Haha this is pretty funny. It sounds exactly like something Snape would be thinking about. I've never come across a story quite like this, it's unique AND excellently written. Great job ^_^Author's Response: Thanks for the review. It's good to know that you enjoyed reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it. =) Report Review
Great Job!! You did really well on describing Snape's POV and I think you got his character down pretty well :DAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review and the compliments. I wasn't sure about how I wrote Snape, so it's good to know you thought I did it okay. =) Report Review
aw tis cute
i like severus a bit more now
he's an ok guy
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. It's nice to know that you liked it. =) Report Review
a few typos, and some line problems where the lyrics are concerned (may just be my laptop) but lovely descriptions and story. well done! *hugs*Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I really must get a beta to help with grammar and to catch things like we/he/she/me/be. Glad you liked the descriptions and overall story though. =) Report Review
Pretty good, this is the first song-fic I've read so I'm not sure of standards. So I'll start with that the plot flows pretty well and gives a sense of complete coherency. Description is overall pretty good and grammar and spelling looks correct for the most part. Its always nice to get a bit of insight into Snape's thoughts and you did it very well and if you ever wanted to you could very well extend this into a short story. So overall pretty good, 7/10
Magical Me13Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I'm not to sure of the standards for song fics myself haha. Glad the overall story was fine though the specifics need some work. I appreciate the comments. =) Report Review
I really liked it. I was really funny with Snape being all annoyed and such! lolAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review. Snape being all annoyed is always funny, I'm glad you liked the way I wrote it. =) Report Review
A writer starts improving on their writing by admitting that they could improve. lol!
Your story itself was good...but to be honest, you need to work on grammer and puncuation. It's not too major, but you should work on it. Of course, you said yourself that this is your first fanfic, so I'm not criticizing. For a first story, you did well. This mistakes are common, but as you continue writing, you will catch them naturally and fix them right away.
Good luck on your future stories. I'm sure you'll defintely improve. ^^
*Phoenix_Rose*Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Honesty is always the best policy, so thanks for that too. I was always horrible at grammar, I will get a beta next time who can help me with that. Thanks for the tips! =) Report Review
This was a very cute story and I enjoyed it a lot. It voices my personal opinion and a thought that had been swimming around in my head throughout the series. I was actually wondering what Snape really thought of his students, other than the trio and Malfoy.
A few minor grammar issues, but nothing major. Good job, a very enjoyable read.
Keep up the good work and have fun ^_^
.:.Midna.:.Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad that you enjoyed seeing what he thought of the other students too. I am definitely going to get a beta next time to help me with grammar, since I was always horrible with that. =) Report Review
i liked the ending.
10/10Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Very glad to see you liked it so much. =) Report Review
This was so good! I absolutely adored it! Snape is one of my favorite characters and I really liked him in this fic. The humor leaked through everywhere and it even made me laugh out loud in some cases. I can really imagine Snape saying that last line! Great work!Author's Response: Thanks for the review and compliments, it's good to see that you enjoyed it and found it humourous. =) Report Review
wow that was great! I think you really worked the song into the story! Great job!Author's Response: Thanks for the wonderful comments! I'm glad you liked it and thought the song fit Snape as well as I did. =) Report Review
Cute story, good song choice. Use commas when a subject addresses another person ie when someone calls another person by name. other than that i liked the story. we don't really get a chance to be in Snape's thoughts often enough :)Author's Response: Thanks for the comments, I'm glad you liked it. I agree with not getting to see Snape's opinion enough. =) Thanks for the tip about commas, I'll remember it for next time and get a beta. Report Review
Ha ha. This song fits perfectly with Snape...especially on the anniversary of his fight with Lily. I'm glad that you remembered that Harry knew about it.
One mistake I noticed, though, was:
"Ignoring Granger's hand raised perfectly still in the air, we went to his desk."--(Shouldn't it be)--Ignoring Granger's hand raised perfectly still in the air, he went to his desk? He and not we?
That was the only mistake that stuck out to me, I didn't look to in depth, though, but I'm sure your fine.
You had me laughing several times. I'm glad I got to read this. It seemed like a normal day in Snape's classroom (with the exception of the anniversary). I think that you captured him well in this story. Nice first fic. Looking foreward to more from you.Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Yes, it should have been "he" but I seem to have overlooked the mistake... oops lol. I'm glad that you thought the characterization and plot line fit well enough with Snape's character to be real too. I'm glad you liked it. By the way, I have my next fic waiting to be validated. =) Report Review
Hmm... Where to start? First off, the idea and the plot is terrific and refreshingly new. I haven't encountered anything like this before, and I enjoyed this one, giggle a bit every now and then. No problems (none that I can see anyway) with characterisation as well. There are a few typo errors in the text, however, such as "Ignoring Granger’s hand raised perfectly still in the air, we went to his desk." I think "we" is supposed to be "he"? I'm sure if you read over this, you'll be able to spot them as well, including errors in tenses (it's best to keep them consistent in a sentence) and punctuation marks, especially comma usage. :)
Hope that helped. :) You can get a beta to look over it for you, by the way. :)Author's Response: Thanks for the review. It appears that I skipped some problems... oops. *blush* I'll be sure to have it combed over very carefully next time. Thanks for the tips. Report Review
wow this was amazing! i really really liked how you portrayed Snapes feelings greatly. and the song went in nicely too! excellant job!!! i shall be adding this to my faves! :]
-nora.Author's Response: I'm really glad that you liked the story and thought the song fit well. Thanks a bunch for adding it to your favourites! =) Report Review
Ah I love that song! We sang it in chorus last year for our broadway theme. (Whats the matter with kids today? da na na na na na. Who can understand anyyything they sayy? Kids! They are disobedient, disrespectful oafs! lol Noisy, Crazy, Sloppy, Lazy LOAFERSSS ok im done now =D)
This was good. I loved the ending =D 9/10
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it, I wasn't sure if people would since I haven't posted on here before. I'm glad it reminded you of something good as well. Thanks for the review. =) Report Review
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