I like this chapter but, when is Percy going to tell her how he feels? I hope before she plans on leaving.Author's Response: You will just have to wait and find out! Next and final chapter is in validation right now. Report Review
Woah, the beginning confused me a lt, lol. I was like "Nooo, Annie it's Percy!" Haha but then he woke up and I feel a bit better... you scared me there for a second lol.
Gah, I'm reviewing as I read and I must say that I am super nervous about her seeing her father. I like the suspense you use and the details of the flying planes used to deliver messages-- nice touch. I have one suggestion though; instead of saying "The room looked like the room cops use in movies" perhaps you could describe the room in more detail. The way you say it, I get a good visual but maybe use some more details.
Wow I *love* this line: "his eyes grey and cold with dark circles underneath them. His face had become aged over the years; a few wrinkles on his forehead standing out from the rest of his face." The way you described him makes him seem old and sinister, yet also vulnerable.
*Sob* Ohh that's sad. I liked the ending to this chapter though. Although it was sad, there was some sort of closure and I think that's what they both neded. Great chapter, update soon!Author's Response: I know. I probably could of described the room in more detail but why say something that you can say in a few words? That's what my Comp II teacher at college taught me. Also, I"m so glad you loved the way I described MacNair. I wanted him to seem older and worn out from being in Azkaban and just from everything bad he's done. The next chapter is already waiting to be validated too! Report Review
I think this story is magnificent, it's really well written, and you can really feel the characters feelings as well, and that shows what a great writer you are. I like the fact that this story is about Percy, he is never in most stories, and he is another good character! Keep up the great work, I cant wait to read the next chapters!Author's Response: I'm glad you like the fanfic and that you understand the characters feelings. I'm also glad this fanfic is about Percy. I might write another one about him later on since there are so very few with him as the main character. Thanks for reading and the next chapter is waiting to be validated! Report Review
ZOMG, I'm sorry... I wrote this wonderfully long review and then it just didn't show up... grr
Oh well, lol I'll try to remember everything I said. Well first and foremost, I love the name Braydon! It's so cute and his little but spunky personality really fits his name. Haha I love how Molly's already spoiling him with the cookies lol.
I also like the relationship forming around Percy, Annie, and Braydon. They already seem like a young, but close knit family. Hmm it will be interesting to see what will happen once Annie sees her father-- I hope that turns out okay.
Great chapter update soon!Author's Response: That's cool. Computers are dumb sometimes. I have the next chapter already waiting to be validated and then the chapter after that is the last one. I know so sad. It will be ending. LoL. Report Review
Just found this and read all 7 chapters. Not bad. Would only have changed a few thing. Sounds more American then British. But I Like it just fine. Keep up the good work.Author's Response: Well, I am an American. LoL. I try to work on that more in a couple of my other fanfics. Thanks for reading. I'm glad you liked it. Report Review
Great loved it, waiting for the next chapter.Author's Response: Thanks for the review and next chapter is already in validation. Report Review
that throws annie in bit of a pickle doesnt it? lol. i dunno if i could go and see my father after that, either way annie will make the decision right for her.
10/10 as usual, two thumbs up! :)Author's Response: Pickle? LoL. Thanks for saying that word. It cracked me up. Anyways, thanks for reading and I'll have a new chapter waiting for validation once they come back from hiatus. :) Report Review
Wow, another cliffy, lol! Gosh, I can't believe she actually has a son, especially about the age of five. So she's a younger mother then? Maybe Percy could help her out there, hehe ;)
MacNair's request was unexpected though. I wonder if Annie will try to see him. I hope if she does though, everything will be alright. Great chapter, and please update as soon as you can!Author's Response: Well, she's 23 so she had him at like age 18 or so. MacNair is kind of a dingbat! LoL. I don't know. I already have the next two chapters written. Thanks for reading as usual! Report Review
Well that was a twist I didn't see coming, very nice can't wait to see what happens next.Author's Response: That's a good thing! Makes it more interesting then. I have the next two chapters written and then I think one more will do. Thanks for reading and thanks for the review. I appreciate it! Report Review
Oh wow! Wasn't expecting that cliffhanger, but I love it all the same. I liked the bits of a love triangle between Percy, Annie, and George. That could make for some awkward family dinners, lol!
I hope the trial goes alright, because I'm starting to like this Percy/Annie ship. Try to update as soon as you can!Author's Response: Thank you! I've got the trial all planned out in my mind. It should be pretty interesting and a big surprise is coming. Anyways, thanks for reading and I'll try and update soon. Report Review
Very good and it was worth the wait. Update SoonAuthor's Response: Thanks! I already know what I'm doing with the next chapter. Report Review
What!?!? NO!! You can't leave it like that! Ugh, I hate cliffies. Even though this micht not be considered a cliffy, I feel like it is because I want to know what happens soo bad.
Yay a kiss! Lol. I hope they get together soon *cough* please? Well, Percy needs someone... This is still great and I can't wait for the next chapter or to read your other stories :)Author's Response: Thanks a ton. I haven't wrote any more chapters for this fanfic but I just got the first chapter of False Popularity validated and I will be posting a Snape fanfic while trying to write another new one and trying to finish them all! Wooooo! Report Review
This is a very good story, I like that it is about Percy.Author's Response: Thanks. I think you said that already. LoL. Oh well. Thanks again! Report Review
damn! i think mrs. weasley suffers from more then menopause! this chapter was awesome. i never thought of percy as the kinky type. red bra.very nice!Author's Response: Oh yes. Percy is very kinky. LoL! Yeah. Mrs. Weasley was having a bitch attack. Report Review
wow that is just tragic. i love this story so far!Author's Response: Yeah it's pretty sad. Thanks for reading. I'm glad you like it! Report Review
ok this is a very interesting story! I can't wait to read the next one!Author's Response: Aww thank you. Unfortunately I only have through the 4th chapter written. Report Review
Ooo, haha looks like Percy and Annie are really starting to hit it off lol! It's cute though. As I was reading, I was asking myself, why didn't he just do the spell before she got changed, and then I'm like Ohhh. lol!
Hmm, I wonder if George likes her too; that might complicate things. How much older is annie than George by the way? You wouldn't think that she would be really into him if she was much older adn I'm too lazy to try and find out, so..
Great chapter update soon!!Author's Response: Well Annie is Percy's age so that would make her 23. That means that George is like 21. Trust me, I figured out all the ages before I started getting too far into this fanfic. LoL. Report Review
This is very good so far, I like that it is about PercyAuthor's Response: Aww thanks! I was fearing that only one person would end up leaving me reviews. I really like that it is about Percy too and I like it because it's different. It's about someone different instead of the same old! Well, thanks for reading. :) Report Review
Oh, I'm sorry that your not getting more reviews and how annoying that can be, but if it helps at all, I really do enjoy this story. The descriptions are amazing as how you describe the coffee shop, it really sets a nice view for the reader and I felt like I was actually there. That's so sad though, about Annie's miscarriage. Perhaps Percy can help her through it? Haha, well just a thought. Anyways update soon!Author's Response: Yeah. The lack of reviews suck. I'm glad you enjoy my story and I felt it was my duty to describe the coffee shop instead of leaving it boring.
Also, Percy could help her thru it or he could be the usual jerkish guy he normally is sometimes! You'll just have to wait and see but thanks for reading! You rock! Report Review
Wow. I really like this story so far! I haven't read any Percy/OC's (yet alone, much of anything about Percy). And even though I sort of still have a grudge towards him *mumbles*, later in DH he becomes a Weasley again!
I like Annie too :) She seems like she's not one to be all flirty with a guy, so Percy better watch his back ;) Haha, well update soon!Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! I thought for sure I wasn't going to get any reviews left for me on this fanfic because it is about Percy. I also tried to make this fanfic different and I agree about Annie. She seems more like one of the guys or one of those girls that won't put up with much crap from someone. Thanks again and the next chapter will come after the next Prankster In Love chapter gets validated. :) Report Review
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