You really surprised me by choosing Padma's point of view. But it certainly fits as it is a beginning for her. Although they'll still see each other, she has to make friends with her dorm mates too. And I liked that you didn't switch between Parvati and Padma's point of view, but let her have the limelight alone. It also fits the idea that she is in a different house than her twin.
Really a good idea!

Leo (Gryffindor)

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I loved how you portrayed his thoughts, and his change over the course of a one-shot. How he was so excited at first to show everyone that he was a Black, how he would make his family proud. That seems to be the main objective of Regulus' life, to make others proud. I find it so sad that he never fully gained his family's respect, and that Sirius never found out about what he did.
Like you, I don't picture Regulus as someone capable of murder or torture, and that he realised the wrong of his way so quickly.
A really enjoyable peek into Regulus mind!

Leo (Gryffindor)

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This was so touching. I really like how, while they might have known, Remus was still slightly bitter about the others. It was so much more cheering in the end when they transformed. I couldn't help but smile. I think all the characters were portrayed really well in this. I really enjoyed reading this.

Excellent job! :D

SakuraSou
Hufflepuff

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I love this. I loved the imagery you created with your descriptions. How much the students of Gryffindor had changed, not only themselves but each other, throughout their years there was also a great touch. The description of whats happening all around them makes it so much more real. I love the ending and how he hopes for a better world. It was a great piece and a great read.

A spacing problem throughout and some of the paragraphs could have been broken down into smaller ones but overall an excellent piece and very well written. Great job.

~Celtic~
Celtic_Dreamer7
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Nothing better to bond over than a mutual laugh! Clever way to show how Sirius would slways think Peter was a bit peculiar when he mentioned the duck, and how James often took charge.
I liked how James would immeditately make the connection with the Blacks after hearing Sirius' first name, as it isn't a common one. It's a nice change from him accepting it without even commenting, it always bugs me a bit. So well done in respect of characterisation. I also liked your Remus, how he would be the one to point out that it was something out of Sirius' control.
Great chapter!

Leo (Gryffindor)

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This was short and sweet and heart breaking at the same time. I really enjoyed reading this oneshot. Charlie/Tonks is a very interesting ship and you've done it so well. I loved their interactions, how she covered his eyes and how he joked with her. It was sad that he had to leave yet I'm glad that Tonks told him to go- its in her character. It was bittersweet but you portrayed it so perfectly.

Really loved reading this, excellent job :D

SakuraSou
Hufflepuff

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I simply loved this! When he drifted off and thought about his team, that was so typical Oliver Wood. And then when McGonagall interrupted the lesson? Lol, that was priceless. First the duck, and then him thinking, "I’ll die an old man, surrounded by dozens of kneazles."
I also loved how described their walk towards the deserted classroom. We know Harry was anxious, but seeing it from another's eyes was really good too.
This was an excellent take on a canon moment, I always love those :) Well done!

Leo (Gryffindor)

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I really loved this. It was really refreshing to read about Madame Rosmerta when she was at Hogwarts. I adored how you portrayed her and her little quirks like how she hates the Ravenclaw riddles despite that she is a Ravenclaw. "Nearly Headless Nigel"- that made me laugh out loud. I loved the concept behind the story and how Maura ends up doing and apprenticeship, it was very original and clever. I really enjoyed reading this oneshot!

Great job :D

SakuraSou
Hufflepuff

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It is so nice to read about Charlie, I rarely get a chance to read about him. I think he is portrayed really well in this- how he dissects the matches and everything. This one shot was a delight to read. I loved all the little details, like the locker screaming at guys but not girls. The introduction of Oliver was nice too, it made me smile. This oneshot was just very touching and I really enjoyed reading it.

Excellent job! :D

SakuraSou
Hufflepuff

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Haha, I loved the stereotypes Fleur held about the English. Expecially the food, it added a nice touch. And then how she saw Bill, and thought that maybe she could put up with it all ...
I really liked this a lot, it's a moment were everything still is - or at least seems to be - normal, before the first death. Plus, your descriptions made me see it too, from hearing the Krums talk to her watching Bill.
Great job!

Leo (Gryffindor)

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Interesting, how she got a taste for hurting people. I loved how you described the chase through the castle. Unless I missed it, you didn't name the boy, but I felt bad she was chasing after him. I also liked how you showed Narcissa as the more sensible one, and also more compassionate. I guess it's really only the beginning for Bellatrix, and she'll descend into madness more and more over the course of the years.
Well done!

Leo (Gryffindor)

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This was a really great Regulus one shot. I love how you portrayed him. The way he was always the other brother, even when he was being praised- that was excellently done. Its interesting how you've shown him here and his reasoning for becoming a deatheater. I think its so believable that he would want to outshine Sirius.

Really enjoyed reading this! Great job :D

SakuraSou
Hufflepuff

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Adorable Percy/Penny! Be still, my heart! I'll admit to you I was actually stalking the collab entries to see if there were any Percy fics - and here you are! Yay.

Great job writing him. He's so awkward and stiff and chivalrous and...and... *squishes Percy*

Wood's line made me laugh. Out loud. I don't know why. "...or were you planning on sleeping under the table?" It's just one of those lines, you know? Just great timing and delivery, and funny because of who the line is directed at.

Just so cute and fluffy and a great read. :)

RonsGirlFriday
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This was such an interesting and refreshing piece! It was really nice to read about Rita at Hogwarts. I think you portrayed her excellently and her ambition was very in character. I felt awful for Samantha, loosing both her secret and her friend in one go, it must have been awful. I think it was very believable that the prophet would want info on the professors, rather than students.

I really enjoyed reading this! Great job :D

SakuraSou
Hufflepuff

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This was beautiful, how she thought about Severus, and that she would never forget him. But she didn't love the man he was, but the boy he used to be, because she had grown up herself.
And I liked how it was James who gave her advise, which also made her see him in a new light.
The first person narrative made it all the more personal, so kudos for choosing that!
This was a really well written and thought-out story, well done!

Leo (Gryffindor)

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This was so sad! It was short, to the point and so emotionally strong in a way that you could see the character was falling apart and how cedric's death was affecting them. How she could only look back at the memories and photographs by herself. I think it shows that she feels like she's carrying the burden alone and while everyone else moves on, she's left behind.
Lilypotterfan123, Gryffindor

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This was truly amazing. I absolutely loved how your portrayed Peter in this, he wasn't pathetic though he was the weakest link, and he wasn't dumb though he was clearly frightened. I felt really bad that he got picked on for being the weakest and it wasn't something I'd really thought about before. It was heart wrenching when he felt hopeful after Sirius talks to him and then how its quickly torn away. His fear is really believable and its interesting how you've used that.

Great one shot! :D

SakuraSou
Hufflepuff

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This was a really unique moment to choose! I love Neville's development over the years. He has such a low opinion about himself, so those moments when he realises what he can do all feel so wonderful. Go Neville!
I loved how you let us see his Gran through his eyes, about her strict attitude, and then how he was surprised when she showed she cared. I loved Neville's thoughts about Harry, and that he thought of the others as real friends for the first time in years.
Awesome job!

Leo (Gryffindor)

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This was so descriptive and in depth. Beautifully written, it really is. I love how immediately you already know how the character feels, then you learn why and maybe you can empathise with them. The second person narrative was good too. Then at the end when you finally gave it all away, finally the reader fully understood. Not that I didn't in the first place. The whole story to me started with a question (sort of) and as the story went on it was slowly answered.
Lilypotterfan123, Gryffindor

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This was great! I've never read this scene from Ron's point of view. I love how you've portrayed Ron and all his thoughts, it was really well done. The little bits like how he grabs the French food in hopes of getting to talk to Fleur were great! I loved the little details. The way his thoughts suddenly turn when Harry's name gets called was done very well, his anger is very believable.

Nice oneshot! :D

SakuraSou
Hufflepuff

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Nice way of incorporating the duck!
I really loved you how went about narrating this moment, and then Draco's thoughts. I got the impression Voldemort didn't expect Draco to step up and say he'd do it. He clearly cares about his family, not solely about his name. I also was suprised at Lucius worrying about his safety, but then I thought that both Malfoys went looking for Draco in the last moments of the battle instead of fighting.
Really great story, and it is clearly a turning point for Draco.

Leo (Gryffindor)

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This is a really interesting look into James' mind. A lot of people don't give him enough maturity and heart and soul when they write him. Sure,, he was a joker, but he was forced to grow up very quickly, and he was a smart guy and very loyal and caring.

I wish the mirror theme or reference had been carried through a little more, used at the beginning or something - because it seemed like the only reference to looking in a mirror was at the very end. But, that said, I really liked the message.

And Sirius' line - lol. Love it. Sounds like exactly something he would say!

RonsGirlFriday
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I loved it how you described Fleur's thoughts, and that she was annoyed and bored with the boys who kept falling for her Vela charm. And I also realised that Bill is quite some years older than her. But it would make sense, in that she is tired of boys and wants someone more relaxed and experienced. Also, I loved how she herself felt so nervous all of a sudden, and that he probably thought her stupid and young, and that there might not be anything beyond a friendship.
Well done!

Leo (Gryffindor)

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Well, darn you, Eldy.

He'd walk through hell on his hands for you, but he'll never crawl for you.

I read that line and just stared slack-jawed at the computer for a moment because it's just so perfect and so true. And it's one of those lines I wish I'd written, you know? Because it's awesome.

*huff*

So, I don't want to write an entire review based around one line (though I think I've probably done that before). I really enjoyed this. The middle portion - which I guess was kind of a flashback/dream thingamajig (I'm using technical terms now) - was kind of jarring at first because I was like What is going on here? Why are we back in HBP? Danger, Will Robinson! But then I figured it out and didn't have to execute and emergency landing. I got it, 'cause I'm smart like that. :-D

But anyhow, you know I love reading your Ron/Hermione because you're so fair to Ron and fair to the ship. Whenever I read something anti-R/Hr I die a little bit inside, but whenever you write R/Hr a fairy gets it wings. Or something.

And I still love that line. *huff* I say! *huff* (I kid.)

RonsGirlFriday
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Wow. This was such a chilling oneshot, beautifully written and absolutely compelling. I loved all the phoenix and circle references, they were a nice touch. You portrayed Tom amazingly well, his lust for power and his lack of compassion. Reading about the making of the Horcrux was mesmerising and you did it so well. I really liked how after ward his eyes were red- again, a really nice touch.

This oneshot was simply amazing! Great job!

SakuraSou
Hufflepuff

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