ahh I admire you so much! your such a strong writer and your graphics are nothing short of perfection an then your stories leave me speechless, this is one of my favorites now, great job! :DAuthor's Response: Aww, thanks so very much! It's wonderful that you think so. =D Report Review
Awww :'( that was just completely heart wrenching. That last paragraph was absolutely beautiful. I adore and hate beautiful sad stories, hate because they make me so sad. Well done.Author's Response: Sad stories are terrible in that way. :( Yet all I seem to write are stories with sadness in them. *sigh* Anyways, thank you for reviewing and enjoying this story. It was quite a new thing for me to write, so it means a lot that you liked it. :) Report Review
oh. my. god. you are THE most AMAZING writer ever. i am soo impressed.
i cried. i siriusly (lol) cried. :(
wow. very very powerful.
i love the quotes about love. they're so disillusioned. i love stuff like that.
id give you a 5646564654 out of 10 if i could. :)Author's Response: Aww, thanks! ^_^ You're very kind to say so and it means a lot to me to hear that you loved the story. Report Review
Wow! this was really really good, I think I have read another one of your stories but which is it? WHat famous story do you have?Author's Response: Thank you! ^_^ You might have read Murder on the Hogwarts Express - I think that's my most famous piece. :) Report Review
Since I have just suddenly gotten onto the Sirius/Lily ship bandwagon, and I saw this new one-shot from you, I thought I would review. *smiles* Let me start from the top...
The symbolism of James in the room was apparent from the very beginning. You never even had to write him in. James was a 'spirit', so to speak. Between just the ring on Lily's finger and Sirius's 'sight' of him in the room made James's appearance omnipresent - if that makes any sense. He's always there, watching, as if this dark cloud cast over the scene.
Love, even in its simplest form, can never be explained. Sirius is feeling that now - a weight on his chest and something more than he could ever possibly fathom. It's with a woman who is his best friend's wife. A woman, who in all parts, is a temptation and a sin that is thrust upon him with her appearance on his doorstep every night. Why would he give that up if give the opportunity? If he has the chance to sleep with the devil and enjoy it, then he's not going to give it up. Lily is, and always will be, his temptation. Even in the heat of the moment, the thought of James will always be lingering in his mind and the thought of the different type of love Lily feels for him.
I felt the crack of his bones. I felt his heartache and even amidst the tears, I felt his sorrow. Sirius was living and breathing in this story and I could feel every emotion that he was going through. Even in the flashback (which was very well done) I could feel his anger even though he knew that he didn't mean the words. He struck out in anger and regret. He struck out at Lily because he had no one else to strike out at. Everything that he is and was is because of her. To even lash out at her broke his heart in two. And I could feel the regret as Lily closed the door behind her...leaving Sirius to wallow in his self-pity and regret.
As for the ending...just the simple I'm sorry spoke so many volumes. After the death of James and Lily...after everything that he had gone through he was still sorry for it all. It wasn't just sorry for not picking up the phone and not just sorry for not being there. But he was sorry for what he had done to her. He was sorry for what he had done to James. Those two simple words spelt out everything you were trying to convey in this story. It was right to the point and made me feel every emotion that you poured into it.
To say that I'm going to cry is an understatement. Bawl and sob maybe. LOL! Violet, this was a beautiful one-shot to a practically new ship that I'm falling in love with. I know I can't stop writing my own short-story because I'm fascinated with the pairing. I wanted to say great job and I can't wait to read more from you. *hugs*Author's Response: Wow! This is quite a review, Candy! ^_^ You've hit the nail on the head with regards to Sirius' feelings about his relationship with Lily - he's stuck in a trap between loving her and being friends with James, and he's too deep to get out. And when he finally broke, he took it out on her - like you said, she was the only one there to take it out upon. Aha! You got the multitude of meanings attached to the "I'm sorry" - Sirius means it in so many different ways, none of which he can express because they're too deep, too painful. It's so simple a thing to say, but what's around it, why it's being spoken, makes it impossible to say. Thank you very very much for reviewing and loving this story. It means a huge amount that you have and do. I am sorry for making you cry, though. :( I never thought that I'd put that much into the story. Report Review
I think I'm going to go cry now too. This is so beautifully written; I don't even ship Sirius/Lily and you convinced me. The refrence to Sirius having all the girls he could ever imagine was well put; I would think that Lily would've said something like that if put into that sort of position. I like how their relationship seemed real; you're very convincing. You even put the flashback into the exactly right place. So, overall, this is a really good job.
Di Author's Response: Aww. :( I convinced you of the ship? That was not intended, really, since I'm still not convinced of it myself. Poor heartbroken Sirius. It's great, though, that their relationship and how they acted was convincing and realistic - it's very strange writing about a situation I haven't actually experienced, keeping it real isn't at all easy. Thank you very much for reviewing and enjoying the story, Diandra. =) Report Review
AH THIS IS SO GOOD! You got Sirius so perfectly and I loved the entire scene with Sirius and Lily; it was all beautifully written. I apologize for not writing a longer review, but there's school tomorrow and I have to sleep! But 10/10 + favorites! Thank you Susan!Author's Response: Thank you very much, Em. ^_^ It's awesome that you enjoyed this story that totally came out of nowhere one night, haha. You don't have to leave a longer review - it's more than enough that you favourited it. =D Report Review
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