Awww James and Amelie are so cute as eleven year-olds! I loved reading about the beginnings of their friendship. I also like all these flashback-ish chapters.
Amelie's background is really interesting. I can't wait to see how you're going to incorporate it later.
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I'm actually laughing out loud. I haven't laughed out loud at a story in... well... I don't remember. Seriously, you have a gift for humour. A serious gift. Be a comedian. Please.
Ah incest. James/Jimmy is so adorable. And arrogant, but that's okay because he's so adorable. I loved how you had this kind of flashblack chapter to show why/ when James/Jimmy started liking Amelie (I think I might have seriously spelled her name wrong last review- sorry about that).
Loved this chapter!
classicblackAuthor's Response: Aaw, hahaha I'm glad you like it so much! I didn't think it was that funny... But thank you so much for your kind words! And I don't think a comedian's life is for me...
Aaaw, I love James/Jimmy too! He's really cute, thank you so much! Report Review
Awww this was soo adorable! I loved that there wasn't all the unnecessary drama to get to Amelia and James dating. You just started it that way! Hoorah for (hopefully) less drama!
I loved that James thinks Harry's a git. A nice breath of fresh air from the usual happy Potter family that's written about. James is a realistic teenager!
I think you might have accidentally called Amelia 'Rose' once. Might want to fix that. James kissing his cousin- yuck.
classicblackAuthor's Response: Yes! No unnecessary drama! Hooray! I wanted to portray a believable relationship between the two of them, so... I'm glad you like it!
Yeah, I'll change that right away! :D
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Brilliant, brilliant, brilliant! Your characterisation is wonderful, with both James and Amelie being so familiar but also likeable. And especially when it's so easy to take Amelie's side and hate James, it's all the more creditable that you've been careful enough to give us something that makes us sympathise with him, too. And the Dumbledore portrait speaking with hilarious!Author's Response: Aaaw, thank you so much! I always find this story a bit cringe-worthy and cliche, so I find it a little odd that people have gone to a lot of depth analysing the characters! I may find it odd, but I do appreciate it! I love it! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! Report Review
Awesome first chapter, I really enjoyed it! I loved everything about it, the characters, the descriptions. Amazing. One thing I noticed though is there's a sentence when you say "Oh no, thought Rose" instead of Amelle. Other than that, I really liked it and I look forward to reading more! :DAuthor's Response: Oh yeah! I forgot to edit that! I was writing and Rose/Scorpius at the same time as the chapter so that's why it's there! Thank you so much for your lovely comments and for reading and reviewing! Report Review
I've just realized I did not comment it! That's scandalous!
I've also realized that I have realy short memory, so I don't remember what exactly I liked in this story. Damn.
Oh, I LOVED the relationship between James and, hmm, the girl (God, I'm hopeless, really), it was believable and realistic. I could actually imagine them. And there were no clichés (or very little, I do not remember -.-').
What I didn't like was the composition (unchronological order). It works in very few cases and I just don't think it works here. But, honestly, it didn't change the fact that it was pleasure to read it and I'm glad I found it.
Thanks for fun ^^!
I'm sorry if I made mistakes here. I'm not native speaker.
And 'not remembering' stuff is not your fault, it's always like that - with books, movies, fanfiction - everything ^^.Author's Response: Oh cool! Thanks for reviewing and reading! I'm sorry you didn't like the non-chronological order thing... it was an attempt to make the story non-cliche, but if you didn't think the story had any cliches, then I suppose you didn't need to like it!
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Aww! They seem such a really cute couple! You did such a great job writing the first chapter! :DAuthor's Response: Aaw, thank you so much! Enjoy reading! Report Review
This is just such a beautiful story, I can't even begin to explain it. 10/10.Author's Response: Aaw, thank you so much for reading and reviewing!! Report Review
wuahhh,,, that's a really good ending for them.
and i like that Amelie, she's really a strong girl :D
i better go to the read the sequel now.
and thank you for reply my comment!
this amelia "mary-sue" girl in story Auror in Training.
i dont know if you ever read that though.Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! Report Review
wuuhh i almost mistaken Amelie with Amelia,, the girl in another mary-sue fanfiction that i've just read lately.
she swears a lot, that Amelia -_-
but i love this Amelie XDAuthor's Response: Mary-Sue? Who? What? Where? Thanks for reading and reviewing! Report Review
woowww,, this was soo cute XDAuthor's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! Report Review
That was a great way to end the story, with a bit of promise for them both, not that it would happen for them right away, but they'd both work on it :) I think this story had definite originality to it and there was such vividness to it especially when James and Amelia were particularly loving to each other, though it was pretty vivid when they weren't too lol. Congrats for completing your story, and all the reviews, and reads! Great job!Author's Response: I wanted readers to be happy at the end - a lot of them wanted the pretty obvious marriage and babies and lovely dovely stuff (a little part of me did too) but some where all about Amelie ignoring him forever because of what he did to her. I think I left pretty open-ended so people could make their own conclusions. I love that you love the story though, and that you sat down and read it all in one go! Awesome! Thanks! Report Review
I really admire Amelie actually, she's really standing up for herself even though it's hard. I have a feeling they'll get back together someday, but James needs to learn his lesson first, that she's not a push over, and he wouldn't like her so much if she was. This was a great chapter, even though it was sad.Author's Response: I know! She's one tough cookie! She's a hard nut to crack! She's super cool and hipster and awesome and wonderful! She has flaws! Thanks for reading and reviewing! Report Review
oh no! :( poor Amelie... but there had to be something difficult about their relationship, and they're only 17, so they need t o make mistakes so it won't later.Author's Response: You're right. Thanks for the review! Report Review
This was a strange chapter, I'm not used to either James or Amelie not being completely open with each other like that. Though, it'd be strange if they were open all the time, I guess it has to happen a little. Though, Watson is very unrealistic, at least to me, I've never read, or heard about anyone as conniving and crazy as she is. I guess its supposed to be that way, just thinking about her makes me cringe. Anyway, we'll see what happens next I guess.Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! Report Review
hmmm, There has to be some reason he's really that mad, or maybe he isn't, but I'm still really glad that Amelie held her ground and didn't get intimidated. It was really good!Author's Response: I don't think there's ever been a relationship where the couple hasn't argued, so I was trying to make this one more realistic. But James is an idiot, so how do we know what he's thinking? Thanks for reading and reviewing! Report Review
I totally know how she feels about having a father who doesn't want to know her, and I feel like my boyfriend would be exactly the same way if anything like that ever happened. This chapter was really well done, we really start to know what kind of things go on in Amelie's head, when the whole rest of the story you can't really tell. Great job!!Author's Response: Aaw, that's so sad but also sweet that your boyfriend would defend you like that! You've got yourself a real life James, congratulations! Thanks again for reading and reviewing! :D Report Review
Ugh!! first off, Amelie's mom was sooo creepy, hitting on James, next ahh! for the cliffie!! I totally wasn't expecting that!!Author's Response: Hahaha I love writing Florence! She's so funny! Thanks for reading and reviewing! Report Review
Wow, that was a really different way to go about it, and you really kept true to Amelie's character! great job!Author's Response: Thank you! :P Report Review
huh, it could be she's pregnant or something, but I'm kinda wondering what's up with her, also confused why you decided to be from her point of view?? it was just a bit of a change I wasn't expecting...Author's Response: Well, for this story, I wanted to show Jamelie's relationship from different points of view: their own POVs, third person, whatever. Georgia Watson figures out to be a very key member of the plot. I thought she needed some character development, so... voila! Thanks for reading and reviewing! Report Review
aw!!! Really, it was sooo well written, I don't want to say it was like I was in the alley with them, 'cause that'd be creepy, but it was so vivid! and you made there be a little conflict without going on and on for chapters about it lol :) I absolutely love this chapter, I'll prolly want to read it again sometime 'cause it was so good :D
Great job! 'can't wait to see what everyone's going to say! They're gonna be floored :DAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for your kind comments! I really appreciate that you've reviewed every chapter! Thanks for reading and reviewing! Report Review
Yay!!! They finally kissed!! It's funny that she started thinking it was weird, and even after she said it was he didn't give up on it!!!
Oh, and just so you know, when she was talking about the puppy dog eyes you accidentally call her Rose, you may want to fix that.
Anyway, great job with the kiss(es)!Author's Response: Aah, thank you! I didn't spot that. I'll get around to it when I edit again! Thanks for reading and reviewing! :D Report Review
I absolutely loved Fred and Alice, and him punching the prefect for his girl, his dad would be so proud of him!! Also, very funny James needing to deal with Amelie, and now his cousins know he likes her! It's getting closer, I can feel it :)Author's Response: I keep forgetting that you are reading the chapters in order! It's weird because, if you were reading it in the normal order, you'd already know! Haha lol lol thanks for reading and reviewing anyway! Report Review
hahaha, aw James is starting to accept that he likes her lol. Pretty funny that he keeps hexing people :P That girl he was partnered up with was pretty ridiculous lol, oi ppl. I can't wait until something does happen between the two :) (Amelie and James)Author's Response: It'll take him a while! Thanks for reading and reviewing! :D Report Review
but but but ... she's but...grr teenage confusedness, I think he should have just kissed her there so she'd know, no, he's not ok with it lol... but he's just getting to know his own feelings so he couldn't do that. ok fine lol. Really I can't really picture her being girly on a date either though lol. I thought she'd have problems with that since her mom is all over them all the time so maybe she wouldn't really want to date 'cause she doesn't want to be like her mom... just a thought. I still love it though :)Author's Response: So much teenage confusedness! So much teenage angst! Wizard angst! Angst, angst, angst! Everyone loves a bit of angst. I know I do! James is a little stupid sometimes (well, basically all the time), so yes, he doesn't know what his feelings are doing!
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