Alice's speech to Lily is incredibly powerful. What Alice said also hit on a theme that I've never seen explored in a fanfiction before. Great work with the story, I'm sad that I'm coming to the end of where you've updated and I'm hoping for more updates to come! Report Review
Firstly, I'd like to say that I'm sorry I haven't reviewed any of your chapters before. I don't really have much of an excuse except to say that since finding Once Defied a few days ago, I've been absolutely HOOKED to the story (and this one too) and couldn't bring myself to write a review when I could have been reading instead! Which, of course, is very selfish, considering how much time you must put into writing these stories for us! But seriously, I hope I can make up for it by saying that reading your story was like as if my mind had been magically obliviated or something and I could read Harry Potter for the first time again, I was that invested in what happened to the characters and the plot and everything that happened. And I can't really give much higher praise than that, since JKR is one of the few who has done that to me in the past :)
But I noticed that you haven't posted a new chapter for a few months, and I really hope this has more to do with the fact that you've been really busy rather than that you're considering abandoning the story... I know I would definitely love to read more of Twice Defied, and maybe even eventually Thrice Defied! It's crazy but your characterisations are pretty much exactly how I imagined all the Marauders and Lily, and I love how canon you are as well :) It definitely makes it easier to imagine that this really happened, which is pretty much exactly what I was looking for when I found Once Defied.
Anyway, this is a SUPER long review, but hopefully it makes up for me not reviewing previously!
I guess I want to finally say, no matter what you choose to do with this story, thank you so much for taking the time to write as much as you have! It couldn't have been easy, but you're a really good writer and I really hope you do decide to finish Twice Defied and then Thrice Defied as well! I know, I don't ask for much... Haha :) But I would definitely read and re-read them if you do decide to continue :)
So in review, this story is perfect and you are amazing and please write more!!! :) Report Review
I enjoy reading James/lily, so don't feel like you have to hold back or anything Report Review
I thought the disease was excellent. Something really believable (in this fictional world).
I also really liked that the girls started to bond a little Report Review
I'm getting pretty excited now that things seem to be picking up.
I really like the way you've portrayed lily and James' relationship. While they aren't unrealistically forgiving of each other's mistakes that occurs in fluffy pieces, they don't do that annoying 'on again, off again' routine with the angst of drama. It's refreshing Report Review
I'm so glad that I found your stories! I've been digging my way through this site for the last couple of weeks to procrastinate studying for my exams (it's working extremely well) and these stories are definately very high up on my list!
Hope you'll update soon. Report Review
I have enjoyed this story very much and i hope you keep updating it often Report Review
Please post more of this story. I have been anxiously awaiting the next installment. I absolutely love your stories. Keep it up! :) Report Review
Love it can't wait to read more Report Review
Good plot development so far. Makes me want to read
more, and I like long chapters when they are as good as this
one.Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm really happy to hear that you're interested to read more...though not so happy that I don't have more to offer right now!
I also appreciate your feedback about the length; sometimes I really do worry that I'm scaring people off with the length of the chapters. (I'm sure that's the case for some people, but as long as there are a few who don't mind, I'm happy!)
Thank you again! Report Review
I love it!! Please update soon! I just read Once defied and Twice Defied in less than two days...I need more chapters for my new addiction. Actually...add like 7 chapters! Right now!Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! I'm so glad to hear you loved the story that much. :) I apologize that I've been slower in updating lately...I'll admit that I've hit a spot in the story where I don't really know where to go next, and plus I'm way more busy because I have a full-time job now. But I am working on more of the story, and will hopefully have something new up soon!
Thanks for your patience and, again, for the review! Report Review
This is amazing. I'm loving the story so far! I'm keen for next chapter :D Please keep writing!! Good luck aha.Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I hope I will have a new chapter up in the next couple of weeks...I started a new job at the beginning of October and it's been a real time leech. I'm planning to try to write 25,000 words for this story in November, though, so hopefully updates should be more frequent.
I'm thrilled that you love the story, and thanks for being patient with me! :) Report Review
Awww they are so cute! James and Lily make me so warm and fuzzy. I loved seeing so much of them here. You also managed to do a lot with them but without completely neglecting the wider plot so that was good. Not going to lie, I sort of saw the attack coming, but it was still pretty suspenseful wondering what exactly would result from James and Lily's messup. Great chapter! One minor error is but she could Sirius wasn’t having any of it. you need something like but she could see, or she could tell. Also, congrats on winning the dobby!Author's Response: Hi StormThief! Thank you so much for coming to read and review. :)
Totally know what you mean about the warm and fuzzy feeling. :D I definitely got that when I was writing this chapter, which was fun! I'm glad you enjoyed that part of the chapter, and the way that I worked it into the bigger plot.
I'm not too surprised that you sensed something was off in that scene. James did too, but then, because he's James, he got all distracted by Lily's Patronus. :P
Thank you for pointing out that error--you're definitely right that something is missing there!
And thank you also (I feel so repetitive, haha) for the congratulations! It's a kind of crazy feeling...one of those things you always secretly hope for, but never really think will happen. I really appreciated your nomination in the Best Romance category, as well. Report Review
I think I have a problem: I squealed way too much during all of the James/Lily bits. But they're just too darn cute! I can't help all the abundance of feels they give me! I loved the whole Patronus thing; I was probably smiling as wide as James was. And she came to visit him! And she loves him! Ah I just can't even jkdsjfgjhsf
Sorry I'll act like a normal person now haha. So I loved this chapter! (And not just the James/Lily bits!) I was very suspicious of the screaming woman and to find out that she's Gamp's wife is unsettling; I feel so bad that Sturgis was attacked, and I don't know how I feel about them not telling the Order about the situation. And I really loved how you described Lily's feelings towards Sirius; I wonder what he has to do in order to gain her trust and liking (since we know in canon that they became friends) and I wonder what she has to do to gain his.
Wonderful chapter! I can't wait for the next update!
~Jess :DAuthor's Response: :D Yay, feels! This was definitely a fun chapter to write. Not the most eventful, but it was nice to get to write a lighter scene between James and Lily.
I'm particularly happy you liked the Patronus "reveal", so to speak (though that makes it sound a lot more dramatic than it really is...), because I was really anxious about having to write that scene. I didn't want to make it seem cliched or contrived or anything, and it felt like there was a lot of potential for it to go in that direction. But if it resulted in feels, that is awesome. :D
I didn't know how suspicious the screaming woman/Gamp's wife was going to seem, but I figured that most people would pick up on there being something off. :P In fact, James kind of did too, but his attention was drawn elsewhere by the whole Patronus situation.
I can't say that I know exactly how Sirius and Lily grow closer (yet), but I know that it will happen. :P I feel like Sirius would have a bit of resentment towards Lily because she takes so much of James' attention away--not really because there's anything slashy going on, but just because I think Sirius is a bit unbalanced and selfish in that way. I feel like that's a wound that could definitely be healed with the passage of time...but we shall both see how it all transpires! :P
Thank you again for your reviews! I started a new job a couple weeks ago, and I'm trying to find the time to write more often, now that things are settling down. Hopefully a new chapter will be up before the end of the month! Report Review
I absolutely loved this chapter! What I really love about this story is how you detail the progression of the war and how it affect James and Lily and the Marauders - and how they cope with it all. It's so realistic and true to JK's work and I am just always impressed. And I loved the second half of the chapter; it was the Marauders being the Marauders again. I think that this is something that probably occurred in canon: sad, dangerous times and then going out one night for a good laugh - just like old times. I thought it was very funny and really great to read.
~Jess :DAuthor's Response: Hi Jess! Thank you so much for the review (and a small apology for taking a little while to reply).
The war is one of my favourite parts of Marauders Era stories. I mean, it isn't very pleasant, but I feel like it's one of the most compelling parts of their story. I'm so glad you like the way I've portrayed it so far! And especially happy that it seems true to canon and realistic, because those qualities are something I strive for in my writing. :)
I wasn't too sure whether the second half of the chapter came off as well as I had hoped, so I'm very happy to hear that you found it funny! I think maybe I was just mired in some of the darker elements of the story when I was writing it, and I worried that it was going to make a scene that was supposed to be funny kind of depressing. And also conflicted because I didn't want to make it TOO funny, given James' situation. :S Anyway, though--that's just me over-thinking, as usual. I'm really happy you liked it!
Thanks again! Report Review
More Lily/James, I say!
But no, really, yet again you did a great job at balancing the plot with the romance aspect. I loved it!
The plot is definitely thickening and I'm really worried that nothing but bad things will come out of the secret they're all keeping. I wish Lily would've spoken up, but I understand her hesitancy to do so.
Once again, I'm super impressed by your characterization of Sirius. There's just something about the way you write him that feels so canon to me. Perhaps it's the darkness that shrouds his peripheral. At any rate, I love it. I also love how close you've made him and Peter - it makes his reaction to Peter's betrayal all the more believable.
Anyway, I'm so excited to read more of this and demand that you update soon! Yes, you read that right - I demand it! Or, at the very least, very politely request that you publish the next chapter just as soon as you're done with it!Author's Response: More Lily/James ALWAYS. I really do enjoy writing the interactions between them--they're my OTP and my favourite characters. I've always considered this story much more of a James/Lily story than a Marauders story. But usually, I get worried that people will be annoyed if I only focus on the two of them--and, realistically, it's not like any couple spends ALL of their time together.
Anyway. I seem to be explaining myself for no reason. Moving on... :P
The Order is this fascinating thing to me--I think there's a temptation to see it as this altruistic, let's-join-hands-and-vanquish-evil group, but I just see all of these individual human beings with their own motivations and opinions, and it's wonderfully flawed. Lily and the Marauders aren't the only ones who keep things to themselves, and that will likely come up later on--not in a terribly important way (or, at least, as far as I can think ahead), but I have a few small plans. ;)
I'm SO happy you liked the part about Sirius. I originally wrote that a couple chapters back, but ending up editing it out and saving it for later. :P Oddly enough, Sirius is a character that really intimidates me. I love his dark edges, much more than his good qualities, and I have trouble putting the two together sometimes. And I don't know what it is about him and Peter that just goes together really well in my mind--they always gravitate towards each other in conversations, and I feel like they have a similar sense of humour.
I'm going to try super super super hard to finish the next chapter by next weekend. I know it's a bit later than the weekly updates I've been doing recently, but that's life for you. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! Report Review
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