Hi Camila! I'm back for more :)

Okay, I have been meaning to ask this but I keep forgetting. Do you make all of your graphics for chapters? Because I always admire them a lot wanted to let you know they are really great!

Anyway, review time!

I know I'm repeating what I said in the previous reviews, but you just make me love and want to cheer for Dominique so much here. I'm really curious as to why she fell out of the bed and I thought her views on the 'evilness' of dust-bunnies was hilarious :)

This probably has a bit to do with the fact that I'm writing a 'kid of Oliver Wood' story too, but I loved the way you portrayed Nat through Minnie's eyes. I just think Oliver would [[haa, Oliver would, Oliver Wood... :p ]] be an awesome dad! The two's personalities work off eachother, describing Nat's personality and quirks while giving us the further characterization of Minnie that she isn't as athletic or in-shape as her "Quidditch star's kid" best friend. With her the only thing I can think is to try not to slip in the 'mirroring their parents' role. While you've done a brilliant job with that on Minnie so far, make sure Nat has her own personality and dreams instead of just pinning her as 'the kid of Oliver Wood'.

I loved the joke that Oliver bribed Neville to make his daughter the Captain. That was brilliant!

Another line that made me laugh: That immediately drops his attractiveness level down to right above Dare and just under the Giant Squid -loved! I am interested about her loathing of Hufflepuff! If that attractive of a guy can bring his level to the squid just for his house it must be pretty bad :p

She's so cynical! I love it. Her character just grows more with each chapter and it's so great to see.

It was nice to get a little bit more of a background of Dare here too. I love how she always makes fun of him in her head about being a nerdy goodie, even though it just sets up that lovely lovely tension between them even more. :D Aww! and he's blushing at Nat's comment! I just love him now. I loved how incredibly shocked Minnie was that Dare was even a Quidditch fan. I should warn you, I'm a complete romantic and I'm going to be sitting here pointing out every little spot between them and shouting at you to make them snog and get it over with!

aah, and we get a bet! Even before the moment where she chimed in, I was thinking she was going to bet the longest. I'm wondering if Dare is going to try to thwart her at all or if things will be genuine because he TOTALLY LOVES HER!

Okay.. getting ahead of myself. :p

Repeating, again, that I'm still loving how long your chapters are. And, that they don't feel like it. I get down to the bottom and I still find myself wishing there was more there! As always, re-request dear! I can't wait to read more :) These reviews haven't been very helpful lately.. But I love this, keep up the fantastic work!

Author's Response: Hi and welcome back! :)

Yeah, all the graphics for my story are done by me. They change about every few months though. I think this story has had like, fifteen different banners now? Hahaha, I get bored a lot. But thanks!

So the only reason why Minnie fell off her bed, was because the night before I wrote this I had also fallen off my bed. Creative, I know. And don't underestimate the evilness of dust bunnis. Those are some seriously mean creatures. ;)

Hahaha, Nat is probably one of my favorite characters to write. She's just so extreme and different from Minnie, which I love. I agree that its important not to have kids mirror their parents and I try to make Nat her own person. However, Nat is also a complete daddy's girl (which will be brought up more in later chapters) and grew up kind of idolizing her father. For her, her biggest dream is making her father proud. And right now, she thinks the only way to do that is by doing exactly what he did. It's still early in the story though, so she still has lots of things to learn.

Oh and I read "Knock on Wood" and absolutely loved it! Freddy and Hannah, ftw!

Yes, Minnie's got a bit of a vendetta against the Puffs. It'll be a while before we get to see where exactly that hatred comes from, but it'll happen.

Hahaha, poor Dare. Minnie's such a bully to him, I swear. But now with the bet in play, that'll hopefully start to change. Although I have to warn you, I'm so awkward when it comes to writing romance. I much prefer humor and so I'll probably avoid any Min/Dare scenes for as long as possible. Which means, no snogs for a while. If they ever happen that is, muahaha. :P

Thanks again for your reviews! And no, these have been totally helpful! Like, if you'd have never pointed out that the length of these actually work, I would've spent so much time freaking out about either boring everyone or not giving enough. So yeah, definitely helpful.
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This was soo good!

Matlida Ramsey cracks me up, she has some serious issues. Does she like Dare? Cuz I think Minnie was right, she seemed jealous...

I loved Minnie's plan and everyone's reactions were hilarious, especially James and Castor's lol. I loved the fight and I'm slightly scared for their detentions since Ramsey seems to be a psychotic, jealous, loon. Merline help Minnie.

The best part had to be the end though, when they were all talking about their careers and Fred kept trying to get Dare to say he has 'feelings' for Minnie which he so does. He's just to scared of James to admit it and Minnie is too stubborn. But they WILL be together because if they aren't then I will cry.

I can't wait for the next chapter, please, please update soon!

Author's Response: Thank you!

Hahaha, yeah Matilda's definitely got some issues. And yes, she does have a bit of a crush on the Head Boy. We'll see how that one goes.

Oh, the detention will not be a fun one, that's for sure. I mean, what else do you expect from a psychotic loon? Hahaha.

Aw, well I don't want to make you cry but at the same time, I can't promise the two will get together. Who knows, maybe Dare's fear of James will prevent anything from ever happening? We're just going to have to wait and see.

Thanks again for the review!
-Camila :)

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Ok, so I was waiting for this story to be finished before reading it and, oh, what a mistake I made!! I couldn't stop myself and here I am, begging for another chapter!!! This is so frustrating!! Aahhh! Hum. Sorry for that. So yeah, great story, I'll be watching out for the next chapter(s) :-)

Author's Response: Well, if you'd have waited til it was finished, it probably would've been years until you got around to reading it, knowing how awful I am with updating. But none the less, I'm glad you made that mistake, hahaha. So glad you like and I will try to get the next one up soon.
-Camila :)

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again a great one! I'm reading this in bed and got that happy comfy feeling of meeting up with an old friend. Your writing is incredible and your characters are amazingly realistic. I hope you update again soon! No pressure though... cough (; keep up the incredible writing!

Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I'm so happy that you think of this like an old friend. That's really sweet! I'll try and get the next one up soon!
-Camila :)

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Awesome chapter! I can't wait to read more : )

Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you like it!
-Camila :)

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AH! an update! yay! ...yeah, I will just calm down now, hehehee. but brilliant stuff as always, the minnie/dare moment against the wall was funny and perfect, hihii. also loved the future/career talk, that was nice:) and of course hated ramsey, but who doesn't, hahaa. all in all loved it and update soon:)

Author's Response: Yay, review! Hahaha, thanks so much! And if you hate Ramsey now, then you're really not going to stand her for the next one, lol. Thanks again for your review, and I'm so glad that you enjoy this!
-Camila :)

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Great new chapter! Ramsey is truly awful - I am glad she wasn't able to get Al and Scorpius in more trouble. Minnie is a hoot. Dare is so afraid of his best friend's wrath that it is really funny. Thanks for the update!

Author's Response: Hahaha, yeah she is. And just wait until the next chapter where you see what she has in store for detention. I'll guarantee you'll hate her even more. Yep, Dare's a bit of a scaredy pants when it comes to James. Although considering how James is the size of a bear, I suppose it's a little understandable. Thanks for the review!
-Camila :)

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i am so putting you into my favourite list! i adore u Camila...its 3 am and im laughing and enjoying myself to the core..im kinda getting sad that the chapters are comng to an end so please update sooon..
great job once again :D

Author's Response: Thanks! Haha, well everything at 3 am seems hilarious. Glad that you're enjoying it, and don't worry the next chapter shouldn't take too long. Thanks again for your reviews!
-Camila :)

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I FREAKING LOVE THIS MINNIE...hats off to you srsly! i love the warm bonding between neville and minnie! and omg love minnie! cant wait to read more. :D

Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I'm so happy to know that you love this.
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Are you trying out for Quidditch? No.

Are your friends trying out for Quidditch? No.

What do you and your friends do for fun? Nothing.

What did your friends do over the summer? I don’t know.

Do you even have friends? Duh.

Do you like any girls? Blank stare.

Do you like any boys? Death glare.

whoa i loved this! Dom is so coool :D one of the best character centric fics iv read! eager to read more :D
really splendid job!

Author's Response: Haha, thanks! That was actually inspired by my own little brother. Glad you like it!
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You're awesome. And so was this chapter.
I absolutely loved Freddie, and Ramsey, and the Slytherins, and Al and Scorpius, and James - and can I just say everyone was amazing? Too bad there was no Nat, though. It's nice to see you're focusing on other things like careers unlike a lot of people who usually stick to the romance - and Minnie and Dare against the wall being weird - le sigh. I really don't know where you get these things, honestly. All in all, I can't believe how little reviews this chapter has, and I can't wait for the next :)

Author's Response: Aw, thanks! And yes, you are allowed to say that everyone is amazing. Nat was being a grumpy butt so that's why she wasn't really in this one, but she'll be in the next one, so don't worry. Although romance is listed as one of the genres, this story is more about growing up and trying to figure life out. So of course I had to mention careers/the "future". It's good to know that you enjoy it/aren't bored by it.
Haha, hooray for pressed up against wall scenes! That was kinda a treat for all the Minnie/Dare shippers out there, even though they were being weird and not really doing much. But oh well!

Thanks again for the review! And I think the main reason why it has so little reviews right now, is because this got published a little over an hour ago, haha. But congrats on being the first!
-Camila :)

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i just wanted to let you know that this story is brilliant. i started off the day, looking through stories, slightly bored. when i came across yours, i totally wasn't. i have spent most of the day trying to read as much as possible without seeming to be obsessed with my laptop (which i already am of course). the way you are able to portray each character is amazing; it doesn't even seem like this is a journey just about minnie. the journey seems to be the development of each character in his or her own way. and the way you are able to place comedic relief between each serious moment, or just to get a laugh out of the reader, is amazing. seriously. i am in love with this story and i cannot wait for an update. hopefully there will be more interactions between minnie and dare, as well as minnie and the rest of her family. i do hope that they remember her birthday soon!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad that you came across this and liked it. :) And you're right, this isn't just about Minnie's journey. Practically every character has their own problems and issues to solve, and I'm glad that you picked up on that. Chapter 8 should be up within in the next week and they'll remember birthday eventually.

Thanks again for the review!
-Camila :)

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Ta-daa!

This chapter was absolutely entertaining! I really love Minnie's bluntness and sarcasm when it comes to her thoughts. I think you would do well with a humour genre type of story. :P

I agree with Minnie, Nat is unbearable. I know she's Minie's bestie and all that and I shouldn't be dissing her, but can I really help it? Of course not.

I love the Thestral scene! Go Scorp and Albus! :D

Well, chapter eight ought to be interesting and I am sure looking forward to it! :D

On the other side, Calvin and Dare needs to sort out their problems -or rather, Dare needs to sort out his problems. Calvin seems oblivious of his brother which is pretty weird because shouldn't he be taking notice of his brother? Oh heck, this just got complicated.

Great chapter as always! :D Min/Dare FTW!

Taa,
Izzy xx

Author's Response: Wow, that was fast!

Hahaha, I'm glad you liked it. Yeah, I'm always more comfortable writing humor than anything else, and I've been thinking about doing a few stories that were more comedy central, but we'll see how that goes.

Yeah right now, Nat's not exactly the funnest character. She'll come around though.

Haha, Scorp and Al ftw!

I just finished chapter 8 so it should be up in a few days. Calvin and Dare are definitely complicated. And Calvin knows that his brother doesn't like him, he just doesn't understand why. So for now, he's trying to give him a bit of space.

Thanks again Izzy!
-Camila :)

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Hi! Here with another review for you :) I always get really happy when I see you post because it means I get to read more of this awesome story :D

Paramore! the second I saw that chapter title it was familiar but I couldn't figure out where from. And then I read... like the first sentence :p Anyway, I haven't heard that song in YEARS! I must listen after this.

I've already told you this, but I love how you characterize Dominique. I think she's so funny and entertaining, but you tell it in a way that keeps her so down to Earth. But she shouldn't be so mean to first years! :p The Hufflepuff in me feels bad for laughing when she calls the kid 'chubbers' but it was so funny.

Matilda was awful, but I think Darren White is going to someone I'm going to watch for, especially because he made his way to a chapter image. I loved all of your descriptions of her feelings as each of them entered the scene; I thought they were really believable. Brain was sweet too; I think you've got a great list of original characters so far and I can't wait to read more about them.

Her food descriptions are back! Sorry mixed greens, but you didn't make the cut.-- this line made me laugh way too much :p Who would want salad at a Hogwarts feast!? Okay.. I probably would, but not on the first night!

Your chapter lengths are fantastic, by the way. they give you enough time to really get into the story and learn more about the characters without switching to another part too quickly. The only transition I would take another look at is the one between the note from Professor Longbottom to actually being in his office. It would only be a few quick sentences to keep that all as one and I think the first part ended a little too abruptly.

This is something really minor, but I thought it was kind of strange that Neville called his kid Harry. I think Frank Harry would seem more believable, but that's just my opinion of course :)

I think the end of this chapter was a great introduction into the plot and how Dominique is going to grow through this story. You write her in a way that, even if she is a bit moody and apathetic, I still want to root for her and see her accomplish her dreams. I can't wait to see what happens next :) Re-request!

Author's Response: Hey there! Aw, I'm so happy to hear that. I'm always worried with requested reviews that they won't like my story and so it means a lot to know that you actually look forward to this. I always look forward to your reviews because they're always so awesome. You give the perfect amount of constructive criticism that I need to hear... er, read. :)

Haha, same here. I was really into Paramore when I was fourteen, but it's been four years now since I've really listened to anything of theirs. However, when I was trying to figure out the title for this chapter, that song came up on iTunes and I was like "hey, this can work". Hence the title. But yeah, I think I'm going to go listen to it now, too, haha.

Hahaha, Minnie's got a bit of a bully in her. It also doesn't help that she has this thing against Hufflepuffs (it'll be brought up later in the story), and so any Puff she comes across she kind of just hates by default. Not very nice of her, but hopefully she'll grow out of it.

Ah yes, Matilda. Awful is definitely the best word to describe her, hahaha. And you're right, you should keep a watch on Dare. He's actually fairly important to the plot, which you will learn later on. I'm glad that you like all of my OC's. I've got quite a few in this story, which always worries me because I know that some people are rather put off by them unless they're really well written - me being included. So I only hope that they come out alright.

Haha, I always get really hungry whenever I write those descriptions. And honestly, if I were at a Hogwarts feast, salad and vegetables would be the last thing on my plate. So yeah, Minnie gets that from me.

Really? I'm always at war with the length of my chapters. When I'm actually writing them, I always feel like they're too short and that I need to put more in. But then I'll reach a certain point, usually around 5-6 thousand words, where I start to feel like I'm dragging it out and so that's where I cut it off. And I've always felt that everything is too abrupt because I always cut things off, but it's good to know that that method actually works. And yeah, that transition into the scene with Neville was hard for me, so I just decided to be lazy and leave it at that. I'll definitely try and fix it though.

The only reason I went with Harry Frank versus the reverse, was because I liked the way it sounded better. I'm really picky with how names should sound, and for me, they have to fit or roll off the tongue. So yeah, I know it's more believable the other way but that's just my OCD kicking in.

Thanks again for your review! Haha, yeah this chapter was kind of where the plot actually made its appearance and like you said, I wanted it to be where we get to see the start of Minnie's personal growth. And I'm so glad that even though she's this moody and cynical girl, that she's still likable. I'll definitely rerequest and I'm looking forward to your next review.
-Camila :)

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Hey there, I'm so sorry for taking so long! My internet has been down for so long and it still is. Thank God, my cousin's internet never fails.

I admit, at first the Minnie/Dare ship I was a bit doubtful with because Dare came to me as this shy-ish guy and Minnie as the loud-mouthed person she is, I just didn't think it would work. But now? Chapter six in the story? Heck, I just wanted what Eli said to come true!

Dear Merlin, was this boy high?
Oh my Merlin, I was laughing so much at this line. Best line ever. I don't know why but its just so funny!

Dare is really not what I'm expecting him to be, he's got a lot of bottled up feelings that I did not expect to be there. It might be even greater than Minnie's jealousy over Vic. I think they would really make a great couple, if only Minnie could look past the bet.

I love love love this story! I can't wait 'til they're a couple. I will seriously be the happiest person on that day! YOU ARE SERIOUSLY SOME AWESOME AUTHOR.

Chapter seven, come at me!
Izzy xx

Author's Response: Hi! And it's no problem, I'm just glad that you're willing to review this. Thank God for relatives with amazing internet connection, hahaha. :)

Muahaha, so I've finally got you to join the dark side... or you know, ship Min/Dare, whatever. I mean, practically every character in the story ships them, but Minnie holds too much a grudge to let things go so easily. Which means it'll be a while until the two finally get together. If they get together, that is. :P

Hahaha, I'm glad you liked that line. I really only put it in there to fill up space, but hey, whatever floats your boat.

Ah yes, Dare's got quite a few emotions hidden underneath his whole "I hate the world" facade. And yeah, I'd have to agree with you and say that he probably does have more jealousy issues than Min.

From the original version, Dare's character is definitely the one who's changed the most. Before I really didn't care for him, because he was so bland and rather shallow. He was actually the typical "cocky stud muffin with a bad attitude" kinda guy, and I got sick of him pretty fast.

So with this new one, I really wanted to vamp him up some. Give him a bunch of issues and make him just as screwed up as Minnie. Which I'm glad I did, because I like this nerdy angry Dare much better. And you're right, if Minnie's ever able to look past the bet they would make quite the couple. But we'll just have to see.

Aw, I'm so glad that you like this (and think of me as an awesome author). It means a lot, especially when it comes from a requested reviewer. Thanks again Izzy, and I will be stopping by with chapter 7 (and possibly chapter 8, if I can get it up) soon.
-Camila :)

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Yay for the superfast update! I especially like the dialogs in your. Good work!

Author's Response: Yay for another review! Glad you liked it!
-Camila :)

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This chapter was great :) I love all of Dare's comments about his brother. Update soon!

Author's Response: Aw, thanks! Glad you like it and I'll try and get the next one out soon.
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please keep updating, you're doing such a great job. I love this story, it's bookmarked and I check back every other day for an update! (:

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm working on the next chapter right now, so I hope I'll be able to get it out soon.
-Camila :)

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Hi! I'm here with your requested review :)

It says something interesting about Dominique's character that she didn't say something to her parents about her birthday-- especially at her age. It's hard to place my finger on, but from the first chapter I sort of expected her to announce it at one point of the day to her parents. I liked it, though, it gave her character another interesting layer to her personality and gave her some depth in a subtle way.

So we meet James! He's sweet, I like him! I really loved how you wrote their friendship. I also really enjoyed that bit of growing up she did when her and James spent the time talking on the beach; that bit of fear about the future and what's to come at school and after was really well written. I'm so happy that he remembered at least, even if her parents didn't.

Which, I really can't believe! They didn't even bring up something a few days later! I did like how you had Dominique wait, instead of saying anything to anyone, and making her point out how the guilt would be worse for them when they realized.

Having parents that worked for Gringotts, ... with parents that worked for the bank.-- I'm not going to copy over this whole part but these two sentences you should take a look at rewording; the first one felt like a half-finished thought and the second one sort of finished it with different information. With just a quick re-word I think it would clear things up a little bit :)

oh my god her questions to Louis! Those were brilliant, I laughed so much! I have a little brother and I can COMPLETELY picture those glares! He was sweet when he realized they had forgotten her birthday.

So to sum things up, I really enjoyed this chapter. I really love how Dominique is developing and her friendship with James and her story of finding her place in the world and in her family. Of course re-request so I can read more!

Author's Response: Hi again and thanks for stopping by!

For someone who is constantly getting into trouble and picking fights, Minnie's actually rather nonconfrontational. With things like teasing, pranking, or kids just being annoying - little things, in her mind - she'll get onto them for that. But the serious issues, she doesn't want to deal with and just waves them off. I'm glad that that's coming through, especially since I try to be really subtle with it.

Yes, James! I've always pictured James II to be just this nice guy, but with a mischevious side of course. I do enjoy other fics where he's seen as that brooding bad boy, but in my head he'll always be the sweet one. And I love writing his and Minnie's relationship. Yeah they prank a lot and fool around, but its not all fun and games. He's the only person her age that Minnie feels like she can talk to about serious things like their future and what not, and I think its because they're also able to get serious that their friendship is so strong. I'm so happy that it came out well written - I'm most comfortable writing humor and so when it comes to the serious issues, I'm always worried that it'll come off cliche and purple prose. So yeah, it's good that it didn't.

Like I mentioned before, Min's the type that doesn't like to face serious issues like her parents forgetting her birthday. She uses the excuse of letting it stew so that they'll feel even more guilty to make it seem like she's not that affected by it, but she really is. It's going to be a while until she finally tells them, though.

Ah, thank you for pointing that out! Most of the stuff I write is pretty on the spot. I have an outline and plan for I want to happen, but how I get there is pretty much improvised. Which is why a lot of stuff comes out half-finished and not very clear. And I'm also rushing to get these in the queue that I tend to just skim things over, but not pay much attention. I'll defintiely go back and clear that up though.

Hahaha, that's probably my favorite scene between Min and Lou. I've also got a little brother, which is where most of my inspiration comes from when I write their relationship. Although, I made Lou much sweeter and sensitive than my little brother. He'd have never hugged me if he forgot my birthday - he most likely would have laughed in my face, lol.

I'm so glad that you enjoyed this! I've always had a thing for "coming of age" stories - probably because I am a teenager - and that's kind of what I wanted to do with this. And I'm so glad that her development is actually coming across. I hate static characters and I make a real effort to not have any in my stories.

Thanks again for your reviews! They're always so helpful and very clear. So of course I'll be coming by to rereques. ;)

-Camila :)

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Crashing through a window while riding a thestral - now that's how you make an entrance! I don't blame Dare for groaning. I wouldn't want to babysit a thestral, some Slytherins and apend time with Matilda either. Natalie's scarring of Lou was funny, too. Good job on the new chapter!

Author's Response: Al and Scorpius are the kings of grand entrances, haha. Well, in my story at least. Ah yes, as if Dare doesn't spend enough time with Matilda already, what with them being Heads. Oh well! Hahaha, yeah Nat and Lou's relationship is one of my favorites in this story. Thanks again for the review!
-Camila :)

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Awesome chapter! I love this story!

Author's Response: Thanks! Glad that you like it!
-Camila :)

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Great chapter! I hope Dom and Dare hook up soon :)

Author's Response: Thanks! And we'll just have to see about that. ;)

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I really like this story!! Especially the ever developing relationship between Dom and Dare! Are Dom's parents ever going to remember that they've missed her birthday?!
Great stuff, please update soon!!

Author's Response: That's great to hear! Minnie and Dare's relationship will be a constant development throughout, so it's good to know that you enjoy it. Yes, her parents will eventually find out, but it won't be for a while. Thanks for your review!
-Camila :)

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yaay, a fast update!:) brilliant as always, of course, loved everything but especially the minnie/dare sexual tension comments and that harry comes to the DADA lessons so often, hahaa:) oh, and of course al and scorp, hilarious!:D can't wait to see what happens next!:):)

Author's Response: Yay, review! Thanks so much! Hahaha, yeah this chapter was filled with all kinds of nonsense. And Harry will most likely make a guest appearance, but it won't be for a while. Thanks again!
-Camila :)

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You're fast :D And I loved this chapter. Al and Scorpius at the end, ha - perfect timing! Eli is as funny as ever, and Cal's first DADA class was just too hilarious! Minnie (and Dare and James and Nat etc.) are still too awesome, and I love reading about them, so, so much - so yeah, in amidst of all my nonsensical rambling, I think I was trying to say that I absolutely adored this chapter and how dare you be so amazing and *deep breath* please update as soon as possible! (I am totally excited to see what happens next)

Author's Response: Haha, yeah I kind of surprised myself with how fast I got this one out. Glad you liked it! It's funny cuz I never intended for Eli to be such a prominent character, but he's definitely grown on me. Ha, Calvin's probably regretting coming to teach at Hogwarts after this first lesson, but oh well!
Thanks again for your review, and I'll try and get the next one out soon!
-Camila :)

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