Ahahahaha! I so adore Ron and Hermione as a couple, yet I rarely find myself reading them. I'm not quite sure why that is but I am very happy I ran across this story. It was just...it was short but very sweet at the same time. I can see Ron's reluctance to mow the lawn and can definitely picture in my mind Hermione getting distracted by watching Ron. And Ginny catching her do it. It just...it made me giggle and it really was a lovely story! I loved it! Great job :D
~GrimmerzAuthor's Response: I adore Ron/Hermione, but aside from as background characters in the non-romance Next Gens I write, I have really never written them before. But aside from Molly/Arthur, they're really my favorite ship. So it was nice to have a chance to write them here, and at a young age. Poor Ron doesn't want to mow the lawn, and poor Hermione gets caught ogling Ron by his little sister. lol. Thank you so much for reviewing! Report Review
I'm still trying to sort out where I want to start out in your series style stories (Unsinkable is constantly getting praises from Mel) so I thought in the mean time I'd start with this happy one shot :)!
I live for imagery. Not so much that I'm sofficated - but by the end of a chapter or story I just want to feel like I was there. This really achieved that. I could see Ginny with her arms piled high and a pair of socks about to tumbling off, and Hermione is completely stuck with watching Ron. I loved that you maintained her logical mind, when she's thinking about Rons physically attributes she's reasoning that it shouldn't be attractive, yet her jaws about to hit the floor. I just think its a really great way to show her emotions (coich* hormones* cough) taking over but still stay true to her Hermiome side.
I adore the addition in the beginning regarding mowing a lawn being character building is absolutely perfect. It was very, very Molly - followed by the taunting of the twins of course.
This was such a pleasant read, thank you for sharing!!
JamiAuthor's Response: I am so glad the scene-setting description was good - there's a lot of it in the Hermione POV section and I tend to linger over dialogue so that is definitely a good thing that it reads all right :)
Ah Hermione, feeling so much and keeping it inside until she bursts ;) Poor Ron doesn't get it for so long haha... She knows he's not actually super hot but she wants him anyway - to her, Ron is a hot guy!
Molly seems to like giving out chores to be done without magic and then trotting out the old "builds character" excuse haha. After so many sons, who can blame her?
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I always like short but sweet one shots. They are usually very meaningful. I think this is one of them!
I always wondered why Hermione loved freshly mown grass so much!!
Ashwini =]Author's Response: I always figured she just liked the smell, but this popped into my head one day ;) Thank you so much for reviewing! Report Review
This was lovely. Such a concise, simple and plausible scenario for how Hermione developed the particular set of smells she experiences over Amortentia.
The dynamic between Ron, Molly and the twins felt perfect. Ron trying to weasel (no pun intended) his way out of an unpleasant chore, Molly having none of it and the twins being unsympathetic to the point of mockery. I love the fact that Arthur has acquired some old, unreliable and heavy lawnmower to torment his children with. Well, he probably didn't acquire it just to torment them. I'm sure he tinkers with it on summer nights and weekends.
Hermione was also very well done. This was right around that time when she was emerging from what Snape called her "insufferable know-it-all" stage and really began to round out into a very deep, realistic young woman. I'm certain that she had more moments like this while staying at the Burrow. The three-way conversation between her brain, heart and hormones was brilliant. Especially the hormones.
If there was any one thing I would suggest about the entire piece, it would probably be for Ginny to be a tad less supportive and a little more "Ewww! That's my brother and he's a sweaty mess!" But it's a small thing. Pay it no mind.
I'm glad I saw GW's status message in the forums. This was well worth the time!Author's Response: Ron totally tries to weasel out of mowing. He would much rather the twins do it for him magically, but of course they're not about to do that ;) Naturally Arthur has a beast of a machine, which he has probably disassembled countless times to "fix" it. I can just see him out there, covered in grease and grinning with delight, as he takes the thing apart to sharpen the blade or something, pretending he's a Muggle. haha
I do think Hermione was a little more girl-ish (for want of a better word) at this point. She's starting to outgrow the know-it-all-ness and mature a bit. And of course, she totally has the hots for Ron right there.
I was actually thinking Ginny already was laughing at her and mocking her. She wasn't being supportive, it was more of a "Well don't let me stop you from staring". But I get you. I'm sure as soon as Hermione rejoined her, there was a round of mockery from Ginny. "Ron? Really? RON?"
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Aww this was so cute! Haha I couldn't resist the chapter summary when I saw it - Hermione and a shirtless Ron? And it was awesome how you linked it to that amortentia quote from Hermione! And your characterisation is so wonderful. Especially Ron. But I loved Ginny laughing at Hermione, but not making fun of her. Hehe, this was just a nice enjoyable one shot to read :) I really liked how simple, short and sweet this was!
- CharlotteAuthor's Response: Ginny was making fun a little bit ;) I'm sure she would have stopped and stared if it was Harry, but this is her brother after all, she's going to mock Hermione for it. lol. I had fun writing this, so I'm really glad you liked it! Thank you so much for reviewing, I appreciate it! Report Review
Very well written - amusing storyline as well. Would give it a ten if there were another chapter or two!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I ought to write more Ronmione, they're such fun. Report Review
Oh lordy lord! There's way too much half-naked Ron in my life lately for it to be healthy. Isn't it just awesome, though?
I saw Georgia squee on the forums and when I noticed it was you and a ronmione combined, if internet movements could be compared to real ones, I'd say I stumbled over my feet to get here. I LOVED this. Who in their right mind wouldn't? Such a moment, ah. I adore how this scene is the reason she thought of freshly mowed grass in the first place in HBP. I always thought it was because it's a really really nice scent any way you look at it (if you're not allergic), but this way...oh my heart melts.
The dialogue in the beginning was awesome. It felt like plucked up right from the Weasley every day life. Or mine, really. Molly is great for telling him it builds character. But when wasn't Molly absolutely great while you were writing her? :)
And just...the scene! I always loved Ron, but the past few days I'm having this embarrassing crush on him and this scene made me 'whoo' and 'aah' in awe and appreciation. And Hermione's reaction to the whole thing is just so full of win.
...Her hormones, which never thought in full sentences the way the rest of her did, simply put in an urgent, Want.
Now this line cracked me up so much! It's just so so amazing. Megs, this was lovely and I'm going to favorite it and I'll read it when I feel sad because this little piece brings me pure happiness!Author's Response: You can never have too much half-naked Ron! I just love him, I never mind Ron being shirtless. ;)
I can just picture Hermione at that line in canon, babbling about what she smells and then realizing she's said too much and glancing at Ron. XD Ah I love them. I think she probably already liked the smell, because it is a nice smell (if you didn't have to do the mowing), but it was fun to add Ron in there for that extra boost of "attraction" to the scent.
Ah the Weasleys. Molly ordering them about like a general, the twins making fun of Ron because they don't have to do this chore any longer (I figure it passed from son to son as in most families, as each one grows to the point of leaving home), Ron trying to get out of having to do it... Boys.
I totally adore Ron, so I'm down with facilitating crushes on him ;) I have a crush on Ron and love the way you write him! And GW has a crush on him too. We'll all enable each other! *group hug*
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Okay so, nano break. I should've plotted first.
But this was oh so lovely. And let me take a second before randomly squeeing to appreciate your descriptions.
"Hermione glanced out automatically as she passed, and stopped with one foot in the air, prepared for the next stair. The sight in the backyard arrested her, and she lowered her foot, backing down a step for a better view without being aware of what she was doing."
^That. It's so simple I can perfectly picture it and can actually feel myself losing balance to step in a lower step.
Add to that that everyone who has or is going through teen years can identify with all that staring and brains/hormones nonsense that life brings.
I am a huge Romione shipper and absolutely adore them so of course I had to read this. And then, your characterization was great! Cursing-complaining Ron, trying to rationalize Hermione, and laugh it off Ginny were *ahem*sorry for the cheesiness*ahem* perfect. And Molly, well, I love Molly, so different between how she's to Ron and to Hermione.
So yeah, this is the kind of review to just say thank you for writing suh a heart-warming one-shot that made me giggle at an unspeakable hour of the morning. Night. Whatever, you made me forget it!
-ValAuthor's Response: Good luck on your nano!
Ah thanks for the kind words on my description. I always feel like I'm weakest in my writing there (I love dialogue). I could picture what she was doing so I tried to get it across. I'm glad it worked!
I love Ronmione! They're so adorable. I don't generally get to really write them, just as side characters in the Rose stories, so it was fun to write a teenage bit for them. Ha, Molly is totally different, but she did have to ask Ron more than once (pet peeve for mothers!) and Hermione is a guest after all ;) Ginny of course is going to mock Hermione for staring at Ron. Siblings!
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This is just so adorable and cute and sweet and, if I may use a very horrible pun, 'Perfect'! I just want to hug it!
As soon as I read the title, I was wondering if this was going to offer an explanation for Hermione's attraction to freshly mown grass; I'm really glad it did, and I think it's a wonderfully sweet explanation at that! Ah, all the feels!
My favorite part? Ginny catches Hermione staring, Hermione starts to follow her but then "her eyes crept back toward the window, and she gave up". That bit is SO true-to-life; such a realistic teenage girl moment for Hermione and I loved it!
BRILLIANT!! :)Author's Response: Aw thank you so much! It is a bit of an explanation for that particular Amortentia scent, although I expect Hermione would've liked it already but then associating it with Ron gives it that kick from "like" to "attraction".
Hermione just can't help herself with an opportunity like that, of course she wants to watch him as long as she can ;) Thank you very much for reviewing! Report Review
I adore ronmione and so of course I couldn't pass up this little one-shot! This was such a lovely (and amusing) moment in Ron and Hermione's eventual relationship. What's more is that I think it's the sort of moment that everyone can relate to in some way. (Everyone gets caught staring at one time or another, right?? :P ). I thought you did a great job capturing Hermione's voice, and definitely had a good giggle over the Hermione's conflicting voices brain, heart and hormones.
Gah. Love me some good ronmione fluff!! And this most definitely qualifies as that.
Thanks for sharing!
MelissaAuthor's Response: Totally agree - who hasn't been busted while staring open-mouthed at a hot guy or girl? The line with her brain, heart, and hormones is the main reason I wanted to post this, even though it's so short. It made me cackle while writing it XD Thank you so much for reviewing! I'm really glad you liked it :D Report Review
This. Is. Brilliant. I love the way you walk us through Hermione's thought processes, and how Ron is not suddenly all rippling muscles. He's not perfect, except when seen through her eyes. My favorite part?
"He's very pale, her brain noted. And rather skinny, actually.
Who cares? put in her heart. He's perfect.
Her hormones, which never thought in full sentences the way the rest of her did, simply put in an urgent, Want."
Hormones never think in full sentences, do they? Sort of like Hulk, you get one word ideas that pack a lot of punch. And I have to agree with her. It's Ron. WANT. Excellent job, and I LOVE it. ~GWAuthor's Response: Ha, Ron is so not the rippling muscles type. He's wiry. But Hermione doesn't care. By this point I think she's absolutely raging for him, so he could look like almost anything and she'd still be drooling over him.
Hormones are totally the Hulk of the body's messages. Thank you for reviewing, and for the forum advert! I have a bunch of reviews thanks to you :hug: Report Review
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