Very sweet. I love the idea of the new family and them strolling along holding hands. It makes for a pretty picture.Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. Report Review
Who cares about canon correctness, this is a lovely image. I, too, would hope that Sirius found a warm and beautiful place to escape to after so many years of soul-drowning cold. The descriptions are wonderful in this. I can almost hear the ocean. The place you chose sounds like the perfect place for Sirius to have run.Author's Response: You know me and canon lol. I was home on O'ahu for Christmas (I just got home last week) and laying on the beach at Hanauma Bay watching the palm trees blow, I thought about this - I hope Sirius went somewhere tropical. Thank you so much! Report Review
ANd you got to be a holiday clue. Cool. I have to say, this had me tearing up. I love the twins, and no one writes them better than you do. I adore the way you show all the differences between them, instead of how alike they are. I think that is where most writers (JK included) make their mistakes. Growing up around twins, they don't even seem to look alike to me, because we see all the things that make them individuals. The way you go about doing that for the Weasley twins is just beautiful. This is my favorite chapter, but I'm a bit biased about my Fred and George.Author's Response: I have no idea what the clues are for! lol. I don't think my boys look anything alike, but then no mom of identicals does. I do think JKR didn't do too well with twins, it's clear she's not a mom of twins lol. Thank you for the review! Report Review
Very sweet. I love how you have Victoire a proper lady, a true daughter of Fleur, but also a Weasley. There's enough of that in there to warm her a little, and the ring shows it. What a neat twist to the ring, and her reaction is priceless. "To this man? And to that ring? Did he think she was stupid?" was just brilliant. Lovely.Author's Response: Thanks! I've never written Teddy or Victoire before, I tried to give them bits of their parents but still distinct personalities. I'm glad you think it turned out all right. Report Review
Ah, what a lovely chapter! I enjoyed it very much. :-) Everything seemed so . . . Mollyish. And so Christmasy. And . . . I don't know. Real, I suppose. Realistic. You write Molly so well. Of course, you have had a lot of practice, so I suppose it shouldn't come as a surprise.
As always, there were a few particular phrases that especially stood out to me. One was of Arthur "presiding" over the turkey. That one made me giggle! I can totally see that! And Molly's thought about giving a hint to Ron, who, after all, could often use a hint or two. Also her observations of Bill and Charlie's apperances (hair & earring).
This chapter started out so sad and wistful, but I like how you made it cheerful and energetic at the end. Of course, that is a direct reflection of Molly's mood, and her flourishing with a big, loud family surrounding her. But I think my favorite part of the chapter was the part when Molly and Arthur danced. That was wonderful! :-)Author's Response: Thank you so much! I was trying to picture what they'd be like alone after so long with a ton of kids at home. I think Molly would be very bored, she's a person who needs activities and people to occupy her. I'm really glad you liked this one, it was my favorite. Report Review
wow that was so nice I loved it weasley christmas are always nice. up date soon.Author's Response: Thank you very much! Report Review
Very cute! I loved it! You are a very talented writer and I hope you keep writing, I enjoy your work alot!
Keep it up!Author's Response: Thank you very much! I definitely will. :) Report Review
You know what this reminds me of? Those ridiculous rumors/stories you always hear about Santa at the beach vacationing after Christmas. Lol. However, this chapter was my favorite in this little collection. On one hand, picturing a warm, tropical Christmas has always been strange to me, but on the other hand, this is perfect for Sirius. It just seems to fit. I know I'm probably reading entirely too much into it, but it seems like a rebirth of sorts for him.Author's Response: I like this one, but I was afraid nobody else would "get" it, so it makes me very glad to hear that you did! Thanks so much. It's deliberately not canon, which makes me twitch slightly, but I really had to write it. Sirius needed something like this, and I hope he got it, even if it wasn't at Christmastime.
Tropical Christmases are what's normal to be, but I'm island-born. I haven't seen a lot of snowy Christmases. Report Review
Btw, I tried to leave a review for the previous chapter, but something funny happened with my internet, so I don't know if it worked or not. Now I keep getting an error message when I try to view the reviews for that chapter, so let me know if it didn't show up so I can try again.
Now for this chapter. It seemed almost cliche to me, because it seems like I have read quite a few stories here in which two characters of the opposite sex are hiding/lying in bed and start kissing, etc. I liked how you told this from Angelina's POV though. That was a good idea. And George is so sad. :-( I guess we all "miss" Fred (even though he was/is imaginary).Author's Response: It did work, I could see it when I checked my unanswered reviews.
Really, cliche? I guess I haven't been reading enough in the archive, I haven't seen that turning up. I'm way behind on my HPFF reading though. This was one I quite liked, actually. Well chacun a son gout, I suppose. :) Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
Another sweet, fluffy one but with not much happening to comment on. I liked the first paragraph, actually, with the description of the street. You also always have a couple good one-liners in anything you write (but I'm not going to point them all out). The one about the parlour-trick was good though.Author's Response: Yep, more fluff. This one's even more fluffy and pointless, but I couldn't help myself lol. The 500-1500 word constraint on the challenge was tough, it's hard to write something terribly interesting in that limit. Report Review
I guess "Christmas fluff" really is the best way to describe this, so I'll just repeat you for that bit. This was a cute story. I thought the part about Lily treading on James' foot was amusing. Overall, though, it was just very, very fluffy. Not much going on to comment on.Author's Response: Yeah these are pretty much pointless, they were the ones I didn't enter into the actual challenge (that hasn't been posted yet) because I didn't think they were as good, but still wanted to share them. Report Review
I LOVE THIS SONG TOOO!!! Aww, this one made me sad...Fred's death was always really sad for me, cuz the twins were my favorite hp characters, but this one also made me happy! I really like the idea of George and Angelina getting together and getting married and so on...and I think that this little story panned it out perfectly! GREAT job!
*love*Author's Response: I loved the twins, I was very sad at Fred's death. How am I supposed to dress up my twin boys as Fred & George for Halloween after that? Sigh. Thank you very much for reviewing! I'm so glad to hear you enjoyed it. Report Review
I LOVE THIS SONG!! Ya had me singing along as I read your story! And that was so cute! I like Victoire's take on diamonds; I've never really thought about them like that, but I can see that...and Rubies are gorgeous! I think that that was sooo sweet and cute of Teddy, and, even from this short little one-shot, I think that he seems really kind and they they're really good for each other...I guess that stories are just like photos...they can speak thousands of more words than they show!
*love*Author's Response: I'm not much of a fan of diamonds myself, I think they're a little boring. I prefer sapphires myself, which of course a ruby is just a red sapphire. Anyway this was my first Teddoire and I enjoyed the ship, might have to write them again sometime. Thank you for reviewing! Report Review
Ah man, while I was reading this I was also watching POA on tv. It was like the two extremes almost, a happy joyous Christmas on the computer screen and a wizard struggling to fight a dementor on tv! ;) But on a more sirius note, your story was so cute! I, personally, can't wait for our real Christmas to get here and reading happy Christmas stories by a great author is GREAT!! I, also, think that you wrote Lily and James really well for your first time writing them! :)
*love*Author's Response: Aw thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it. I can't wait for Christmas too! Report Review
Beautiful little one-shot. I've wanted to visit Kalaupapa ever since seeing a dramatization of Fr. Damian's life. A perfect place for Sirius to get a little of himself back.Author's Response: Thank you! I've been to Moloka'i but not to Kalaupapa, the last time I was there I was too young - the restrictions on the park include no admittance to minors. I'm legal now of course, and I've been thinking about visiting. It'd be almost like seeing the Hawaii of my mother's youth and I love that idea. Thank you for reviewing! Report Review
I really enjoyed this little four story thing...it was really well written, I especially liked the stroy line between A & G I think you captured George'es emotions perfectly!
Great job!Author's Response: Thank you! I tend to dwell on Fred's death out of all the deaths in DH because I have identical twin sons, and based on that experience, I cannot even fathom the depth of loneliness that George would experience after his twin's death. My boys are so very close, they don't even like being in different rooms from their bro. So I write George with that in mind...
I will probably have more up soon, definitely at some point, because I wrote a fifth story that was entered into a contest, and I'm going to post it on the 18th when the contest ends. Until then I'm going to try to get a few more written and posted. Thank you for reviewing! Report Review
it sad that serius has to spend christmas alone. please up date soon what christmas storie are you going to do next.Author's Response: Well I have one submitted to the Christmas challenge contest, that ends on Dec 18 so it will be posted then. The entries are secret so I can't say who it's about. I'm writing one, probably a little longer than a drabble, about Bill/Fleur and Ron. Had an idea for one on some OCs from my novel-length too, might do that next. Thank you for reviewing! Report Review
this was a little sad but it is nice to see how they got together in the end. that is how it all started.Author's Response: Poor George :( I like to think he and Angelina helped each other out and got to love each other... Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
that is a nice storie about the next genaration and I love that teddy and victorie are together they are one of my favorites couples.Author's Response: Thanks! That's my first Teddoire, I like that ship though. I might have to write more of them. Report Review
very good for your first try I love it. it is always nice to read stories that have james, lily and harry together because those moments are so unique.Author's Response: Thank you! I know, it makes me sad to think of the three of them together, they had such a short time. Report Review
Very lovely. Being Muggle-born, Lily probably spent many Christmases in Church and singing carols. I imagine it was a bit different for James. I love the interaction you wrote between them. It was very realistic, and adding in poor Bathilda was sweet. I can't wait to see what's next.Author's Response: I wanted to give them a little peace in Godric's Hollow. Poor Lily and James, they are the ultimate tragedy in a series that's full of tragedies. I'm glad you liked it! I just posted the next one, a very fluffy Teddoire. :) Report Review
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