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Review #26, by Illuminate darkmark.

8th December 2012:
Hi! Here for the Holiday Swap!

This is a really stunning opening chapter. Your prose and dialogue is so cinematic, I can see it and feel it and smell it. I can imagine exactly what it would look like, and you evoke that with the perfect amount of description. Especially the Dementor nightmare, I can imagine it exactly.

Draco and Astoria I think are equally well characterised. You show her professionalism and her care for Draco matched with some vulnerability that makes her believable. And your Draco, what can I say? He's full and perfect and human, and I care deeply about him depite his outward gruffness and resentment.

Wonderful chapter, great job :)

Author's Response: Thank you! :D The dementor nightmare is one of my favorite scenes, and I had written much of the fic around it, actually! I kept the description purposefully sparse, so it's great that it hasn't detracted from the imagery.

And I'm glad you like the both of them; people have been quite accepting of grumpy Draco ^__^

Thank you for the review!


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Review #27, by momotwins darkmark.

8th December 2012:
So, I have always enjoyed your style of writing. You do description so succinctly and often a bit pithily, and I like that. Overly wrought description tend to make me skip the paragraph. I adored the "like a statue that has made a mistake" line. And "Azkaban or not, there is no escaping hell." DAYUMN. That's fantastic.

I liked Astoria as his therapist. I feel like that really works. And the way you've made her someone he wouldn't normally be interested in. I expect being somewhat unremarkable helps her to be soothing, part of her job, you know? And again with the nailing it in a single sentence. I would throw things at you for being super talented but I'll just blow a raspberry and tell you you're awesome. And you suck. Because you're good at everything. Pbbbt. Anyway really beautiful stuff: "There are words to say, but he does not know what they are or who they are for."

Anyway, I like how he needles her at first, that's very Draco, and her responses make me wonder if she was a Slytherin like her sister. I think she was.

"How potent are the nightmares that were once reality."

Have you ever seen that Adam Sandler movie 50 First Dates? And his friend tells his kids, "You kids suck, you're good at everything." I'm just saying.

I would quote every line back at you as being beautifully written, but then this review would be all quotes and while that's fun, it's not as good a review as could be, maybe. Your style is amazing, and it fits this piece so seamlessly, with the subject and characters and emotion, and everything just flows just so. Ack. So perfect. Stop being so flawless. I've been on tumblr too long now not to want to call you my bb and snuggle you while saying things like WHY IS THAT YOUR FACE, SIR when people are perfect.

Okay actual review, I can do this. I think the only way Draco could have a successful marriage, which even though I think he's a big fat jerk, I still hope he manages to have, is by his wife knowing everything about him. I'm sure he'd rather keep things hidden and have her believe him perfect and such, but that's not reality and I think this scenario for him unloading the insides of his mind to his therapist really works for a setup for the two of them. You kept him very in character, with his simmering resentment and injured sense of self-importance, and the bit of reverence that he still has about his father. And I love that she's a Legilimens, I think it's going to work very well for both unearthing some of his deep-set Voldyfears while at the same time helping him to get over his nightmares and psychoses from the war. A bit of PTSD for Draco there maybe.

Fabulous job. Everything is perfect. I'm trying not to hate you for being flawless. *snuggles you* You're awesome.

Author's Response: Reading this whole review was just about the best thing ever 8D

Woop, women of brevity! I've got this tic about efficiency in absolutely everything. I go about life always having thoughts like, 'if I cut across this grass, will i get there faster?' and I'm weighing the cost and benefits of risking muddy shoes while my legs are still walking and I have to make a decision in .2 seconds. Apparently that extends to writing.

I ALSO ENJOY YOUR DAYUM. This might sound weird but I can actually hear your validator-vetern sassiness behind that dayum :'D

I like the idea of Draco being unimpressed with Astoria upon first meeting(s), because he wouldn't feel like Draco otherwise to me. Even when he's grateful, it's grudging and mostly annoyed. There's sentiment somewhere in that ferret brain, but it ain't gonna come easy.

I have not watched that movie, but I have wiki'd it :'D Hee, you are too kind, omg I could never be compared to a high-res pic of RDJ or Misha Collins.

Definitely; there are key components to marriage, and I have always personally /wanted/ Draco to have a relatively happy one, because I love redeemed characters. But even without all the war trauma, if your spouse could always look into your brain at any point of their choosing, well, that can't tide over well all the time! So I can't wait to explore the whole lot of that!

♥ :33 eee YOU'RE awesome


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Review #28, by Icouldn'tcomeupwithanawesomename darkmark.

8th December 2012:
Whooop! This is so cool! (Strange choice of words maybe, seen the tone of the story, but alas.) I very much like the idea of Astoria helping Draco accept his past and then they'll fall in love and awww that is so cute! and Draco's sligtly cynical/dark tone is exactly right. With his youth, anyone would have lost faith in the concept of people wanting to help without you having to do them a favour back, and faith in happy endings, I think.

D'awww, Draco, poor old sourpuss... HE'S SO CUTE!!!
(Don't judge, he is.)

X

PS I see that my sentences are entirely too long but I'm not gonna change it so there.

PPS 'He was a born monster; anyone could have seen it - exept blind batty Dumbledore'. Oh Draco, if you only knew.
And do we get to know more about what Astoria did in the war? Draco doesn't see half how interesting she is.

Author's Response: Bahaha, cool and awws and cute were not expected, but they are welcome nonetheless xD I love a Draco redeemed, which will always require grappling with the past, and so this has been my headcanon as to how it happens, of sorts. It's really really forlorn, so the thought of calling him a sourpuss - it's like he's grumpy cat. That's what I'm imagining, grumpy cat in one of those strange sweaters Tom Felton wears. The story is a little darker, unfortunately :'D

There is definitely more of Astoria to come! Perhaps not what she did, but definitely how it's affected her.


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Review #29, by CherryBoom darkmark.

7th December 2012:
I quite like your Draco. He seems to be much more realistic than what most of the fanfic writers prefer, but I personally love it. My favorite part was were he describes his life very laconically. I just can't repeat it here because of non 12+ words. =P

While I'm generally opposed to idea of a psychiatrist getting involved with a patient (it's just so profoundly against their ethics), I really like the idea that Astoria tries help him find his way in life. He seems to suffer some kind of posttraumatic stress disorder, which wouldn't be least bit surprising after the Second Wizarding War.

I'm intrigued about Astoria's ability to use legilimency to help her patients. How has she acquired such skill? Apparently after the war Draco has let his guard down, since I think he was quite good at protecting his mind with occlumency. I think it was the darling auntie Bellatrix who thought him this useful skill, probably with a help of painful curses everytime he failed.

It was a very interesting read and I enjoyed your way with words. The flow was excellent despite the angsty material and I was hooked from beginning to the end.

Author's Response: I've always been very picky with my Dracos, and the reason why I wrote my own was because most of them weren't depressing enough for me xD Post-traumatic is exactly how I imagine him, holding guilt that is overshadowed by anger and listlessness. And aha, indeed, Draco enjoys his non-12+ life.

Astoria, I think she believes she's just doing her job when she oversteps her boundaries, and doesn't entirely see the ramifications; i imagine sort of a devil-may-care-ness to her that goes with her youthfulness. It's fun writing her; she's got all the quiet surprises tucked away!

Thank you! :)


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Review #30, by jay darkmark.

7th December 2012:
loved your chapter on draco looking forward to the next one

Author's Response: Thank you! :)

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Review #31, by peppersweet darkmark.

7th December 2012:
YOU POSTED IT AIIIEE I am glad I bunked off studio early so I could catch this at the top of recently added

you = the best, drastoria = the best, this = one big melting pot of lovely bestiness.

first line and I already love your Astoria. okay, I can't base her entire character on those few sentences, but I feel like I already know who she is, y'know? I feel people often have a tendency to make Astoria just another wealthy pureblood, all disdainful and rich and snooty. so I like yours so far.

even if there's only been four sentences about her. I just have a lot of feelings, okay?

mean girls moment ('it's raining' 'I know'). but, yep, loving Draco's languid, stuck-up ennui.

'Mist lumbers outside the window, a paper-white purgatory.' - love this.

you probably know this already, but I love those post-war drastorias that show the malfoys' downfall. so I appreciate that wee snippet about him having his wand confiscated.

'Her sympathy is a ploy, and he knows it. To understand is her job, and ultimately, she will crack more galleons out of his coffers with tea and patience. - THIS, THIS FOREVER

also, I like how you're bringing up Pansy now and again. now that would be an interesting love triangle.

but, yes, I love this post-war society you're building, with all the politics and tension and etc, etc (and life goes on).

sorry, I'm not a very good reviewer - I tend to just regurgitate lines of the fic and squee and say silly things and I'm not very good at concrit or anything like that. Not that I've found much to crit about this, mind.

(when astoria says 'you have bags under your eyes' i just imagined draco going 'yes they're DESIGNER')

damnit, woman, this is making me want to write inceptionfic again.

oooh. oooh dat ending.

update soon, please! I'll just sit here worshipping the ground at your feet until you do, no biggie.

(also thanks for the shoutout in the author's note, heee)

but, yes, I'm digressing in an enormous way (and I always have been, you know, since when have my reviews ever been that reviewy?), so I think I should bring this back to the point: this drastoria set up is perfect. It's so close to my headcanon, it's so real, it's so...RIGHT. downtrodden! tea! angst! nightmares! inscrutable legilimens astoria!

in a nutshell, I'm kind of in love with this



Author's Response: I DID AGAINST MY BETTER JUDGEMENT. Let's be real here i have no judgement.

but u da best~ come jacuzzi in the melting pot

ahem.

PLAIN JANE ASTORIAS ALL THE WAY. You know ittt. Social justice and oblivators etc etc. Of course I know your taste in Astorias; YOU MOULDED MINE~~ Of course, it'll take you until the end of this review for you to see that I mention this in my author's note, so I get to see your ramblings until then~

Draco always has his mean girls on.

IT'S THE TEA and a wee bit of patience.

Wah it's strange actually, I wish I could build more of the world, but the focus of this fic is actually rather narrowly on Draco. Politics make me sad, which is why I channel all my criticism into teenage social politics, because that's exactly the same without the global consequences. Heh.

DESIGNER EYEBAGS, SNORTING RN.

AND YES GOOD, WRITE INCEPTIONFIC :3

♥ of course it's close to your headcanon! we have the same head! brrr r r rm


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