forget what i said in my last chapter- this is my favorite chapter by FAR!!! it's so sweet, i absolutly love James he is adorable! and he and lily are the cutest couple!
this is such a great story :)Author's Response: Aww thank you very much that's so nice too hear :) Report Review
ahh this chapter is my favorite, it was so sweet and funny, i absolutely love it!Author's Response: Thank you! It's one of my favourites, too. Report Review
ahh the ending of this chapter was really sad- i feel so sorry for james :(
but anyway- its a great story and im really enjoying it :)Author's Response: Thank you so much, glad you're enjoying it :) Report Review
i'm really enjoying this story :)
my favorite lines were: "we need more moments" and "well, that's a number alright" those lines were really funny :)
very good, engaging writing well done!Author's Response: Thank you very much :) Report Review
heeehee that's a really good opening...
although i wd have ended it with the "And now, you do too". But it was really good and sounds like the rest will be fun to read...Author's Response: Aw thank you!! I'm glad you think so. Report Review
AHHH NORTHHAMPTON Author's Response: I KNOW RIGHT? Report Review
This is defenitely not a good story to start right before bed... I was completely hooked the first chapter I read! And here I am 3 in the morning wide awake, I loved the idea of them falling in love over summer and their promise was super cute too! Plus you incorporated snape, lovedthat. Though I doubt he and lily ever kissed, and I'm pretty sure death eaters existed while they were in school, and I don't think lil was an animagus. But other than that, your story followed canon and I loved it, thanks for the awesome post! :)Author's Response: Oops, sorry for keeping you up! I think my story is fairly canon, some things we just don't know for sure so I just used my imagination! Thank you for reviewing! Report Review
pretty cool story :) well written, good story line, and that really sucked about Sirius' girl. I thought she'd be a good one but... apparently not. Poor guy.
I do have to say that this last chapter, with Lily's possessive way of not wanting James to go out with the boys, made me dislike her. I don't think a girl should be so controlling over her bf but then again, I'm sure she has her reasons.
Good work! Keep it up :)Author's Response: Lily's not perfect. All the characters need to be flawed or it'd be too cliched, I feel. When you take into account Lily's past, I think it's almost believeable (almost) that she'd be that overreactive, but I hope her charcater isn't too tarnished by it! :) :) Thanks for your four reviews, I loved receiving them! Report Review
Aww, she called him Sev. I'm crying on the inside for James :PAuthor's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing! Report Review
So sweet :) love the embarrassment between James and his parents. Lovely chapter again.Author's Response: Aww thank you for reviewing it's really made my day! x Report Review
“You could always go to law school, you know. I don’t think I’ve won an argument with you in five years.”
AHAHAHAHAHAHAH! That's fantastic! Great first chapter. I like the story line too - it's believable. Could easily have come from JK herself. Really pleased I don't have to double-over your sentences either - everything is written very fluidly. Thank you personally for that!Author's Response: Thank you so much for a leaving a review to let me know these things, I really, really appreciate it! No one else has pointed that line out yet, and it is one of my personal favourites, thank you for that!! Report Review
Awesome story I loved it all! This chapter was my favoriteAuthor's Response: Thank you!! Report Review
Awww! Cuties! I love james! He's so sweet ahaha
10/10Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing!! Report Review
i love this story! just quietly, i think the line “I said do a cartwheel, mate; Not find the most artistic way to destroy a pair of glasses” is hilarious!
10/10Author's Response: Aw thank you!! I'm so glad you think so :) Report Review
Aww poor james :( i love him so much!Author's Response: I love him too :) Thanks so much for reviewing!! Report Review
Wow! I was about to review the previous chapters but then I thought 'Hey, finish the story, be a decent reader' and I did! I love it! The whole 'LilyJames' relationship and how she never wants to spend a night apart from him was so beautiful :') I was wondering. Could there be another story with Lily and James, but where you also concentrate on Sirius' realtionships? That would be fantastic if you were ever stuck for ideas ;)Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing!! I am considering doing a fluffy lily and james story. At the moment I'm concentrating on finishing up my other work in progress stories, I want to complete those first. But I love lily and james and guarantee I'll do another one eventually. Report Review
Wow. I laughed hard at this one.
Imagine how confused he is!!
He got a bunch of random numbers, so what's he supposed to do with it??
Surprises me that he hasn't had numbers from other muggle girls before :D
But then again, he isn't around muggles most of the time :D
Awesome so far :DAuthor's Response: Thank you so much, thanks for reviewing!! Report Review
aww good last sentence "And she couldn't se any good reason to not live with James for the rest of her life." too cuteAuthor's Response: Thank you! Report Review
oh no! poor sirius! but at the same time yay for james and lily! ahh! my emotions are torn between being happy and sad. lol!
good chappie though! haha!Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
ahhh! in short terms, i love this chapter! great job :DAuthor's Response: Awesome, thanks so much for coming back and reviewing more! Report Review
ahhh! it took me a few seconds before i read that it was a full moon to realize that's why he was starting to freak out! eek!
another good chapter! i liked it when James had to ask she liked Remus. too cute. hehe.Author's Response: Thank you so much! Had to have a full moon in there somewhere! I'm glad it wasn't too subtle, I didn't want it to be obvious but I'm glad people understand it :) Report Review
man why couldn't she just go to james! she's kind of leading on remus like sirius warned her not to!
her moment with remus seemed a little rushed. it would've been nice to be a little more dragged out, but still a very good chapter :) great job!Author's Response: Thanks for the critique, you're right, it is rushed, my only reasoning for it is that with them all under one roof, and Lily being around 24/7 which they would not be used to, all kinds of feelings would come bubbling up. (Plus, when I read a story I don't like waiting around for something to happen so I kept that in mind!) Report Review
oh no!! i was wonder who she thought he was! that's horrible! kind of funny, but still horrible!
another fantastic chapters! i like that you brought in Remus. gives some jealous opportunities for James, but then he's just plain fun to have around! haha!
good job :)Author's Response: Thank you so much, I lurve your reviews! Report Review
lol still loving it.
the part bout patronus' giving Lily that small bump of a clue (though she's resisting it, of course) and James taking the date seriously!
I'm not so sure about how Mia acted in the bathroom though...it seemed a little over the top. like i know girls freak out when on dates, but i think because she was with someone she had just met (lily) she showed a little too much emotion to be believable.
but! i am glad she didn't totallyyy ditch Sirius and at least ran back up to him :) heheAuthor's Response: Mia's a bold character, definetly enigmatic and an all around weirdo. But I like that, not having the typical kind of character for an OC love interest. I had to hint at her irraticness (is that a word?!) so her reaction later in the story doesn't totally come out of nowhere. Report Review
ahaha i love it when Sirius, so used to being his awesome self, ends up being nervous and what not around a girl. it makes me laugh XD
i like the way you set up the story too. when I read the summary i was like 'hmmm i wonder how she's going to make this work' and them doing a potions project together is a reasonable reason! good job :)Author's Response: Oh thank you so much! It's so lovely to get new reviews so long after publishing! Report Review
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