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Ooh, this is neat! I really think it's creative how you used the prompts to set up a little obstacle course, and it only makes sense that Narcissa would do whatever is necessary to protect her baby boy. (Between you and me, she always struck me as being a little more intelligent than her husband.) I liked how she faltered, though, because it made her seem realistic and like she was really frightened. You really did a great job on this story!
-AmandaAuthor's Response: Hey! Thanks a lot! I always love your reviews :)
I am glad you found this creative, and that you found it plausible for Narcissa to do so much to protect her child. Haha, she's always struck me as more intelligent too xD Yeah I thought it would only be realistic if she faltered.
I am glad you think I did a good job :)
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This was a great story! It's refreshing to have one not about Salazar. You wove the prompts in so well, they almost weren't noticeable if I hadn't been thinking about them.
I loved how sweet Narcissa was as a mother, how her only thoughts were of baby Draco and, briefly, her husband. It was really tugging at my emotions. =)
Slytherin House Cup 2012!Author's Response: Hey! Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing. Yeah, am not much of a Founders person so I chose not to do a Salazar story :) I am glad you think I wove in the prompts well.
I am also happy that you could connect with Narcissa's emotions and thoughts.
Thanks a lot once again!
Slytherin for the cup!
Wow! This Narcissa point of view was so very good. You had me reading very fast as she ran to her baby son.
I loved how you paralleled the 1st war with the 2nd. She only cared about her son in the end, so it makes complete and logical sense that she felt the same from the start.
You really surprised me with that bogart... great twist there.
And... PERFECT patronus for Lucius! He's so proud and enjoys strutting about (and they are on the lawn at MM). LOL! I truly enjoyed that bit of genius.
This was very suspenseful and had me on the edge of my seat.
I think my favorite 'awe' moment was the very last line, how she hoped "...Draco may have a future devoid of darkness." ;( Awe... because we know he had to.
Great job. Go Slytherin!
P.S. I LOVE your A/N. So true about strict canon-folk pointing out the obvious "flaws." I get that a lot myself. 10/10Author's Response: Hey DarkWhisper,
Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing! I am glad you liked the Narcissa point of view. Haha, I wrote that part quite fast too :P
Yeah I always thought of Narcissa as a very motherly person, and I always thought of her as someone who would keep her son first, so yeah I kind of paralleled the 2 wars. Glad you liked it.
And what's a story without some drama? I just had to put in the boggart twist there, glad it worked if it surprised you :)
As for Lucius' patronus, I always thought that if he may have had one, it might have been a peacock since it sort of matches his personality, plus as you pointed out, peacocks are always outside Malfoy Manor xD
I am happy that you liked the story overall, that you found it suspenseful, and that you found the ending sweet :)
Go slytherin yeah! :D
And yeah, about the A/N, I get quite a lot of reviews telling me canon things I already know (I mean just because I didn't use them in my story doesn't mean I don't know them) so I decided to put that little note!
Thanks a lot for reading & reviewing once again! Report Review
Very good fic. I liked it quite a lot.
Ah who needs canon anyway, their magic they can just use a blasting curse (yep, my jokes are all that bad). but on a serious note, it was very good. Flows well, timing is good and the imagery works nicely. Top effort.Author's Response: Aw thank you for the awesome review. Haha you're right, and your jokes aint bad. Thanks a lot for reading & reviewing! Report Review
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