Wow, this is really good. The detail is really good, I can get an image in my mind based on the way you write. I laughed when Beth dropped Ron, that was so funny! The guy in the beginning of this chapter (whose name escapes me at the moment), he's going to propose to Beth isn't he? There is definitely more to Beth though... Oh, and you wrote "Why can't you just except that?" You used the wrong version of except, you want "accept." Just thought I would point it out. Great job, I can't wait for more!Author's Response: Oh, that makes me so glad! I love hearing that the detail is good enough for people to be able to 'see' it, you know? Lol..
Uhm, John.. Yes, he is going to propose to her, =]. And yes, there is definitely more to Beth, ;]
Hmm, I wonder why I didn't catch the mistake.. Oh well, I'll fix it, so thank you for pointing it out!
More should be coming in about four days from now, so it shouldn't be nearly as long of a wait as it was for the last chapter.. Thank you mucho! Report Review
it was billiant all 6 chaptersAuthor's Response: Thank you, hope you think the same about the next chapter! Report Review
i love it.Author's Response: Thank you again!! Report Review
It's ok.Author's Response: Okay, thanks. Report Review
please! Ron has to find her.I love it so far...update quickly. My fav couple, yeah!
Weasley is our King!Author's Response: Yeah, he does need to find her.. but he has a few more people to face and such, =]. Haha, they're my favorite couple, too.. otherwise I might not be writing about them!! Chapter six should be up in a few days! Thank you! Report Review
Oooo, can't wait for the next!
I still can't figure out whether I like Beth or not. I mean, she's nice to Hermione and all that, but there's something strange about her... lol, I guess I'll just have to wait and see!
I love your story, keep it up!
:)Author's Response: Lol!! I know what you mean, Beth is more that you'd expect her to be really.. I knew that her sudden behavior change would be a little odd when I wrote this chapter, although I have my reasons for doing so..
I will say that Beth is a great help in the chapters to come, for both Ron and Hermione... you'll see =].. though I expect that it will be odd to trust her even after those chapters, considering how unpredictable she is.. heh =D..
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Oooh I'm soo confused!! How's he doing...whatever it is he's doing to talk to Hermione? I don't get it... Please help!!
Anyways, great ideas for the story!
Please keep it up!
:)Author's Response: I'm sorry that I can't explain it now!!
All that I can tell you is that Ron ISN'T doing it.. that someone else is doing it..
But I promise that it'll start making sense by chapter 9 or 10.. =D
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I liked this chapter, but there is something that I can't imagine happening... I can't think of Hermione immediately thinking that she was going to die when someone threw a hex at her. Plus, maybe it's me and my memory failure, but I don't remember when Malfoy told her that she was a witch. I just remember when he told her that she had a wand, but did she believe in magic then? Or did she remember that magic existed?
Sorry about the questions, but I'm kind of lost, hehe.
Great story! Keep it up!
:)Author's Response: Well, at that particular moment she was thinking of the worst that could happen to her.. which was death. And you have to remember that Hermione has lost her memory, I know how she did, but I haven't explained that yet.. you'll see with later chapters..
No, Malfoy didn't tell her that she was a witch, but he did tell her that she had a wand.. And considering her memory loss she didn't believe in magic nor did she remember that it existed.. so she was (and still is) very skeptical on the concept of magic..
It's okay, I don't mind the questions.. It actually helps me to remember that I have to explain this better in the later chapters, =D.
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Nice of Stan to lend her some money, I was wondering what she would do when he asked her to pay him...
Great ideas, please keep it up!
:)Author's Response: Well, she had to get money somewhere, didn't she? Which reminds me of something important in the later chapters that I keep forgetting to include..
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Excellent start! I love it! Please keep going!!!
:)Author's Response: Thank you!! And I will keep going, that's a promise. Report Review
i like itAuthor's Response: I hope you feel the same after the next chapter!! Haha, thanks!! Report Review
Beth's more then she seems, isn't she? Can't wait for more. Very good plotline, etc. etc. you rock etc. all good things.Author's Response: Yeah, she is more than you would expect.. =]
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Ha, that was mean of Beth to just let Ron fall on the floor! Especially after she yelled at him for not trusting her. and then the whole using Leglimency on someone she just met, against their will was kinda rude also. Well nevermind, good story, keep it up (ie update soon)Author's Response: Yeah it was, but she didn't really think he would fall, lol..
Well, she wasn't invading his mind. All she did was see if he was lying or not.. though I agree with you - it was rude, considering they had only met the day before..
Well, I will update soon, thank you!! Report Review
Did this chapter post already? I thought it was new...but still, needed the refresher and am READY for the next :) Please update soon.Author's Response: Don't worry, I will Report Review
okAuthor's Response: Uhm, ok.. thanks! Report Review
Oh great job. I lkoved it:)Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it, thank you!! Report Review
please more please more!Author's Response: Okay, I will soon!!! Report Review
Wow, this story is brilliant. Its so sad at times. good job, 10/10. I'm completely hooked so update soon!Author's Response: Oh, really? I thought I was just being a little overdramatic!! lol!! Thank you!! Report Review
this story is absolutely great!!! i definately can not wait for the next few chapters!!:D please keep writing as soon as you can!!Author's Response: I will!!! and thank you!! Report Review
amazing chapter. one of my favorite storys. Author's Response: Thank you oh so much!!! Report Review
goodAuthor's Response: Thank you!! Report Review
So I noticed in the part where Ron is speaking with Beth that you change your tense, as in you go into the present tense starting with...
"Can I show you something?" She asks, remembering she has a key to Hermione's room, "Something of Hermione's?"
and ending with...
"Oh - I'm sorry, Ron. I thought that - that you knew. I'm sorry." She says quickly, the words tumbling from her shocked lips.
It just doesn't sound right when reading it so that's why I wanted to point it out. But I am really enjoying your story and am so glad that you finally got a chance to update.Author's Response: Hmm.. all right, I'll take a look at it. And thank you so much!! Report Review
Awesome...can't wait for more!Author's Response: Oh, thank you!! More will come soon, I promise! Report Review
Awesome...how did I miss this chapter? Now to the next...Author's Response: Haha.. Thank you! Report Review
He's gotten so much closer to finding her. Hopefully it's Ron who came to rescue her out of curiosity of what was going on outside. And I highly approve of the American measurement system, being an American and all.Author's Response: Yes, he has gotten very close to finding her, hasn't he? Well, maybe it was him, maybe it wasn't.. only the next chapter will tell...
And using the american measurements is quite convenient for me. I do know how to convert it to the metric system, but I didn't feel like doing it at the time..
Well, thanks, as always. =D Report Review
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