This was a lovely chapter with so many facets in it, George's birthday with thoughts of Fred, a family gathering. I enjoyed Molly's ranting as she tidied up her grown sons, and Percy's introduction of his girlfriend, all well written as usual. The Three Stooges made me laugh - nice choice.
Hmm, the kiss - okay, my own opinion is that George would have taken the lead and not been the one to pull away - just because the twins were such opportunists at everything that came their way, and because they were pretty bold and unabashed about everything. I think George would have taken full advantage of the situation, maybe even to the point of having to be called off. But that's just my own opinion. It didn't really put me off that you wrote it the way you did. I was quite happy to go along with your idea of how it should be - because it was time for a kiss to finally happen, regardless of how. And it was so nicely written that it was easy to just go with the flow of the story and enjoy whatever came. I did like your description of the hesitancy BEFORE the kiss, like any little thing could get them running apart. Terrific job as usual. I'm glad there's more to come.Author's Response: Why thank you!! I'm starting to get spoiled here. Everytime I log on I seem to have a new review from you!! I really do appreciate them. :)
Ahh. This chapter was a bit of an emotional roller coaster ride, and for that I apologize. I am glad you enjoyed it though. Molly is the best, and it was so much fun having a chance to write her in a mothering sort of context -- those are the scenes with her I love the most in canon.
Ahh. The kiss. I do appreciate your opinion. George is definitely a go-getter, oppurtunist sort of person, but at the same time -- THIS IS ANGELINA -- they have such an drawn out history that I think it would be very realistic to have developed a bit of a stigma about it all. Otherwise, George would have kissed her way back in the Yule Ball chapter... So, I think I'm going to chalk this one up to lurve~ and say that George is just a bit hesitant and unsure with most everything to do with Angelina due mostly to all the time he's spent trying to analyze their relationship.
I'm so glad that you are continuing to enjoy this story!! You're almost all caught up and I hope you enjoy the next few chapters as much as you have the first few. As always, I look forward to hearing from you again!
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this fic is brilliant, I love your style and I love the way you've structured it, it makes the story so much more interesting when you have to think a bit to figure out what's going on and to pick up the little references from the future and the past ;D this is so underreviewed, my apologies for not reviewing the other chapters but I couldn't wait to get to the end :$
George is just too adorable. I was reluctant to start on this even though it's at the top of every favourites list I've seen because I thought it might be another one of the typical caught between the brothers type thing but this is different and i like it :)) keep on writing! looking forward to the next chapterAuthor's Response: Hey!! Don't apologize for not reviewing as you read! I'm just thrilled that you are reading and enjoying this story. The time line is a little experimental for me, but so far It seems to be working. :) The fact that you've noticed this story on other ppl's favorites list is beyond thrilling.
George is adorable; I know I'm biased, but I can't help but agree Iol. I do understand your hesitancy to Start a fic you fear may be a fred-is-gone-so- Ang-settles-for-george story, but i hope you've noticed that i'm trying very hard to revamp that bit of fanon.
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Well, I've gone on reading and the story continues to be delightful. I especially enjoy the chapters that are written from George's point of view. Not that the other chapters aren't lovely, but because I'm a twin's fan and you've got him down so well, which many other fanfic writers' don't. I think the way you portray what's going on in George's thoughts is just
perfect. The scene with George and Ginny was touching and absolutely in character for both of them - what a great job you did with it - I loved it. It was funny, it was emotional, just perfect. Angelina's nephews added another lovable and funny element that fit perfectly into the story. Here again, for someone who claims not to be a funny person by nature, you're doing spectacularly!
One little thing I noticed is that George calls Hermione by her first name. In the original books, I don't think the twins ever did that - they always seemed to call her Granger. In fact, to me it always felt like the twins might purposely continue doing that even after Ron and Hermione were married - just as a way of getting under her skin, and maybe Ron's too. Not that I'm criticizing, I'm just throwing it out as a casual observation and a personal opinion of my own.
I don't read much fan fiction, but this story has been a joy and I'm looking forward to continuing. Let me also say that your writing style is engaging and versatile. The humor comes off extremely well, and the heartwarming scenes are captivating. Your writing is ray of sunshine. Do continue!Author's Response: Hello again!! I'm so glad you continued to read the story after your last review, and it's great to see another review from you :) I think one of my favorite things about writing this story was the freedom it's given me to explore different groups of relationships -- angelina and her friends, George and Lee, George and his family, Angelina and the gryffindor boys, and of course, Angelina and George. The two timelines gives a lot of freedome too, and it's always interesting to see which one readers prefer.
I'm so so thrilled that a self-proclaimed twins fan approves of my George characterization. thank you for such encouragement!!
Agh. that scene with ginny was such a headache to write, but i'm always relieved to hear when readers think it turned out well.
I really swear to you that I'm not funny... I base all of the goofiness and comedy in this story on observations I've made of people in RL, and always just hope that it works out. :P
Huh. that's a great observation!! thank you. I will definitely look into that now.
For somebody who doesn't read much fanfiction, you leave really lovely and helpful reviews. thank you so, so much!! As with last time, I hope that you continue enjoying this story and that you pop back in to let me know what you think :)
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Hi, I happened to find this story as the latest chapter came through the queue, and I've been been enjoying it. I don't usually read a romance, but this story seems to be more than just that, and I do enjoy a story that portrays the twins well, and you're certainly doing that.
I absolutely loved this chapter with George's visit to the Burrow. It was so touching. I think you've portrayed the family in the early days after Fred's death really well. As soon as I got to the end of the chapter, I wanted to read it all over again! I'm not so sure Molly would have tolerated the crude humor about Percy and his 'plaything' without reprimanding her sons to curb their manners - I kept expecting her voice to break in, sounding appalled, but maybe she didn't overhear. Anyway, the humor was delightfully funny. Great job.
All in all, this was a wonderful chapter to a lovely story. Your writing is great, your descriptions are vivid, and you've done a marvelous job at capturing even subtle hints of the underlying emotions of the characters. Fred and George dialogue can be hard to get right, especially in a romance! But I think you're done it extremely well so far, and I look forward to reading the rest.Author's Response: It's so wonderful to hear that you found this on the recently added page!! Welcome to the story. I'm so glad that you decided to read this and that so far you are enjoying it. :) One of my biggest goals in telling this story is to tell the story of their lives -- sorting through the mail, doing homework in the library, talking about boys, visiting friends, etc. I think those sorts of things tend to fall by the wayside in a lot of fics labeled as 'romances' for sake of the romance. I'm trying really hard to make this first a story about them as individuals and how their relationship grows from that.
Ahh. Weasley sibling humor is my favorite -- their banter is just so much fun to write. And if I did state it, I intended for Molly to be out of the room (perhaps grabbing trays of pudding or fixing Percy his plate) when that conversation happened. I will definitely go back and look that over once the Dobby Awards are over and I'm permitted to edit again. :) Because you're absolutely right, Molly would not permitt that sort of language and insinuations in her presence -- if they tried, I'm sure somebody would be getting slapped with a spoon. :P
It's always such a relief to hear that my George/Fred dialogue works. I am not by nature a funny person, and so it was by biggest fear going into this project.
Anyway, thank you so much for this review!! I'm very proud of this little story. I look forward to hearing what you think of the rest. Report Review
So, guess what? When you posted on my status update earlier, I thought to myself that THIS story is one that I've always kicked myself for not getting around to reading. So, here I am, hooking myself in by writing a review, because I always find that if I write one, I'll eventually write more.
Now, having sat down and read the first chapter, I see that yes, I should have started reading much sooner. Your George is SO well-characterized. From the first paragraph, I felt like I was right in step with how he was feeling. I loved his stoicism, and the conversation between him and Ron was really...well, I can't find the word, but it just seemed right. I can completely picture the Weasleys being worried about George on his own, and the way George kind of brushed Ron off was like evidence of his grief.
I felt so bad for him when he was out with his friends, too. I could just feel how hard he was trying to be strong, but whenever he spoke, it was clear that he wasn't himself. And THEN. When he saw Alicia and you talked about him having to look at himself in the mirror...devastating. AND THEN. Lee's toast. You nearly killed me in this chapter, I swear.
Because of all of that, it was the biggest relief when Angelina showed up and treated him like a normal person, and made him laugh. I assume that's exactly the effect you were trying to create, so...well done. Excuse me while I go try to recover from the emotional trauma.
On a less depressing note, I love the creativity you have with the magical world. The description of "microwave" dinners, The Fizzing Whizbee, the Fuzzy Cauldron--all very clever. :)
Okay, so, as I said, I'm hooked in now--it may take me ages to actually get through the story, especially since I'm starting a new job tomorrow, but I will be back. You are a lovely writer, and I'm really glad I finally started to read With All Things!Author's Response: Oh my goodness, Penny. I was scrolling through my WAT reviews tonight trying to make a feasible plan for responding to them, when I came across this one! I remember typing a response to it... I'm claiming innocence and blaming the black hole of the interwebz. ^_^
Anyway, sorry this has sat without a response for so long. That looks terribly ungrateful of me. I am so so ecstatic that you decided to read this story, and even more thrilled that you enjoyed this first chapter. George was a very daunting character for me to write -- we all know he's wickedly funny, but I don't consider myself to be very funny at all, and then there's the issue of the effect of Fred's death on him. Needless to say, any praise at all of his characterization (especially in these early chapters when his grief is still so raw) is very reassuring!!
Lee's toast was a huge area of concern for me while I was writing this. I have very little confidence in the decisions I make whilst writing -- and I always worry about whether something was too dramatic or too over the top or too just about anything. Needless to say, Lee's speech fit the too-dramatic worry bill.
Angelina is very good for George, now in 1998... as you'll come to find. :) I'm very sorry, but I'm also not, for all the emotional trauma!
Thank you again for this review, and once again, my apologies for it being unanswered for so long. Report Review
HI THERE! Siriusly89 here reviwing :)
I really do love this chapter! As requested, I started my reviews on Chapter11 :) I'm really sorry, but I'm attempting to write the next chapter for one of my stories, but at some point in the very near future, I will go back and read the rest of this story :) Angelina and George are just perfect together! You got the relationship balance just right! I really, really enjoyed it! No critiques here :)Author's Response: hey there! thank you so much for your review. I'm glad that you enjoyed the chapter. Looking forward to what you think about the next few chapters. :) Report Review
MELISSA I WANTED TO SEE THEIR MEETING. I WANTED TO SEE HER TELL GEORGE THAT SHE LIKED HIM. Bahhh! First of all, I'm really glad that the reason George stood her up was because of the attack. I was temporarily very annoyed at the idea of him getting distracted and not meeting her, but he couldn't do that because he does like her and he must know what the talks going to be about. And Fred and Lee are probably giving him the same must-tell-her-you-like-her talk that Alicia and Lora are having with Angelina. Which means I should have realized it would be something bad, but it didn't and now I'm so mad at you! Only because you put zillions of feels into me with this chapter.
I really think you did such an awesome job with grumpy Angelina. Her feels were so real. I think everyone can identify with that bad mood that just makes you want to mope and fall asleep. Her heart hurts and she doesn't want it to, and then she almost was going to tell him and gahhh!
I seriously love these two. I can't believe how amazing of a relationship you're creating, and I'm so excited for these two to just figure it out.
This chapter was extremely awesome. It was so tense, but at the same time it was so familiar. Just everything about Hogwarts, the DA meetings, gah. You're awesome ♥
Sorry if this was just review made no sense, but your chapter did that to me!!!Author's Response: SORRY. THAT'D MAKE EVERYTHING A BIT TOO EASY. :P
Of course George didn't actually stand her up! Even if Angelina doesn't know it, we all know that he's crazy about her. I'd like to imagine that Fred and Lee tease George about Ang just as often as Lora and alicia tease her about him. that's just what friends are for, you know??
ang is a really independent lady and so her preoccupation with George is really frustrating to her. they really do need to figure it out, but time is ticking and their seventh year is half over already.
Hogwarts is the best, and it's so much fun to exploit all it's magicalness.
Thank you so so much for your review, your general loveliness and all your enthusiasm
Oh my goodness, Melissa, this is such a wonderful story. I could kick myself for not reading it sooner. It's so beautifully written, full of both tender and heart-wrenching moments. And this chapter - ugh, my heart just about collapsed in on itself, it hurt so much. I doubt it helps that I was listening to Death Cab for Cutie while I was reading, not knowing what I was getting into. The sheer weight of George's emotions was overwhelming, yes, but not in a bad way; I felt the sadness he felt, even if it was only a fraction.
I love the subtlety of the romance that's been building between George and Angelina throughout the entire story thus far. It's cute at times, touching at others, and then there are the times when I wanted to knock their heads together for being so silly for waiting so long. When they finally did kiss, though, you better believe that I cheered so hard, I nearly toppled backwards in my desk chair.
Your characterizations of both Angelina and George are gorgeous! So true to canon yet so unmistakably Melissa. You've always had a knack for writing canon characters very well and it shows in this. I love how you write Lee and Alicia as well as the rest of Angelina's friends. It's very refreshing, this story is - you rarely see George and Angelina stories and this one takes the cake as the best one out there.
I cannot wait until the next update! This is just such a wonderful and beautiful story that I can't even imagine what the future chapters hold!
Fantastically stellar job, Melissa. Just...wow, I'm speechless!Author's Response: Molly!! It means so, so much to see a review from you. I adore your writing and so all your compliments and kind words have me fan girling :P Don't even apologize for taking a while to get to this story. I'm just tickled that you read it at all! This story has definitely been a bit of an emotional roller coaster... but it makes writing it really fresh and fun since each chapter the tone and mood switches back and forth.
This chapter in particular was extremely challenging. The emotions were so strong that I worried I was over doing them or that they'd stray into the world of melodrama.
It's so wonderful to hear that you can see the subtle romance... I worry sometimes that there's not enough romance in this story. I really from the get go intended this to be a story about two people as individuals and how their relationship develops from that.
I'm so happy to hear you think their characterizations are good!! I'm so far into the story now that I hardly have to think about it, but I was very nervous at first about getting them right, especially George. I don't consider myself to be especially funny. :P Lee and Alicia are two of my favorite characters because they both serve as the same foil to their respective friends. Annnd they're both sort of ridiculous. and fun.
Thank you so much for this review!! The next chapter is now posted, and I can't wait to see what you think of it. :) You're amaz-sauce.
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REVIEW 300 WO! I should start by saying something else about my love for this, but from the other reviews I've left, I think you've probably figured that our yourself already!
"Biscuits were always a good companion to help pass the time, and she was almost certain that there was a brand new tin in the cabinet." sounds like a good day ahead. BOURBONS YES.
"He paused for a several seconds before nodding very seriously. "Let's do this." I love this little lad. You capture his innocence so well!
Ahehehehe, this friendship is just to die for! "Michael, this lovely individual with the really attractive smudge of ice cream on her chin is Alicia Spinnet -" You just capture every single aspect of human life perfectly - from loss, to happiness, to friendship, to children, and relationships. You are the bomb!
"You caught me - that's exactly what I was trying to do. Merlin knows it's loads more handsome than yours." I don't think this was meant to fill me with as many feelings as it did, but it invariably did.
"She wasn't sure if it was his smile, her anticipation to begin captaining the Gryffindor Quidditch team, or the feel of his broad hands around hers, but a light tingle buzzed in her head as she fell into step with him." FEELING THINGS AGAIN.
And what an awful 300th review for you to have received. It was just a lot of Hannah's feelings spilling out onto the page and incomprehensible sentences. Ah well! I think it describes how much I love this ♥ You are a genius and I am so jealous that I didn't think of this first. Although if I had, I wouldn't have written it half as well as you, and I know that for a fact :) Report Review
Whenever I read one of your chapters, I'm always like 'Oh, I'm glad to read Angelina, I need some more happy, before-Fred's-death' time in my life', and then it gets to George's chapters, and I'm all 'Oh good, they're going to fall in love'. You have made me bipolar! ;)
"Oddie let out a long hoot and fluttered down to the edge of the sink bowl." Oddie knows... But his little talking to the owl makes me all giddy. He's so nervous and it's so adorable ♥
"Oh my Merlin, could you imagine the Prophet's obituary if she hadn't?" Katie asked. "'Budding, neurotic Quidditch star chokes to death on biscuit in response to the detention of his teamís Seeker.'" Please write this obituary. It sounds absolutely hilarious.
Your descriptions are killing me. They are so beautiful and making me ship this ship so much harder than I already do, which ultimately makes me sob that I haven't written this wonderful thing ;) "He felt his mouth go as dry as if he had eaten Doxy powder. His heart leapt up into his throat as he recalled the heat of her palms against his bare skin." Also, I am so stoked to read about the kiss. Thought you ought to know ;)
"A grin spread out across his face and he found himself shaking Michael the Muggle's hand and clapping him on the shoulder without thinking. There was something profound about the coupleís news - a new life for the new year, for the new world - and it was beautiful." Oh George just marry me. I love you. And once more, as I had predicted, I have proposed to another character. I do this in every story, but I do not regret a thing. I will marry all of these fictional men and live a wonderful life ;)
"he was suddenly aware that she had been leaning back against his chest, and that he had been standing with his arms draped over her shoulders." Captain Hannah of this OTP over here is ready to leave the port. All aboard?
AH THEY NEARLY KISSED. I am so excited for the eventual kiss/memories of the first kiss. This story is just gorgeous, and I love it ♥ Report Review
So many shipper feelings! And all of these feelings are utterly believable, and that is what is making me feel them even more!
"Merlin, she had put her name into the goblet last term, and had been a twinge jealous of the boy ever since. What if she had been in the maze, instead of Cedric? " Ohmygosh I'd completely forgotten that...wow. To think that it could have been Angelina saddens me, because then George would never had had a second shot. And all these lovely chapters would have been for nothing because Angelina would be dead. Wow.
Oh I remember reading this chapter in it's first draft! I remember reading this and loving this particular light note in such a dark chapter: "Oi, are you two awake?" Lora's head peeped out from her bed./"No, we're both fast asleep," Alicia called across the room./"Well, I'm not either." Dormitory/sleepover talks never change...
"Some chocolate was beginning to sound nothing short of necessary." Some?! More like 'all the chocolate'! I had a couple of chocolate frogs at the studio tour - they break your teeth but they're so tasty. "She's a firm believer in chocolate therapy as a solution for all problems." As are we all...
"Fred, or George - no - maybe Fred - oh, as if it matters, right?" How dare she. That girl had better get off that train and never return. IT MATTERS LIBBY, IT MATTERS.
"The feel of his breath against her neck sent trails of cauldron fizz flooding through her body./She dropped her hands, not knowing exactly what to do." KISS HIM. KIS HIM! (I think you can tell I ship them quite a lot)
"Be careful this summer, eh? I, erm, I don't think I'd know what to do if something happened to you."/"You, too." And you've done it again.
This chapter was so sad but absolutely necessary at the same time. I loved it, not because of the sad (Cedric's death was too sad, too too sad for an 8 year old Hannah to read), but because of the end. THE END! ♥ I loved it. Truly. Report Review
When I started reading this oh so long ago, I thought I would get really confused with the constant changing of time etc, but you control it so well that I can't imagine it having been written any other way. Seeing the way the characters have changed and the way in which they interact with each other is just perfect. It really makes everything they say and do seem so much more important, because of everything that happens after/before the chapter. I don't know if you quite understand what I am trying to say, but I hope something legible came out of it :)
HA! lolol best pun ever: "Two-Ton Tongue Toffees (For Twice the Tonguefoolery)". Honestly, though, how do you come up with this?! I am so bad with puns and names with meanings, and yet you seem to do it with such ease! So jealous!
And after seven years, Ron has actually found his brains: "It had been Ron's idea to schedule the grand re-opening to coincide with the arrival of the Hogwarts Express at King's Cross with all of the students traveling home for the holidays." ;) But it really is a clever idea - 10 house points to Mr Ronald Weasley!
And HAHA Percy's present is just brilliant - "Love Me Lusty Lip Gloss (Infused with Long-Acting Love Potion No. 5 to Make Every Kiss Memorable )". I reiterate my earlier question: where do you come up with this wonderful stuff?!
"Weasleys' Wizard Wheezes had started within a family, and would grow as a family." You should start a business, and this could be your tagline (with own company name inserted of course), because I totally buy this and it makes me feel all sad and happy at the same time.
Oh and Ron is famous! I really love that you put that in here, because you kind of don't think that people would recognise Ron, especially after having read all the books from Harry's perspective. But that is genius and just perfect ♥ (as you can tell, I have a very special place in my heart for Ron)
"Of course everyone had told him that his twin would always be there looking down on him, but today George knew that Fred was right there in the shop with him." ;_; MY HEART! I am just a ball of emotions and wet tissues right now.
"So I can really have the grow-your-own moustache tea like you said?" She smiled a wide, toothy grin. "I think Ron would look smashing in a black handlebar moustache. I'm sure Hermione would agree."/The image of his brother with a black moustache was nearly as funny as the look George would expect to be on Hermione's face when she saw the facial hair." Once more, this is brilliant, and the inventions sound like the bomb!
"You'd do that for me? Could you even sign it? Gee whiz, if Elliot sees I have your autograph." Ohmygod this is the cutest thing ever.
Okay, I would once more like to apologise for how long it has taken me to come back to this story, and honestly, I don't know why it took me so long when I absolutely adore it and them ♥ I just love you Mel for writing this! Report Review
And because of all the feelings you are making me feel, I cannot keep away.
"Your sister's sense of style leaves a lot to be desired. Trust me." I feel like you have been speaking to my sister here - oh how she laughs at some of my combinations ;)
Alicia is just perfect. I would love to be her friend just to watch this: "I swear to Merlin if he kisses me before the first lesson one more time, I will dump my coffee on him and not even pretend it was an accident." I like to think that she's already dumped her coffee on him and said it was an accident.
I need to find new words other than 'love' and 'adore', but I really do (those words) the way that you make Angelina and George like each other before Fred dies. They weren't consolation prizes. She didn't marry him because she loved Fred, and he didn't marry her because she once dated his brother. I just think you have balanced their relationship perfectly and so utterly believably ♥ yaay, go Mel!
And the relationship between the girls is just so believable! Gah, if only I could write as well as you!
Oh and George is such a gentleman paying for her. I don't know why - maybe it's because we all know how he doesn't have a lot of money, or maybe it's because he's so obviously nervous and just wants to make sure they have a good date - but this makes me so gooey and happy inside.
"Only after she thought this did she realize that George still had a hold of her hand, and that his broad palm was just as warm as his fingertips had been." SO MANY FEELINGS. And this time, they are all gooey and lovely and I knew this OTP would be good for me eventually (when I found a fic as thorough and believable and brilliant as this)
WOO MEL IS BRILLOPADS! ♥ Report Review
WOO MEL! I read over the last chapter to bring myself up to speed because I haven't read this in ages :( I'm sorry, I don't understand why I haven't read more of it when I have always loved this pairing and your writing. But on with the show!
I know this is a tenuous detail in this chapter, but saying that Ron still lived at home really pleases me. People always rush through Ron and Hermione's relationship by making them move in together almost immediately etc etc, but I love this. He's still a child after all. I just thought you ought to know how much that little addition pleases me :)
"She stood there for a moment, mouth opening and closing, before tearing her eyes away from him. " I want to cry. This moment is so sad. How can you capture such a heart breaking moment so well? My words aren't doing my emotions well, because I am feeling so much more than I can portray.
;_; the bit about her getting George's food preferences wrong makes me even sadder! Why are you playing with my emotions in this way? Mel, you are wonderful and I am a blubbering mess :'(
"The latter was miraculously still dating Ron, who at the moment was wiping custard from his nose with his sleeve." And yet, there is my silver lining in this chapter full of feels. I love Ron. And I love your Ron. He is just perfect.
"We've got no real proof, after all Percy could just prefer women's perfume to men's cologne, but it's a working theory." This is definitely what is really going on. But I adore your Weasley banter, it's so true and so easy. And the fact that no-one questions George is just right - just like them.
I love Arthur. "Muggles call it an Eye Pod. I've still not figured out what its function is, but I think it's for communication. Sometimes, words appear on the screen. Why just yesterday, I was tinkering with it and some man named John Lennon had a message about imagination on the screen - just tiny little letters." This was just the best comic relief.
ARTHUR NO, DON'T CRY :'( "When at last the older red head pulled away, he coughed and removed his glasses, rubbing his eyes." This is even worse than Molly, because Arthur never cries. I swear you like playing with my emotions like this, don't you Mel? ;)
I am so glad I came back to this story. Even though it's sad and making me feel so many Weasley feels, I know I have to read it. I just get so sad when I remember Fred it gone, and imagining George living without him for the rest of his life, but this fic is going to be good for me and my fragile emotions, I can tell :) ♥ Report Review
I'm so angry at myself for not reviewing this the first time. Because NOW I had to be attacked with feels all over again. Bah. Did you cry while you were writing this? I feel like there's so much emotion done so perfectly, placed in just the right format and at the absolutely perfect (I know how much I've already used that word, but nothing else can describe it) degree, you had to have cried while writing it.
The understanding that George has in regards to the times he's seen his father cry tells so much about his feelings for Angelina. You have no idea how much I love you right now for writing this story with two characters that do survive and end up getting their happily ever after, because I seriously could not handle one of these two dying, haha.
And now you've ended this very moving chapter with quite a hint of mistery. So he has to be Zonko of Zonko's joke shop, right?
Melissa... I have to know what comes next. I think you need to fake sick until chapter 14 is finished ;)
And if you haven't noticed by now... IPhone review ;)Author's Response: Baww!! I'm so happy to see this review. I'm getting ready to take an exam that I'm not nearly ready to take, and this was just the perfect thing to cheer me up. :) There are a lot of emotions in this chapter... nostalgia, grief, self-frustration... that it was very difficult to write. But, I can say that I didn't cry writing it. I was very brave -- I did write everthing from the start of the memorial ceremony onward in one sitting. :P
The comparison between George and Angelina and molly/arthur was something that my brain produced and I just sat back and was like, "huh... where did that even come from?" but I am really proud of it. I think people learn a lot about relationships from their parents in one way or another, and so George relating he and Angelina to his parents is an important step.
Annnd Yes. I can say that Mr. Garfield Zonko is of the Zonko jokeshop family... and that's all I can say right now. :P
I'm hoping to be able to take some time this weekend to work on the next chapter, and with any luck, I'll finish it up. :) (though it's an Ang chapter, so we won't be getting back to George's story line until chapter 15!)
Thank you so much for this review! Report Review
Bah this chapter was so amazing and warm feeling-y, I don't even want to click click to the next!!
I love seeing the trio through Angelina's eyes for some reason, it just really reminds me of what was going on outside Harry's PoV during this. Your ability to tie in small canon details is amazing, I was so excited when she read the DA meeting note!!
Your combination of story telling and imagery intros chapter is absolutely perfect. I love the details you pay to classes and the other students, it really takes away any sort of empty space feeling.
Bah your words are just so beautiful Melissa, the way you create them into people and emotions.. I have to say I really feel like so much of your talent is coming through in this. You build up relationships with such a careful an precise hand, they feel unique and real to the person reading them. You focus on the people involved and alter it to fit them like a glove.
iPhone review! Can you tell loved this chapter? 13 is waiting until after my meeting, I don't need red puffy eyes :PAuthor's Response: Responding to a few reviews as a mini study break...
Ahhh! I may have said this before, but I loved writing this chapter. There is something so homey and coforting about writing within Hogwarts as a setting. :) I tried really hard to keep all of WAT linked integrally with canon, so you compliment means the world to me!
Writing classes and normal every day to day things is really important to me... these characters at this point in the story are /students/ first and foremost. I think sometimes that gets forgotten in FF, so it's somethink I try to pay attention to as the story progresses.
Baww. I'm seriously blushing. Thank you so, so much for all of your support of this story thus far!! I seriously look forward to your reviews and get super excited when I see one. :)
Annnd this may have been your best-written iPhone review yet. Congrats. :P Report Review
I remember you telling me about this and I'm so angry at myself for not getting to it sooner. I managed to read it all night without stopping and I've enjoyed it immensly. It's amazing, you've captured the characters perfectly. The way you write George is breathtaking and so in canon, to how I thought he would be. You're an excellent writer and this chapter was heartbreaking for all the right reasons, it really told me how much was lost on that night of the battle. I adore your take on Angelina too. Just how I imagined her to be. I thank you for writing this ship, it's a personal favourite of mine and you don't nearly see enough of it. I hope you have a great day and thank you for this wonderful story, I shall be sticking around to see how you develop George and Angelina's realtionship from here :)Author's Response: Hey!! Do not worryyy!! I'm just thrilled that you popped in to read this at all, and am even happier that you enjoyed it. It's so great to hear such lovely compliments from somebody who was already a Georgelina shipper!! it means a lot to hear. I hope that if you continue reading it, that you continue enjoying it!! Thank you so much for this review, and sorry this response was such a long time coming.
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So I was having a perfectly enjoyable day until you slayed me with feels. I absolutely love the idea of a stone phoenix monument actually built from pieces of Hogwarts. It would be so painful, so hard-hitting, to look at that and see the names of your loved ones. I'm just imagining how after George looks at that, he'll never be able to get rid of that image; the name will be branded there. Every time from now on that he passes that monument, he won't even have to look for Fred's name. After viewing it once, he'll already know exactly where it is. There is something about this story that makes me ramble insensibly. But needless to say, the emotions were subtle but strong. I got this powerful sense of a young man desperately trying to move forward in his life but there are all these obstacles trying to hold him back, to keep him submerged in his grief. I wish the world would stop trying to delay his progress!! But he also needed that, I think. He needs to break down every now and then so that he can slowly drain it from his system, and Angelina was the ultimate catharsis here. So lovely and strong, a pillar of support even though she didn't say much. All he needed was her presence, and I'm so glad that she was able to make him feel a little bit better. I particularly loved this bit:
Suddenly, George knew why the few times he had seen his dad weep it had been into his mother's shoulder. There was something sacred and secure about being in Angelina's arms - something that made the rest of the world fall away for a moment.
♥ I love that, the resemblance of Angelina and George to Molly and Arthur, and how important it is to have someone to lean into when you're grieving.
The thing that I love the most about your George is that even though life craps on him left, right, and center, he rolls out from under it and keeps walking, keeps trying. He doesn't just sit and wallow for an extended period of time. I feel that is so canon and so important and I'm really, really happy you made him this way. I don't want to read about a George who digs a hole and just sits in it, waiting to die because his brother's gone. That is not the Weasley twin way. Even after something like this flies at him, hitting him right in the heart so hard that it made me feel like I could hardly breathe, I know he'll endure; and I think you confirmed this at the end of the chapter when he propped up Garfield Zonko's card. (Garfield is an awesome name, btw, and I am loving that man's zany characterization! I do hope we see more of him. He seems quite colorful.)
I have so much admiration for George, which of course is directly due to you, which I have even more admiration for, and now I am just spinning around in a circle of feels and I think I need a hug because poor George sometimes forgets that he doesn't have to go at this alone, and I just want to pick him up in one hand and pick up Angelina in the other, like two dolls, and make them marry and have babies so that most of the holes in his life can start to fill back up again.
P.S. I vote Orly for the owl. GEDDIT?? Trollololol.
♥Author's Response: YOU ARE THE ONLY REVIEWER WHO SUGGESTED A NAME FOR THE OWL. ORLY IT IS. :P
I had a really hard time deciding where to the line between effective emotion and melodrama was in this chapter and I think I rewrote Kingsley and McGonagall's speeches about a half a dozen times. You must know how much I respect and admire you as a writer, and so hearing your kind words literally makes me so giddy and I'll take your so-called ramblings any day. (H)
You so /get/ my characterization of George. He's such a vital character -- so full of life and energy -- in canon, that I can't stomach the thought of him rolling over and giving up. Sure, it's very difficult for him to move foward and some days, like this particular on, are almost too much for him, but enter Angelina. I think he's finally starting to truly understand how much she means to him and what an immovable support she is.
Ahhh. You always seem to pick out passages that I'm particularly fond of. I think Molly and Arthur are such a shining example of a good relationship, that their children would have to look up to them as role models.
George is definitely not going to be giving up anytime soon, and you'll def be seeing more of mr zonko.
Gahhh. Sarah. Your reviews always leave me with so many feels -- you don't know how many times I reread them when I need a boost writing the next chapter. Thank you so much for being a wonderful friend.
Well, well, welcome back! I had noticed that this chapter took a minute to come up but I've been patient since I knew that you'd probably wanted to get it just right, everyone does that with a chapter like this one. And may I say that it was so emotional that I nearly burst into tears? The Memorial service was so wonderfully written and the details that you put into the other characters there was brilliant. It felt like something that I would be a part of, as if it were happening and that's very hard to do! I had thought that I would become nothing but a slobbering piece of unfeminine mush by the end of this and somehow, I survived. But not by much! I loved the surreal quality to the service and George's recollections of knowing that Fred was gone was very beautifully written. I always say that I should leave really long reviews for you but I never can, I don't know how everyone else does it! There aren't nearly enough words to describe how well done this is! Argh! Oh, and that little thing with Percy was very unexpected! Are you going to continue on with that or are you just going to leave it hanging between them? I haven't written anything quite like what you have here so bravo for being really brave! Such a touchy subject and not enough toilet paper to stop the tears! I'm rambling right? Okay. Uhm, glad to see Angelina again and her comforting him was too sweet and her support was very realistic and I hope that it continues in the next chapter with George. Though, he has some other things on his mind and I can't wait to see what you do next! Uhm...congrats on all of your nominations and I hope you win a few of those darn Dobby's, you deserve them! I'll be back whenever you update again!
GabbieAuthor's Response: Heyyy. Sorry for the inexcusably long time it's taken me to respond to this review.
Yes, the time between updates has been longer since I started back to school. My current update schedule goal is a chapter/month...
It's so wonderful to hear that you enjoyed the Memorial service even if it did render you an emotional mess. :P It sort of makes me happy to hear that! Not that you were upset, but that my writing evoked such emotions in you. As for the bit with Percy, I sort of invisioned it as something that's been eating him up and in the emotional stress of the memorial surface, it just sort of came out. I dont' think I'll be picking that back up, especially with the design of the timeline. The next George chapter takes place in july... so minor plot points are sometimes lost for the sake of the overall structure, if that makes sense.
Angelina is very very good for George, and it's about time he starts realizing that. ;)
thank you so much for your review and for all of your amazing support of this story. You are awesome-sauce. Report Review
I love this story and especially this chapter. It so beautifully describes the emotions that would have been present on such a somber occasion. It is gratifying to see Angelina's and George's relationship deepening and my curiosity is peaked with the appearance of Mr. Zonko. I see an acquisition/expansion in George's future!! And...the best thing about this chapter is finding out I am only half way through the story! Love it! Thank you!Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review!! This chapter was really challenging to write b/c I was really nervous about depicting the emotions well. It's wonderful to hear that you liked how I did it. Annd you will def be seeing more of Mr Zonko.
Thank you again, and I hope you continue enjoying the story. :) Report Review
My favourite bits from this chapter included the first line - "A pitiless wind whipped through the grey-green mist..." as it really set the scene. Plus, Fred's line about "if you're going to be reprimanded, you may as well have your entire body over the line.." was really funny and well put! I also loved Flitwick's reaction to the "show that's about to happen stage left." Brilliant, haha. I can't wait for the next chapter! :)Author's Response: Hey there!! Thank you so much for this review! I love to read which lines readers enjoyed. :) I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter, and I hope you continue to do so! Report Review
Charlie is such a perfect piece of wonderful amazing man. Can you make him real and give him to me for my birthday (couch - Nov 20th - couch)!
Anyway, I loved his total manly man attitude, he spend his life around dragons, and certainly doesn't have to watch his language there! So it just felt very realistic to me. And I'm in love with him in a non creepy I know he's a fictional character type of way.
Molly's reaction is so priceless! I really wanted to be there and listen to her lecture the (not so) grown men!
Fred and George's first birthday alone :(. Cry. Did you just hear my heart shatter?! Funny thing - I am totally imagining George laying in bed looking up when he says Happy Birthday Fred, then in my head George was looking down from Cliodna's Clock in Run, telling him Happy Birthday too. Clearly your story and Sarah's have merged in my brain. Haha!
Kiss!!! Eeek Squee Feel!!! A simple, sweet, let's not go crazy and start picking out China patterns but we care about each other and this feels right, kiss.
I am trying to hard to avoid this story because I'll be caught up oh so soon ;(. I miss you and with Vet school didn't take away your precious free time!Author's Response: Charlieee. You know my feelings about him, so I'll just leave that unsaid. :P Also, belated happy birthday. I'd have tried to send him to you, but the dragons needed him.
Molly is one of my favorite canon characters and fictional mothers ever. I really enjoy any chance I get to include her in this story, even if only briefly. I knowww. George shouldn't be allowed to have birthdays without Fred, JKR, whyyy? Omg. slay me with that image of Fred and the ties to Run and ermahgerd. So sad.
Annd yes. They finally kissed... about time, right? I'm glad you thought the scene was well written given the context.
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I really liked this chapter. We get to know more about Angelina here. Can't wait to see what happens next. I like you're switching perspectives from George and Angelina. :DAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for this review!! I'm very glad you're enjoying this story. :) Report Review
i never read any George and Angelina stories before. So i am glad i am stumbled across this somehow. I liked how you wrote about George. It was not completely heart breaking. Yet, sad in a very beautiful way. I would love to see how you develop this story.Author's Response: I'm vrey glad you stumbled upon it too! But I'm even more glad that you enjoyed reading it. Thank you so much for taking the time to leave me a review. :) I really appreciate it. Report Review
I noticed this story a while ago and favorited it immediately. I have to admit I thought it would take me a long time reading all the chapters, because my attention span is very hamster-like. And here I am, few hours later, having read this in one go! I'm sorry I didn't leave a review for every chapter, sometimes I was just way too excited to read more.
This chapter was entertaining and funny and it made me feel downright nostalgic about OotP. I like how you include all these events from Angelina's point of view. The Charms lesson with the 'hem hem' beast was spectacular.
Alicia totally cracks me up by the way. And yes, I don't know what else to say. This story is great and you are an amazing author. Everything comes so wonderfully natural here, every emotion and action and the switching timelines are brilliant. I thought at first I wouldn't be as interested in Angelina's parts, but I find that I reall am. So yeah, I'll be waiting for an update eagerly and good luck with the next chapter. You've found a big fan in me. Finally I have THE Georgelina in my life.
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