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Review #51, by Beeezie The Flowers of London

18th July 2013:
The start of this chapter was very, very interesting, and you brought a lot of serious societal beliefs up in just the beginning of the chapter. You're not just telling a story - you're creating a world and showing the readers its faults and flaws. Lily's thoughts about wizards not needing to look good was very, very telling about her attitudes and the way her society as a whole sees women. It's clearly a bit more complicated than that, but it gives an overall idea, as did Lily's reluctance to criticize her brother, even though what she ended up saying really isn't that bad.

And I continue to love your writing style. It's easy to get absorbed in and quite witty as well; I loved the bit where Ginny popped out of thin air and you said there were too many spells for "this poor author" to list. I also loved the comparison Ginny drew between herself and Rose when she was talking to Lily in the carriage. The similarities had occurred to me as well, though Rose would likely rather read or garden than play Quidditch. Still, it amounts to the same thing: not being a "proper" lady.

Another great chapter, Susan. I loved seeing this from Lily's perspective, and I can't wait to go one.

House Cup 2013 Ravenclaw

Author's Response: Yes! Yes, that's what's happened to this story! It's become much more about the worldbuilding than I ever intended, but that's mostly what motivates me to write more. I've fallen in love with this universe and all of its complexities. At first I was worried that it would take away from the story, but if anything, it's helped me develop the plot in my own way, distinct from Austen's P&P. This story started as a parody, but it's become something more substantial... and I'm not complaining. :D

What's interesting about Lily is that she's "bought in" to those societal beliefs and doesn't think about what they mean - she represents the "average" point of view, unquestioning of the world in which she lives. A lot of the cousins are like this because they've not known anything else and are comfortable - complacent. Rose, coming from an outsider's perspective, sees all of the inconsistencies and hypocrisies of this society - she doesn't view Ginny or Roxanne as strange because the memory of the war is still fresh in her mind, thanks to her father's stories, in which witches are as much a part of the action as wizards.

It makes me warm and fuzzy inside to see you pull these things out of the story. ^_^ Thank you again for your wonderful reviews!

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Review #52, by Beeezie The Pestilence Comes Forth

18th July 2013:
You continue to amaze.

I think my favorite part of the whole chapter was the "Oh Rose" bit in the very beginning. I've totally been there, and it's really annoying. While I'm pretty sure Lily means well, she's starting to get under my skin, too, by being so ridiculous. I also loved the bit about constantly having a handkerchief in her hand just in case a man she wants to get the attention of walks by - oh Lily.

I also absolutely loved Rose's first reaction to Scorpius. It wasn't quite unreasonable - he did compare her to a hippogriff when she was already having a bad time of it with Lily - but it was perhaps a bit silly, and I was glad to see that she recognized that. And, of course, immediately dismissed it, but that's all right. A little conflict is necessary, and she found other things about him to dislike in no time! I especially liked the bit about Malfoys "heaving into view from whatever moral void in which they existed." It was lovely imagery that made me laugh.

This was another amazing chapter. I'm overusing that word. I can't help it. Great job.

House Cup 2013 Ravenclaw

Author's Response: *blushes* You're being way too kind! Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review every chapter of this story. It's lovely to follow you through and see what aspects of the story are working most effectively. :D

The funny thing about Lily is that as close as she gets to caricature here, there's something frighteningly realistic about her. XD I'm looking forward to continuing to give her depth, slowly revealing more about her as the story develops.

Although this story is founded on the love-hate romance, I don't want there to be that much actual hate between the two of them. Certainly they misunderstand one another and get off on the wrong foot, but they're surprisingly well-suited to one another - the major difference between them is their background and education, which gives them an outward appearance that the other finds unappealing. Rose does have a bit of a short temper (rather like her parents :P), so I'm glad that her snappishness toward Malfoy wasn't unreasonable - poor girl, already in a bad mood, then mocked by this stupid boy... it wounds her pride, and she lashes out.

Thank you again for reading and reviewing! ^_^

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Review #53, by Beeezie Sense and Insensitivity

18th July 2013:
Oh, Violet. How are you so talented? It's almost unfair, except that it's not because you have such lovely stories (and graphics!) for everyone else to enjoy.

I have so much love for this story.

The writing is absolutely beautiful. It definitely felt a bit old-fashioned, which is perfect, but not so much so that I think it would be inaccessible even to people who don't like Jane Austen (which I very much do).

I also loved the way you set the stage for the book early on. That can be a really awkward point in an AU story - it's important to give the readers some sense of what's going on, since it is AU, but it can be difficult to do that without having it come off as awkward and boring. You, however, did not fall into that particular pitfall - the way you talked about the Weasley history here was elegant, and the way you phrased Hermione's background - "as far from pureblooded as one could get without actually being a Muggle" was awesome and so well suited to the time period.

You justified why Rose needed to marry very well. I think a "Because I said so" would have been fine, but I liked that you went deeper and gave reasons that doubled as a way to give the reader some idea of the world around them.

However, once you'd established that, you seamlessly slipped into Rose's character. In just a short period of time, you made me sympathize with her and feel for her. Your last two sentences of the chapter seem to sum up a lot of Rose's fears perfectly, and I can't wait to read on.

House Cup 2013 Ravenclaw

Author's Response: Oh dear, don't start on the compliments so soon! *hides* I don't know how I'll get through your reviews otherwise. I can't begin to explain how happy I am to hear that you love this story, its style and its universe. It's my first time writing a positive Scorose relationship, and also my first time writing in the Regency period, so I tend to agonize over... well, everything. To hear that it's working out means an incredible amount. ^_^

The wonderful thing I've found about writing this kind of AU is the amount of worldbuilding that's necessary. It's more like writing an original story - in fact, I can easily imagine how this story could be converted into an OF with some additional work on the magical structure. It becomes a way for the story to grow beyond of the confines of the P&P structure because I've included a lot more historical content than Austen normally does, largely because it figures prominently among the reasons why Rose and Scorpius become at odds with one another. Their prejudice is based less on class hierarchy and more on family reputation and the "sins of the father(s)".

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review every chapter! It's lovely to get such a treat, and even lovelier to hear how much you're enjoying the story so far!

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Review #54, by WeasleyTwins Sense and Insensitivity

18th July 2013:
Hello Susan! It's been ages, it seems, since I last enjoyed something of yours!

I'm sure you've heard over and over how much people love or hate Austen, but I really like that you've taken her masterpiece (it's really more the time period, I know), and captured the characters and universe we love into something different and fascinating. This past semester, I finally read P & P with my students (they abhor it) and we really delved into the time period. I wanted them to understand the Regency era and what Austen was responding to/against/whatever you please. I also like that you've got your own narrative voice and didn't try to strictly emulate Austen's very distinctive voice. You make it your own, even while negotiating two universes, per se. But, how am I surprised? Still, you and your talents never cease to amaze me.

If I remember correctly, you don't particularly like Scorpius/Rose, so I'm interested in how all of this is going to turn out. Did you intentionally characterize Rose as similar to Elizabeth? Even if you didn't, they seem like almost-twins from different eras. Rose has always struck me as very independent and book smart, not unlike Lizzy. And Lily! As my Southern dad would say, what a card!

I've never really been one for AU because it's never in the right writer's capable hands for me. I think, however, with a few more chapters, I'll be the biggest AU fan running - only if you're writing, though!

As always, it's a privilege and a pleasure to read and review your work, Susan. I can't wait to see what's in store! ♥


Author's Response: Shelby! It was a great surprise to see you reading and reviewing this story, and it means a lot to hear that you've enjoyed it so far! :D

It really is more of a Regency story than an Austen story, especially since I've drawn a more explicit connection to the Revolutionary Wars, but of all the authors who write about this period, her works are still the most inspirational - her wit and way of writing people is something I'd like to capture in this story. Her characters are wonderfully flawed and real, which is perhaps a major reason why her novels keep inspiring audiences (excluding your students of course :P The poor things have trouble with the writing because it doesn't sound like "modern" English to them - I wonder how they got through Shakespeare in high school).

I'm glad that the writing style is working for this story, not just because it's sometimes a nightmare to keep it up (it's wordier than even I'm used to!), but because I want to give a flavour of the style of the period without specifically trying to emulate Austen. There's no way anyone can do that - any attempts I've seen end up sounding ridiculous. It probably helps that I've also drawn from later nineteenth-century authors like Thackeray, Eliot, and Dickens - I've tried to recreate the period in this story rather than recreate an Austen novel. Maybe that's the difference.

It's true that I don't like Scorpius/Rose, though it's mostly because of how fandom has constructed their relationship. It's made a difference to place them in an entirely different setting, and I can see the ways that their personalities compliment one another. It's great that you see the similarities between Rose and Lizzie. I didn't purposely make them alike - the combination of Ron and Hermione gives Rose a lot of interesting characteristics. She is rather different from Lizzie as the story continues, mostly because Rose has more to fight against... as you'll see in later chapters. ;)

Thank you SO much for your review! It's inspiring and lovely - I can't tell you how much it means to hear these compliments from you, Shelby! *hugs*

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Review #55, by MissMoneypenny A Promise Given

23rd June 2013:

First of all I'd just like to congratulate you, because this must be an extremely hard plot to pull of sometimes, what with all the historical accuracy, and the writing style, and everything. So hats off to you for that.

I'm really enjoying the story so far. I have to say, being a bit of wimp when it comes to this sort of thing, I wasn't ver the moon when I heard how Rose's family was now sort of... Is discredited the right word? But then I suppose it makes your fic stand out from others, and also emphasises the whole plot of Rose's search for a husband.

Rose is brilliantly written. She's a bit unpredictable, isn't she, and that's what makes her great. I am impatiently (not to say that the plot is moving slowly) awaiting more interaction between her and Scorpius/Darcy. And, if it's OK, would you mind putting in some good stuff that happens to Rose? Like, I don't know, everyone noticing how beautiful she is? Or she suddenly inherits a large amount of money? Or, at the very least, she learns how to conduct herself in public and becomes the toast of high society?

... Sorry. It's my own form of escapism.

Anyway, thanks for a great story, and please update soon!

Miss Monepennny :-)

Author's Response: Thank you very much! It can be a challenging story to write, especially in trying to find the right balance between historical content and plot development (I keep veering toward the former to my dismay :P), but it's also just a fun story to write. The Regency period has a lot to offer, and I'm enjoying my first foray into it.

It's fantastic to hear that you've enjoyed the story so far. It was a risk to make Ron and Hermione unpopular in the wizarding world, but it made for an easy equivalent to the social position of the Bennett family in Austen's novel. Lady Catherine and Darcy himself have issues with Lizzie's family, and it ends up being a significant aspect of the novel's plot. I also wanted to take advantage of the fact that Hermione was tortured in Malfoy Manor - it's not something that comes up often enough in fanfiction even though it's a major traumatic moment for Hermione.

I'm so glad that you like my Rose! She's an odd character - at least in my mind - and I haven't quite figured out how I want to develop her. Good things will definitely happen to her! Thank you for mentioning that - she does need some happy moments to improve her self-esteem and ready her for the next encounter with Mr. Malfoy. :D

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Review #56, by j A Promise Given

14th June 2013:
i love love love this! so much! i'm loooking forward for the next chapters! your story is very original and well written. i'm very curious about scorpius. and i'm hoping for a happy ending for the couple! thanks so much for sharing.

Author's Response: Thank you! :D It's great to hear that you're looking forward to the next chapters. I have to sit down and figure out exactly how I want to develop Scorpius's character - he's a tricky one to write at the best of times, but because he's now in the role of Mr. Darcy, there's a lot more pressure to portray him in just the right way. *crosses fingers*

Thank you for your compliments! I really appreciate that you took the time to read and review. ^_^

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Review #57, by Penelope Inkwell A Promise Given

13th June 2013:
Very well crafted! Your commitment to the style of the period continues to astonish. Also, I donít know that I mentioned it before--I love that youíve combined the Second Wizarding War with the turmoil in France. So clever! I continue to enjoy your remarkable fic.

And, of course, I can hardly wait to see what becomes of the relationship between Rose and Scorpius in the world you have set up.

Thank you!

Author's Response: Wow, thank you! It means a lot to hear that the style of the story continues to be a success - sometimes it takes longer to properly word a particular sentence without making it horribly wordy. I didn't realize just how much writing styles have changed in the past two-hundred years until I began writing this story.

Thank you again for your compliments! I hope that you continue to enjoy the story!

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Review #58, by Sun Lovegood A Promise Given

13th June 2013:
This was really good, love the idea. I may not have liked how you pictured Albus as stupid, but you cant have everything, right? keep up the good work and update soon!

Author's Response: The characterization of Albus isn't the greatest so far, I agree - I've meant him to be putting on a performance as the fop. He's not stupid, but he values the wrong things and thinks too highly of himself. But he and Rose do get along well, and I don't think that Rose would like someone who didn't have some substance.

But anyway, I'll make sure to work more carefully with him in future chapters. :) Hopefully that will help.

Thank you for reading and reviewing! I'm glad to hear that you've enjoyed the story so far!

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Review #59, by navyfail A Promise Given

13th June 2013:
A much awaited update!

Miss.Zabini is an interesting new character and I hope to see more of her. Ginny seems very responsible and reasonable. I like how she watches out for Rose. Scorpius, my oh my, is he going to get tangled with a Weasley. ;)

Great chapter as usual!

p.s. I also enjoyed Kreacher. He is always more of a forgotten character. I like that you included him.

Author's Response: It took forever to get this chapter out! The next one shouldn't take so long, though, because I've finally outlined the plot in greater detail. :)

Thank you for coming back to read and review the new chapter. It's fantastic that you've enjoyed it and the story as a whole! The characters, including Kreacher, are very interesting to write in this period - I'm glad that you enjoyed seeing Kreacher here. It is easy to forget him, but he's an important reminder of the war and the pureblood attitude.

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Review #60, by AriesGirl40 A Promise Given

13th June 2013:
Sounds like Scorpius is infatuated with an equal.I adored this chapter. Well done :)

Author's Response: Yes, he is! :D Rose has shown herself to be more than just the country cousin of the Potters, and his first impressions have all been shattered. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!

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Review #61, by Rachel A Promise Given

13th June 2013:
Loved the little moments between Rose and Ginny!! Great work, can't wait for the next chapter :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I was worried that those moments were slowing down the plot too much, so it's wonderful to hear that you loved them! :D

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Review #62, by itsonlyjamespotter A Promise Given

13th June 2013:
I have just finished reading this story and it's amazing! I love how it's set in the 18th Century, I was skeptical at first but you certainly make it work! Well done! You are a very talented writer - keep going! Looking forward to the next chapters :) ~Hannah x

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm very glad that you like how the different time period is working for this story. It does sound strange at first, but I've noticed that the more I get into the history, the more parallels I find with the Potterverse. I've always wanted to write a period piece like this, and it means a lot to hear that you've enjoyed it so far! :D

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Review #63, by emerald_princess A Promise Given

13th June 2013:
Oh my goodness! I'm so excited you updated, this chapter has just given me so many Pride and Prejudice feels. The characters and writing are invredible and I love every moment of reading this story. It's fantastic!

Thanks for being such a wonderful writer! :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much! :D It's great to hear that you're excited to see this story updated, and even better that you enjoyed this chapter. Your compliments are fantastic and inspiring - thank you!

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Review #64, by navyfail The Field of Dishonour

27th April 2013:
I read this story about a month back and was itching to go back and review so here I am. :O

I love the setting! The idea of taking the Next Generation and placing them in a Pride and Prejudice type time period/situation is unique and cool. The dresses, the balls, the men in their coats and trousers...very likable.

Rose is the best. Scorpius seems rude but he'll grow on me. I'm sure of it. Lily makes me laugh with all her girlishness and interest of Malfoy. And Al is a sweetheart for protecting his cousin.

All in all, I love this story. I hope you update soon. :)

Sama 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! :D It's great to hear from you, especially that you've been enjoying the story and its premise. Writing the next-gen characters in this period is strange at the same time that it's really exciting - there are so many details to keep track of, but the social attitudes of the day suit this set of characters.

Hopefully Scorpius does grow on you - from this point, Rose will start to see another side of him, but it will be a slow process. Not only do they have to get around their prejudices, they have the whole history between their two families to deal with, and that only makes things more difficult for both of them.

Thank you again! :D I've already started the next chapter, so keep an eye out for it!

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Review #65, by Penelope Inkwell The Field of Dishonour

9th April 2013:
I just want to say, this is brilliant! Itís just incredible how excellently you recreate the literary style of the era youíve set the story in, and I cannot wait to see what happens!

Again I say, BRILLIANT!!! And well done, Rose!

Author's Response: Yay, thank you! :D It's wonderful that you've taken the time to read this story, and review it too!

I'm really glad to hear that the era and the story are coming along so well. Writing in this style is strange, not so much because of the word choice but the different phrasings and syntax. It's so much more formal and exacting. Writing like this makes me admire Austen all the more.

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Review #66, by greenphantomme The Field of Dishonour

5th April 2013:
I quite like how you've set this story up! The time period you placed the characters in brings something different and I'm excited to read more!

It's very easy to read and enjoyable! I wonder what's going to happen next. . . !

Author's Response: Thank you very much! It's fantastic to hear that you like how the time period and plot are working out so far. :D It's a lot of fun to write these characters into the Regency period - I've never written this kind of AU before, so I'm pleased that you like it.

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Review #67, by slytherinchica08 The Field of Dishonour

2nd April 2013:
First of all, how have I not noticed that this story has had a new chapter for weeks now! Gah that just makes me so sad because I remember loving this story so much! Ok, well I'm here now and now I will go read the chapter!

Man I can't even get far into the story without already falling back in love with it! Your wording and imagery that you paint for your readers is just beautiful! I was sucked right in to your chapter and felt like I had never left it! And oh how this new chapter did not disappoint! I just loved it all to bits! I did notice one mistake and it was here "for surely no polite wizard could know such depth of feeling, particularly not a Malfois" I'm not sure if the i in malfoy's is meant or not but I'm assuming you meant to have a y there.

I'm so excited to have seen a new update for this story and hopefully more will be coming again soon because I have missed this very much! This story has been in my favorites for a reason so I will continue to keep my eye on it and hope for some more updates!

I was kind of wondering where Rose was at since she had really wanted to be there in the first place, but I will admit to suspecting that maybe she had come as Roxanne I didn't even think about Louis! It was great though when it was revealed that it was her and that Malfoy didn't get upset about it! I loved that he even kept with the civility of it all and shook her hand in the end. I can't wait to see what you will come up with next for this story! Great Job!


Author's Response: Thank you for coming to read and review this story! I'd only just realized how long it had taken me to update this story! Somehow I'd lost track of time - I can't even believe that it's been a year-and-a-half since I began writing it. Anyway, I'm really glad that you've been enjoying it, and I promise to keep better track of updates in the future. :)

Eee, you liked the chapter! It's fantastic to hear that! For that line you pointed out, I think I wanted to allude to the French translation of Malfoy as "bad faith" - that the family can't show depth of feeling because of their lack of faith, but now that I look at it, the sentence didn't turn out the way I wanted it to. It's too confusing. >< Oh well, thank you for pointing it out - it's a case of the words sounding better in my head than on paper.

It was tricky to make the scene work because of Rose - how could I trick the reader into believing that she was not there. She could have been watching from the trees (and Roxanne had purposely passed her by), though I hadn't thought of her being Roxanne. I made her Louis instead because it would mean the significant change of costume - Rose isn't afraid of becoming someone else, least of all a man, and that impresses Malfoy just as much as her magical abilities.

Thank you again! :D

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Review #68, by Crescent Moon  The Field of Dishonour

16th March 2013:
I love this story! It's so nice to read something really original for a change. I can't wait to see what's going to happen next.

Author's Response: Wow, thank you! :D I'm very pleased to hear that you've enjoyed this chapter!

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Review #69, by Hope's Mom The Field of Dishonour

15th March 2013:
Such drama! Go Rose! As much as I love Austen's amazing stories I have always been grateful that I did not live during those times. Women were just so limited in what they could do (were permitted by men to do). This is an interesting adaptation of the next generation characters to this much earlier time period. Thank you for sharing your story!

Author's Response: The limitations on women in the period makes writing this an interesting challenge - even though the Wizarding World was a little more advanced (one of the Ministers of Magic around this time was a witch), there are still many restrictions on a woman's behaviour. I enjoy writing the Next-Generation characters in this kind of world, though at times it's not all that different from today.

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing this story! It's fantastic to hear that you've enjoyed it! ^_^

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Review #70, by emerald_princess The Field of Dishonour

15th March 2013:
Absolutely brilliant. Your writing is incredible. I am eager to read more so please update soon.

Author's Response: Thank you! It's wonderful to hear lovely compliments like this! I'm very glad that you enjoyed this chapter. :D

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Review #71, by 800 words of heaven The Pestilence Comes Forth

4th February 2013:

So, I reviewed the first chapter of this story, also under the guise of the review tag. I really should go review another story of yours, but I like this one too much!

You have such a wonderful author's voice! And your use of commas - to die for! Excuse the weirdness of me complimenting your commas, but I really love them!

So... Scorpius seems to have potential to be interesting. I already love Rose. And Lily reminds me a lot of Tianna's best friend from Princess and the Frog, for some reason. But we didn't really get much about Scorp in this chapter - I hope to see him in the next three published chapters!

Also, on a slightly unrelated note, um... exactly how old is Kreacher now? He was practically as old as Christianity when Sirius had him, he must be as old as the Pyramids by now! It seems the free elf lifestyle is suiting him!

Anyways, I actually cannot wait to read what happens next!

Author's Response: Thank you for coming back to review another chapter! ^_^ It means a lot that you've done so, and to hear you say that you like this story so much!

You're like the first person who compliment me on my commas! I love commas and clauses - it's a lot of fun to put them together in complicated ways to give a sentence perfect rhythm. Thank you! *dances*

Scorpius will come back... often. ;) There's still much I have to do to develop his character, as he is complex, but he doesn't let anything show. In some ways, he is like Darcy, but I want to make him more of my own character too, and I still have to figure out the best way to do that.

Kreacher is probably ancient. XD I don't know how long house elves live, and I've never actually thought about it before. My excuse for this story is that the timeline is shortened - Rose was born at the end of the revolution (she's 18 in this story, which would put her DOB at 1799). So instead of the 25 years between the fall of Voldemort and Rose being 18 in canon, there's only 18 years. Perhaps the difference of 7 years would keep Kreacher alive.

That's a very lame excuse, isn't it? :P

But thank you again for your lovely review! I hope that you enjoy the rest of the story too!

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Review #72, by Ray In Which History is to Blame

26th January 2013:
This is amazing. I love the whole Jane Austen outtake on the rose/scorpious ship! I hope you continue with this fanfic and update soon! I can't wait to see what happens at the duel!

Author's Response: Wow, thank you very much! It's fantastic to hear such compliments for this story. :D

I'm halfway through the next chapter, so it shouldn't be too much longer. Duels are harder to write than I anticipated. ;)

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Review #73, by 800 words of heaven Sense and Insensitivity

22nd January 2013:

Hello! For some strange reason, I've never actually read any of your many works, which is quite weird - but I'm glad that I finally have!

I adore Jane Austen (and clearly, you do to), so I was pretty excited about this! This is the first AU story I've ever read, and I must say, that I'm enjoying it immensely!

Your writing style is obviously unique, but you still manage to capture the essence of Austen, I think, with that sense of humour and wit, but there's still that underlying presence of something much deeper and darker. Already, Rose's character has raised some interesting points about gender equality in the wizarding world, especially considering what we know about their world and how men and women tend to be equal, because magical ability isn't considered to be gender-dependent.

Anyways, I adore Rose - I think she's a fantastic character, with a lot of potential for development and growth. I like how she seems to be a good balance of both Hermione and Ron, yet still her unique self, which is sometimes lacking in other depictions of her.

Lily seems like an interesting character - she reminded me a bit of Austen's Emma, actually.

So excited to see what happens next!

PS: Sorry about appearing as a guest reader. I'm not logged into my account, because my internet is acting weird!

Author's Response: Thank you for choosing this story for the swap! It's a lot of fun to write, even if it takes a while to get the right voice in my head for it - Austen's style is very complicated, peppered with satire and wryness. It doesn't always come through as well as I'd like, but I'm really glad to hear that the essence of her style is there. :D

Yay! Someone has noticed the commentary on gender roles! I thought it would make an interesting addition to this story, especially because the wizarding world seems to, historically, include more women in powerful positions. The Minister of Magic before the Revolution was a woman, so I can safely place witches like Ginny and Roxanne in roles that wouldn't at all be allowed for Muggle women. But there's still a tension present that I want to explore, especially with Lily, who almost seems rebellious in her desire to be nothing more than an ornamental wife. Rose navigates the space in between, which gives her the opportunity to observe and comment upon on what it means to be a witch at that time and place. It's something I hope to expand upon as the story continues. :)

It's wonderful that you've enjoyed this story so far, and I hope that you enjoy reading the rest too! ^_^

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Review #74, by Jchrissy In Which History is to Blame

26th October 2012:
I still can't believe I didn't submit the review on this when I read it the first time. But the good news is, this chapter was just as entertaining the second read through as the first!

Oh. My. God. I feel like I'm in my theater class. Practicing our improv with the Albus and Scorpius scene. Which is perfect. Because everyone knows in Drama you over act, and the fact that no one in the crowd is falling on the ground laughing as Al removes his glove, is just such an awesome credit to your ability write this time period. I could read that entire section over and over.

I am so jealous of you right now. The green envy kind where I almost want to just exit out of this box. But I won't, because.. I pretend to be a big person and all that. BUT! Your seamless transition from the more comic aspect of this t Rose's own thoughts about their society, which clearly hasn't risen from the ashes the way we imagine the world in HP day to have. I just. I want to use big letters at you or something because of that tactic that you've really mastered like no one else I've seen. This second part didn't feel slightly out of place, it felt necessary actually. You gave us this real substance, and it wasn't necessary to make this story awesome, but it absolutely got me more addicted to their world. And know Harry has done something naughty! He's given Rose a way to get past what her aunt said, well I guess he just gave her the name that would lead her to an answer, but still. I just really loved their conversation. It felt like Harry was really seeing that Rose truly is something *more*.

I feel like I never make sense in the reviews I leave you. That's your fault; you're the one who writes so well that I just get mushy.

I can't wait to find out what happens! In the meantime, I'll occupy myself with a step into Minerva's world ;)

Author's Response: Yay! It's a great relief to hear that this chapter was as good as the last. It's not just the fact that this chapter was... rather bipolar in nature, but also the amount of time that passes between updates poses a threat to my style. I always wonder whether I can keep up the right tone for this story, as it requires a very specific voice. It's a wonderful voice to use, but it doesn't always come naturally.

Haha, that scene between Albus and Scorpius! It's so wonderfully overdramatic - I had way too much fun writing it, making the seconds tick past as Albus pulled each finger from his glove. These two and Lily are very theatrical, and Rose just watches them and shakes her head in wonder. But from what I've read of this period, this flair for the dramatic was the fashion in courtly circles. It doesn't come into Austen's work to any great degree, but when I read about the Prince Regent or Beau Brummel, I was amazed. That's probably why the crowd doesn't laugh - they see it all as part of the show, and only Rose sees it as alien. Ginny tells her to ignore it and let them perform the duel, but Rose can't because it's just so strange to her - she feels the slight as a real insult, and she wants real revenge. What Albus wants out of it is more ambiguous.

Jealous of me?! :O I can't tell you how happy I am to hear that the transition was seamless! It didn't feel that way to me, but as long as it looks that way, I'll feel better about it. It seemed like such a contrast between the bright stage of the ball and the darkened salons where Rose indulges in her equally dark thoughts. She doesn't belong in that other world - if anything, she's more like the older generation, and Harry not only recognizes that, he respects her for it. Now that I think of it, the second half of the story represents the reality of their world, whereas the first scene is this artificial world that Rose will always oppose. Perhaps she'll even try to pull it down to expose its shallowness. But that might end up being too deep for what I initially meant to be a fun, light story. :P

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing these last few chapters! It means a lot to hear your opinions - you're an amazing reader and reviewer! ^_^

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Review #75, by Jchrissy Of the Prejudiced and Proud

28th September 2012:
Hello, darling! So, I know you've been requesting from me for this story, but let's do away with that from here on out. Mainly because I'm not patient enough to wait, and because I just saw (for some reason??) your Minerva story, and I want to start that. But I want to caught up with this first.

So if you have any specific concerns for the chapters five of this, and the future chapters, *please* PM them to me. That way we both win.. I can review at the speed I want without having to worry that you are online when I open my slots, and you can still list any concerns you have for me to pay special attention to. You're more than welcome to do this when I start your McGonagall story, as well!

Anyway, onto my fangirling I'm about to do for this chapter...

Oh my gosh! I am so happy this was the scene you decided to use from Pride and Prejudice because it's *perfect*! I'm not disappointed that you'll be making this novel your own, I'm actually really excited about it, but I'm still thrilled that you used this scene. I'm giving you big huge lovely puppy eyes right now.

And Rose's humor. Well, your humor I suppose, is just so fitting for the time period. I love dry humor and so far this is filled with the perfectly placed little tidbits of it.

I really liked the peek into Victoire and Teddy's life, I'm actually excited to learn more about all the Weasley/Potter/Lupins during this time frame. It's just like learning about a new character but with that 'oh I know them' feeling. Am I making sense? This is what happens when it's a 'because I want to' review, I tend to just a bit mushy and kind of squiggle things together.

I just can't get over how much I love stepping back into time with your story, it's wonderful!

See you soon, and really don't hesitate on the offer to PM me concerns for chapters with this or the Minerva story!! I'm going to review them anyway; I want you to get as much out of my reviews as you can.. and not just mushy squiggles of words!!

Author's Response: Hello! I'm sorry to have taken so long to respond - it was a delight to receive this review from you, as I was waiting to snag a spot in your review queue. It means a lot that you wanted to come and read the rest of your story on your own. It's what I hope for when requesting reviews or doing exchanges, but it still manages to be a rare thing to find the right person for a story. Whenever you're able to read the rest, please do and enjoy it! That's what matters most. :D

It's great that you liked how I used that scene. It's such an iconic one in the whole hate/hate type of relationship emerging from Austen's novel, so I couldn't resist including it. And you like Rose's humour too! You're doing a very job of making this author happy. :P I wasn't sure if that aspect of the humour was going too far, but it is an interesting part of her personality, both letting her rebel and relieve the stress of awkward situations.

Hopefully I'll be able to include more information about the larger family as I continue. I add it as I go depending on what seems necessary to provide background or, I'll admit it, fill up a scene. *hides* But it would be fun to do something on Teddy and Victoire's relationship because it would provide a nice contrast to the dysfunctional relationships of Rose/Scorpius and... others. Thank you for that idea - it's got the wheels turning in my head now, which is always a good thing!

Also thank you for reading and reviewing this chapter! I really appreciate it! ^_^

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