Hi again! I can't even begin to tell you how much I enjoyed this chapter. First off, it was wonderfully written, and you put in your original creative ideas that complimented the Hogwarts' world so well. From the very beginning when you described the tedium of studying for NEWTS, your descriptions were so tangible - I loved the way you described the castle being so cold that students wanted to keep their hands in their robes. And the part about measuring Asphodel seeming like blah blah to the minds of students - how perfect! Hmm, somehow it shows that you're no stranger to long hours of studying yourself!!! You described it perfectly! And all of the potion descriptions,including the harmful effects of Dittany were so creative. It was delightful to read.
The humorous banter between the friends was spot on. Your characters are always 'in character' - it's as if they flowed straight out of the original books. The scene with George coming into the library - you got his character down so well with his humorous little remarks. He was perfect. And your description of the romantic thoughts going through Angelina's mind really drew me in. I'm not even a lover of romance stories, but this was good! I was completely absorbed.
Then the description of when they went through the secret passage was so vivid and well-done that I was totally captivated with it. And then it only got better! I loved the scene when George told Angelina about the shop and gave her that little glass gift. It teased the reader the entire time, wondering what George had to tell her. It sort of mirrored an impending marriage proposal, even though I really didn't think you were leading to that and would have been really surprised if you had. But it was perfect, because the shop WAS a big event in George's life. I was a little surprised that Angelina wasn't a little more forthright in voicing her true feelings for George, but I also think it made it a better chapter for her to discourage him because it created a small setback that the couple will have to overcome - and every good romance story needs that. It just makes me eager for the story to continue! An absolutely FANTASTIC chapter!Author's Response: Hello!!
I hope that you had a merry christmas! I'm so glad that you enjoyed this chapter and thought it was well written -- it hadn't been beta'd at the time you read it, so I was a tad nervous about it being unpolished. Writing Angelina's stresses over studying was definitely the scene I've been able to most closely identify with her -- long hours of studying is sort of my middle name. :P It's so nice to hear that you enjoyed the passages from the potion's text. I quite enjoyed writing that.
I know that technically, this story is a romance, and I may be egotistical in saying so, but I'd like to think that this story isn't just a romance story -- it's a story of a young girl and her experiences being a teenager and student in an increasingly dangerous world and it's the story of a man trying to overcome his grief and put his life back together. I sort of feel like the romance stems from these stories.
!! I had a lot of fun writing the scene when they were sneaking out of the castle, and I'm glad that you enjoyed it. WWW is one of the most important thing in George's life after his family, so I think it was only natural for him to want to share it with Angelina, the girl he fancies.
Ahh. Yes -- Angelina is a rather forthright sort of character, but I think that in her logical mind, the two of them moving on from Hogwarts was enough of an excuse to not be involved in a relationship. He is one of her better friends and I think that she was sort of scared of putting that friendship at risk.
So glad you enjoyed this chapter!! Can't wait to see what you think of the next chapter. :) Thank you for all of your support. Report Review
Oh my god, Mel, I don't know if I want to shun you or hug you. I've been sitting here yelling at the screen throughout the entire chapter, "Kiss! Snog! Declare feelings! Mature actions!" With every new scene, I grew more and more excited and confident that a kiss would happen. George taking her somewhere mysterious at night? Alicia's well-placed remark about wimping out on potential relationships simply because the familiar is so, well, familiar? ALL VERY PROMISING EVENTS. Like, you should have seen me. On the edge of my seat, smiling triumphantly, fully expecting only the happiest of instances. By the time they were sitting in the dusty Wheezes shop and George was giving her "the look", I was already skimming down the page to see that she was SNOGGING GEORGE WEASLEY and I did several fist-pumps and mental I-told-you-so's. All was right with the world.
AND THEN YOU STICK A PIN IN IT AND DEFLATE ALL OF MY JOY.
I am making faces at you right now. Let me describe these faces. They are of me looking away from you with the air that I know you are looking at me but I am decidedly ignoring you because I am letting you feel the full effect of my cold shoulder. Let it be cold. Let it be very cold. I hope my shoulder snows all over you.
WHYYY, ANGELINA. WHYYY. WHY MUST YOU BE SO INFURIATINGLY RATIONAL AND OVER-THINKING. SHUT YOUR BRAIN OFF FOR TWO SECONDS AND ENJOY YOURSELF, YOU'RE ALLOWED TO. She made George sad and skdjfskdj and I know this means that in the Angelina chapters, at least, things are going to get worse in their relationship even as they simultaneously get better (THEY'D BETTER GET BETTER) in George chapters.
I DON'T KNOW WHAT TO DO WITH MYSELF. YOU SMASHED ALL OF MY GOOD FEELINGS.
And now George is going to leave Hogwarts thinking that Angelina only wants to be friends, and Angelina will also be thinking she only wants to be friends BECAUSE SHE IS A WIMP AND NEEDS SOMEONE TO POUR SOME COLD WATER OVER HER, and just for this I hope that her N.E.W.T.s are very hard. -_-
Despite my intense frustration at this moment, I do have a few favorite lines and will have to overlook my despair for a moment to share them:
"If your face is any indication of how good that book is, I'm even more glad than usual that I dropped potions."
- Stop writing George so perfectly canon. Stop making him say the perfect things that are always funny and good-humored and wonderful because it makes my ears steam when Angelina doesn't throw herself at him like a spider monkey and never let go because let's face it, anyone else would be doing that.
♥ George ♥
"Ah, mum's the word, lo -"
- WAS HE GOING TO SAY LOVE. HE WAS GOING TO, WASN'T HE. TELL ME. TELL ME NOW. I KNOW THAT'S WHAT HE WAS GOING TO SAY. DON'T LIE AND TELL ME OTHERWISE, WE ALL KNOW HE WASN'T REALLY SAYING 'LOOK'.
I'm just such an asset to have on staff - people say it's because of my big heart. Literally, ask any healer at St Mungos - they all know me by name. My heart is actually almost twice the size it's supposed to be. It's practically a miracle I'm still alive."
- loool, Libby, you delusional soul. And your heart that is twice the normal size. Lee, what are you doing with her. ALSO I REMEMBERED when you mentioned earlier in the chapter when Indira got a face full of porridge that she is Libby's friend. LIBBY IS GOING TO BE ONE UNHAPPY WOMAN IN THE FUTURE.
Loved this chapter but also still want to shun you. I am torn. As are my feelings.Author's Response: I vote for the hugs. :D shunning is so m33n.
Ahaha. I cackled like the witch from wizard of oz when I first read this review, and very nearly did again now, responding to it. Angelina is very very frustrating and I just want to mush them together and let them get married and have babies and go skipping down the road together holding hands or riding a tandem bicycle or something, but alas... plot notes. :P
Angelina is infuriatingly logical sometimes, but I also think she's scared -- George is one of his best friends; putting herself out there, having a relationship with him puts that friendship at risk. What if it falls apart? Could they go back to being friends? Gahh. At least we know things get better in the George timeline, right? :)
George is da bomb, tru storeh. I'm just so thrilled every time you praise my characterization of him -- you write the Weasley twins so, so well and lskjfowaie. It means a lot.
Libby. That girl is so much fun to write. As I get closer to finishin up this story, I'm scrambling to find scenes I can shove her into just for lulz.
Thank you so much sarah. You are the bestest and I hope you like the next chapter and don't want to shun me after it. ;) Report Review
Melissa. Me-freaking-lissa. You and your absolutely uncalled for stress about this chapter. This is AMAZING. I'm green. I'm so jealous green that i'm surprised my letters aren't green. This is by far my favorite chapter so far. I'm even iPhone reviewing because I can't handle not reviewing right away and you know how much I hate iPhone reviewing!!
Feels. I'm covered in them. Sad frustrated feels about it being so close to the end of the year, and I know just how she feels and I love how well you translated your own frustration of studying into her. Feels wishing she would have told George then all over again, although these feels were the break my heart kind, when they were joking about seeing her all the time and probably ending up in her sofa because.because.because Fred never gets that and it crushed my heart. He knew for so long how much George fancies Angelina and he deserved so much to be apart of their future life together and be Angelina's brother in law and stand by George when he married her and gah. I'm going to start sobbing. You are a mean (amazing) girl and just play with my heart strings like they are your own little toys!!
Then! The kiss! And Angelina! I wanted to slap her. You'll be done with school shortly and even if you end up far away from George you are a stinking witch! Grab some powder and floo over to him, you silly girl!! Scary cat. Even though I'm so different from her in terms of jumping in head first without thinking of repercussions, I do understand her reasons. Frustrating as they may be. I kind of want to pull one of her braids and maybe it will yank some sense into her.
Okay. I'm a messy pool of WAT feels and now I'm going to leave my office and get a coffee, and stop at michaels and get a new Christmas wreath just to cheer myself up. Oh and I might go crazy if I don't get the next two chapters soon. Please tell me your entire Christmas break will be spent chained to your computer? ;)
Love your gorgeous writing to itty bitty pieces.Author's Response: Jamieee. I'd type the little heart here, but I'm technologically challenged and don't know how to. So, use your imagination.
aha! I love that you knew where Angelina's frustrations with studying came from. can't tell I was drowning in my own studies at the time at all, can you?? :P alkdjfowiea. Gah. You're my only reviewer that pointed out Fred's comment about showing up on their sofa and how he never has the chance for that to come to pass. Now I'm sad all over again.
Aha. I knowww. Angelina is a little bit infuriating. But then again, logic usually is. I find it interesting that you call her a scaredy cat because that's something I intended to get across. Of course she says she turns George down b/c they're both moving on with their lives and what now, but I think on a subconcious level that even she isn't aware of, she's afraid of rejection or losing his friendship.
I hope you had a wonderful christmas and tat you enjoy the next WAT chapter!! Thank you so much for all of your support so far.
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I'm back, just like I said I'd be! Surprised? I hope so because I'm sort of fangirling all over the place. Anyway, so we're back with Angelina again! Sometimes I get so wrapped up in my love for George, I mean, er, the fantastic writing when we get back to George (Right?) that I sometimes put her from my mind. Not because I don't like her or anything but because I sort of you know, have this huge crush and everything and Angie's not my type.
I really liked the beginning of this chapter, it really gave me a feel of how the kids were anticipating/dreading their graduation from Hogwarts. The uncertainty that you've weaved in with all of the characters was really something that I could relate too. Who hasn't felt that way at some point? You're never too sure what might or might not happen and I think Angelina's feelings about it were very well written. Also, I'm not sure why but Alicia's line about things feeling safe and comfortable with a relationship struck a chord in me. I've heard something similar from friends myself so I sort of had to sit back and think about it, since it sort of relates to alot of various things. The fact that Angelina started to think about George in that same way, despite how she obviously feels about him made me sort of uneasy. I had a feeling that the second half when she met him for that little adventure wouldn't go as smoothly as I, as a fangirl, would have liked.
And it didn't! D':
Argh, I thought, for some reason that George would be the one denying his feelings for Angie, not the other way around. I thought that he'd say something along the lines of just being excited and happy for he and Fred (Really liked how he showed her the joke shop by the way) but it was Angie!
It was a wonderfully written play on emotions too and I could practically feel how awkward it was after Angie put him off. Poor George! Poor me!!!
Anyway, I do like that you've started making a contrast between the chapters. George's feelings are brighter while Angelina's are darkening! I thought it was a very interesting way to move the story forward and I can't wait for more! So, I'll be back, fangirling and squealing like the weirdo I am so look forward to that (?)
GabbieAuthor's Response: Gabbie &hugs.
I'm always surprised and pleased to see your reviews for this story. :) You were my very first WAT fan that I didn't know all that well (at least when you first started reading it), and for that you deserve a golden star or a enormous box of chocolates. I am still very grateful and excited when I log in and see a review from you.
The frustrations my characters were feeling in their regards to studying came almost directly from my own feelings going into finals season in school. The adventure was fun to write -- it wasn't in my original notes for the chapter, and I'm not sure where the idea came from, but I'm glad it worked out as it did.
Huh, it's interesting that you thought George would be the one to deny his feelings. That boy is crazy about her -- we just don't get the oppurtunity to see his thoughts in the Hogwarts era chapters. :P
Thank you as always for your reviews. I hope you enjoy the next chapter. :)
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Oh I also forgot to add in regards to your AN, I recently bought an owl plush puppet and named it Mr. Nathaniel Hoothorne. Although I doubt wizards are familiar with this guy, so never mind. :D
This was another great chapter about Angelina and it built her character so nicely. Back here, she's this normal girl just living her life, having the usual problems with her own spin on it when suddenly very slowly war starts to seep in and she starts to realize it. You've thought this mixed chronology perfectly. It provides such a unique pace and flow to the story. I want to know what happens in the future just as I want to know what happened in the past.
I really liked the DA meeting from Angelina's point of view. I should read OotP again because it brought memories of the book really swiftly. :) Lora and her Headgrilness is so much fun, and all the verbal exchanges with Alicia crack me up! It was nice and soothing to read a sort of lighter chapter like this after the previous emotion-packed one (although I really, really loved it). I mean, sure, the ending was darker and tainted with the horrible reality, but the rest of it just made me smile and sigh because it was so real-life all of it. And then some moments, like George holding Angelina by the shoulders. I melted into a puddle and had a hard time coming back from it. It was so fleeting and random and so, so lovely. Then Angelina's sudden decision and determination to tell George about her feelings! That takes some guts at that age, and I was looking forward to their meeting. I admit I completely forgot about the attack on Mr. Weasley, so my emotions were running very similarly with Angelina. I was upset George didn't show up (although I sensed he didn't do it on purpose) and then when they mentioned Arthur I just went week in the knees when I remembered all the worry of that scene. I'm not usually into female fanfic characters, but I simply adore your Angelina. She's the kind of girl I find myself desperately rooting for.
Another fantastic chapter, dear! :) Report Review
I've done the mistake of printing out this chapter and reading it in the library at uni today. I looked kind of awkward tearing up in the corner over a piece of paper but what the heck, I couldn't do otherwise because this was so packed with real, raw emotion. Everything about it, really. Just from the beginning when George arrives I felt my skin prickling, because I knew what was about to happen. It was poignant and significant in every new sentence. Your words carried the flow of the entire chapter perfectly, through many emotional turbulences. There's not only George's grief, but the reader's grief as well. It's not easy getting something like that across. What I most love about this story and why I cam back to it is how it affects and touches me as a reader and a person, so intensely that I feel like I'm a part of the story. It's amazing and I love being so immersed in some stories, although it's tough sometimes because my every fiber just wants to cry in moments like this.
I thought I'd die when George entered the Hog's Head. How desolate it looked, and sad, only a fraction of the Order sitting there. It could be felt around everyone, from Molly to Ron, and it broke my heart seeing them like that. And there truly wasn't only the sadness after Fred, but also Remus and Tonks, which later resonated even stronger during the ceremonial.
I loved how George realized he wanted and needed some of his mother's fussing. They both provided comfort to each other that way, and it truly warmed my heart. I can hardly find the words for the ceremonial. I don't think you could've done it better. It's perfect. It's tragic, but has a sense of uplifting as well. Still, I felt smothered by the sadness of hearing Kingsley speak, and then Minerva. By the way, having George's thoughts being broken up by Kingsley's voice during the battle was a nice touch. Then the descriptions, crushingly beautiful, really! The way you described the castle and the entire atmosphere was just brilliant. I don't get it how your words can affect me this much!
I was so glad Angelina went after George. I expected her to, but I still felt relieved when she did, and even more so when he didn't push her away. They hardly said anything, but the support between them was almost tangible. Angelina is such an amazing woman. What I love about her is that she understands him and doesn't push him in any way.
I really, really just love this story. Report Review
Yay! An update! I hate how infrequently I leave you a review, to be honest I'm not sure if I ever have, but I follow your fic intensely and am always waiting for an update. I love this piece so much. I think you've nailed everything on the head, from the characters, to the plot, to the structuring (which I absolutely love), and keeping it canon. I admire you for this piece immensely. I absolutely love it, so please do not ever stop!
Author's Response: A review is a review and for that I am grateful!! I'm bowled over that you follow the fic and wait for new updates -- it's really surreal hearing that. I'm so so glad that you enjoy this story and this chapter. The structure was something I had been keen to try well before it even occurred to me to write about George and Angelina, so I'm glad it ended up suiting the story so well.
Thank you, and I hope you continue to enjoy it!! Report Review
This was a lovely chapter -- yes, yes, despite Angelina rejecting George.
I love the way you write, it's so beautiful. This was my favourite part:
Angelina freed a small, Snitch-sized chunk of glass from its makeshift wrappings and couldn't help but gasp. Its surface was smooth and glossy, but it had a depth that seemed to continue on far beyond the limits of its size. Colours and textures moved and shifted within it creating a new palette in rhythm with her breath.
You are so amazingly talented, I don't know what to say. Wow. Just wow.
I'll be around.
10/10 :)Author's Response: Hey again! The thing with having procrastinated the last chapters review responses is that now you get two responses from me on the same day! Thank you so much for your compliments -- I think I may be blushing. That passage, now that I'm rereading it, is a bit odd for the tone and style of this story and is much more like something I'd expect to write in my Luna-centric novella, First Star to the Right. Regardless, I'm very glad you enjoyed this chapter and thank you for taking the time to leave a review. Report Review
Yay! A new chapter! I'm glad you found time to write - amazed really that you found time while doing veterinary study. Anyway, I really enjoyed reading it. The poker game with all the humorous banter was great. All the dialogue was in character. And I loved the bit about needing a cigar to play even if you never light it. And the names you gave the cards, especially Supreme Mugwump, had me chuckling. Very fitting and creative.
The part with Zonko and his personal quirks was also well done, including the bird. The way you portrayed him as eccentric fit so well into the story - sort of like Albus being eccentric and having Fawkes - except Zonko at the opposite end of the spectrum with jokes. I enjoyed all of it.
And the part with George and Angelina - it was nice to see them together being affectionate without any reservations in private - I especially liked the part where he slid her off the table. I think that would have been George's style, very bold. Yet fitting how you portrayed George reluctant to openly admit to his other friends how much he's involved with her. Which I think would be just like George to play it cool around his friends, who probably WOULD love to tease him to death about it.
I've found this story absolutely delightful ever since I started reading it, and I voted it for a Dobby. Finishing a novel-length story is a big commitment, but keep writing whenever you find the time, and I hope you never lose your muse! And good luck with your vet studies as well. Hagrid would be proud of you!Author's Response: Hello! I'm so sorry about how long it's taken me to respond to this reveiw. I could blame my veterinary courses, but instead, I'll just apologize. You've been such a support since you first began reading this story, and I really appreciate your dedication to the story -- your reviews really bring a huge grin to my face!
The whole guys' night sort of began as a spur of the moment decision, but as soon as it was made, I knew I was going to write about magical poker. Thankfully, my friend and her boyfriend were able to teach me the basics of the game!! Having only learned it as I was writing it, it is a relief to hear that it was well done /and/ entertaining. :) (though I completely attribute the entertaining bit to Lee -- that boy has a way of stealing the show no matter what scene he's in).
Zonko is basically just my guilty pleasure character. It's just so much fun to have a character that can do or say anything and have it be completely normal! That is such a cool analogy... I am flattered (and my mind is sort of blown).
Annd georgelina. I am such a fail at writing physically romantic scenes, yet here I am 70K words into a romance. I'm always very suspicious of these scenes and cobbsquint them like crazy to try and make sure they don't sound too purple or forced or ridiculous, not to mention in character.
Baww. Again, you're just too sweet. I'm literally grinning from ear to ear over your hagrid compliment. thank you! Report Review
I told you that I would be back and I'm really sorry that I haven't given you a proper review. Real life came in the form of me being busy with military stuff and I've been trying not to cry as my laptop is still, sadly, deceased.
What a nice way to start this chapter. Its always great coming back to George (As you know, I'm such a fangirl where he's concerned) and I really enjoyed the lightness of the poker game. Lee was hilarious and I it was a pleasant surprise to see a slightly more mature Ron there too! The passage of time is nice and I got the sense that he and Angie are slowly molding into one another in a really nice way. Does that make sense? I hope that didn't sound perverted...
What's really great I think is that George is slowly pushing himself towards the rest of his life and really going for what makes him happy. With Mr. Zonko of course and his relationships, I'm really happy to see that he's moving forward. If only a little and I'm happy that you've put in some of his sadness for Fred, which is something that you could never get over of course.
Now, the second half!
Talk about a girl blushing over here! See how mature I am? Hahaha. While I did really like that Angie and George are getting into the habit of being together and snogging on desks and such, its really nice to see their relationship developing. Its great that he sees her as someone so important in his life and her determination to be with him is just...perfection. Sigh. What's funny but not-so-funny I guess is the fact that we had sort of a mind meld! I sort of had a fangirl moment myself because, in my Georgelina, George actually expands the shop sort of in the same way! Hahah. My face was sort of embarrassing to be honest. Anyhoo, can't wait for more of this and I hope everything goes well for you with school and congrats for all the votes you got for the Dobby's! :D
Hope to see you on the forums too!
Much love of course,
GabbieAuthor's Response: Heyy! I never doubted that you'd be back ;) seriously, though... your enthusiasm rocks and means a lot to me.
I always feel like I can pick whether I enjoy writing George chapters or Angelina chapters more, but truthfully, I like different facets of both of them equally well. I don't know if you've noticed or not (I'm not even sure how evident it is in the story just yet... but perhaps after you read the next chapter) but George's chapters are slowly lightening insofar as mood and his general demeanor towards life. But because it's a cyclical story I'm hoping to balance out the lightening of his chapters with a gradual darkening of Angelina's -- afterall, they will be graduating and going out into a world on the brink of war.
anywho... not sure where that tangent came from, but I'm glad you liked the poker game!! It was a lot of fun to write. Lee is the bomb, end of story and sort of carried that scene. :) Ron... I really love his character, so any chance I get to include him is a good one.
Honestly, I don't think I could make it through a george chapter without a mention of fred -- he was too big a part of his life not to. However, I do hope that as george's chapters have progressed that the context in which fred appears is progressing as George learns to accept and ultimately live with his grief.
And Georgelina scene. Gah. I really dread writing any sort of physical romance (why exactly I set out to write a romance novel is beyond me). You know how sometimes you read a romantic scene and it just feels forced and awkward -- that is my biggest fear with these scenes. I feel like I'm intruding, but am trying not to intrude... and hoping that it all comes out sounding legit. lolol. Anyway, I'm glad that you enjoyed their scene and that it wasn't too awful.
Yayy for Georgelina shippers. We, in my most humble opinion, rock. :) Thank you so much for your review and all your enthusiasm and support. Report Review
This was an absolutely adorable chapter. Although I love all of this story, I have to say I especially like the Angelina chapters. They're just so entertaining to read.
George is so bashful around Angelina! So unlike him, yet so cute. He should be more confident, he's George Weasley after all! Haha, I'm excited to see what happens between them in their Hogwarts years. I like all the little subtle parallels you're including between 1994 and 1998, like how they danced together in both and sat next to each outside in both. I may be reading into it too much but I'm going to assume it's intentional?
Excited to read more, as always! :)
Bri, xxAuthor's Response: I've always wanted to write a Ball chapter -- so how better to do so than with the yule ball?? Angelina's chapters are fun ones -- there's something refreshing about seeing the cast of characters so young and carefree.
Yesss. George may be all boasts and brags and jokes and pranks, but around the girl he fancies he certainly clams up quickly. Annnd very good!! I did intentionally include those details to link the chapters. I will admit that not every pair of chapters has links like that, but a lot of them do! You'll have to keep your eyes peeled.
Thank you again for your reviews and I hope to hear from you again, I really do appreciate it and value your opinion. :) Report Review
This was a sweet chapter. I like seeing that George is steadily getting better, no matter how slow that process may be. He deserves to be happy! I do notice, however, that the "George" chapters seem a bit slower than the "Angelina" chapters. I do realize that that may be due to the mood of the chapters and how he's still quite depressed, though, so it doesn't bother me all that much.
I thought the bit about Fred's name being on the envelope was so sad. :( There's always going to be unexpected reminders lying around like that for George, I just hope one day they'll make him smile instead! I also appreciated the little flashback to Hogwarts and Canary Creams, I thought that was artfully done! I love seeing writers building off things that actually happened in the books, but weren't gone into a lot of depth about.
Finally, a few questions. First off, is icebox another word for refrigerator? I'm assuming so, I've just never heard that term before so I'm curious. Also, I forgot to mention this in my review of chapter one, but I believe you said something about Fred having died two months previous? Fred died on May 8, and I see that chapter is set in August, so his death would've been about three months prior. Just thought I'd point that out in case you didn't know!
I'm really liking this story :) Keep up the good work!
Bri, xxAuthor's Response: Ah, yes. George's chapters do start out a bit slower than Angelina's do. I think it has a lot to do with the mood of the chapter and where George is at emotionally in dealing with his grief over Fred's death. As he learns to deal with it and to accept it and live with it, I'm sure you'll find that they pick up. :)
Ah! I nearly forgot about the envelope thing -- that is really sad, isn't it? :( Poor George. I big goal of mine with this story is to tie it to what little twin canon we do know so that it could for all intents and purposes be an extension of the stories we already know.
And to answer your questions, yes... an icebox is another term for refridgerator -- they were used before the advent of electricity to keep perishables from spoiling. With being a wizard from a pureblood family living in diagon alley, I didn't think it likely that George has electricity or an actual refridgerator in his flat. And Fred actually died on May 2... when the battle of hogwarts took place. the two months mentioned here refers to the two months since George left the burrow to return to his flat. After fred's death he stayed at the burrow until mid-july and then returned to his flat in diagon alley.
I'm glad you're enjoying this story! I know I'm enjoying your reviews. thank you so much!! Report Review
The more I read this, the more I like it! You have a lovely writing style. It flows really well and your characterization of everyone is perfect. No one seems out of character, which is a real accomplishment!
I liked the bit about Lora and her boyfriend. Michael the Muggle, haha. It has a nice ring to it. :)
I also really like how apparently this story will be switching perspectives AND times! It's very intriguing and makes the story so much more interesting to me now. I'm not sure what the purpose of jumping back and forth from the past to the present is, but I'll certainly be reading on to find out!
Lovely writing, keep it up!
Bri, xxAuthor's Response: Baww. Thank you so much! I think I may be blushing right now. I'm a huge fan of canon and of characters in general, so it is very important to me to create realistic characters that coincide with how they are portrayed in canon.
Michael the Muggle was meant to be a quick, one time joke... but as you continue reading I'm sure you'll notice that the nickname sort of stuck. :P
I had wanted to write a cyclical timeline story for a while before I ever attached that story format to my idea for this story. Basically, Angelina's timeline will run from here up until Fred's death whild George's will extend from Fred's death onward. Hopefully, when it's all said and done, angelina's last chapter will flow smoothly into George's first chapter. :)
Thank you again for your review! Report Review
This seems really interesting so far. :) I've always loved stories centering around the Weasley twins, as they've always been included in my all-time favorite characters, so I'll definitely be continuing on to read more! I also particularly love stories that are Post-Hogwarts, focusing on the aftermath and how George coped with Fred's death. I can't wait to see where you take this.
One thing I particularly liked--the bit with Ron at the beginning. I like how you portrayed him as a caring brother, reaching out to try and see how George is doing. I feel like a lot of fan fiction writers portray Ron as a bumbling idiot with no tact or common sense, when in fact I think he's very kind and intelligent, especially when it comes to his family and friends. Thanks for portraying him in a different light!
I'll definitely be reading and reviewing more of this. Perhaps not today, but hopefully tomorrow! Lovely writing.
Bri, xxAuthor's Response: Hello!!
Welcome to the story and thank you for taking time to review!! It really does mean a lot to me. I feel like loads of people love the Weasley twins, but not many people write them. Post Hogwarts is my favorite era to write and to read, so yay!!
Ron has always been one of my favorite characters, so any chance I get to portray him as the kind, loyal character that he is in canon, I will. I'm very glad that you noticed and appreciated it!
Thank you again for your review! Report Review
I love this story! Keep it up :)Author's Response: Thank you so much! I appreciate your reviews. Report Review
THIS STORY. ♥
Lee was perfect. You know just as much as I do how little face time he gets in fanfiction, so it's lovely to see him front and center in this chapter with his unlit cigar, doling out cards. You wrote their boys night magnificently, which is important to include in a story that half-centers on a young man; it could not have been a simple feat for you and I admire your ability to get inside a bunch of male heads so seemingly effortlessly. Ron whining about his nagging mum, but reluctant to move out because he would have to cook for himself, made me laugh. Geoffrey was a nice addition, too. But you continue to make George one of my favorite fanfiction characters ever because of the way you write him - part canon perfection and part Melissa's-canon, because you've evolved him and made him even better. It will be impossible for me to go back to the actual books without thinking of this story: Marlow the macaw when Zonko is mentioned, Indira when Lee is mentioned, and George getting this deal from Zonko and chewing it over, not jumping in all the way like Fred might have. I like that he's taking his time to consider it thoroughly before signing up, because that displays how he's matured, how serious he is about his business. Even in a business about jokes! It's seriously brilliant. It's exactly as he should be.
The occasional feels about Fred hit me right in the gut, I will have you know. They were well-timed and just fleeting enough to be a nod to his honor but not so long that it would bog George down. I can't imagine having to walk that tightrope but you do it wonderfully. It's the perfect balance.
Also, I really appreciate your details about the shop. It would be so easy to just focus on George/Angelina but this story is all-encompassing; you include details about everything, which makes it so much easier to feel like I'm there. Your inclusion of the interns and their various jobs, and the merchandise and money and paperwork and everything, is so neat and organized and realistic. I just love those details. You remind us that running a business is rewarding but it needs a lot of maintenance to continue being a well-oiled machine. George's personality is so compatible with this lifestyle, which becomes increasingly evident due to your excellent characterization of him. And the slow-burning evolution of his relationship with Angelina is like the cherry on top. You write it so well that I can't tell when they stopped becoming just friends and started blossoming into this couple. I love it.
I have nothing but praise for this story.
♥Author's Response: SARAH. THIS REVIEW â¥
So as per usual, I've save answering your review until last of the group I'm working on. I don't know why, (probably b/c you're amazesauce) but I always get all babbly and nonsensical when I read your reviews (more so than usual). So, bare with me. :)
Lee â¥ I really adore him, I don't know if you can tell... but I sort of based the entire first scene off of an image in my mind of him chewing on a cigar dealing playing cards. (that scene didn't even exist in my outline! craziness) It was sort of fun to be inside a bunch of guys heads for a while and to imagine what they did and said when no lady-folk were around. Mr Zonko is cray cray for shizzle, but so, so much fun to write. It's sort of liberating to have a character that can do or say anything without a real, motivating reason to do so. Annnd Fred. :( I will never forgive JKR. neva eva, bitter 5eva... but hopefully it's evident how the mentions of Fred have changed in context as George goes through the healing process.
Gahhh. How do I even respond to some of the things you say!!? The fact alone that you'll take a piece of this world with you to the canon books like blows my mind. My heart is melting and is on the floor and I am ded. That literally may be the kindest compliment that I've ever been paid.
Sarah, you're seriously one of my favorite authors on HPFF and I can't even begin to tell you how much your kindness and enthusiasm towards this story means to me. Report Review
I've been looking for a story exactly like this for ages and yours is just perfection.
My first favourite!Author's Response: I recognize you from the forums!! Thank you so much!! I'm flattered by your favorite and appreciate the review. Report Review
Rawr! Finally! RL tried to keep my away from With All Things. ;).
You have so many awesome elements going on in this chapter! The humorous tone of the poker game.. boyish teasing, brotherly jokes, but.. but. :(. Well, you know. He wasn't there and he should have been. But I love the way we're seeing George strengthen. he doesn't fight against his own pain when it comes to the fact that he had his twin so brutally ripped from him, but this time he lets himself feel it. Feel the tickle in his throat. I loved it.
The scene with the interns. It was all just so perfect. I love the fact that you're showing growth for the shop, and you don't ignore the fact that the shop is a huge part of this. You don't just mention it every so often, but you make sure a lot of the story takes place there. Because that shop is George and Fred, but now it's just George.. and that's honestly heart breaking. It means so much to him.. it's those kinds of thing that make this story so amazing and unique. (True fact, I just sounded unique out as -- U/Ni/Cue)
Anyway. You're really showing how much work this shop takes, and how, despite it being a massive passion, it isn't all fun and games.
Then during that, you're building us up for even more! Mr. Zonko!! Finally! You made me wait for so long!! I think George's initial skepticism was very smart and well done, and then when he tells Angelina!!! He wants her opinion! He wants her to know, because they're in this together and WHAT THE HECK. You've melted my heart. Melted it. I'm so angry at Vet School, because I know it will be a bit before you can find the free time to write more.. but I will be constantly chipping away at you, just so you know. I can't wait until this is finished so I can start it back over and read it from chapter 1 until the end. And Bah. You know how in love with your writing I am, m'dear. You give me such amazing, perfect details topped off with even better (if possible) characters.
I absolutely loved this chapter. And! For having been taught about poker and not played it, you did an awesome job there!!! I enjoy poker quite a bit, and felt like I was at the table in the game with them! Impressive!
Okay. I have to go be a productive member of society. Boo.
♥Author's Response: Oh my goodness, Jami... I'm so sorry it's taken me so long to respond to this. No excuses -- this is such an awesome, well thought out review too!! I really, really appreciate it.
I had a lot of fun writing the guys night -- it was really entertaining to try and think about what a group of dudes does for fun when their women aren't around. :P Annd boo. I know. Poor, poor Fred. :( :( :(
It's really important to me to continue to make this story about George and Angelina as individuals outside of their relationship with one another. WWW is a huge part of George's life, and now that he's back up on his feet and the shop is thriving, it's sure to be featured more heavily in his life. Hee. Zonko is so much fun to write. He's sort of like that character that can say or do anything and you just accept it no matter how cooky or strange it may seem. I recommend everyone have a character like him at some point. :)
Thank you so so much for all of you support and enthusiasm!! It really means a lot and I hope to be able to respond to your next review in a more timely fashion. Report Review
I'm so, so, sorry that I haven't properly attacked this like I'd said I would a while back. I've been stupidly busy and everything and it really blows.
Anyway! We're back to Angelina again and I really do love how you have her character. I can really relate to her and her nervousness about finally telling George how she feels. Really enjoyed what you did with the Dueling Club, its very vivid and seems like something I would have read in the actual books. I think I'd have failed horribly describing it all but really nice job and poor Colin, I really do hope he was all right. Hahaha.
I thought you described all of Angelina's emotions very nicely and I sort of had a fangirl moment when George (I'm such a sucker for George anything so I was especially happy) actually agreed to meet her.
Alicia and Lora were funny too about their mild bullying and such before Angelina actually went through with asking him. That's what friends are for, right? I thought their banter was really funny and realistic, they seem even more like good friends than I'd thought before. :D
Anyhoo, I know you're super busy but one last thing: Loved what you did with the reference to Mr. Weasley being attacked, it was smoothly tied in with the chapter. And Angelina's concern was very touching. Sigh. Poor Arthur.
So, loved this chapter and all that and congrats on your nominations! I'm rooting for you! You've got my support and everything, Georgelina shippers stick together! Hahaha.
Much love and I'll be back! Promise!
GabbieAuthor's Response: Busy-ness (almost typed business and realized that actually was a word :P ) is no fun, but I can completely empathize.
While I'm sure I've said this before, I really do love writing both the angelina and george chapters equally for the different things they bring to the story... but angelina's chapters do tend to come a tad bit easier to me. I never really intended for it to be this way, but I can relate to a lot of situations that she's found herself in throughout the course of the story.
I wrote the scene with the DA specifically for a friend of mine. She's a big OotP fan, especially for things DA related and had made a comment about wanted to see a scene with it in one of her reviews. It was actually a lot of fun to write!! And, yes. Poor colin... i'm fairly certain Madam Pompfrey fixed him right up.
hee. Alicia and Lora. Those two. Angelina's relationship with her friends is one of my favorite things about this story!! I'm very glad you enjoyed their scene. Annd thank you! I tried really hard to tie the canon occurence of Arthur's attack into my story line. I'm very glad it worked out.
thank you again for your reveiw -- georgelina shippers 5eva. :) Report Review
Oh, George. I love him.
So I haven't been keeping up with this at all and I now regret it very much. The realistic style of this fic in general is just something I absolutely love: it's a romance novel whose protagonists just happen to be magical.
I love how normal this chapter in particular is. Guy stays up late working, visits his parents on his birthday, meets his brother's girlfriend, spends the evening with the woman with whom he's slowly building a relationship. Except it isn't normal at all, because his twin should be there. But it's still fun. What I'm trying to say is, you've struck a really good balance between woe-is-me and life-goes-on, and I'm sure I told you that last time, but I wanted to tell you again. Just so you know.
Sometimes minor details still feel a bit odd, like:
>Oi, Mr Weasley.
Yeah... that's not how you talk to your employer if you want to keep your job. :P
I get that they have a more informal relationship and all, but I just thought "oi" was a little bit OOC for Verity. Probably just me, though.
> his smiling, blue-haired godson stood in his arms
Not even Teddy can stand on thin air. It's a bit nit-picky, I know, but that was weird.
Anyway. I will attempt to keep up with WAT in the future (and try to get Teddy to behave long enough to conform to some sort of plot that both we and the validators approve of... *sigh*), and thank you so much for the swap! :)Author's Response: Heyyy. So, dreadfully sorry about how long it's taken me to respond to this review. I know excuses are lame... but so is the amount of free time I have with Vet school course work. -___-
Oooh. I really appreciate your description of this story -- a romance novel whose protagonists just so happen to be magical!! I really did want to accomplish something like that -- a story about two individuals and how their lives and the world at large influence their relationship with one another.
Annd thank you for those critiques!! I really do appreciate them. I've found that this far into a story, criticism is harder and harder to come by. And no pressue to keep up! The archives are called that for a reason, and WAT will be here whenever you get a hankering to read it. :)
If you do, I'd love to hear your thoughts ;)
Thank you again! Report Review
I loved this chapter so, so much.
I would love to develop except I don't know what to say. You've got the description of the George and Angelina relationship spot on, as well as their characterisation - though that may just be me, and I'm far from being an expert.
Congratulations on your nominations/votes for the Dobbys!
And good luck for the following year(s) of veterinary school.
:)Author's Response: Yayy!
I'm so glad that you enjoyed this chapter and took a moment of your time to let me know! It really, really means a lot to me. Annd pssh. Expert or no, I value your opinion and appreciate your compliments.
Thank you again, and I hope to hear from you again! Report Review
I hate having to wait for the new chapters!! Love this story, keep it up!Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to leave this review!! I'm so glad you're enjoying the story. Report Review
OKAY, I DID NOT EXPECT THAT.
I should have been paying closer attention to the dates, but of course I was too giddy thinking about Angelina telling George that she thinks he's hot stuff to lend a fleck of attention to what was happening right under my nose. AGH. VOLDEMORT, YOU HAVE NEVER BEEN SO INCONVENIENT. She wasthisclose to telling him and AGH. Rude! Rude, rude Voldemort!
Lora and Alicia's pseudo-intervention made me laugh. ANGELINA, YOU ARE IN DENIAL. WE ARE HERE TO HELP YOU. WE WANT TO SEE YOU MACKING ON GEORGE. Snort, isn't this also when Harry and Cho snogged in the RoR? EVERYONE GETS ACTION BUT ANGELINA. I did love Peeves; no one ever includes him in fanfic and you did his wickedness justice here. I also really enjoyed seeing practice-y bits with Dumbledore's Army! I love Dumbledore's Army, it's one of my favorite things. It was inspiring to witness it again (totally makes me want to go and read OotP), and to see Angelina mentally trying to work out what to do. I especially appreciated how she illustrated the differences between Quidditch and dueling; Angelina has the foresight to predict how Quidditch will go, but dueling is so much murkier. You honestly never know what's going to shoot out of the other person's wand, so you've got to be ready for absolutely anything. Her nerves about that, and then the bit where GEORGE MASSAGED HER SHOULDERS, OH MY GOD, I MADE NOISES OUT LOUD, and poor Colin, and ♥ ♥ ♥ Seriously, you are not capable of making a dull chapter. Each and every chapter is loaded with stuff that tells me more and more, that is vital to the story of GeorgeandAngelina even in subtle ways.
I also did a lot of sad smiling because Fred was so alive and vibrant. :( I just want to trap them here in this era so that George and Fred can still be the sneaky boys who brew illegal potions in disused classrooms; but then again I don't, because I like seeing George when he's just George, and how he functions as an individual instead of half of a two-man show. And I like seeing how he copes, how he gets on with Angelina and makes the shop an even bigger success than it ever was. I just have so much love for George, and it's all thanks to you and your extraordinary talent with writing him. You've made me love Angelina, too (and I can see bits of you in her!), and Lora and Alicia. And the most amazing part is that I have different feels for the same characters depending on what age and places they are at in life. Lora-the-perfect-student is different from Lora-who-is-engaged-to-Michael, and yet they're the same, and that goes for all the characters. They're the same, but not. They're perfectly evolved. I just love going around and around, back and forth, and seeing all the differences, and seeing how everything happened.
Georgelina headcanon forever. ♥Author's Response: TROLOLOLOL~
Your reviews, Sarah. Oh my goodness. This is the /only/ review from chapter 14 that I haven't responded to, but since I posted 15 today I decided that it was time to stop dragging my feet and respond. I never know what to say to you -- your reviews are so kind and supportive and slightly overwhelming. Thank you so, so much for all of them. You are remarkable and it's always exciting to see a new review from you b/c you are one of my favorite authors around here (true story).
I felt so badly for angelina and sort of evil through this whole chapter -- building up her nerves and the readers expectations just to party crash it all down. And yepp. er'one getting action except poor georgelina. Writing the DA meeting was so much fun!! I actually never had included it in my original notes for this chapter (truly, until I revamped my notes very recently I hardly had anything in my notes -- I don't think my subconcious expected me to make it this far into the story), but something you said in a review of the last Angelina chapter (when they all met in the hogshead about forming the DA) sparked my inspiration for this scene. So thank you for that. :P
hehehe. George trying to be sauve and Angelina being too rational to just enjoy him rubbing her shoulders. I love that you mentioned how each chapter subtlely provides more information to the story of GeorgeandAngelina -- sometimes I worry that this story isn't really about anything... just the normal everyday lives of these two characters and how their relationship comes from that.so thank you.
Writing Fred is so bittersweet knowing where it all goes. It's very odd to write him so alive in one chapter and only as a memory in the next. I'm so thrilled that you love george (I do, but I'm a bit biased) -- I've really tried to make him more than just half of a two man comic relief foil. And Angelina... I sometimes feel like I don't have as good of a grasp on her character as I do Georges, but I think that has more to do with the vast difference between being 17 and being 22... a lot changes. You can see me in Angelina?? huh... The evolution of these characters has made me love them all, even the minor ones, so much more than I think I would if I only wrote them in one of these timelines... seeing where they end up, knowing that they're husbands and wives and parents and friends makes writing all their teenaged shenanigans more meaningful to me.
God, sarah... this response so rambly and probably barely sensical and probably like a flashing LOOK AT MY EGO billboard, but your reviews leave me with so many feels and thoughts. Thank you so so much. Report Review
Okay, I've arrived at the last posted chapter where I will patiently wait for the story to continue. Not as much going on in this chapter as in some of the others, but it was a nice turn of events to learn that George's absence was because of Arthur's attack. I'm sure a lot of your romance-loving readers will be feeling a let down that the promised meeting didn't materialize - well, that's the way the cookie crumbles sometimes!
Let me just say that it was nice to find this story, and I'll gladly come back to it when more gets posted. And as much as you have enjoyed my reviews, I have equally enjoyed your responses.Author's Response: yayy!!
Well, I'm incredibly glad you found this story too!! your reviews have been so lovely and encouraging. :) I think one of the reasons I love this chapter so much (it is one of my favorites for some silly reason or another) is that nothing really happens -- I feel like normal things are overlooked a lot in fanfiction like courses and eating and things like that. I've been itching to write a DA scene for ages, and so I really enjoyed the oppurtunity to do that here.
Ahh. yes. a bit of a let down, but it's only chapter 14!! Indeed that is the way the cookie crumbles.
thank you again for your review! I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter. Report Review
Well, what can I say about a very sad chapter except that is was - well sad. I felt a real twinge at the one line Fred had before he died about the twins knowing the secret passages better than anyone and that he'd better see George at the end of it. There's just something about knowing what a person's last words were before they died that makes them feel very haunting.
On a lighter note, I kept reading that part in the beginning where the strange man wanted to talk to George, thinking to myself - okay, what am I missing here? Finally, it made sense in the end, including his odd costume, when the name was revealed. I also liked the little scene with Arthur, George, and Ron at the end, and your line about every time Arthur cried it was into Molly's shoulder - what a great line. Again you point out something about the characters as you imagine them that was never in canon. Nice!Author's Response: Hee. Thank you again for your (as always) wonderful review. I had reread the chapter in Deathly Hallows where the forces at Hogwarts were splitting up to protect the castle, and all the relevant scenes involving characters that weren't Harry and realized that George wasn't with Fred when he died! This made me really sad, especially when I realized that the last time they likely saw each other was when they split up to gaurd the entrances.
Molly and Arthur have such an amazing canon relationship and family that I'm sure the Weasley children look up to them as models for relationships in their own lives. George's thoughts about his dad and mum, and reflecting it on himself and ang (though he doesn't completely realize it) is a sign of how much she has come to mean to him.
Ahh. Mr. Zonko. I really didn't plan for him to show up in this chapter, but he ended up in it anyway. :P He's a fun sort of character that doesn't necessarily have to make sense. I can gaurantee you'll be seeing more of him in future chapters. :)
Thank you so much for your continued enthusiasm and support. It really means a lot to me. Report Review
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