Hiya Rachel. This isn't going to be one of my usual essays so don't worry :)

Wow, this is darker than I expected it to be. And Molly, I suppose, realises how futile things have become. But I just want to slap her sometimes! Why is it that women turn into fools when it comes to a man? Why?

And Teddy, all broken and bruised. I think Molly and I had the same reaction.

When Victoire came in, Molly was so calm, my goodness. This is quite the character you have here. Most people would've been all thumbs. The end was the most thought provoking for me though. It makes me wonder if she regrets that night in the garden and if she would've preferred to just roll over and go back to sleep but then the outcome might of been the same. Kind of like that Doctor Who episode...'Turn Left', you remember?

This was another lovely chapter, I don't have much else to say about it :) But seriously.they need to stop torturing themselves and just get together already! Gosh!

Lia

Author's Response: I just finished replying to this one before when my computer decided its battery had run out and shut down before I could copy it >.> Very, very annoying!

Anyway, this does have a bit of a dark end to it. I was really tempted to take it on a downwards, gloomy spiral but I've already written a psycho Molly and didn't much fancy it again. I might make Lucy go a bit nuts if I ever write a spin-off, though :P

Teddy ♥ Bless him.

Molly is far, far calmer than I'd be in that situation, though I think she's really desiring to know why Victoire seems so upset and this is the first point where she realises that she never asked Teddy why he was so upse the night before.

That's such an interesting point. I'd never thought about what would have happened if she had not gone to that party or said no to him. As you said, very thought provoking. I'll ponder that myself, I think. I'd like to hope that it would eventually have come out - perhaps in an easier way than it eventually does in this version. Maybe he'd have chucked Victoire or never got together with her at all. Who knows?

Gosh, tell me about it :P Well, 3 more chapters to go so it'll either be really good news or really bad by the end!

Thank you so much, yet again, lovely. These reviews are far too good!

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There is something about the first few paragraphs that I've always loved seeing an author bring to life. The ugly side of relationships and that confusing concept known as love. It's clear that she's struggling with this because all she had was a taste but not the full experience and quite frankly, it can be really frustrating. So now, she's trying to move on but her mind really isn't in it. Now with Alistair, we see a glimmer of hope...maybe she could let go and move on to a place where every other thought doesn't cause a dull ache in the middle of your chest.

The older girl - a woman by law but not by mind - watches her cautiously and when the conversation she is nodding and smiling through lulls... - This sounds strange to me, perhaps a word is missing?

I just have to say...I love Lucy. Just because she sees and knows a lot of things...too many things and she is clever. Ah, she's a pubescent sage. Her advice is true and to the casual observer, it would make sense to follow it but emotions are funny things - they make fools of the most sensible girls.

You've painted Teddy and Victoire in a light that makes them almost fairytale-like to everyone else. Indeed, that's how a lot of people see them in fanfiction and in an earlier chapter, Teddy even says it's like their families planned their relationship since birth. But to the rest of us who can see, it's not like that at all. It makes me wonder if Victoire can tell that Teddy isn't really there. Maybe she isn't as oblivious as people think, especially Molly.

Exactly how many boyfriends has she had since Ben? Just the three?

I'm sorry if all my reviews thus far have been lengthy and full of my rambling. I love stories like these where I'm free to pick apart characters and discuss their traits.

I'm really enjoying this story, Rachel!

Lia

Author's Response: You've pretty much hit that straight on the head. She wants so much to forget Teddy - for him, for Victoire, for herself too - but for me, every time she looks at Alistair, she feels like she's forcing herself into it.

It's just badly phrased :P I'll have a play with it and see if I can fix it up.

I love her too. I'm dying to write her in something else (probably a Lucy/Scorpius but perhaps Lucy/OC), set after this story, but writer's block is, as ever, proving itself to be a royal pain in the neck. I'm not sure Lucy is the nicest person in the world - though she has her moments - and I think in chapter 6, you see a better summary of the two girls.

They certainly are fairytale-like. It's a bit of a twisted fairytale, really, but I wanted the pair of them to seem quite elevated and mystical, kind of put on a pedestal by the rest of the family as a benchmark for the others.

I wanted to bring Victoire off as a bit naive and blind. It comes across in the first chapter - Victoire oblivious to Teddy and Molly hanging around at the back of the group - and definitely in this one and chapter 4. I don't think she expects it and so she doesn't look for it. She's admirable in the sense that she's not very paranoid or suspicious of anyone. She's really rather innocent.

Errr -goes and checks- I think it's 6 but don't hold me to it. Ben, Castor, Flynn, Sam, two unidentifieds and Alistair. Honestly, not sure :P

Lengthy and rambling are fine! I love watching people picking apart the story and putting their own interpretation into it. I think that means I'm doing my job properly.

Thank you so much!
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Hi again, Rachel :)

I really liked your opening paragraph, it just spills everything that she's feeling into those lines and it's something that many people can relate to. A chapter of your life is closing or has closed and you're not quite sure what to do about the other one that's about to open. It's kind of weird that it summed up the prompt Len gave me for my own Molly story.

It is not her he is calling. It is not her that is swept off her feet. - This is just swimming in an underlying sense of something inside her, isn't it? Is she a tad bit jealous or is she just lamenting about something that's so close but still so far away?

It seems like she can never get away from all that's Teddy and Teddy + Victoire. The universe, apparently in the form of a 10 year old girl, has a way of really rubbing your nose in the most unpleasant of things. I have to give Molly some credit for not saying a word.

There is so much tension and awkwardness between Molly and Teddy. I swear, I'm so surprised they didn't leap into each other's arms right then and there. Of course, their levels of self-control don't last long at all, though her resistance takes a while to crumble.

I'm almost in a puddle here at Teddy's ever so subtle gesture. You see what you've done to me? Do you?

Molly is trying her best to be sensible but the more she fights it, the more agonising it is. She's trying to say the right things like she's supposed to but all the while, resisting the urge to say something else. And Teddy, clearly doesn't want to make an effort to try with Victoire...try whatever it is they have. It makes me wonder what the point was. I'm not sure if I brought this up in the first review. What's the point of faking something just to make everyone else happy and you're just miserable? Now he's willing to drop it all and as you've put it, let them start their own dream. If only it were that easy, right?

This was just lovely. I can't even comment on the kiss because I'd no longer be typing coherent sentences.

Fantastic job, my dear :)

Lia

Author's Response: I like the opening of this one too. I really wanted a significant moment for her and one that people can relate to, as you said. It's a very strange, emotional time and I think I wanted an instability to Molly for this second snapshot of their relationship.

I think it's a bit of both. Perhaps a sudden realisation that she's not over whatever it is she feels for him, a reminder that he's not hers. It's a lot of things rolled into one for her.

I don't think it's in Molly's character to say anything. At least, not yet. One of the key parts of her character is the long fuse she has. She doesn't really lose her temper, she doesn't snap or shout; I think for an 18-year-old girl, she's quite mature, and to say something snide to a 10-year-old cousin would be out of character for her.

Tension and awkwardness is good. That's exactly what I want from their relationship in these early stages, anyway.

Teddy ♥ He's not even that nice a person but I love him. I think they're both quite weak, in their own ways. Molly tries to resist and even though she does push him away, I think it's mostly her feeling that she'd be ostracised from her family if she let something happen that stops her from doing so. Teddy, I think, needs someone and as Molly won't have him yet, he makes do with what he's already got. I don't think he loves Victoire but she's someone for him and that's enough for him.

Thank you so much, lovely!

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Rachel! Back to review the third chapter. I thought it flowed well and I like how you've balanced between showing Molly's relationship with her new boyfriend, Alistair, and Teddy toward the end of the chapter. You did a good job really showing how Molly felt about both guys and the confusion she felt toward the end when she was sitting next to Teddy because she loves him, but at the same time she knows that he's out of bounds. Over all, great, strong start to this story so far. (: 10/10

Author's Response: Leslie ♥

I'm really glad that you said those two are balanced. I was worried that there wasn't enough focus on her and Teddy in this chapter so I'm really happy that it seems to have paid off.

Thank you for the review!

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Heya! From the forums here with a very late review! Sorry!

I honestly really liked it. ^_^ Especially the pairing of Molly II & Teddy, since I've never seen it before! It is a bit clunky at the beginning, so maybe split up a paragraph or two? And a tad incoherent in that it's confusing to know who's the main focus to start off with? Hopefully that makes sense, if not poke me on the forums and I'll explain that more!

Characterization wise, I think you did it brilliantly. Teddy is very realistic to me, and the words between Molly & Teddy clearly show the sort of relationship they have. You really did a lovely job of captivating readers with the first chapter, as I definitely will be reading on!

10/10^^
-Caiti

Author's Response: Hey! It's no problem :P I'm the world's worst with keeping up with review threads.

Thank you so much. I completely get what you're saying with the start. I have fixed it up but maybe it needs a little more work. The style shifted about halfway through that chapter so it's caused me huge problems.

I'm so glad that Teddy is realistic. I do get a little concerned about how these characters come across, especially who people think is the most at fault in their pairing, so thanks for bringing that up.

I'm really glad that you liked it. Thank you so much for the review!

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I really am enjoying how you have written Teddy as the one to pursue Molly, yet Molly is the one to pull the plug by saying there can't be anything between them while he belongs to Victoire. It's very angst-driven, but I like a good angst read. Anyway, I thought this chapter flowed well and the character development is growing more as the plot expands; great job.

Author's Response: I definitely didn't want Molly to come off as a seductress from the beginning. Once the relationship is established as being more genuine than it is at the start, she definitely takes more of an active role in instigating things but for the minute, she's very sensible and knows that it's wrong and that she has to stop it.

Angst ♥ Love it :P

Thank you so much, Leslie!

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Hiya Rachel, I'm here to review as long-ago requested. Sorry for the delay, things got a bit crazy there for a moment. But I made it eventually, as I usually do. (:

I like this first chapter, you've done a good job really painting the picture as to where the relationship between Teddy and Molly stands and of how anything that happens between them should not be taking place at all because they are both already spoken for. Yet, they still yearn for each other. Already the characters have depth that will carry the plot through to the end in the beginning. Over all, it flowed nicely and I'm looking forward to reading the next two chapters as well to see what else holds these two apart.

Author's Response: Leslieee -squishes-
I absolutely know how you feel. I still owe reviews from about 4 months ago (Sorry, Ty. Sorry, Sarah) so I really can't say anything!

I'm so glad you pointed out that part of their relationship because the forbidden aspect is very much the crux of the story, really. He's Victoire's (or rather, he thinks he ought to be) and Molly has to live with the expectations of her family so their relationship really plays on that.

Thank you so much for the review, Leslie!

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Rachel, oh my gosh. Why have I not read this before?

I'm commenting on things as I read so please, bear with me. I've only just read the first chapter and already I want to curl up in a ball and die. This is beautiful. The imagery you provide is gorgeous and your use of present tense makes it more so. It gives the story a wistful feel, if that makes sense.

"It would be food for gossip, this talk of the boy and the girl who is not supposed to be his." - I really like this line, forbidden yet almost appealing and perhaps harsh, making attempts to create boundaries in the eyes of everyone else but of the pair in question, both of them are too willing to cross those lines.

This sentence confuses me a bit: "They speak of nothing. Together, they are old. They have a century between them..." From how you ended the last paragraph, it made me think that the 'they' in question referred to the two cousins Molly was squished between. When I read the chapter again, I realised that you meant all of them.

"Or maybe it is because he is Teddy Lupin and if she didn’t find him perfect, then she would not be a true Weasley." - This made me laugh out loud. Quite clever.

I love how honest Teddy feels he can be with Molly and I wonder if it's because she's the girl he prefers over the one that everyone seems to like. How he answered that question makes me wonder why he's going through with his relationship with Victoire in the first place.

And she kissed him, or rather, he kissed her. Then the rain fell. Oh dear. My inner romantic was pretty much swooning by then.

The irony of it all was when Molly thought at the end that everything would be as it should. But it most definitely will not end there. Not after what happened between them.

I really, really liked this and I'm onto reading chapter two.

Lia.

Author's Response: Oh gosh, Lia. I don't really even know how to begin to reply to these gorgeous reviews. I appreciate everything you've said so much and each one makes me grin like some kind of lunatic each time I come and read them.

I love that line myself. I think it sums up the message in the story itself really well and even now, I can twist it in so many ways to reflect elements of the story.

Thank you for pointing that out. I've edited it so it makes it more clear. I hadn't even thought of it being misconstrued like that!

I think that's exactly it. The reasoning behind his relationship with Victoire is more deeply explored in chapter 2 (and the later ones too) but it's really all about expectations vs reality.

I can't even remember putting rain in there! Gosh, how cliché! The ending of this chapter is really important, I think. She's very sure that that night will eventually be forgotten by both of them, she'll accept his relationship with Victoire and life will be good. But that wouldn't make a decent story, would it? :P

Thank you so much for the stunning review, Lia. I can't thank you enough. Honestly.

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A perfect ending to a perfect story. There's not really much else to say.

Well, there is one thing, actually. Thank you for making Victoire such a great character in this chapter. In non-Teddoire stories, she tends to become unpleasant, but now you've made her something much, much better, and I'm kind of wondering why Teddy would prefer Molly to her. :P But then again, Teddy and Molly are very much alike, very well-suited to one another in every way, whereas Victoire was too much of a perfectionist, and I'll say it, too good for Teddy. I like the bits about soul mates because they really drove home the connection Molly and Teddy have - it's indescribable and inexplicable, but it's there and can't be denied.

Wow. This was quite a story, and I'm really glad that I was able to read it because it was amazing to read - so engrossing and powerful, yet with a happy ending. I hope you're proud of this story, and if you're able to send some of your talent my way, please do. ^_^

Author's Response: I so wanted to give it an unhappy ending but I just couldn't force myself to do it. I'd started writing with the aim of a happy ending and when I got there, despite my head telling me to be brutal - perhaps even be realistic - and keep them apart, I couldn't!

Wow, thank you. I didn't want her to come across completely innocently. She does keep them apart for a while - I think at the end of chapter five, she could have ended it but she knew that Molly wanted him and so she couldn't let him go - but ultimately, she started as naive and oblivious and completely redeemed herself for keeping them apart.

Ooh, I don't know. I think in another world, perhaps one where chapter one never happened, Teddy and Victoire could have worked but it was always Molly, for him. I think you're right and she was too good for him, although she was never completely innocent herself.

Thank you so, so, so much. I think it's one of the few stories that I am proud of and I'm so glad that you liked it. You absolutely do not need even a fraction of my ability when you've got your own ridiculously wonderful imagination. I'd happily swap you, any day!

Thank you, Susan, for completely making my year and making me want to write again.

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Oh, that ending! It was so perfect! I teared up reading those last few paragraphs, they were just the way they should be. Yes, I should probably still be screaming at Molly to just stop it already, but in this case, I think she's grown up - she's different in this chapter, more assured, just on the cusp of making that choice that will change everything for her.

I really like how you've portrayed the next-generation, not only in this story, but more specifically in this chapter - how you've shown them maturing and experiencing life. It's far more realistic than other next-gen stories I've read in that it's grittier, more true to life in the details. I don't know how else to describe it, but there's something very different about this story, and I like the story very much because of this difference.

So there's only one more chapter, and I really want to see what choice Molly will ultimately make and how she'll do it. This is a fantastic story, Rachel, and I continue to be astounded by the writing in every chapter, it's so beautiful to read. ^_^

Author's Response: I'm so glad you like the end of this chapter. I hadn't intended it to happen but then it did and I just so wanted them to have their little moment of happiness. She has grown up a lot. She's been changing between chapters, really, but this is a big leap.

Thank you. I must admit, I like the gritty. I like the real. I'm not one for fluff - as much as I love to read it - and I can't see why they should be any different to the rest of us. I think the minimal amount of magic I tend to use helps that :P I kind of forget they're witches and wizards sometimes.

Thank you so much, Susan. I'm still sorry it's taken me so long to respond but it's been really hard to find words to match yours.

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Wow! That was really incredible! I loved all your play with shadow and dream vs. reality. it was mesmerizing to read. Great story!

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much. I'm so glad you enjoyed this. It means so much that you spent the time to read it and review!

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Another brilliantly emotional chapter! I cringed when Victoire and, later, Teddy entered the room, then couldn't breathe as Victoire took her time in figuring things out, then cheered for Molly's sudden show of strength before wanting to scream at her for being so selfishly unselfish. You really know how you torture your readers with this story. It's so volatile and dramatic, with emotions that are so powerfully deep and passionate that they can't help but affect one.

The dialogue, the descriptions, they were all spot-on. If I thought that the last chapter was amazing, this one is even more amazing. Absolute perfection. If the next two are better, I don't know what will happen to me - I might explode or something. :P Brilliant work!

Author's Response: I think once Victoire walked in, that was the moment that it was all to change. Comparing Teddy's reaction when he sees Victoire to that of Molly in the previous chapter really sets apart their differences as people, I think.

Molly is so strong in this chapter, it still kind of stuns me. Chapter Four is a real turning point for her. Suddenly, she's putting herself ahead of her cousin and her family but she still cannot bring herself to hurt them completely.

Thank you so much...I just ... words have suddenly forgotten how they go together and make sense :P

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Oh gosh, Rachel. How could you do this? It's brilliant, but it's so painful to read with all this emotion, powerful and draining and heart-wrenching. It's perfectly written (I think there was only an "envelope" instead of "envelop" that I noticed), leading the reader on, but always with the knowledge that something's not entirely right about what happens, there's a sense of wrongness that permeates, and Molly knows it, but she takes what's given to her, and who can blame her?

As soon as Victoire appeared, I knew how it would be, but I loved how you portrayed Molly's emotions at that part best. She's amazingly sympathetic and real. The details of this story are incredibly realistic, even frighteningly so - you're not afraid to show the dirt and grime of these characters' lives, and that's what makes this story even better, what helps to set it apart. I feel like I'm there while reading it - everything's very vivid for all the senses.

While reading this I was like "OMG" over and over again. You're an amazing writer, and this is an amazing story. ^_^

Author's Response: -cue evil laugh-
I wish I could have resolved this earlier but my summary dictates six moments (seven? I forget) and so I had to stick with it. It was so hard to wrench them apart from each other over and over again.

Quite right -edits- :P Thank you!

I'm so glad you used the 'r' word for her. Lia pointed out that Molly was very calm, which I think she was, compared at least to later chapters, but there's that line 'Do you regret it?' (I think) which adds this slightly edgier side to her. Perhaps if Victoire had been definitive, it would have all come out. I don't know. I like to think of that question as a point where things could have changed.

Wow. Honestly, words can't even express how grateful I am for you saying that and giving such lovely words of encouragement and appreciation and everything! Thank you so much (I'm far less eloquent when it comes to review responses than I am when writing)!

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But why is it her fault? Why does she keep blaming herself? Oh Molly, just nab him already!

Haha, you've made me feel quite a bit about these characters and it's absolutely wonderful. Even though I fear that they're only growing further and further apart, you still show how perfect they are, perhaps so perfect that their relationship can never be. No one else thinks they're perfect, and therefore their relationship can't happen - that's an extraordinary way of writing a romance, but it's amazing how much other people with their perceptions can get in the way. You encapsulated it all with Lucy's observation that people don't notice enough - they don't notice Teddy and Molly's act nor their inability to resist one another, and that's tragic. Immensely powerful, too.

Another brilliant chapter! Your portrayal of relationships and people in general is fantastic, and they make this a very intense story to read - it's engrossing, sucking in the reader until their nose is against the screen. I'm loving this story very much and look forward to catching up with the rest. ^_^

Author's Response: She's far too good, isn't she? Or, you know, enormously selfish. Depends on your view on life :P

I'm so glad you can feel something for them. When I can see frustration in reviewers' words, I know I'm doing the job properly. They are stepping apart at this point. The gap between chapters two and three is probably the most pronounced; it's the point where they distance themselves from one another, Molly decides she needs to move on and so they end up at opposite ends of the same track, really. Walking and walking away from one another but knowing that at some point they'll have to meet again.

'Nobody else thinks they're perfect' - absolutely that. Nobody else - aside from Lucy - sees it. They see their perfect Teddy and Victoire, and Molly steamrolling through guy after guy - as girls her age can do, I guess - and they don't see far enough into it. Lucy's point sums it up really well, I think, and I love her character to pieces.

Thank you so much. You're showering me with so many completely insane, amazing compliments that I just don't deserve but they do mean the world!

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This review would be better conveyed via pictures because I'm really kind of speechless at the moment. The emotion in this story is fantastic, and I love your portrayal of both characters because they're so human. I almost want to strangle Molly for being so self-effacing - she's bought into the fairy tale of Teddy and Victoire even when he's practically throwing himself at her. ARG! But that's what makes her a well-crafted character and what will make for a more emotionally traumatic story. :P It's the best kind of story in my opinion. ^_^

Again, I love your imagery - that scene where Victoire walks out of the train's steam was so vividly described that I could actually see it before me, very much like it was from an old movie, probably because you mentioned that Molly saw it in black and white. What's interesting, though, is that Victoire's appearance isn't much to write home about - she has presence, but she's not glamorous, which sets your portrayal apart. It's probably the Veela blood that makes Victoire so striking.

The Teddy/Molly scenes were indescribably amazing. If I tried to express what I feel about them, I'd slip into babbling squees, so just know that they were fantastic. They compliment one another, seemingly able to understand one another in that perfect-couple way that's always fascinating to read about. But where will it go? What will happen? I love how the story is suspenseful in this way - the "falling in love" part is already established, even before the story begins to a degree, making the "now what" question far more urgent. It's just another reason why this story is so wonderfully unique. ^_^

Author's Response: She absolutely has. She wants to keep the prince and princess happy and she's content (somewhat) to sit there and play the-girl-it-should-have-been. Emotionally traumatic? I liiike.

I'm really glad that you saw that like an old movie scene because I do, every single time. It's such a short moment, really, but it was very clear in my mind and I wanted Victoire to sort of be elevated by it. With her appearance, I agree completely. She is what she is, which is obviously very pretty, given her parentage but not one to flaunt it much. I think in chapter one, there was a line about Victoire's beauty and how everyone looked on her, not quite enviously - perhaps wistfully, I don't know. There's definitely a feeling amongst the cousins - Molly included - that she's the one to beat (though if you imagine Molly as Keira Knightley from the banner, the competition's going to be tough).

I must admit, this chapter is far and away my favourite in terms of the quality of the Teddy/Molly. It was writing this one when I knew I had to finish this story because I just couldn't bear it for myself if I didn't. They are almost perfectly halves of the same whole and it is most definitely the 'now what' that is going to lead the story on. I hope nobody doubts their falling in love!

Thank you so, so much, Susan!

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Okay, I wanted to leave you a proper review but I am too shocked/annoyed/angry that Jane beat me to reviewing. WHEN DOES THAT EVER HAPPEN???

Anyway. You know how I feel about this story. At the beginning, I was rooting for angst and an unhappy ending. Now that we're here, I don't think I could BEAR for any more angst because I love them both too much and they deserve happiness after all that waiting around and on and off and silly Victoire (only not so silly after all). Basically, SQUEE Teddy/Molly, SQUEE for this fic and SQUEE for you, because you've done it again and TOTALLY made me fall in love with you/your writing all over again. Fabulous and BRILLIANT and I cannot wait for your next masterpiece.

Be proud, dear. ♥

Author's Response: Hahaha, I DON'T KNOW! It's MADNESS but I love you both anyway.

Seee? I would have loved for this to have had an angsty ending but I just couldn't make myself do it. I needed a happy Molly/Teddy in my collection and I really couldn't keep two people so right for each other apart for much longer. Not without killing one of them off, anyway.

SQUEE for you too. You might be waiting a long time for something else, my lovely, but thank you to the end of the world and back again.

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xx

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I AM SO HAPPY.

THAT IS ALL THERE IS TO SAY.

Author's Response: I LOVE YOU. THANK YOU.

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AH. I'M ADDICTED.

I HAVE SPENT THIS WHOLE TIME READING AND ALMOST SCREAMING 'THEY BETTER NOT GET MARRIED'. I GENUINELY THINK I WOULD HAVE SUFFERED HEART FAILURE.

THE SHIP. YOUR DESCRIPTIONS. YOUR PROSE. DIFPUOKJASDHFIKUASDLFDSIGLDSA. IT'S AMAZING AND I LOVE ALL OF THE TWISTS AND TURNS. (but angry Lucy is PROPERLY scary).

PLEASE POST ME THE NEXT CHAPTER. PLEASE.
♥

Author's Response: I LOVE YOU SO MUCH, YOU CAPS ADDICTED LOON.

YOU'LL JUST HAVE TO WAIT AND SEE, WON'T YOU? I've just got a couple of edits to run through and then I'll throw the last chapter up. JUST FOR YOU.

SHUT UUUPPP BUT I ABSOLUTELY ADORE LUCY. I want her to have her own story but...effort.

PATIENCE, DEAR, AND THANK YOU.
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GOJHEGJSKLDFGADHGKJSDAGBAKLFGHA

THIS, MY FRIEND, IS SO SO GOOD. You know I'm crap at fanfiction and don't read/write/do much at all now, but this looked too good to skip past and IT DID NOT LET ME DOWN.

Seriously, your writing is so lyrical and emotional and FANTASTIC. And I love Molly/Teddy. However, I see you're being a rat and haven't posted the last chapter to this yet? PLEASE don't say it hasn't been written because I couldn't cope...

As always, your description was on top form, but I adore everything about the story so far. Seriously, the plot seems amazing and I'm already emotionally invested in the characters XD.

Am running off now to read more ♥

Author's Response: I FEEL SO PRIVILEGED TO HAVE A REVIEW FROM YOU POST-'I HATE WRITING AND LIFE' PHASE. It's my life made. Officially and everything.

OFC IT'S BEEN WRITTEN. Have you forgotten everything about me? A couple of edits and it's ready to go.

I love youuu - thank you ever so much.
♥
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arghh this just gets better with every chapter! they're so cute together but the sexual tension is so unbearably good! it's so realistic and their problems are real and their personalities are real and I feel such empathy for them. WHY ARE YOU SO GOOD?

Author's Response: I COULD ASK YOU THE SAME QUESTION. I could also ask you where you at the moment because I miss you terribly.

THANK YOU, MY LOVELY ♥

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Oh wow, Rachel. Really, wow! That word doesn't entirely capture the image of me running around squeeing and waving my arms madly, but it'll have to do. :P I'll somehow express how amazing I think this story is and how amazing an author you are another way.

You had me with the line "Or maybe it is because he is Teddy Lupin and if she didn’t find him perfect, then she would not be a true Weasley." I love the idea that both Teddy and Victoire are regarded as perfect, even though you kept slipping in their weaknesses, those little things that Molly notices, but still pushes to the back of her mind because their perfection has been ingrained on her consciousness. It's a wonderful way of playing with the Teddy/Victoire ship.

I'm a sucker for alternate Teddy ships, and you write Molly so well that it's hard not to want to ship her with Teddy right away, even before reaching the end of this chapter. I didn't expect something to happen so soon, but that's what really hooks the reader into your story. You give an incredible amount of background in a single chapter without making the plot flow lag one bit, and that's brilliant. Then there are the descriptions, which are beautiful. The image of the waves outside the cottage and then Molly's inner romantic thoughts stood out as particularly well-crafted and poetic.

I knew this would be good as soon as I saw it, and although it's taken me a while to finally get to reading it, I'm very glad that I have. It's all-round fantastic. :D

Author's Response: -stops hyperventilating-

It's now taken me well over a month to do that. I'm honestly still not even sure how to reply to these seven stunning reviews that absolutely mean the world to me coming from the mouth of someone who everybody in the FF world idolises. It's just completely mind-boggling!

It amazes me that people pick up on that line because it was put in and pulled out again then put back in so many times. I'm always on the fence with it and it gives me a lot more confidence in it now that that one has been pointed out!

They're undoubtedly regarded as perfect, probably in most bits of fanfiction (certainly the less creative ones, anyway), and I really wanted them to...not be, here. I don't like the ship much and I absolutely love that you said that Molly 'pushes [their weaknesses] to the back of her mind'. It's completely true. She's as much for protecting this false aura of perfection as they are.

Gosh, me tooo. Again, it's my general distaste for the easiness of Teddy/Victoire :P

Molly ♥ I completely overuse her and subject her to far too much for an extremely minor character! I wanted this very much to be about snapshots of their relationship, the six key points, and not bothering with the...dullness, I suppose, in between. This is that very first realisation for both of them of what their relationship could be.

Wow, thank you. I think that's the ultimate compliment. I'm always so scared of info-dumping and to hear that from you is really amazing.

Thank you so, so much, Susan. I'm sorry it's taken me so long to reply but hopefully I'll get to the other 6 gorgeous reviews shortly.

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Oh my god, amazing chapter! Victoire's realisation was painfully slow, it felt agonising to read it just because I knew she had to get there eventually but she's so naive! And everything Molly said sent shivers down my spine, excellent dialogue.

And then her refusal to tell Teddy she loves him, and how he KNOWS and how neither of them will say and aarrgghhh the tension between them is unbearable good! Excellent chapter.

Author's Response: One of my favourites, I'll admit. She's very naive and innocent and young and she really does need to grow up. Hopefully this is the turning point for her.

Molly's not that nice a person, really, is she? But then she is and gosh, she's a bit complex which is absolutely not the fault of my own inability to write consistent characters...

Thank you, my love ♥
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The fact that Teddy rings Molly, and not Victoire, is really poignant. They have such a natural and tense relationship and you write that so well here. Your characterisation is stunning, as always, but your portrayal of interactions between each character and their relationships is absolutely stunning, it's second-to-none.

Author's Response: And the fact Victoire doesn't have a phone...:P But I'll stop ruining the moment for you.

Thank you, lovely ♥
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Lucy is an amazing character. She has a very good knowledge of her sister and yet still remains to be this irritating presence in her life that is the reality of most sibling relationships. All your characters are so realistic and that's what makes this so amazing - that coupled with the gorgeous writing makes for a gripping and chilling read. Chilling in a good way, of course - it's almost haunting how bittersweet Molly and Teddy's relationship is. Excellent job :)

Author's Response: I love love love Lucy. I know you know that but I dooo. I wish I was like her, as horrible as she is sometimes.

Thank you so much, my lovely. I wouldn't have written this without you :wub:

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I love how complicated these two are! Their motives aren't transparent and their feelings for each other are mixed up in the reality of their own relationships. Fabulous stuff!

Author's Response: It's all higgledy-piggledy, messy mess, really, isn't it? I still have no real idea what's going on between them.

THANKS LOVELY ♥
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